Love is..........

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  1. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    Love is......(inspired by 1 Corinthians 13)

    (June 11, 2004)

    Love is God – Love is strong
    It’s that unexpected phone call of care just because
    Love is heart pounding, blood rushing, spirit pause
    Above touching shooting stars, feel it draw
    Near or far love is involved
    And in charge on how we all live
    Love is focus and forgives enemies and friends
    Love is the kiss of family and kids
    Innocent tender bliss
    Fear and hate dismiss
    Picture this freedom life with happy thoughts
    Love is Jesus Christ on the cross
    Can never say it once and stop
    Drop or fall in love and don’t get up
    Should be in the front top priority for all of us
    Love is never boring, ignoring, or annoying
    It’s off somewhere exploring
    Touring with humming birds using funny words
    Like Dido or Honey – sweat like candy but greater
    Love is watching the back of your neighbor
    Making a day for nature
    Or doing a random favor
    Love can’t be read on paper
    But can be felt by our creator, maker, and savior
    From the breath of life he gave you
    Before your birth and after death
    You will always be loved
    And that’s the answer you can trust
    Love is contagious so go and spread it among the natives
    And take this free gift
    Keep it sacred but not a secret

    (July 28, 2005........Journal keystyle inspired by the darkerside of love)

    Love is………….
    A twisted myth
    A sick joke beating to the pulse of a heart
    Torn out the chest with Satan’s finger prints
    Love is a constant argument
    A war of the worlds between a boy and girl
    Holding back balling fist
    I call this Love counterfeit
    Where promises never kept
    Kind of fit soothingly on lonely lips
    Who are we to pick our relationships?
    Destiny and God like playing tricks………..
    Love is a recipe card for making kids
    Love is everything hard
    Tucked in a blanket of bliss
    But beware of passionate nights
    When the pyramid flips
    And the truth jumps off of that cliff
    Hidden feelings revealed
    A power concealed
    Exploding from one simple kiss
    Love is…
    Frustrated, Agitated, Complicated, Temptation
    “FACT” is we all must face it
    Soaked under gray clouds where angels masturbated
    Rainy days are the perfect ways to spend your vacation
    LOST on an Island - Unknown destination
    Love is a demon smiling
    Holding cupids arrows and the flowers fragrance
    A shattered window
    A slammed door
    Shouts that echo invisible sores
    You fall to the floor
    Unable to reach the knife in your back
    Love is
    A massive media trap
    A wife addicted to crack
    A husband out of contact
    Both our ghost
    Strangers living together
    With different welcoming mats
    This is love
    This is my future
    But I’m willing to adapt……………
    test
  2. Poetickz

    Poetickz The Humble One

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    wow...thats all i really can say UFO...shit is absolutley true...i loved the entire thing, i loved how it all flowed so well, how all ur off rhymes hit so well, how you wrote about the good and evil of love...ying and yang in your words...but the most i loved about this piece was how dead on true it was...how true the meaning of the entire piece was...i have to say man...this is prolly one of my favorite pieces from you...very few times have i read somethin that was so true, meaningful, and real...

    keep doin you man...and show up more often homey!!! lol
    one
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  3. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    Don't hate me..I must extend my policy of honesty to those who normally post stuff I really like as well ;)

    But for me, I wasn't really feeling it. I mean..I was but I wasn't if that makes sense. The like your message throughout, describing love..the good and bad side and all that, but I guess it was the way it was written that I wasn't feeling. I feel bad for saying that cuz like I said, I do like what you are saying. But something about it...I guess for me the best way to describe it..would be... it was almost like you were writing it to a young(er)(ish) audience. That's just the tone it took with me although I'm sure you didn't intend it that way and others might not take it that way either.

    Sorry I can't give my 100% love on this piece but I wanted to be totally honest =)
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  4. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    ^no doubt...I was trying to make love sound really BASIC and SIMPLE....when in reality its so complicated and abstract....or is it?

    I dont know anymore....lol

    but this is what came out

    Poetickz knows what I mean....lol
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  5. quotive

    quotive 3

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    I hate how you used some multies, then went back to one word rhyming, then no rhyming at all. Very scattered, and unorganized.

    The angel's masterbating line was weird as fuck, I've never heard such a random metaphor for rain in my life.

    The first part was decent, since I'm borederline on my beliefs the part about God weren't my cup of tea.

    Keep doin' you though.
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  6. ManMadeofAshes

    ManMadeofAshes *DREAMER

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    damn... lost me at god is love. LOL. Hey man you know how I feel about all this shit. No love lost. I am just going to hit up one of your other peoms so I can give you some cool feed that I know is not horribly biased to your beliefs.

    like the god is love thing oh boy. I has so many stricptures that so obviously contridict that phrase that I can't take it seriously ever again.

    if you want the scriptures I would love to send em to you, (i have them all written down) but I ain't going force that shit on you. Spirituality is a journey for the individual, as a concequence we only see what we look at, not alway the things that are infront of us.

    take care man. I appreciate you always hitting me up when I drop by the realm. You know I want to return the love and I will soon.

    -ashes
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  7. Xyliere

    Xyliere Shattered Demoness

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    "Innocent tender bliss
    Fear and hate dismiss"

    "Can never say it once and stop
    Drop or fall in love and don’t get up"

    and of course, the very end... "Keep it sacred but not a secret"
    Those lines stuck in my mind, Not sure why though...must be the evlusivness?? I think that is the right word...Good flow, excellent writing as always.
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  8. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Love is a hypocrite.

    Nicely written piece man. I think you did a good job describing both parts in your own way. But man, are you trying to blind a nicca with that black font?

    One luv
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  9. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    ^shooots you don't even have glasses and I'm straining to see that LOL

    anyways UFO man I thought I replied to this already because I remember reading this but apparently not...I like the second part a little more, it just has a little more edge. I mean, I've written some number of poems that would lean so much more towards your first part, you know, but nothing like the second part-kinda unpredictable I guess. Keep writing Oddie!

    -Much Love
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  10. Poet x

    Poet x a ploy at being human...

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    this was dope, i especially enjoyed the darkside of love portion, that one line "Soaked under gray clouds where angels masturbated" that was sick.. keep writing, this was a true representation of love and both of it's sides..

    peace
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  11. Koban4max2

    Koban4max2 New Member

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    What can I say? I like your love theme. It's very good.
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  12. LadyL257

    LadyL257 New Member

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    i think the whole poem was nice... i mostly liked the 1st part tho..shit i love what love is...and in both parts cant be afraid of love...:)

    1Luv
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  13. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Man...What??!!??!

    today is a good day for reading in the realm.

    I'm feeling this shit....and again am inspired. Love is totally contradictory!! I mean..it makes you feel like you can flyyyyyyyyyyyy into a big asss brick walll!!

    I don't know man..I'm in love now but am I..when I know it's not really exactly all it's cracked up to be? Does that give me an advantage..maybe..maybe not..eh

    Good job!
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  14. Hannegan

    Hannegan Twist

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    I agree with that angels masterbating comment about it being totally weird and random. This was aiight tho bro, It did seem a bit scattered for me but it's about love right? what the hell about love aint scattered
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