WEST 1. Infinite Truth vs 8. Atreyu

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Old 10-04-2004, 04:32 AM   #1 (permalink)
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WEST 1. Infinite Truth vs 8. Atreyu




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here.

its written on my laptop cuz i had no internet access.

im gonna start typing it up now.

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"Second thought is always a little more reasonable than the first."
"The only way to get rid of a temptation is to yield to it.

pt. 2 (continued from last week's piece - although reading last weeks verse is not necessary)

& he would awaken to a dawn breaking like a gargoyle,
cracking its stone shell open,
& he would awaken to a dawn that could break a lion’s heart..
& he would awaken to a dawn breaking like the city’s taxi cabs’ engines,
& he would awaken to a dawn breaking into the dark.
& he would awaken to a dawn,
broke down like the conspiracies of the innocent..
& he would awaken to a dawn breaking,
just a little bit bent.
& he would awaken to a broken dawn,
colored w/ popped balloon bits..
chased & recovered by the crows that once flocked the telephone wire,
& he would awaken to a dawn,
as plexiglass shuttered the crescent of moon chips.
~~~
it was the butterflies in the tornadoes,
it was her halo of flickering neon,
it was the cherubs in the hurricanes,
it was her co of castaway whispers..
it was the way she laughed,
it was the way she cried.
it was the way she danced with such a pride.
it was the way she woke me every morning,
letting me know she had something – one thing – all figured.
it was the way.
it was her way.
~~~
& she would situate herself at the mirror..
hunched clumsily over the counter,
slipping into her usual work clothes..
sliding into a beautiful pearl glow.
as she ornamented her neck in a shimmering décor.
~~~
& she would apply her makeup -
tuesdays & thursdays it was a blueberry mascara & an indigo blush..
monday, wednesday & friday it was auburn eye shadow & a bit of a copper touch.
but every day of the week it was cherry lipstick..
yea every day of the week it was cherry lipstick .
~~~
it was the hummingbirds & the truths & the long walks home..
it was the raspberry pickings on an april morning..
it was the way she wrapped our names in a heart and carved it into the oaks.
it was the way she’d watch the dandelions forming.
it was the way she slowly nodded her head,
with her eyes sunk in the bottom of her palms..
it was the way she slowly nodded her head,
with her eyes fixed on the bible,
& a tight grip on her rosary beads,
reading the psalms.
it was the way..
it was her way.
~~~
yea cuz there was a time when they were midnight walkers,
barking the moon’s fall,
yea there was a time,
a time when they were driven to redemption with cans stringed to the fender..
a time when he never knew what time was,
seems then, things seemed a lot more simple,
but now he sees the difference between the fall and the winter.
so now he sees the differences between the jester & joker..
yea now he sees a difference -
the difference between the lesser, the yes sir, & the no sir.

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10:01 A.M
Abrupt and short...my sleep was broke with blurts
Of spurts of sound my cells a con-cert
it says my "Work" and im off today
FUCK!i dont wanna answer in a groggy way
"Hello" i say...[/color=pink]"Greg youre needed in an hr[/color]
but you said you wouldnt abuse your power!
i know i know...but my dads hospitalized
i need to be by his side in case he should die

"Alright fine...",i sigh,"ill be there soon in a daze
all the work i do i shouldnt be paid minimum wage*click*

This bitch is crazed!THE THIRD TIME THIS Month shes pulled this stunt!
i wanna tell her off...my boss...but i cant to be blunt...
last time someone tried theyre job was lost fried gone
im barely makin a livin so i cant have mines gone...
it seems as if...lifes gift is to be bored and tired
i got a sack but dammit i dont even have a lighter
so now...for goodness sakes i gotta go to this place
without bein blazed and happy with a fake smile on face....
the emplyees suck...this nerd just talks about a book he wrote
plus tonights the shift i drive because Johns foot is broke!
Ahhhhhh...


Near Closing time
Tired as hell...this pizza smells infested in this car
my last delivery of 15 boxes-Address is far...
ok here it is...but damn i cant carry all of these boxes
but first ill have to explain why im late n how off my watch is
*rings doorbell*
Maam...im sorry but my watch is a little off and...
"About time your here!"3 girls pulled me in and then...

Told me to strip!a swarm of drunken bitches surrounding me
my objective was lost with quickness precision and accuracy
a burst of joy!i played the role and stripped for dollar bills
drunk kegs of beer and said the hell with work is how i feel
Now...

Im drunk as fuc...this partys gettin wild and im horny
plus i got hooked up with sum chick who wants to bone me...


Next Morning
Literally frigid...my clothes is gone and im naked
in a bed in sheets i dont of, how did i make it...
here?
the suns bright to shine in my face...
as i look to the right with utter disgrace...
her black hair was ruffled from the rough fuck we displayed
