49-?mysterious? [v] 50-busterhymen

DMeTRIUS · 08-02-2004, 03:29 PM

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?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-03-2004, 02:48 PM

in...

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-03-2004, 11:36 PM

>EDGE<

Walkin through life without a care in the world...
No problems, No worries, No bills....
On street cornas standin in places where people have hurled...
Walkin through these allies where people have poped pills...
Livin in this massive city it's hard to find someone who is truely fulfilled...
Hate is often seen clearly on the street..
Hard to survive when ur all alone it's like being a S.E.A.L u have to be illeet...
Always being followed, always being watched...
Paranoyia is rare in this town were extra points are botched...(N.O)
As the sun fades behind the buildings my addiction takes ova...
Tryin to find my god, it's not hard its usually on the corna in a blue range rova...
Streets become crouded wit strangas from outta town...
They have come to party i must be the only one who wears a frown...
Women parade as men stair in awww...
This must be the only city were porn in the street ain't against the law...
But as i turn the corna i see my saviour....
I feel myself go wild i cannot explain my behaviour...
Walkin to the car excited and ova joyed...
Handin in my payment, my god in my palm is were it is deployed...
Find a nice dark hole to chill...
Sittin down and puttin heroinin a cup then the nedd i fill to daring not to spill...
As i tighten the belt around my arm...
The background sound is a fire alarm...
The needle I hold and then i flick...
Tappin my arm and find the vain i wish to stick...
Life hasn't always been so easy since i lost my fam...
Something about me tells me that i my life? nah i shouldn't even give a damn...
These five grams i have put in my arem are leathal but dont worry i know what i am doin...
Hopefully in a few minutes my last 6 mos. on the edge will end ...
And the rest of eturnity with them is where i will spend....

BusterHymen · 08-04-2004, 07:40 PM

In the blink of an eye all this thinking alive,
Turns meek in reply, breathing tires a blink and you die,
Each minute seems so minute when you take it for granted,
But when you die you beg for seconds,
(pause)Seconds of life,
Correcting whatevers wrecked in your perceptions of right.
Never questioned expected lessons you discerned in the light,
But neglected the darker message that’ll furnish your plight.
Because every obstacle’s a burning delight – the easy way,
Seems to ease the pain but it will surface in evil ways.
So prepare for the stare of dismay, this way the stairs will convey,
This pair of despair displays,
To dis pairs of lying eyes that portray,
Look beyond what you see, where your true vision is staged.
Tomorrow you may not have a part so act on the script that you play.

Take heed to what you have,
Count blessings take time to laugh,
Each breath could be your last,
So enjoy it while it lasts…

I truly believe God sends peoples signs in life,
In mine it’s my moms, friends, daughter and wife,
I’ve slaughtered the trife, but still remnants resurface,
And the true test is if I can manage this circus,
From your vantage it’s worthless, thoughts that you slander don’t work it’s,
Another way to hide the truth that stands on the surface.
So all leave in hate - and won’t alleviate,
All eve I iterate the next evening will be too late.
There’ll be no even..ing debate, of what you’ve done that’s great,
Life will be measured by what you’ve done to that date.

Take heed...
Close your eyes..
(pause)visualize...
Each day could be your last do more that you're alive.
So while you're cursing your life for the downs and in each day,
Understand that could be another you were down in the grave.

Ever imagined To lose everything….
(Pause)Well wait a minute…you will never have nothing,
Your beings you’re greatest gift.
My father just snapped his fingers another life passed before us,
By the time Elizibeth claps, another will be up on us.
Milleniums of performance can’t capture the time,
After this will be sublime sub mine with others shine.
The cycle still pedals forward..important whenever spoke,
I tire of whatt’s just spiteful contorted to just provoke
So break it with insightful, theories here we can quote
Even if you're leary please hear me there's still reasons to hope

Life is never truly helpless...

