NORTH 3. Tekneek vs 7. Edward Lake

[Mac Flow]

RSTL TOURNAMENT
Round Three


DUE DATES


VERSES DUE Thursday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST/

VOTES DUE Sunday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST


TOPICS

Round 3 / League 10 - 17 october TOPICS

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60 lines - MAXIMUM


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Go Forth and Produce

[TeKneeK]

"You will lose"


- Drago: Rocky IV

[Edward Lake]

"I will not lose"


- Nas: Ether

[TeKneeK]

*points at Ed* dead man walking...




You're walking slowly towards something you dread...


Within the corridor of darkness…
My satanic portraits…
Furnished both my walls… since the night I was an orphan
I tread into the halls in a veil with lacy sequins
Apparel for my tastiness for blood that I was seekin’
Insatiable happiness…
Lurkin thru the passageway..
My paradise to wander thru my realms was a happy day
The jovial reminders of the onyx-colored night
Was how I felt the comfort thru obscurity in sight…
Thru the tunnels as I marched… until that ray seen before me..
Had halted me to stop… what is this thing that has scorched me????
Inside this blackened tunnelway the glimpse of a beam
Had my schizophrenic mind thinking life in its scene…
As the glow streamed my dragon eyes…
I roared away in pain…
With these evil tides of life there was a fear I couldn’t gain..

You see… I walked within these spirits…
that supposedly would haunt you…
To prey within your vital signs in ways how demons want you..
The visions you’d imagine that would speed up your heart
As the truth behind origins how the meek depart
In this tunnel filled with darkness ..
peace has overwhelmed me..
The paradox of evilness embraced me as it felt me
The black darkened clouds.. …
And the grey-shaded moon..
While the family of bats displayed the nature of your doom
Disappearing thru the dark skies… leavin’ you cold..
Till the souls that left behind itself would be untold…
Episodes of this nature’s what content me deep
While I sauntered thru the shadows… I submerged to creep
To seek descent into the depths of this abysmal keep
Where the night I found the sacrifice of white wool sheep


But those days before tonight…
A scary vision came before me..
A terrifying reverie that soon would come to scorn me.. (30)



Intense golden rays within the heavens in the sky light
Extinguished thru my dark murky realms within my twilight
Extremities of beams like lasers pierced inside me
Horrific scenes of darkness had quaked in its demising
The agitation shook me…
awakening in torment…
A bloody face of tears appeared again as born an orphan
I staggered to my knees to see me stuck within this pipeline
A dark tunnel passage led to guide away my lifeline…
I hunched over labored…
shook my fist uncontrollably…
The light at the tunnel gleaming bright shone in front of me
I couldn’t turned away from…
the force began to shove me…
Slowly to the light source… a dread had overcome me
I tried to hide my face away to what I was approaching…
The ambiance of light exhaled a heat that was disposing…
An outbreak of boils… my eyeballs were bleedin’
Inside as they fed into my minds walls and ceilings

The imageries of life began to rapidly succumb
As my vital signs decreased to have myself reacting numb
While the earth intensely shook.. unremorsefully it came
With its screaming beams of light… it was never more the same (50)
To the powers that be, that once presided in the blackness
The ending of my life has had me victimized and hapless
To never walk in darkness or ever feel the light…
Cus the revelation’s coming…
made my death become my night.
And thru all that was done…
There will be no beginning…
But the halt to all the darkness that the light has seen the ending..
The dread to have me walking to the bright-filled shine..


Was the unaware experience of the end of my time..


