34. Eternal Path 0-1 vs. 33. E the Real 0-0

[TaLi RodrigueZ]

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TOPICS:

Topics for 7/11 ** free slurpee day !!! WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.. sorry

Choose a topic from the link posted above.

[Eternalpath]

Through my window I gazed at the eastward sun rise..
Unable to make out structures through my teary eyes..
As the door opened in my room & da caressing of my thighs..
Bought me back to reality of the pressure he would apply..
The window shade always got pulled down before the crime..
Five years of pain, emotionally drained out of my mind..
Every time he would wait until the house was empty..
And bestowed his growth on top of me that left me in pity..
Doesn't matter of my screams & tears..He was just to strong..
Every time I told someone, they made me feel I was in the wrong..
So left to deal with his sexual frustration, one day will come..
That I will overcome my fear, and gain enough strength to run..
Never will I forgive the man who forced away my virginity..
From the age of 12, to live with more rage then infinity..
The way he looked at me, wiping the sweat when finished..
Wishing that his self used organ would quickly diminish..
My cry's never heard nor felt, left knee deep in water..
There must be reasons why..I'm his only daughter..
A single parent with torture of using me as a hobby..
The only way another man would touch me..would be
Over my dead body..
Years have passed but the thoughts still linger..
The day I escaped that bullshit ringer..
Everyday when I gaze in the window I see..
His eyes, His Nose..everything that resembles me..
There's no escaping the memories I left behind..
Until the one day of the love I will find..
It came the day after Valentine, those broad shoulders..
Chiseled face that made his young age look older..
Over and Over he tried to get closer..
Smooth at using his profession as an composer..
Trying to use his romantic ways of impression..
Of course I looked at it as physical aggression..
With every attempt to seduce my vaginal walls..
I thought of my past experiences & the pain it caused..
My body shut down when touched by another man..
Even though I know God is just giving me a helping hand..
To overcome my fears and overwhelming concerns..
and it only took several attempts for me to learn..
That this is the time I shall relinquish to his sexual appetite..
My thoughts of my friend that he will try again tonight..
Over my dead body was my thoughts, but they have passed..
My outfit sexy, and made me look sharper then glass..
His words lacked of compassion, as if he has gave up on me..
so I knew I would have to seduce him to see..
That I was ready for this test, the look on his face was amazement..
He took me to his dungeon, where he began to vent..
Screaming more then talking, telling me he lost his patience..
Until tonight, the peek had reached its greatest..
He had this set-up, of sexual fantasies that came to life..
He wanted me to be his first, the one who would be his wife..
I started to stutter, feeling as if I made the wrong decision..
Until he grabbed me and started licking and kissing..
On my neck so I thought what the heck..I'm use to pain..
At least this is from someone who loved me all the same..
Whips and chains, and tied me up tight so I couldn't move..
Unleash his madness like he had something to prove..
With blood pouring..he began's to fuck me profusely..
Choking the life out of me..his hands the opposite of loosely..
He finishes, and now notices that he went to far in his hobby..
and by strange twist of fate, my next sexual encounter was..
Over my dead body..





of course my topic is Over my dead body..60 lines

[E Tha Real]

"Habit and routine have an unbelievable
power to waste and destroy."- Henri de Lubac

Chivalry is dead, maimed and it's been months in disguise
Of "I trust you" really meaning 'just not your wandering eyes'
thundering skys, emotions flare passed this demeanor
an oath for better or better and were the grass is greener
Active means words, grow accustom to worthless pain
arguments over right & wrong plotted on a surface of shame
words hit to remain, a scorned heart that never lost track
day in and day out wishing i could sever the clocks back
when my neck snaps around her eyes, tell its graphic
I raped her in my mind babe & forgot you were telepathic
my words aren't precise then watch her swing for the fences
her temper feeds off of studders and lingering sentences
it ends with shit or get of the pod, I'll unload what's next
Engagement? I'd rather get down on a knee...propose sex
in a murder, death, kill mode with no plead for an apology
On top of the talent in telepathy... a degree in pyscholgy
and don't ever think divorce? want to lose what you've earn?
clever idea... a prenuptual agreement? it's tough to burn
ask and buy a ticket into what many will call the dog house
rather simple you want to sleep in the garage or couch?
smiling for your lost dreams, you'll develop a lie & live it
swallow your pride, it's time to know that sky is the limit
watching the forecast but you can't hinder the weather
trying to be tolerant while living in a sinners endeavor
sacrifices felt deep in pockets & couting off a weeks digits
And if luck be a lady? its not to late to turn priest is it?
habits of verbal of abuse from lack of trust can't lay off it
date night & anniversary's dead, another day in the office

we give love a bad name...

[ssenlli]

up over no shows

[Logicalistic]

Vote-Eternalpath


That shit just had raw emotion in it....and the way you brought the whole thing around was very well thought out. You took the "over my dead body" thing in a direction that I wouldn't have thought of, primarily due to my gender, but either way, it was 100% fire.