10.Helpless

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-05-2004, 12:48 AM

nice drop g'luck

Anaphora · 08-06-2004, 02:49 AM

Mysterious: This was OK, but the language was weak, and not just the slang, but the word choice really didn't bring as much to the story as it could've... then the story was kinda... eh... a story with drugs playing a big part in it, ending with death is just kinda... blah. been done many times before, just nothing too interesting.

Buster: This was really sick, good story, flowed very well, some very nice lines, I especially liked:
Each minute seems so minute when you take it for granted,
But when you die you beg for seconds,

Vote: Buster... very nice fucking verse.
Very nice shit

Lucifer Leviathan · 08-06-2004, 03:02 AM

...mysterious...
...verse's flow stumbled alot, lots of typos, enough to detract from the read...
...story was hurt deep because of it...

...buster...
...verse flowed really well, a few really beautiful lines in there...
...i felt it ran a lil long for the way you approached it, but it was smooth and polished...

...vote/buster...
...better all around verse...

Nique... · 08-06-2004, 05:13 AM

^I agree.

Vote-Buster.

.Etxegreshun. · 08-06-2004, 08:47 AM

mysterious, your verse was OK but u could have used alot more description and complexity. you could have used better vocab aswell.

busta, this was a very nice verse flowed very nicely, good choice of vocab, it rolled nicely and had some good description and complexity.

vote - bustarhymen

BrEaK-PoInT · 08-06-2004, 03:31 PM

vote=buster

just a better verse to me. Flow was there, very nicely written and means alot. Enjoyed the read. Myster=your story was ok, but like LL said the typos took away from the read somewhat. Maybe get more in depth with your story lines also. stay up man!~

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-06-2004, 04:01 PM

ight yo good look, thanks for da votes

peace im out

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-06-2004, 04:32 PM

33-breakpoint (2-1) [v] 34-extexgreshun (2-0)
17. atheist (26-9) [v] 18. cigma (25-5)
21. part II (4-0) [v] 22. noib da mutt (12-7)
23. prospect (8-2) [v] 24. krooked k (13-3)
#1 contenders: 3-mc4sight (21-5) [v] 4-cereal killer (18-5)
championship: 1-richard corey (25-5) [v] 2-anaphora (18-6)

got my votes in

BusterHymen · 08-08-2004, 03:49 AM

http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/778798-33-breakpoint-2-1-v-34-extexgreshun-2-0-a.html#post9668969
http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778807-21-part-ii-4-0-v-22-noib-da-mutt-12-7-a.html#post9669031
http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778804-26-5-smoke-trail-8-3-v-27-brandon-thompson-3-0-v-29-menso-3-0-a.html#post9669071
http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778806-23-prospect-8-2-v-24-krooked-k-13-3-a.html#post9669126
http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778813-13-iglos-3-2-v-14-equitus-9-3-a.html#post9669193
http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778817-7-doyen-7-0-v-8-lucifer-leviathan-5-0-hot-match.html#post9669225

DMeTRIUS · 08-08-2004, 02:00 PM

winner busterhymen

08-02-2004, 03:29 PM	#1 (permalink)
DMeTRIUS ³³³³³s and bananas Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 13,006	49-?mysterious? [v] 50-busterhymen DUE DATES VERSES DUE Thursday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST/ VOTES DUE Sunday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST TOPICS rstl topics 8-1-2004 by tha talent LINE LIMIT 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. YOU MUST VOTE ON 6 BATTLES for every vote you fail to submit and post a link for you will be deducted 1 if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!! Go Forth and Produce __________________ The Olympics is nothing but a full political scene—everything in world athletics is. You tell a kid the Olympics is the highest form of athletics. That it's man against man, soul against soul. But when you get to the Games it's all different from what you've been told all your life. It's country against country, ideology against ideology. - john carlos

