31. jsick 0-0 vs 32. tWEETY 0-0

Ratiko Malodic · 06-13-2005, 06:24 AM

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TOPICS:

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=12120601

Choose a topic from the link posted above.

Tw.ee.Ty · 06-13-2005, 06:18 PM

Checking in................................. .......

jsick · 06-15-2005, 01:15 AM

checking in

jsick · 06-16-2005, 03:44 AM

your an underground rapper who in order to get signed must turn mainstream.. do you or dont you take the contract and what leads to your decision. L Dogg

Reached a cross roads, and the path I picked is unpopular
My homies say its blasphemous, like Rodney king becoming a copper
I decided to use this mic, as my way 2 make money
While I luv the game, I hate seein my daughter hungry
They labels say they like the flow, but my shit 2 underground
They offerin million dollars, if I can make a mainstream turn around
Now I'm the cat who said th@ bad boy's music was a waste of time
But I got 2 stay alive, cant keep havin 2 move wit a nine
Cant keep havin 2 hustle, tryin 2 raise the stacks
Strainin my mental muscle, so my daughter can eat flap jacks
She's my reason 4 bein, makin this change 4 her not 4 me
I also got dreams, and 1 is seein her in university
If this was a muvi, now u'd hear the sad lament of a harp
Decision is to do music for money, or do it for my heart
It mite hurt my heart to leave, but even broken hearts heal
And I do anything, if it guarantees my daughter a meal
U mite c this as malevolent as cain killin abel
But I luv my daughter so I'm signin 2 th@ record label

Tw.ee.Ty · 06-16-2005, 11:18 PM

Bullets passing by me, loud explosion sounds ringing in my ear
A Miracle hope that I’ll live through this. Death is my fear
My finger on the Trigger , 1500 bullets is coming out of my gun
As I see the Blood and the bodies drop, I tell myself this isn’t fun
My heart is beating out of control, like an over dose patient
Sweats pouring out of my open pores, while the sun blazen
My feet’s moving forward while their doing the opposite
I stop all of a sudden. I see this little thing flying above me like a rocket
Threw my gun on the sand, took cover. Sand gets in my mouth
Felt the ground shake, on the side corner of my eye, down the goes the houses
Throat felt scratchy, cheers starts to erupt, in my ear. We won the war
Ache pain on my back and my legs As I got up. My finger felt sore
.
.
.
Going left and right my eyes goes, looking for any survivors
Their death was unexpected, out it goes like an broken lighter
Stop, and I See between the woods a blond hair, I look closer.
Grasp a hold of the hair and pulled, a corpse girl body is what I discover
My lips started to quiver, so vibrate my hand goes, feeling shocked
I can imagine her screams before her death, tears leak…*Fuck*
I can also see her hiding under something, to prevent her death
But it was too late, as soon the rocket hit, *BOOM* she felt
Her body looked like everything was blown out of her, no bones
Legs felt deflated, her head, There wasn’t even a brain being shown
.
.
.
Layed her down on the ground. Got on my knee’s and started to pray
Hoping in the near future I wont be punish for this on this war day
.
.
I see why people says “It’s hard to get freedom”
Cause we soldier keep killing the people who wants freedom”

Forgotted all about this....Quick keyed it..

Peace

Urizen · 06-17-2005, 05:27 AM

jsick

your story was kinda quickly read
it was ok but it held nothing special
it was real straight forward ... wich made it more like you just told it to get rid of it
you couldve done more with it in my opinion
but signing 4 ya daughter is a nice concept cus sometimes you gotta do the best thing
not what you you want that was dope but all in all you couldve done better

Tweety

Yours was quick to ... I can see youve got skillz and that this was rushed
I liked the way you told ya story .... vividly
you finding the girl while killing people is dope to and that last line
was a nice ending line
I cant really say much about this story but good job

vote tweety

J o o k · 06-18-2005, 09:20 PM

Jsick - I don't know if you keyed the story thinking that tweety was going to no show or what. But it just didn't hit hard to me man. I mean it was a fast read plus the story wasn't even that great feel what I'm saying. The imagery needs work, the flow was cool it was probably the highlight of your verse.

Tweety - Although it was a quick read also, it was a bit more talented then what Jsick posted. Your connection to the picture was pretty solid. The imagery was nicely executed and the plot was pretty cool. Overall you just outshined Jsick. Good read.

v/ Tweety

Balthowsai · 06-19-2005, 08:47 PM

Tweety wins this, simply off the descriptive aspects of the verse. Pretty good from both guys, but Tweety's was better.
Peace.

