N.E. - Round 2: 7. Brains -vs- 2. Tali Rodriguez

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Old 01-31-2007, 03:36 PM   #1 (permalink)
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N.E. - Round 2: 7. Brains -vs- 2. Tali Rodriguez



RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

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The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced


[list][*]Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
[*]Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
[*]Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
[*]During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
[*]Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a “show” but will not result in a match. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent posts between 16-64, you will lose the match but you will remain in the league. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent does not show, you will “Win by no-show”.[/list]
Voting:[list][*]If you do not show you can’t vote in any matches. .
[*]No bias votes! If you have a personal investment in wanting someone to lose, whether because that member voted against you once, or you just don’t like that person, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match. If have a personal investment in wanting someone to win, whether because they’re crew member, or because you want to face that person in the next week’s brackets, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match.
[*]”Bias” must be confirmed by a Moderator.
[*]3-ways are inevitable. In order to provide a tie-breaker in a 3-way, you are now required to indicate in what order the contestants finished (1st, 2nd, 3rd).
anyone who does not show or vote is suspended one week and must sign-in again to be inserted the following week.[/list]


Topics: Tournament Topics - Round 2 Brackets




From now on if you don't vote in the tournament and win your match, you will be deducted a vote from your next match for every vote didn't give the previous week. If you show late and your partner allows the extension as long as it’s less than a day late, it can count, but you will be deducted 2 votes for showing late regardless.

These rules will be put in effect starting now and won’t be modified again. I’m not bending or breaking anymore rules for anybody.


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Must READ: You must pick one of each topic to give your opponent some protection from choices and also so there isn't several verses written on the same topic that everyone has picked to be used.

So pick one of the Title and Phrases, one of the Quotes and one of the Pics for your opponent.

Thursday is the deadline for choosing topics or your opponent will get to pick their own topic. Topical choices must be posted in match threads by deadline.


All other rules that are applied in the league will also be enforced for regulating the tournament. If you're not familiar with the rules of the RSTL, please read them.


The only difference will be that in this tournament, your opponent will get to pick your topics for you. Topics must be picked and posted within the match thread within 1 day. If it's not posted, the opponent of the person that didn't pick a topic in time will get to choose his/her own topic. You must choose one of each kind of topic for some variety.


So... topics will be up Wednesday 12am PST every week and topical choices are due Thursday 12am PST and verses are due Monday 12am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich with votes due Wednesday 12 am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich

Also, there will be no recycling allowed. Nothing you've ever posted anywhere online will be allowed. The mods will be checking verses for authenticity with online search engines.

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Old 01-31-2007, 04:54 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Tali, I'll be giving you your topics today by like 7ish, please do the same. Thanks.

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- http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...8#post14402538
- http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...0#post14402780
- http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post14404681
- http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post14404731
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I'd really rather not have to tell each other what to write about, but if you insist, ok lol.

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Old 01-31-2007, 06:43 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Lets not undermine the tournament by ignoring its whole, stipulation, thing.

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Old 01-31-2007, 07:16 PM   #5 (permalink)
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If you insist...

Since I don't want to mandate what you write, my girl will instead lol...




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Old 01-31-2007, 08:19 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Written to a sloooow beat...Sorry so early...Going out of town for the weekend...



Chasing Destiny
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Eventually, everything that shows growth decays
Or using other words, in the end, it all goes away
As sure as the cagey coast elopes with the ocean’s waves
In the end, it goes away; it ALL goes away


One quickly figures out where one’s ass is supposed to fit
Whether you cried the first day of class or laughed at the folks who did
Even if neither choice was something you were much into
By doing nothing, you made a choice, and that choice stuck with you
As the days and grades passed, you played games and obeyed fads
Or became the ‘picked on’ and picked up ways to evade class
But even if neither choice was something you were much into
By doing nothing, you made a choice, and that choice stuck with you

Once junior high hit, the phantom boundaries were set in stone
The kings and queens were crowned and pawns were generally left alone
But say you weren’t them; I bet you sort of wanted to be
If only to avoid the teasing and taunting that haunted your dreams
It probably seemed that often a coffin was awfully intriguing
Maybe guns and pills crossed your mind, or possibly bleeding
Of course it never panned out; you weren’t really dying to leave
You were tired of being slighted and yearned for the right to believe
That the next four years of your life would surpass the previous eight
Because, as it stood, you were trapped and lacked an easy escape

If only you’d known…

Everything that shows growth decays
Or using other words, in the end, it all goes away


Grades nine, ten, eleven, and twelve were a mix of heaven and hell
Peaks and depressions, leads and suggestions, greed and deception
Obsessions and needs, confessions for deeds you deemed to be reckless
Exceedingly restless cause’ your actions never seemed to leave the impressions
That you sought. You swore you had every lesson received
All the answers, when really, you barely had a piece of the question
It’s likely you lacked perspective which led to defective reasoning
But post high school, close to none of that shit means a thing