08-03-2004, 02:48 PM	#2 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	in... __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-03-2004, 11:36 PM	#3 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	>EDGE< Walkin through life without a care in the world... No problems, No worries, No bills.... On street cornas standin in places where people have hurled... Walkin through these allies where people have poped pills... Livin in this massive city it's hard to find someone who is truely fulfilled... Hate is often seen clearly on the street.. Hard to survive when ur all alone it's like being a S.E.A.L u have to be illeet... Always being followed, always being watched... Paranoyia is rare in this town were extra points are botched...(N.O) As the sun fades behind the buildings my addiction takes ova... Tryin to find my god, it's not hard its usually on the corna in a blue range rova... Streets become crouded wit strangas from outta town... They have come to party i must be the only one who wears a frown... Women parade as men stair in awww... This must be the only city were porn in the street ain't against the law... But as i turn the corna i see my saviour.... I feel myself go wild i cannot explain my behaviour... Walkin to the car excited and ova joyed... Handin in my payment, my god in my palm is were it is deployed... Find a nice dark hole to chill... Sittin down and puttin heroinin a cup then the nedd i fill to daring not to spill... As i tighten the belt around my arm... The background sound is a fire alarm... The needle I hold and then i flick... Tappin my arm and find the vain i wish to stick... Life hasn't always been so easy since i lost my fam... Something about me tells me that i my life? nah i shouldn't even give a damn... These five grams i have put in my arem are leathal but dont worry i know what i am doin... Hopefully in a few minutes my last 6 mos. on the edge will end ... And the rest of eturnity with them is where i will spend.... __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-05-2004, 12:48 AM	#5 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	nice drop g'luck __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-06-2004, 02:49 AM	#6 (permalink)
Anaphora was here Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 1,694	Mysterious: This was OK, but the language was weak, and not just the slang, but the word choice really didn't bring as much to the story as it could've... then the story was kinda... eh... a story with drugs playing a big part in it, ending with death is just kinda... blah. been done many times before, just nothing too interesting. Buster: This was really sick, good story, flowed very well, some very nice lines, I especially liked: Each minute seems so minute when you take it for granted, But when you die you beg for seconds, Vote: Buster... very nice fucking verse. Very nice shit __________________ -- -- -- -- "Those who know they are profound strive for clarity. Those who would like to seem profound strive for obscurity." -Nietzsche -- -- -- -- -- -- This isn't a place for people to improve. This is a support group, where everybody just pats each other on the back and give words of encouragement. -predicate* on the poetry realm*

08-04-2004, 07:40 PM	#4 (permalink)
BusterHymen Registered User Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 76	In the blink of an eye all this thinking alive, Turns meek in reply, breathing tires a blink and you die, Each minute seems so minute when you take it for granted, But when you die you beg for seconds, (pause)Seconds of life, Correcting whatevers wrecked in your perceptions of right. Never questioned expected lessons you discerned in the light, But neglected the darker message that’ll furnish your plight. Because every obstacle’s a burning delight – the easy way, Seems to ease the pain but it will surface in evil ways. So prepare for the stare of dismay, this way the stairs will convey, This pair of despair displays, To dis pairs of lying eyes that portray, Look beyond what you see, where your true vision is staged. Tomorrow you may not have a part so act on the script that you play. Take heed to what you have, Count blessings take time to laugh, Each breath could be your last, So enjoy it while it lasts… I truly believe God sends peoples signs in life, In mine it’s my moms, friends, daughter and wife, I’ve slaughtered the trife, but still remnants resurface, And the true test is if I can manage this circus, From your vantage it’s worthless, thoughts that you slander don’t work it’s, Another way to hide the truth that stands on the surface. So all leave in hate - and won’t alleviate, All eve I iterate the next evening will be too late. There’ll be no even..ing debate, of what you’ve done that’s great, Life will be measured by what you’ve done to that date. Take heed... Close your eyes.. (pause)visualize... Each day could be your last do more that you're alive. So while you're cursing your life for the downs and in each day, Understand that could be another you were down in the grave. Ever imagined To lose everything…. (Pause)Well wait a minute…you will never have nothing, Your beings you’re greatest gift. My father just snapped his fingers another life passed before us, By the time Elizibeth claps, another will be up on us. Milleniums of performance can’t capture the time, After this will be sublime sub mine with others shine. The cycle still pedals forward..important whenever spoke, I tire of whatt’s just spiteful contorted to just provoke So break it with insightful, theories here we can quote Even if you're leary please hear me there's still reasons to hope Life is never truly helpless... 10.Helpless