[Just So Cute]

Ep your verse was real nice the flow was straight and it had its bumps... But your verse had alot of things that made me have to stop and reread alot of parts... You had some nice lines but it didnt spark my interest..

ETR I liked your verse is grabbed my attention easyily... I liked how your flow was consistent and how there werent very many bumps in your verse... I liked the topic you chose and you did a real nice job with it... You imagery was dope...

Vote- ETR

[Eternalpath]

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post12311631

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...4#post12311744

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post12313571

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post12313631

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post12313681

[TaLi RodrigueZ]

EP

Very heartfelt stuff...Damn near painful at times...Rhymewise...This wasn't the strongest in the world...Nonetheless I never really got the impression that this piece really needed it that much anyways...Would have been icing on the cake though...I thought it read pretty smoothly...Like I said...Content was pretty good...The ending by itself isn't the most original thing ever but coupled with the beginning of the story it still packs a decent little punch...

E Tha Real

I can relate with the topic and how you applied it...Your writing is pretty descriptive and reads fairly easily...The rhymes weren't anything amazing...But they were certainly solid...Really...My only issue with this particular piece is that it seems kind of short...I don't mean lengthwise as much as just development wise...You picked the topic...You executed it pretty well...But I didn't really feel particularly fufilled by the end of it...Like there was so much more that could have been explored...

Overall...I have to give this one to Eternal Path(I still can't believe you voted for Tek but anyway lol) for a couple of reasons...First because the story/topic just seemed more complete...Secondly because something about the emotion displayed just grabbed my attention...Which is something I can't say for a lot of rhymes period...I didn't really get that from E tha Real...Although I sincerely hope he sticks around because he will make it up towards the top if he does...He certainly seems capable...

[Richard Corey]

don't have much time...Eternal Path, your language, at times, was a lil' wonky. But it is what it is...It was a nice story with movement and it developed rather well. It's funny, I didn't so much like how you told it, but what you told. The story itself was rather engaging. The character was interesting and nothing happened out of the blue, everything was set up for so when the ending came, I didn't think of it as the average obligatory twist.

E The Real was cool, your story or statement wasn't as clear as Path's was. You had some nice images and a couple of quotable lines, but for the most part your writing wasn't as concise. Good story, but Path's was better


vote: Eternal Path

[Corrupt Science]

Eternalpath... i dunno. the rhyming was pretty weak and you stretched a good handful of rhymes. the content and story i thought was mediocre. it didn't seem like that hard of a concept. as soon as i hit what i considered to be the climax (the transition from the father to this new man) it seemed all too obvious to me, especially with the reptition of "over my dead body". i never caught your emotion except towards the part between the middle and end but didn't last long. i think it pretty much fell off a little bit when you described this guy who is consistently trying to get at (you) and then he almost gives up when you finally agree to get involved with him sexually and now this guy who almost gives up has whips, chains, and basically rapes you? and then you even mentioned a notion that it was his first time and that he would want to WIFE her?! no offense but that kind of killed it for me. it was easy to read but primarily because it was relatively simple writing.

again, in all this no offense, hopefully you take it constructively and improve off of it.

E Tha Real... it was a decent verse. you made a topic that should be relatively simple into something almost abstract and i didn't think it was appropriate. it was hard to read maybe because you were trying to be overly complex or maybe just bad connections but through most the verse i was thinking "alright cool... but how does this relate to the topic?". anyways, you did have some nice lines and the ending as well as that last little statement kind of bring it full circle.

overall i'd have to give it to E Tha Real
his story wasn't as easy to read and wasn't as clear and concise but i felt it also had a lot more writing skill and i enjoyed the story more simply because it didn't have tiny faults that made me lose a lot of interest.

[TeKneeK]

vote - eternalpath


reason: more visual imagery and understandably narrated.... more suspense during the reading and everything from emotion to storytelling pretty much made it a sure shot win



E was good.... but lacked the oomph that gives off something more than his strong content.... didnt really gripme enough emotionally but thats it.

[Ribonuclease]

Both very good stories. EP had a really good verse with very raw emotion, I think it could have even been shorter and better with some wordplay and metaphores, but a good read overall for a sensative topic. E the Real just had a great verse with good imagery and metaphores pretty much just felt like E the Real took this with some really clever wordplay and a story that was pretty damn clever. Good show from both.

Vote - E the Real

[Runna DaMille]

Eternal – I didn’t feel like you were able to convey any one subject well enough because you tried to encompass so much that everything came off a bit superficial. To include as much as you tried to, you’d have to go much longer so you have to either cut some stuff out or find a way to express something more succinctly.

E Tha Real – You had some nice one liners in there. Incorporated many clichés “Luck be a lady”, “Sky is the limit” etc with interesting wording. I don’t know that there was enough detail in regards to the reality of your relationship. More like broad generalizations. On the other hand, that helped give the verse more elements that I could relate to than it might have if you were too specific.

Vote - E the Real

[TaLi RodrigueZ]

Match is a tie 4-4

Both of yall' catch a win...

EP= 1-1

ETR = 1-0