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u flip shit, i refine it
Join Date: Sep 2003
Posts: 1,185
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Methodine
You've been here a while, but still i'll leave you cut up like a surgeon
cuz your Top 30 record's like ya sex life, you stay on the verge, in
--the idea was there, and i havent seen verge-in before, im almost surprised i havent.. but i liked this.. it was cool. i just think it coulda had some better wording to it.. incorporate verge in into your punch rather than having it at the end
You aint ever gunna be ill, n' ya text aint ever stopped shit
cuz you resemble ya verse, they way you both get dropped quick
--lol i dont know man, this just didnt come off right to me.. well, i guess that he did write his verse early, but kids are gonna forget that... especially now that its not early anymore lol..
Im'a go thug on you, n' jus' watch me take out ya crew too
cuz my slugz are like laxitive, the way they go straight thru you
--hmm to be honest laxitive references are sort of played, this was an ok flip.. nothing too fancy
I've already got the win, so nevermind thinkin about the scores
cuz even if I threw ya a lifeline, most likely its probably yours
--cool concept i thought, but bad wording with it man, if you flipped it a little more, i could have thought this was str8 dope, but alas, you didnt this time around lol
You'z a respected head, but in this, I jus' sweep on through
cuz dudes dont sleep on your battles, they sleep on you
--haha what man? that just seemed so simple... i mean, i dont know man, i get the gay reference obviously but.. i wasnt feeling it bro
Im sick with spits, n' sly too kid, n' thats sumin thats found new
so i'd come up on ya weak side, but can't get my arms round you
--hmm, creative concept, but again wasnt quite delivered to full effect dogg
If you can't see me winnin this, then you gotta be blind, see
cuz if im'a pussy, then your deffinatly ass, the way your behind me
--lol naw man, this type of shit is just played to be real, i mean you had a flip to it, but it was still just sorta simple and nothing spectacular.. overall you had an aiight verse dogg.. you had a couple cool hits, but some were pretty bland.. it was a pretty good read overall tho
ST_UC
you dont belong in the RBL, now ya should leave
please Seq the exit dog... your outta your league
--that was a pretty creative hit.. i think that you should have incorporated Sequel into the punch a little better, but i still liked it, original and effective..
your lousy wit beef faggot... and let it be known
only a confused junkie would think that meth is dope
--hah, well, i would guess this gets used on him alot, but one way or the other it was a nice flip, pretty solid delivery of it.. well-connected punch
a virgin, you dont prefer to have sex, son
only time u've played your hands right, is when U jerked with the left one
--hmm, i wasnt really feeling this too much.. it just didnt come at me right for some reason.. it didnt seem conceptually right, like only time u played ur hands right, u use ur left to jerk off, it doesnt quite make sense.. i see what your getting at but i didnt feel it too much
hes hungry for new concepts...and im perplexed to find
that if I said food for thought was a dick... meth'a dine
--hmm, somewhere between creative nameplay and a bit forced, not bad tho
fuck a crowd, this n*gga couldnt even Rock Aesop
he aint a yankee, but his ASS really wants A - Rod
--haha, man, i wouldnt have noticed this if someone didnt say an A-Rod line to me on AIM.. i have never heard alex rod. called that for some weird ass reason, but this was smooth, really funny actually haha.. good shit
"ERI mu'fucka*"? Is that what im susposed to say??
"Emergency Room, Incoming"! when they carry this joke away?
--lol niceness, your really picking it up here.. this was a cool hit
cant take a loss? wont accept it? your hard headed, but dude
there'll be 50 lines below EXPLAININ why im better than you
---thats creative, i think you are referring to the ten votes, each having five lines (the minimum), but i think some kids could miss this, i dont blame 'em if they do either, you shoulda referrenced the voting and the line minimum for each vote maybe to make it more effective, but it was creative... overall, you had a nice verse, i think you really picked it up with the last couple of lines here, good read..
vote- ST_UC
why? I think that you both were at about the same calibre of concepts, but stuc had a bit better wording, and was more consistent. he had more lines that made me laugh, and remained slightly more personal, or at least relevent to the battle (ie-the voting closer).. it was a pretty close battle, but i definately think stuc got it, good reads..
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Wonderflow
my dick is so-long.. yours is more like hello
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