IllaMentalz!!

pestilence · 06-19-2005, 10:24 PM

I need to give quick votes… very busy weekend…
J-Sick- you need to work a little bit, just under-par work, It wasn’t developed enough, maybe next time use more bars, and please spell right, people don’t take “muvi” that seriously…. The daughter, your music… all needed more development, too all over the place

Twee. Yours was better than J’s, just the word choice and the imagery though, the plot wasn’t anything out of the ordinary, but it was direct, and I know it was just a key, I expect to see you do better next week…

Vote TW

Ratiko Malodic · 06-20-2005, 12:35 PM

tweety wins 1-0
jsick looses 0-1

06-13-2005, 06:24 AM	#1 (permalink)
Ratiko Malodic Hispanic Bitchm0nkey Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Wales Posts: 36,007	31. jsick 0-0 vs 32. tWEETY 0-0 DUE DATES: VERSES DUE Thursday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Sunday 9:00pm PACIFIC/12:00 Midnight EST -----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+----- LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 14 lines - MINIMUM 60 lines - MAXIMUM -----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+----- VOTING: No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes No hate votes -----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+----- YOU MUST VOTE ON 5 BATTLES! For every vote you fail to submit and post a link for in your own match, you will be deducted 1 vote. -----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+----- No Show Voting Rule People who win via a no show, MUST vote on two battles in order to recieve credit for the win. If you don't vote on two other matches then your record will be left as it was coming into this week. -----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+----- if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!! !!KICK SOME FUCKING ASS!! -----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+-----+----- TOPICS: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=12120601 Choose a topic from the link posted above. __________________ fuck it

06-13-2005, 06:18 PM	#2 (permalink)
Tw.ee.Ty Registered User Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 51	Checking in................................. ....... __________________ .:I'm So Fly:.

06-15-2005, 01:15 AM	#3 (permalink)
jsick Registered User Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 8	checking in __________________ "We talk a lot about Malcom X and Martin Luther King JR, but It's time to be like them, as strong as them. They were mortal men like us and everyone of us can be like them. I don't want to be a role model. I just want to be someone who says, this is who i am, this is what i do. I say what's on my mind"- 2pac "Even though we were going through our drama I would never wish death on nobody. 'Cause there ain't no coming back from that."-Biggie "There's a difference between confidence and being cocky, and I'm real confident because I know what I'm capable of." -Big L "It's also for the love, for the love of the music itself. The financial reward is also great, but really without it I still got love for the game itself." -Big L "Like and respect are two different things. Respect only comes with integrity, and that's not necessary to exist in today's amerikkkan cultural world"-Chuck D

06-16-2005, 03:44 AM	#4 (permalink)
jsick Registered User Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 8	your an underground rapper who in order to get signed must turn mainstream.. do you or dont you take the contract and what leads to your decision. L Dogg Reached a cross roads, and the path I picked is unpopular My homies say its blasphemous, like Rodney king becoming a copper I decided to use this mic, as my way 2 make money While I luv the game, I hate seein my daughter hungry They labels say they like the flow, but my shit 2 underground They offerin million dollars, if I can make a mainstream turn around Now I'm the cat who said th@ bad boy's music was a waste of time But I got 2 stay alive, cant keep havin 2 move wit a nine Cant keep havin 2 hustle, tryin 2 raise the stacks Strainin my mental muscle, so my daughter can eat flap jacks She's my reason 4 bein, makin this change 4 her not 4 me I also got dreams, and 1 is seein her in university If this was a muvi, now u'd hear the sad lament of a harp Decision is to do music for money, or do it for my heart It mite hurt my heart to leave, but even broken hearts heal And I do anything, if it guarantees my daughter a meal U mite c this as malevolent as cain killin abel But I luv my daughter so I'm signin 2 th@ record label __________________ "We talk a lot about Malcom X and Martin Luther King JR, but It's time to be like them, as strong as them. They were mortal men like us and everyone of us can be like them. I don't want to be a role model. I just want to be someone who says, this is who i am, this is what i do. I say what's on my mind"- 2pac "Even though we were going through our drama I would never wish death on nobody. 'Cause there ain't no coming back from that."-Biggie "There's a difference between confidence and being cocky, and I'm real confident because I know what I'm capable of." -Big L "It's also for the love, for the love of the music itself. The financial reward is also great, but really without it I still got love for the game itself." -Big L "Like and respect are two different things. Respect only comes with integrity, and that's not necessary to exist in today's amerikkkan cultural world"-Chuck D