08-06-2004, 03:02 AM	#7 (permalink)
Lucifer Leviathan Does it 4 Da Shorties... Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: The Top Notch. Posts: 11,751	...mysterious... ...verse's flow stumbled alot, lots of typos, enough to detract from the read... ...story was hurt deep because of it... ...buster... ...verse flowed really well, a few really beautiful lines in there... ...i felt it ran a lil long for the way you approached it, but it was smooth and polished... ...vote/buster... ...better all around verse... __________________ "I'm a muthafuckin ni99a you will never try... Fuck you hoes. Cause i'm a pimp... Till' i die." -Meatwad

08-06-2004, 05:13 AM	#8 (permalink)
Nique... I hurt feelings. Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: NY Posts: 3,368	^I agree. Vote-Buster.

08-06-2004, 08:47 AM	#9 (permalink)
.Etxegreshun. Registered User Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 102	mysterious, your verse was OK but u could have used alot more description and complexity. you could have used better vocab aswell. busta, this was a very nice verse flowed very nicely, good choice of vocab, it rolled nicely and had some good description and complexity. vote - bustarhymen

08-06-2004, 03:31 PM	#10 (permalink)
BrEaK-PoInT Registered User Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: fl. Posts: 696	vote=buster just a better verse to me. Flow was there, very nicely written and means alot. Enjoyed the read. Myster=your story was ok, but like LL said the typos took away from the read somewhat. Maybe get more in depth with your story lines also. stay up man!~

08-06-2004, 04:01 PM	#11 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	ight yo good look, thanks for da votes peace im out __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-06-2004, 04:32 PM	#12 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	33-breakpoint (2-1) [v] 34-extexgreshun (2-0) 17. atheist (26-9) [v] 18. cigma (25-5) 21. part II (4-0) [v] 22. noib da mutt (12-7) 23. prospect (8-2) [v] 24. krooked k (13-3) #1 contenders: 3-mc4sight (21-5) [v] 4-cereal killer (18-5) championship: 1-richard corey (25-5) [v] 2-anaphora (18-6) got my votes in __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-08-2004, 03:49 AM	#13 (permalink)
BusterHymen Registered User Join Date: Jul 2004 Posts: 76	http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/778798-33-breakpoint-2-1-v-34-extexgreshun-2-0-a.html#post9668969 http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778807-21-part-ii-4-0-v-22-noib-da-mutt-12-7-a.html#post9669031 http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778804-26-5-smoke-trail-8-3-v-27-brandon-thompson-3-0-v-29-menso-3-0-a.html#post9669071 http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778806-23-prospect-8-2-v-24-krooked-k-13-3-a.html#post9669126 http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778813-13-iglos-3-2-v-14-equitus-9-3-a.html#post9669193 http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusic-audio-league/778817-7-doyen-7-0-v-8-lucifer-leviathan-5-0-hot-match.html#post9669225 Last edited by BusterHymen; 08-08-2004 at 04:48 AM.

08-08-2004, 02:00 PM	#14 (permalink)
DMeTRIUS ³³³³³s and bananas Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 13,006	winner busterhymen __________________ The Olympics is nothing but a full political scene—everything in world athletics is. You tell a kid the Olympics is the highest form of athletics. That it's man against man, soul against soul. But when you get to the Games it's all different from what you've been told all your life. It's country against country, ideology against ideology. - john carlos

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