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u flip shit, i refine it
Join Date: Sep 2003
Posts: 1,185
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Super Dooper.
Cane dissing bad wordplay in the mag drops
means next week u wont get a PP, but ull get a mag spot
--heh, this hits close to home for me lol.. but iunno, i see this type of flip so much, not specific to the wordplay part but just reasons they will get in the mag or something.. even the 'ish kids always say to rhyme like 'you wont make the pp, but use to make the mag' type shit..
ya moms a druggie, always trying to smoke shit
so when i leave u in the dust, shell probably try & toke it
--aiigiht aiight, sorta feeling this.. not the hardest diss, but coo
his girl is real, not like them fake bitches
im no Robin Hood •••••, but ill steal Rich's
--naw man, this is sooooooo played against him.. been flipped in very similar context's too..
ur shit reminds of some1, not like hotness
when i read ya verse, i honestly thought u were Tri Optix
--? i didnt like this, for one, i dont think of tri as someone that like everyone straight across the board considers wack, this seemed more offensive to tri than to corey lol..
with them long & forced lines, my flows tighter
but keeps me wondering..is Namix ur ghostwriter?
--haha, hey asshole, i didnt see this comming when i started breaking it down.. this was ok man.. i mean, again it seemed like a meaner hit to me than corey.. I dont like this style that kids use sometimes, it makes their hits really indirict.. 'u look like so and so' 'ur the new so and so' 'u have the style of so and so'.. all those will just be so so to me lol, but this wasnt bad still
Richard, ya horrible, fists will make u feel hits
verse is like Mel's movie, spent 10 years on it & still shit
--damn man, this was soooo simple.. is it even true? did he spend ten years on it? lol, im serious curious.. but i saw it last night, and liked it.. and most people on these boards and that i have talked to liked it - so you need to be careful when making comparisons like that.. give us something that is blatantly shit.. that everyone can relate to, it will make the hit more like 'hahah soo true and funny',
aint no king, ur the female royalty & sitting fine
if u want a place to fit in, i heard theirs a Queens in NY
--ehh, naw man.. im just being real with you.. but there is even a show called King of Queens, its not like this is real fresh wordplay, and it seemed like your setup really forced the concept.. 'ur the female royalty', it just doesnt sound right for some reason..
25 on the net? get a life with ur boyfriend or job
its not like ull get married, Bush aint passing those laws
--haha, there ya go kid.. i been waiting for somethin like that.. u almost didnt need to spell out the boyfriend part though, it might have made for a strong punch if you ommitted that and kept ur punch more implicit... u know? but it was funny, cool shit
next week ull be shook, thats what dudes say
hope ur ready for Friday, 13, thats when & who ull face
--i dont like when kids do this man.. because not everyone knows how to do the ranks, so it doesnt really strike a chord with me.. but it was a creative punch.. i think you should hav elaborated on the friday the 13th.. i almost hate to say it, but maybe a jason reference coulda even work lol
remember when Tang stomped u, feeling dumb?
all i expect from winning, is a thread saying u really won
--haha, that was a cool closer.. overall you had an aiight verse hommie, a couple real funny lines, and a few that just came off too simple to me, but good read..
Richard Corey
Mel Gibson’s looking for me...
his sales dropped, I took it to mean
folks found out about this drawn-out ass whuppin’...that's free
--haha, weird how we flipped the movie in the same free direction a minute a part.. yours was alot better than mine though to be real lol.. mine only woulda been ok if no one else referenced that movie this week.. i cant believe how many kids have.. ahh.. but this was the funniest one to me so far, nice opener pawtna
don’t start crying now! This guy is lying, he ain’t defiant! How?
bitch, your bed sheets show how you’ll take this shit lying down.
--hmm, take this shit lying down has been used, not abused, just used, you had a pretty funny flip to it, i wasnt feeling it too much for some reason though..
Recycling; playing off verses is cool. Quietly, I had my doubts
Now Supe’s in the Top 10, I have to ask ... is wack aloud?!
--haha i dunno man, it seems like you could have better incorporated the wordplay into the punch.. Or maybe expand on it a little bit, make it more obvious in the setup.. because "quietly" almost didnt make me draw attention to "aloud".. but even though this was simple, it still made me laugh lol
If ya mouth’s the only thing shootin’ off, let me cock it, dude.
I’ll kill you and use your death scene, next week, as my topical
--outside of this not flowing well to me, pretty nice punch, relative and all..
First, I come hellish with scenes; second, I make this nerd cower;
so I guess breaking down ‘Super’s scripts’ is the third power
--almost overly complex, but i still liked it.. I just dont know what third power has to do with it that much, outside of the super-script.. but it was still creative
That’s all well and wack, but you lost...now the consecutive sonn’
cus I made sure it would never be possible that this negative won
--ehh, calling him a negative didnt cut the butter for me
I’ll come up with the chrome and squeeze, and blow debree
The top four will be washing YOU out of their clothes for weeks!
-haha, niceness.. ouch
Riddle me this for your ritalin fix, why won’t I riddle ya body
when you just throw ya joints together like Mr. Miagi?
--hmm.. the concept was cool but it seemed like you wrote it quick or something, maybe could stand some rewordin to be even more effective, but it was still aiight
This fag seems to be a drag Queen...overruling dykes
so the question is: how many men can Super Do per night?
---haha, nice litttle subtle nameplay,
“Richard, dumb it down.” Fuck it now, I just struck him down
... this post will be the only time you see me help Up this clown
--word, i actually havent seen that concept used before, im sorta surprised, pretty coo closer.. overall you had a nice verse man, i literally liked most of your lines, u were consistent with it.. good read dogg
vote- Richard Corey
why? man to be honest he got this pretty easy in my opinion.. His concepts were just alot more fresh.. he is one kid that always comes fresh as fuck, so thats hard to compete with - but i think he edged super out in general with flow and everything pretty much.. Super had a couple lines i was really feeling, Richard only had a couple lines that i wasnt really feeling though.. So he gets my vote.. good reads tho guys
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my dick is so-long.. yours is more like hello
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