58 bars

[Edward Lake]

my soul's on ice, so don't kiss my ring,
i kiss the fist before i roll the dice..
wager my wealth carelessly, figuring out my goals in life
now i'm not really a gambler, but satan has blinded my sight
defining my type as manic depressives trying to fight
and the lines that i write.. are just offering glimpses
of a poet painting pictures as he discovers his image
because..there's so much more behind this ego you see,
a good person seeing people deceived by the evil in me
self-concious about my insecurites, but i gotta concentrate on that
cause the net ego's just trying to compensate that fact
and it's incredibly easy to see myself defined as great
but i'd rather benefit and bare my soul to analyze my traits
see, im not the only one gambling my fate..what's the odds
of having your soul torn apart by both satan and god?
c'mon, let's take a look at my mind, even trace it in time
remember when i posted pics, saw that precyse wrote a diss
that broke the bliss, and almost got me chased off the site?
don't you know i feel ugly when seeing the hate in replies?
see..i had a girl back then..the only woman i've ever had
my everything, my lifeline, and you wanted to sever that
well we broke up soon after that, it might be part of the lesson
but it also triggered something that started depression
as ed lake, i wrote many pieces about being trapped in a cycle
most dont know that it's based on an actual life though
endless cycles of ups and downs, plagued by the sickest mind
i've had blissful times, even felt like i've been kissed by christ
the next minute experiencing atlas' shoulders, breaking now
like, 'god show me the way, the devils trying to break me down'
yeah thats kanye's prayer, sometimes raps the only thing i got
its so much more to me than pretendin you're slinging rocks
fuck ill bare it all, i even thought about taking my life
there, thats the reason soul music may be making me cry..
so go ahead and call me a pussy then..
and i don't care really if you doubt me, right..
cause -i- know i don't ever go down without a fight
that's why im still alive, still praying for hope
and so far ive been rewarded with the strength to cope
using my writings as therapy..
calling this shit a waste of time? that's so deceiving
those are lies satan whispers in your ear, don't believe him
we ARE the music, us artists, students
performing the biggest act of worship by putting our hearts into this
i want to write pieces that make tears well up in eyes
cause art with substance is what i love most..
..so satan, please don't stop telling those lies


"Never interrupt your enemy when he is making a mistake"

[TeKneeK]

votes votes votes!

[Mac Flow]

over no shows

[Edward Lake]

tourney votes:

SOUTH 11. BusterHymen vs. 7 Dicenyaeye vs 2. Tha Talent
SOUTH 9. Ashen Horse vs 4. Khoi
NORTH 9. Nique vs 5. ssenlli
WEST 2. Trap vs 6. Headless Verseman
WEST 1. Infinite Truth vs 12. Kaybi vs 4. Cereal Killer
EAST 4. Anaphora vs 9. A.S.K.

league votes:

29. square vs 30. blackgammon!
21. 6ft Deep vs 22. theme
13. Unavailable 38-20 vs 14. Kaybi 9-4
7. Dicenyaeye 8-1 vs 8. L Dogg 29-5
#1 Contender's Match 3. Trap 22-6 vs 4. Atreyu 12-5
Championship Match 1. Omen 49-3 vs 2. Tekneek 42-10


Now give me my 18 points, lol.

[Cereal_Killer]

Tek:
I think you wrote this very fluently, the multi’s helped to keep it flowing on all the way through. Then ending predictable, but you can look past that because how much fine detail you’ve laced through it. Nothing to over the top but as far as pieces go this is defiantly one of your better written. Good job

8.1/10

Ed:
To me this was written pretty well all the way through as far as structure and flow, but content to me ranged from powerful and excellent to dull and pointless. The topic at the end did pump it up a bit in points.

now i'm not really a gambler, but satan has blinded my sight
defining my type as manic depressives trying to fight

fuck ill bare it all, i even thought about taking my life
there, thats the reason soul music may be making me cry..


I like all this, anywhere in your piece where you actually showed everyone inside of your head and your heart but what I would of left out, changed or something was the connection to rm with the pics, that whole section to me felt blank it just didn’t feel like it needed to be there and ruined the mood and flow of this piece. All the other connections to your writing was fine except the pic one, I think you could of come up with something a lot better.

8.1/10

Vote = tie

I cant decide boys you both did pretty damn good.