If only you knew…

Everything that shows growth decays
Or using other words, in the end, it all goes away


Once it goes away, you’re left with very little to guide you
And you’re forced to confront all of those evil demons inside of you
Tried and true methods of coping no longer work their magic
In the tragic search for sadness cures it’s sure that nothing certain passes
Through a hearse as fast as fervent passion and you’ve lost yours
To the coffers of mass acceptance or purposely lacking tenants
Throughout school, you worked so hard to create an escape
From the insecurity that was most happy to take in the bait
But once the audience displaced, did you ever vacate the stages?
Or were you still a performer pretending to placate their gazes?

Regardless…

One quickly figures out where one’s ass is supposed to fit
Whether you drove the nicest car to class or laughed at the folks who did
And even if neither choice was something you were much into
By doing nothing, you made a choice, and that choice stuck with you
But only as long as you allowed it to fester within you
Did the self-imposed pressure to live up to 'nothing' continue
Once you took a look back and perceived the contrived standard
You realized that you had finally reached precisely the right answer

Which is what?

Everything that shows growth decays
Or using other words, in the end, it all goes away
As sure as the cagey coast elopes with the ocean’s waves
In the end, it goes away; it ALL goes away


But then what? An entire lifetime of chasing your destiny
Leaves you basically empty, ashamed, afraid of facing your memories
It's okay cause' eventutally, instead of tracing, you'll make your own fate
And begin the slow race toward erasing the entropy

There it goes...



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Old 02-04-2007, 09:27 PM   #8 (permalink)
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(In the year 2010).

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…The heir apparent of a pair of careful parents
set in ten commandments she would never dare to challenge
Scared of what would happen if she failed the Catholic practice
…Long established moral fabric torn until the cloth was damaged


That’s what they saw in Alice and sought to restore the balance
…poured her holy water, forced to absorb the gallons
…With morbid damage that only the Lord could salvage
and manage to diminish which is what they thought would happen
…It was all imagined … she was pretty well behaved
but if she went against their system they instantly felt betrayed
A liturgy bread buffet … seemingly everyday
At least till he came and helped misery melt away
…She met him in school, after praying they would get introduced
Pretty soon he was the only one she let in her room…
Denim and blue, leather with elegant shoes, offbeat
He recognized her stresses and lessened them too, softly
…Often made her forget she was cemented in rules…
and loosened the strict rigidity, extended her views
…Her parents even liked him which was slightly surprising
Only because he didn’t fit so tight in their alignment

Still he seemed to hypnotize them and impress them with his etiquette
…whenever there was tension in a room he simply shredded it
His delicate rhetoric had intoxicated Alice and
she was an orthodox, caught in knots … he unraveled them
Valiant and charming, yet alarmingly unexplained
Soon she noticed every time she approached him he’d tuck his chain
and he wasn’t always fun and games. Some days,
he’d say he had to tend to “private matters”, then run away.
…Simply darted homeward…speaking of which
she had him at her house but never spent an evening in his
…or even seen the inside of it, but paid little mind to this
and even grew to like the suspense she was provided with
…It off-set all the force-fed righteousness…
He often said “I have to tell you something”, time and again
But couldn’t find it in him and would fall dead silent
…she didn’t believe in broken faith, ignoring any sign of it

These were tough times, a permanent drought season…
The rate of anemic babies increased and they seemed to keep bleeding
…Twelve buildings in three cities had fallen without reason
The warmest summer as of recent was thirty degrees beneath freezing
The people would keep pleading for relief from the mire
and Alice appreciated having someone there beside her
To take her hand and guide her through each horrid occurrence
... as his lips let the hints slip … part of her heard it
It was hard to blur it … still she couldn’t trace his history
Three months in … and he was still a basic mystery
Until the night he would finally, tell her his plan
…when he flopped trip sixes in six consecutive hands
Revealed the chain, she thought was from another girl
…Uncovered pearl pentagram pendants from the underworld
…brought up the recent horrors and began to explain it
She knew the Antichrist would come but never thought he’d take a maiden…

The object of affection, or target of the devil’s henchman
Damien laid his eyes on her and felt her very essence
Then he read her thoughts about her parents as she choked up
“They’ve been taken care of, no longer can they slow us”…
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vote - tali

Tali - now this here was nice from beginning to end it read away
mad easy ... your writers voice was strong as fuck in this I liked the repeating
of the lines and how you went from school to school fuck it I liked this piece
you descriped the person you were talking to mad nice and still made it seem
real simple yeah this was sick wordplay flow all was on point

