EAST - 8. In Your Ear vs. 9. A.S.K.

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Old 09-26-2004, 08:52 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Old 09-27-2004, 03:42 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Old 09-29-2004, 05:18 AM   #3 (permalink)
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who got more style than son do

or summin to that effect
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The glass shattered with a deafening crack
The fragments smashed, caught the light and reflected it back
The blade of the knife
Laid stained red, damp as the night
As blood cascaded on its path, pausing to drip form its height
To lay in the puddle, the sins and troubles within
Toiled in the young man, till he gave in, fell to his knee’s
Brushing hands through his hair,
His laugh went to whimper
How ironic he thought of his image yet just had broken the mirror
The blade still laid on the sink
To slit his wrists seemed so inviting
Shaking his head desperately, he tried so hard in to fight it
How did he let this happen,
separated a soul from his heart
It was friends till the day they die Friends until they part
Yet to part like this left the heart so torn in conflict
They were born in homage, their love was born in arguing
The young man sat on his bed
His heavy head left spinning
Trying to repair the damage dealt since now to the beginning
They were supposed to be friends
And he’d heeded the advice over
Ignoring his enemies, so he could get his inner friend closer
How could he let this go on, his hatred such a passion?
This was unbearable; he couldn’t even look at himself without action
From his second partner
So this sealed his one descision
Pulling gun from the pillow, he indicated his index to the trigger
Then glanced unwittingly at the remaining mirror…….

You pull the barrel and they have you
The automatic soak that frabric
With blood
From floor to the damn mattress
Stop with the drama you b*tch, you aint no damn actress
Why do you have to ruin this for both of us
You let it bust
And we’ll both be gone,
And they’re wont be no inner friend who’s saving us
No wonder your mum doesn’t call, and your dad cast you out
And you seem to be hating me, but your family hates you now
Cos your flame blew out, and you’re stranded in the darkness
My home is where my heart is, so if im alone then youre heartless
Chris….. do you remember at your 12th birthday party
you stabbed that girl with a birro
she saw you to the mirror you were talking
and muttering incarnations, that’s was f*cking shady
hahahah, cos you got the blame, and they all called you crazy


Chris stood up, kept his temper
Even though his legs trembled
Wishing it hadn’t happened, it had been fine when he was eleven
Then this devil claimed to be his friend
Saying friend till the end, and stupidly he took it all in
Truthfully, his friend was always true to me
But to be true to me, was to deceive his friend so truthfully
And as the friend smiled finally, and picked the knife for him to see
Cos true, this pain was you to me, put its fine cos you are me

The glass cracked, and the blood ran it path……….

Psychotic Diagnosis’s report:

The young man had been supposedly suffering depression
As he went from timid and shy, to almost crazy and aggressive
I believe this took him to take his life
Suffering illusions ‘when he saw his other side inside’
And so he had stabbed himself to the heart and the inner
Yet somehow had stabbed and left blood splattered on the mirror
As if attacked from an assailent and himself, how weird
Yet some of us have these demons, and some let that beast win
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i thought id try spmething new to me, i like to experiment

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Old 09-30-2004, 09:56 PM   #6 (permalink)
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My car's outside
The engine's still runnin
Like your nose,
Keep the trembles comin'
You'll inhale it easier
After I cave your lungs in
You think I'm buggin ?
Don't scream too loud,
Your son'll come in
Tears in his eyes
Cryin for mommy
But I'll out his face with the shotty
I'm not sorry, if I
Tore your neck apart -
Believe me hunny, it's a
Metaphor of you and my heart
My stomach's growling,
And my mouths water
I can feel your stomach
And smell the phosphorus
Look at you shake quiver and tremble
You want to die, but
I wont let you - Not just yet.
You did me worse, left for me him
And his retro ass style, homie
Shoulda just let go - Now he'll come home
And see his wife stapled to his bed post.
Your sheets are darker by the second
And my knife in your abdomen is all that's lettin
You and heaven be one in perfection
My arms on your tit, I can feel you pump
Blood for your life, but it's losing spunk
Once it's over, I'll leave you slump
In this dump, too bad it's too sweet
My car'll be in the river
With your son in the passenger seat
Askin if he, knew mommy cut me deep ?
But not as deep as the pole down your throat
That slumped through your teeth.
Fucking slut, you should've never mistreated
Me, this was too easy see -
You'll never be leaving me, HURT
Without leaving this earth.
Bitch -
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Old 09-30-2004, 10:20 PM   #7 (permalink)
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A.S.K:
Man that’s some weird shit dude. I’m serious. At first I was huge fan of this, it just ran so smoothly then once the inner voice came in, it sort of came across a bit to simplistic. Just the way your lines where structured seemed as if you didn’t put as much effort as you could of with it. The end was still cool and it brought it back up a notch for me. I felt by linking the blood on the mirror back was a nice little touch.

