EAST 2. MC4Sight vs 10. Retulen Reactus

[Mac Flow]

RSTL TOURNAMENT
Round One


DUE DATES


VERSES DUE Thursday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST/

VOTES DUE Sunday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST


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Round 2 Tournament TOPICS

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Go Forth and Produce

[Retulen Reactus]

Interesting.

Good luck man.

[MC4SiGHT]

no doubt. good luck

[MC4SiGHT]

The Canvas Renovation Theory

She blew a kiss to the devil, sucking her yogurt spoon…
As she sat beside herself…the squeaky table…
The school lunchroom….and her finger guided invisibly…
As her eyelids visually, captured arrogance…
The effects of parents which, steer their kids with fearlessness…
Valor, courage, and audacity gone over the edge…
Through flooding rivers, and dark woods of depth…
She stepped. She climbed. She got up out of her space…
An angel face.
But faces are only first, to a second deeper gaze. She flirts.
She smiles, she walks to my obverse. She files.
Photographing my expressions, as the face of an innocent child…
And though a while, since my last kiss.
I dare not be tempted by this temptress.
Yet as she moves her lips.
Words dip the atmosphere and spread to my ears.
Sweet swears, I swear I cannot bare, to be bare of her arms.
She’s an essence, a glow, a fluorescent, a charm…
A strangling hold swarming my presence, willing to harm…
An angel voice.
Which takes away presumptions, and makes me unalarmed…
I’ve heard of scars, which she has dug into past hearts…
But she’s busty, she’s slim, she’s sexy, she’s the in…
And I’m in, eclipsed by the sin she perspires. She never tires.
She wears men on her necklace and drags them on her ankle bracelet…
And though we teenagers, her dangers are adulterous…
She’s pestilence and I’m her latest test to it. She’s blessing me.
Kiss. Kiss. She captures my pecks with her lips, lips.
I trip, trip, her tongue is acid, her mouth speed. I’m fast spinning.
Spin, spin. I twist, she twists, together we wisk over another.
Were lovers, I love her. As she attaches her tentacles tightly.
While in truth she spites me. See that’s why she feels she must bite me.
Angel Eyes.
Beside herself, yet I fell to her devise to single-handily divide…
The line between trust and lies. Somehow I got entwined.
Now she dines. Chocolate milk spills as she presses over my chest.
She’s a vest. Worn by the willing, the victims, the mess.
Caressing the unknowing with scrupulous French. She’s a love language.
One in her own, words scripted in melodious tones…She sings…
And I think I fell asleep in her curse, fell asleep on her lap.
She attacks, she grabs, she grips, she holds on to whomever.
Until together, she clutches societies crutches clasping their fluxes…
And I’m the latest crippled, stippled off the edge of her brush.
And when her painting’s done, I’ll be the pigment to flush.
The slush, the mush, the dumb fuck, the who? As she grabs a new canvas.
A creature of habit, She is.

Angel Face.
But faces are only first, to a second deeper gaze…She wakes.
Faint. Her look is all I need, she need not say.
She steps, she climbs, she got up and threw her empty yogurt away…
As she gazed. I was no longer the color to paint.
And that was yesterday.

Angel Face.
But faces are only first, to a second deeper gaze…
Angel Face.
But faces are only first, to a second deeper gaze…

And today she’s at another table. Kissing the devil…

THE END

Topics Used:
“Second thought is always a little more reasonable then the first”
Yesterday
“The only way to get rid of temptation is to yield to it”
Teenage Love

[Retulen Reactus]

1. Teenage Love

e-mo-shi-null
Teenage Love
e-moe-shi-null
Teenage Love
emo-shunal
Teenagle Love
emotional
Teenage Love

Teenage Love
live and learn.



Coming off all nervous
I want my eyes to connect with yours when
im alone and hurting, feeling worthless
All i need is a purpose
Your my god,
i built a church in my chest for your heart to worship
but if loving you is a sin then curse it
I've lost all my emotion's but one that's true
Love is blind, so the only sence had was "feeling you"
Why, is it so hard to see?
I thought it was a forged love, to be
You were my first crush, why'd you have to flatten me
remember, back in janaury
When we used to carve our name into redwood tree's
Together forever, ZacH n...
Thats all i wanted to see
and that's all i did, until march 13, 1990

Teenage Love
Feel's great
Teenage Love
So curious
Teenage Love
never last's long
Teenage Love
Can be Furious

When i caught you kissing another guy
It bruised my pride
Confused inside, i had blades to my wrists and thighs

You've broken down my wall after all the years
exposed my fear's
With every drop of blood, came two tears

On top of that, my grade's have gone to crap
You fractured my thinking, and put my mind in a cast
Manefastation's had been created
.... but my spirit elavated
For im an adult now, that's all outdated
Teenage love, happens so often
and it's such a beutiful thing that rarely blossom's
We sit in class, passing note's
and they all contain three word's that you wrote
A Yes, a Maybe or No
You hide your emotion's in such a hidden Cloak
that miltary specialist's label it remote
We sneek out, late at night
Stepping so bravely, yet one wrong move can break our might light
when you see your lover's face.. despite
the dark, all turn's to light
you see them the next day, eager to speak
and when you finally do, your word's collide in speech
you begin to start studdering,
but you dont stop now, the sentences are in reach
Perhap's the greatest feeling of all that may arise
Is smiling, into his/ her face- peering at eachother's eyes
Followed by distant cries, and fatal Lie's
until you dont have one single hug left
and everyone's asked if you've fucked yet
Most people can't handle it, just learn to let..
it go.. and i know
because i have expierence, on this subtle subject


It's okay to feel someone, it's okay to feel the glory
Unless your straight... then thats a totaly diffrent story

Teenage love
Gay?
Teenage Love
Stupid?
Teenage Love
dont abuse it



edited, topic in.