Brain - this was sick too flow was there your imagery was on point like
a motherfucker ... the hint of emotion and the way you described girly was all nice
but the only down part was the ending I was expecting something real
or something which would leave me shocked but him
actually being the devil child was kinda well done before I dont know
maybe I was expecting something else and got what I wanted instead but anyway real nice piece

this was a real dope battle both came real nice with theirs but I just
feel like Tali took it with a more complete piece which just took me in
I mean brains did his and made it harder for tali then I thougt he would
but just not enough its like a 8 to 10 for tali so there you go
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Old 02-06-2007, 08:17 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Tali, this was masterfully written I think. Somewhat of a poetical prose for those looking to expand in that field.... here's a great example. I was into it from the very start as the flow and metaphorical inference you used were near perfect.... can't be calling nobody perfect, not even me. lol

Eventually, everything that shows growth decays
Or using other words, in the end, it all goes away
As sure as the cagey coast elopes with the ocean’s waves
In the end, it goes away; it ALL goes away

I loved this start of it, reminds me of how mines starts actually with great wording and used as the introduction of the details that follow. The subject of growing up and becoming more mature as you go through what kids are like in school, maybe more so you then others, but we all can relate. You went through the transitions nicely with a kind of chorus.... sounds like something you plan on recording later, which isn't a bad idea. My humble guy puts up some texticular heroine for the verse fiends.

*Please sir, may I have some more?*

Brains, I want to say that I'm a fan of using different font, I did that too this week, but please when you do that can you increase the font size so we readers/voters can read your verses without struggling. not taking anything off for that, but it would help and I'd personally appreciate it because I like reading your work.

Ok, moving on...... the verse, written very well. you have the narration of a author, but with the flow and rhymes of a great verse writer. The content in itelf was nicely developed and easy to follow to your surprise ending that I haven't disliked yet in any of your verses I've read. So far, your suprise endings are the best surprise endings in the league. The character development wasn't that great, but I can see how that may have been on purpose to help the mysterious element that you were going for. I liked this alot regardless.... Some of your lines were just barely stretched, it didn't take away from the read at all, but in such a close match, it all counts and it was noticed. If you were facing anyone else, this would of probably won.

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this battle was actually better (or closer) than the ask vs dic battle imho.

tali came on some song shit, i know this was a track or at least could be by the repitition of what obviously was a chorus. but the fact is the story telling by tali, is really second to none. he took everybody back to where they have been before no matter who or what they are. i mean he took me back thinking about grade school days. shit was nice, and fresh. the mechanics were pretty nicely displayed but i dont like how you change your rhyme scheme midway through a stanza that is ugly to me, but to each their own. all around this was dope, what can i say? that it wasn't? na it was lol.


brains, ya shit was wack as fuck. na seriously that's what you expected me to say. this shit was very well written, and creative, reminding me of some immortal technique-esque type shit. i liked it a lot brotha, i would actually say you were one of the best reads this week, your choice of vocab was very well prepared and your mechanics were in tune with the best of them. you came at a VERY high skill level to face tali, and the fact is i think you won ......

if it weren't for his narrative voice...

so with that said ....

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Closest battle I've read but VOTE TALI because of the relatability and nothing more

Tali -- this was dope, something anyone can vibe to as its messege is universal because it touches on all or at least all the main groups. It keeps progressing in story while growing on the same message with a utilization of words that give off a very mature writers voice and clean narration. Very nice shit here

Brains -- also very nice man. I want to vote for u as much as tali but when I brought it all down I had to vote on a technical thing (relatability) as a story this was dope tho, I'm not knocking it by any means, the only thing I felt was 'offbeat' was when u developed this character (which was done well) u brought in the hellish aspect to late, u should've foreshadowed a biiit more because when u said he flopped 666 6 times they never played cards it was just BAM u know, u had a slight foreshadow with the penant but it wasn't enough, for me

Other than that very dope shit man
Srry to see u go
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so much similarities between the both.... you can see the identical style in both... but one difference if was made... tali's word usage, patternizing and mastering of narrating putting all the elements together is something he's too good at. --- he brings it to a higher level... but its not flaws that was seen in brains' verse... it was because his narration/storytelling if it was combo'd better, it would've proven to his favor totally... however, at end of everything, tali was way 2 fluid and much 2 on a higher style in the essence of writing.

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tali....this was a very well written piece...very good wording and solid smooth flow...the story line was nothing special but was real..somethign people could relate to... i think that works well with people...if you preach on something that could really happen...so props...you developed it good and im truly amazed at the strength of this piece.

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brains...... i thought this was pretty good..had a good flow and was pretty well written...i kinda lost focus after the first few lines but you ended it pretty well....the stand out in this was the flow to me..the story was alright the beginning and ending were good...but the middle just lacked some development.

overall...brains would have beaten a majority of ppl with this...but talis piece was just tooooooo good.

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