im amazed at the stamina that this woman sprayed
im so happy that i was laid!until i saw her face a little
Cuz i thought she was with her dad at the hospital...
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damn. INF. that verse to me was amazing there aren't too many people in the league that can write some shit like that, and i don't think there's enough people who can truely appreciate how great of a piece that was. i loved it. from start to end. it's some real writing, poetic, smooth, polished and filled with pure imagery. with your own writer's voice and your own approach to it all......just a great great verse man. atreyu your verse wasn't terrible for a key in fact it was pretty cool but i'm inf. just took this in every aspect for me, my fave verse so far this week....

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it seemed like atreyu was in desperation to write something quick to get something up... the structure seemed rushed... the details were bleak and just some instances too unclear.... the story was choppy and something was missing... i didnt really get the ending..... i dont know....

too much of a wide gap to make a comparison that would challenge.... infinite ran away with this one pretty much..... utilized a sense of 4sight's style... but it gets by enough to get u the win....


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Tek what didn't you get about the ending? He slept with his boss

Atreyu, that was pretty cool for a quick one...I think you missed some big time gaps, but the ending was cool....you've gotten a lot better. Now if you only actually put time in, you'd be doing excellent

Inf, amazing verse, very brilliant scheme and flow, the imagery was awesome....raw storytelling with a touch of poetic genius. You keep droppin hot ones and you'll be one of the faves in this thing man.

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Atreyu:
it was a good story, and with a little more polished and smooth writing, you could have made this a great verse overall...it did have rough edges, but you showed me a lot in terms of variety, because you went with a more accessible story than your standard...good job, but as i said, wording definitely had plenty of rough edges.

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you are a great writer...the only problem with this was that the ending wasn't as complete as i would have liked it to be, which i understand entirely is because part three will be coming next week...you developed an entrancing love story and wrote it very well...sometimes i think you put repetition/variation on borderline overkill, but still...very well done.

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Inf:
As far as a rap story/topical verse goes I actually thought it didn’t suit, but just as a normal piece this was written so beautifully. I think it was very out of the norm style wise, which I kinda liked because you where willing to take the gamble. The best thing about the verse is the subtle way you delivered it, for a dark story it really seemed pleasant. Nice piece.

7.6/10

At:
I actually really liked your piece, for a key anyways. It had a few iffy parts to it but in a whole this was a pretty tight piece. Ending nailed it, just the wording on how you delivered the final surprise I liked. Good job

5.5/10

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Infinite truth = Repetition did its job, i was feelin this al the way through. The story itslef was simple but written beautifully. I liked the imagery. It was fresh.

Atreyu = Written well, you told a story from start to finish, but you definetly could have put a stronger twist on it. The story itself was between average and entertaining. Flow was ok, vocab a little slim.

Vote = Infinite, i felt it more as a piece of poetry, although it was hard for me to decide, since it was more of a descriptive passage rather than a story good job from both.
 
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i though infinite truth's verse was complete and utter garbage on the highest level


that is garbage writing and even more, poor story telling


vote atreyu

\inf, ur usually dope.........this fuckin sucked and nobodies willing to say it
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yea.. truths verse was crap this week lol im sure he knows it too, looks rushed.
but it still beat the the other guy..
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nice breakdown Headless.....way to go, you wanna explain why Atreyu's was better since Inf's was "garbage on the highest level"?
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then how can your vote count? if you can't explain the winner's reasons for winning...
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Vote - Atreyu

Honestly I enjoyed his story...Infinites was good and his word choice was tops, but the whole repitition of words and lines eventually became drawn out and seemed to just get boring of sorts. Atreyu came with a pretty good verse and I thought he did a good job with the topic. Kept me interested the entire way through. In the end I was just feeling Atreyu a little more then Infinite this week.
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