[Edward Lake]

Damn, I feel bad for RR here.

RR: you didn't come bad, twist was good, you had some nice lines..

Your my god,
i built a church in my chest for your heart to worship
but if loving you is a sin then curse it

But your piece didn't portray the emotion I expected to see. Also your wording was off at times. Plus you had the disadvantage of going against one of the best pieces 4Sight ever wrote.

MC4SIGHT: Classic shit homie. This is Inf Truth type material. I was loving it. Your descriptions were sick, imagery was off the fucking hook, I could quote so many things. Cadence, vowels, everything was in perfect harmony, let me quote some shit.

But she’s busty, she’s slim, she’s sexy, she’s the in…
And I’m in, eclipsed by the sin she perspires. She never tires.
She wears men on her necklace and drags them on her ankle bracelet…
And though we teenagers, her dangers are adulterous…
She’s pestilence and I’m her latest test to it. She’s blessing me.
Kiss. Kiss. She captures my pecks with her lips, lips.
I trip, trip, her tongue is acid, her mouth speed. I’m fast spinning.
Spin, spin. I twist, she twists, together we wisk over another.

This is worded so perfectly...I don't think ANY writer in the league could have done this better..it was written so beautifully and complex, yet so concise..
This piece shows you're up there with the Talent's, Inf Truth's etc. if you want to.

vote = MC4Sightp, amazing verse.

[MC4SiGHT]

Wow thanks man. 1-0 i'll edit votes in here.

[Mac Flow]

upppppppp

[Mac Flow]

upppppppp

[LDogg The King]

i think it was closer than ed claims in his vote.. both writers had some real nice shit.. i really liked RR's, because his words were so understanding of the subject..i could tell you been through what you were talking about.. and we all have, but not everyone can describe it.. it was a good verse man...

I think the reason 4sites verse stands out to me is the fact you have to look beyond the words to get the understanding, unlike RR's which was told so straight to the point...I like the wit 4 site uses in his lines.. like the men being dragged by her anklet.. those images are very clear.. and the writing is a gift to be able to put that type of imagination into words.. 4sites appealed to me more for its complexity, and explicating the lines was a pleasure for my eyes.

vote mc4site..

nice match guys..

[Tha Talent]

MC4Sight:
it's amazing how you write such similar verses every week, and yet they are all so different...you're very good at that...you're just a great writer...stream of conciousness with an abstract twist...very deliberate storytelling...slow moving and beautified...with a lot of deeper meaning...a lot of social commentary in your verses...this is actually one of the best i've read from you...really great verse.

Retulen Reactus:
that's not a twist...no offense, but that ending wasn't really well setup at all...no foreshadowing and no difference in understanding...Skull flipped out a gay twist properly, you didn't...however, it was a very good verse...very well written...the lyricism and flow were nice and you pulled off the love verse without making it too corny...good job.

vote=MC4Sight
just on another level

[Retulen Reactus]

i agree Talent.

good looks, on helping me improve with your critism

[MC4SiGHT]

votes:
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...2#post10148562
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...5#post10148605
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...5#post10148605
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...0#post10148690

[Mac Flow]

man I had a long ass breakdown typed out at work and the network went down, I'll edit my vote later

anyways

vote = 4Sight

Retulen put up a brilliant effort, very nice little story, don't remember the last time you dropped an RSTL piece this nice. Nothing incredible, but you covered the basics for the most part and you had a nice flow and scheme. Word choice was weird in some spots, and the ending wasn't all that solid IMO, but still good effort.

4Sight, you never cease to amaze me. I really liked this one, could be one of my favorite verses from you. You've really got that scheme and flow down, and I hope you don't change it after it took me a while to pick it up lol. this piece was full of little things that made the imagery stand out, and you had brilliant word choice throughout. Great story

good luck y'all

[TeKneeK]

I agree pretty much with what ED LAKe and NAVARA stated.

4sight
you got a knack in really colorizing words and showing metaphors in a very descipritive way.. im personally trin to evolve mine in that way 2 but to correlate it into a more defined direction.... although u showed this illustrative display throughout... it still gives a deeper understanding of how u patternize and eloquently have it done... i dont know... that part jus does enoughto mystify me


rr
this wasnt bad at all... u just need to polish ur whole structure in whole and like what talent said... just need to find a direction and a purpose to what ur telling us about..... basically 4sight just glitered with more overwhelming exhibits of each element he used..



4sight = 92
RR = 84

[Cereal_Killer]

MC:
That was f-en awesome, your wording was perfect, I sometimes frown upon your style until mid way when I get pulled into the rythem and then I just flow with it. What I really like about this is that you can read it fast it’s just one continues stream. Story wise great, look the tittle itself tells it all, brilliant ideas, nice structure, all round good piece.

9.2/10

RR:
This was it’s own little cool thing ok. It wasn’t mind blowing but it was alright. Flow was good, story ok, wording not too bad, it was all just sort of a normal everyday story. Nothing bad but nothing standoutish

6/10

Vote = MC4sight

Great match good reads from both.

MC4Sight = Tight, flow was perfect, not a syllable off. Definitely props on that. The story was nice, a chronicle of thoughts sort of. I was feelin it, the structure was ill, and vocab was there. The only thing is the end left me feelin a little empty. The very end. Thats just me tho. Overall really good work, enjoyable in all aspects.

Reulen Reactus = Tight verse, done truly in story/song format, which is cool with me. Told a story from start to finish. Story itself was strong, and carried curiosity to the end, no flaws in that. Flow was good, off a couple times but it didn't hurt you. Some metaphors were a little plain and maybe common, kinda like the "cum" wordplay in battling. I felt this tho, good finisher as well

Vote MC4