My life..

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by BirdV, Dec 21, 2014.

  1. BirdV

    BirdV New Member

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    fuck family fuck friends money over everything
    I'm trynna live straight in a world so crooked
    I'm trynna live straight, fuck it, it's not worth it
    the life is calling me, pulling me back to the dark
    chains n shackles, i didn't get very far
    "you'll be back, you're a lifer" i said that'll never be me
    now look at me, I'm a lifer, dead as can be
    nothin left, no love, just me n my greed
    makin money has become the life of me
    nobody cares so fk it ill do what i do best
    the life thats gonna kill me, is all that i have left
    bitches actin like they care but they fake as fk
    if you cared u woulda been there when times was rough
    but u weren't i was alone, i had nobody but me
    opened my eyes n realized you're more like enemies...

    this person filled with anger? this really isn't me
    I've changed into the person u all wanted me 2b
    now i can give a fk about you
    i can give a fk about ur problems
    figure it out urself like i had to when i was at the bottom
    you think u know me? u know nothin at all
    i'll rob the shit outta you in front of ur face
    and kiss you goodbye with a smile
    hahahaha cuz thats the new me livin life with no love
    fk the world is my next tatty dedicated 2U scrubs
    i'm done with u with the anger I'm gonna live 4 me
    don't want no friends no ppl just my music n me…
    think what u want take it how u want n judge this shit up
    have i ever looked like some1 that really gave a fk?
    what you think or what you say or your opinions of me?
    it doesn't matter cuz in my world theres nobody but me
    fuck family fuck friends money over everything
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  2. Black8ce

    Black8ce IS 6FTGROUND

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    "I'll rob the shit outta you in front of ur face
    and kiss you goodbye with a smile
    hahahaha cuz thats the new me livin life with no love
    fk the world is my next tatty dedicated 2U scrubs
    i'm done with u with the anger I'm gonna live 4 me
    don't want no friends no ppl just my music n me…"

    This stood out...Keep up the good work..
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  3. DJDelicious

    DJDelicious New Member

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  4. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

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    HiBirdv, I enjoyed your verse. the flow was nice, wording simple but still created a picture. the shorting of words to fk, u, 2u etc seem to decrease the power of the message. maybe that's because I'm an old timer and don't text a lot.Anyway all in all a good drop.
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  5. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

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    keep up the good work
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  6. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

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    sorry impatient so too many up loaded, it's been awhile
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