06-16-2005, 11:18 PM	#5 (permalink)
Tw.ee.Ty Registered User Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 51	Bullets passing by me, loud explosion sounds ringing in my ear A Miracle hope that I’ll live through this. Death is my fear My finger on the Trigger , 1500 bullets is coming out of my gun As I see the Blood and the bodies drop, I tell myself this isn’t fun My heart is beating out of control, like an over dose patient Sweats pouring out of my open pores, while the sun blazen My feet’s moving forward while their doing the opposite I stop all of a sudden. I see this little thing flying above me like a rocket Threw my gun on the sand, took cover. Sand gets in my mouth Felt the ground shake, on the side corner of my eye, down the goes the houses Throat felt scratchy, cheers starts to erupt, in my ear. We won the war Ache pain on my back and my legs As I got up. My finger felt sore . . . Going left and right my eyes goes, looking for any survivors Their death was unexpected, out it goes like an broken lighter Stop, and I See between the woods a blond hair, I look closer. Grasp a hold of the hair and pulled, a corpse girl body is what I discover My lips started to quiver, so vibrate my hand goes, feeling shocked I can imagine her screams before her death, tears leak…Fuck I can also see her hiding under something, to prevent her death But it was too late, as soon the rocket hit, BOOM she felt Her body looked like everything was blown out of her, no bones Legs felt deflated, her head, There wasn’t even a brain being shown . . . Layed her down on the ground. Got on my knee’s and started to pray Hoping in the near future I wont be punish for this on this war day . . I see why people says “It’s hard to get freedom” Cause we soldier keep killing the people who wants freedom” Forgotted all about this....Quick keyed it.. Peace __________________ .:I'm So Fly:.

06-17-2005, 05:27 AM	#6 (permalink)
Urizen I hate humans Join Date: Sep 2004 Posts: 2,856	jsick your story was kinda quickly read it was ok but it held nothing special it was real straight forward ... wich made it more like you just told it to get rid of it you couldve done more with it in my opinion but signing 4 ya daughter is a nice concept cus sometimes you gotta do the best thing not what you you want that was dope but all in all you couldve done better Tweety Yours was quick to ... I can see youve got skillz and that this was rushed I liked the way you told ya story .... vividly you finding the girl while killing people is dope to and that last line was a nice ending line I cant really say much about this story but good job vote tweety __________________ realistic is a small block within a massive city of possibilities and potential

06-18-2005, 09:20 PM	#7 (permalink)
J o o k free the oppressed. Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Bay Area, Ca Posts: 9,650	Jsick - I don't know if you keyed the story thinking that tweety was going to no show or what. But it just didn't hit hard to me man. I mean it was a fast read plus the story wasn't even that great feel what I'm saying. The imagery needs work, the flow was cool it was probably the highlight of your verse. Tweety - Although it was a quick read also, it was a bit more talented then what Jsick posted. Your connection to the picture was pretty solid. The imagery was nicely executed and the plot was pretty cool. Overall you just outshined Jsick. Good read. v/ Tweety __________________ "Somewhere a True Believer is training to kill you. He is training with minimal food or water, in austere conditions, training day and night. The only thing clean on him is his weapon. He doesn't worry about what workout to do - his ruck weighs what it weighs, his runs end when the enemy stops chasing him. This True Believer is not concerned about 'how hard it is;' he knows either he wins or dies. He doesn't go home at 17:00, he is home. He knows only The Cause." Win or Die. Still want to quit?

06-19-2005, 08:47 PM	#8 (permalink)
Balthowsai ARCHIVIAL STATUS YO Join Date: Apr 2002 Posts: 118	Tweety wins this, simply off the descriptive aspects of the verse. Pretty good from both guys, but Tweety's was better. Peace. IllaMentalz!! __________________ Baltho08: nuk3script: btw im serious.. i will love u long time Fresh E Funk: FUCK U

06-19-2005, 10:24 PM	#9 (permalink)
pestilence now believes he's hyphy. Join Date: Apr 2000 Posts: 13,109	I need to give quick votes… very busy weekend… J-Sick- you need to work a little bit, just under-par work, It wasn’t developed enough, maybe next time use more bars, and please spell right, people don’t take “muvi” that seriously…. The daughter, your music… all needed more development, too all over the place Twee. Yours was better than J’s, just the word choice and the imagery though, the plot wasn’t anything out of the ordinary, but it was direct, and I know it was just a key, I expect to see you do better next week… Vote TW

06-20-2005, 12:35 PM	#10 (permalink)
Ratiko Malodic Hispanic Bitchm0nkey Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Wales Posts: 36,007	tweety wins 1-0 jsick looses 0-1 __________________ fuck it

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