[Khôi NguJin]

a tie? lol, that's ghetto shit, it's cool though, if it comes down to a final deciding vote tho, expect to be it.

yo tek, smooth shit here, real nice. what i really liked was your portrayal of the end of your time, everything had it's own intricacy's and ultimately led up to your ending. the depiction of darkness as light and everything worked greatly to your advantage and take on the topic. everything seemed rightly placed, and i hope i enjoyed reading it as much as you enjoyed writing it.

eddy, you tore the fucking house down with this verse. every little bit of it i felt. written so nicely as well, the flow was just a benefit. i noticed the satanic spurts brought up everyonce in a while and i can def. see where you are comming from, coinciding perfectly with the topic. loved your approach to this for the topic as well. satans always making mistakes trying to make us think wrongly. excellntly done here ed. the kanye add in was coo, the verse was beautiful stuff.

v.Ed cos is grasp on his topic was really tight, and this match was even tighter so, it's a basically a toss up, but v.Ed.

[headless verseman]

ha, vote tie....

seriously, this is too hard to decide, two good verses



gluck * i know, cop out right?....not really, shits just hard to choose

[TeKneeK]

voted on all the damn matches.... go look.

[Omen]

TekNeeK
Your imagery and description of things was nice in here. I really enjoyed reading this verse. Word choice was good and the flow was nice. Overall this was a wonderful verse to read...emotion good...your imagery really painted a picture in my mind. Allowing me to vision the events unfolding. Top 3 verse this week in my mind.

Edward Lake
I read this on AIM and this is still as good as I read it the first time. I really enjoyed the way you let everything come out. Who you are and how things not only in real life but RM influence things around you. Flow was good and you went back to your old style for this week. You really painted a part of your life nicely for the reader. Allowing them to connect with you. Enjoyed the fact that you used Satan Lieing to you as the reason bad things were happening.

This was the hardest match to vote on so far. I really enjoyed both verses. Tek had imagery and word choice. Lake came with emotion and flow. Just two completely different verses yet both seem on the same level. Its a hard decision to call. But I see everyone voting tie and that just causes problems so I won't do that. I've sat here for the past 30-40 minutes trying to decide.

Vote
TekNeeK

[Nique...]

I agree with Omen. Edward, I haven't even been here that long and I think you're one of the best writers in the RSTL, but something is missing in your piece in my opinion. Your content didn't catch my eye like your past works. It went from interesting to average to confusing and drawned out. I don't know, it just didn't grasp my attention like your others. You usually give off this powerful message, but this didn't seem to have one. Tek, you came nice..I was feeling the flow and the imagery was great. This was well written and your word choice was perfect. An above average piece.

V-Tek.

[Tha Talent]

Tekneek:
honestly, i don't think you have a complete grasp on your style...you seem to be rambling a lot...having a poetic style doesn't mean you can say the same things in different ways...or that you can take one image and dwell and dwell and dwell...you were using the style well in your battles with User and Truth, but since this tournament started it just hasn't seemed natural to me...and this verse is an example of that...almost like you lose track of where you are at in the verse.

Edward Lake:
great verse...i loved the progression of thought in this...the ending was very nice and the entire concept was just very well executed...a hell of a lot of polish put onto your writing...the concept was a very good one, too...that always helps...your flow was nice and my attention never waivered...well done.

vote=Edward Lake.

[A.S.K]

ED LAKE: man this is one tight verse. i like the beggiingin, the whole rolling the dice [hase was sick. your writing style is very devloped, very polished and fluent. i liked the ending, thouhh i kinda got lost towards the ending. i liked the way you brought the concept to the topic. this was not ur best verse, but still incredible

TEK: this is the 2nd poetic verse ive read from you, i and i really hope u change from it and become u again. it just seems as your trying to be too poetic, kinda ramblig on trying to add the feel, which takes away from ur concept and story line. i still enjoyed this, but like talent said u just seem to dwindle on and on without much happening

[A.S.K]

oh yeh

vote: edward lake