7.2/10

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Hmm I hate the rhyme scheme straight up. I tried to get use to it or even tolerate it, I struggled. You had a lot of emotional anger which is cool, I liked the venting but it didn’t go any where, it was just pure emotion and that’s it. All round it was an OK piece I just think you could of added a bit more to it.

4.7/10

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Old 10-01-2004, 05:01 AM   #8 (permalink)
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I don't feel I have to do much explaining on this, it was pretty one-sided.

I didnt have a problem with In Yo Ear's rhyme scheme, it was aight, but the topical wasn't really anything special. Wasn't too creative. He was pretty descriptive, imagery was alright, but I think his verse was just lacking. I liked the ending tho. A.S.K. just took it hands down.

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i was trying to get acroos the differnet side of him, his inner friend which he fought

but i gave up on it and it came acroos too simple

this was just a step for me in changing my style
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Old 10-01-2004, 11:44 AM   #11 (permalink)
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As I approach the task my vote goes to ask,

I was gunna rhyme it but I couldnt be bothered...

Ask :- Pretty wack. Well I wouldnt say wack if I was being honest, Id swear first and then call it wack. Not much to say and I hate giving one line votes so ima just babble for a bit. Yo you seen the making of the matrix? Shit is gully as fuck. I didnt realise they did so much of it on a pc... shit looked real as hell. The other reason Im not giving you a break down is because rm fucking froze on me...

Ear Wa(x)ck :- That word play I did on your name was as good as you got. I liked your rhyme scheme though, cant front because I got ya back. The story itself was too simplisitc butaint like your a lost cause dont let these harsh ni..ggas get to you...

Ask just takes this.
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one sided battle.....neither seem to treat the match like it was for a tourny.....ask clearly took it though.....in your ear came with something a kindegardener could write in a few minutes. didn't like either one but ask took it with a more structured and just overall better written peice...

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Old 10-01-2004, 03:00 PM   #13 (permalink)
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neither impressed me. but

ask won

he jsut brought more to the table for me. better read. content wise was better, nice smooth flow i guess. some decent word play, just a niceer verse


in your ear didnt bring much, must have been short on time or something
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Ask's read more like a gay ass poem than a rap an in your ear's attempted to actually spit some gangsta rap shit so i have him winning
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Old 10-02-2004, 02:31 AM   #15 (permalink)
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In Your Ear

This was an OK piece....The overall rhyme scheme wasn't really my cup of tea, and I didn't really feel like your flow was on point. As far as emotion goes, you expressed alot of it, but it just seemed like meaningless ranting, that never seemed to reach a point, you gave no background or motive as to why or who was killing this woman and her son...IMO it seemed real rushed, there wasn't any substance to it....

ASK

This was aight...The overall flow was pretty smooth, your overall storyline came off real simplistic, and a little bland. It started out pretty cool, but you lost it during the transition to the inner voice stanza...IONO I didnt feel as though either of you put much effort in this week, but you get my vote, due to a better structured piece with a smoother flow.

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I really liked IYE rhyme scheme. I felt it was good and it added a more audio element to the verse. although his content could of used some work he still came with a good verse. ASK I felt took this due to his content and overall mechanics. He came what seemed more focused on winning this battle.
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Old 10-03-2004, 09:04 PM   #17 (permalink)
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