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Old 07-26-2004, 12:25 AM   #1 (permalink)
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The Olympics is nothing but a full political scene—everything in world athletics is. You tell a kid the Olympics is the highest form of athletics. That it's man against man, soul against soul. But when you get to the Games it's all different from what you've been told all your life. It's country against country, ideology against ideology. - john carlos
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Old 07-27-2004, 10:31 AM   #2 (permalink)
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1. Equitus vs. Mc4sight

2. Brandom Thompson vs. Ibeechu

3. Part II vs. Straight Up

4. Doyen vs. Vulgar

5. Lucifer vs. Noib da Mutt
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Old 07-30-2004, 01:13 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Sorry, didn't get a chance to write this week; just throwin this up.
Adrenaline rush, a scent and a touch
Brings back ashes, that’s just plenty enough…

To remember the flame, dancing beneath me
For the embers to send my name to the streets, see
I’d, for weeks, prayed and ranted beseeching
That this evening came to pass me succeeding.

Adrenaline rush, a scent and a touch
Brings back ashes, that’s just plenty enough…

To years ending in fame, chants or proceedings,
and be known on the TV, aint so easy.
Gotta do something big, I’m fumbling with this.
I’ve fueled it, it grows as I reminisce.

Adrenaline rush, a scent and a touch
Brings back ashes, that’s just plenty enough…

for passion in fan’s hearts, its set the house to start.
Its burning everywhere now, and somehow, its art.
Parts of me are tired, of being wired and admired…
But what was I supposed to do? The roof was on fire.
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Topic: take a nursery rhyme or child's story and write a modern story expessing the same moral value or theme

Intro: It’s a fact…people change. Some change for better and some for worse. Just remember…no matter who they are and how long you have known them…every “next visit” could be your last. Keep your guard up or severe consequences could follow.

First Impressions…she was small, short and skinny…a “Twig Gurl”/
Young, Naïve and kind-hearted…not ready for such a Big World/
Her Head Twirled…when she thought about tha Earth and its Beauty/
Gazin at tha sky…considerin’ unicorns, trolls and Smurfs in tha Movies/
“Is it Worth it Truly?” she smiles…rolls her eyes…”I cant Desert my Duty/…
To see everything in such a short amount of time…no worries, One Day”/
She falls asleep…soon its Monday, Sun Rays pour in on her Plum Face/
She Becomes Awake…Stomach Aches…she honestly Luvs this Day/
Songs…Sung with Praise…numb…her special day…has Come to Play/
Mondays, she skips through the woods to see one of her favorite Relatives/
She Takes tha Steller Trip…always good times…Haste Develops Quick/
Her grandma Awaits tha Celibate…LOVE conquers Hate and Jealous Flips/
Grandma’s made a Cake for her to Taste and Embellish It…Arrival Time/
Her smiles Designed ta Shine, “Grandma, you’re My Sunshine/
Tha gurl noticed many changes about her grandma…her Cheeks…her Grin/
Her glare…her Teeth that Bend, what was truly lurking Beneath tha Skin/
“Ol Grandma” was Eaten Quick…just before her face smashed…Beaten In/
Tragically…she realized too late…that her Grandma was a Beast Within/

So what really happened to Little Red Riding Hood? Lol

Moral: Dont trust anybody

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althhough I liked th wordplay of Tacitc's verse, it was too short and he could have made it a little bit more indepth and longer. The italicized lines were really good.

ha gurl noticed many changes about her grandma…her Cheeks…her Grin/
Her glare…her Teeth that Bend, what was truly lurking Beneath tha Skin/
“Ol Grandma” was Eaten Quick…just before her face smashed…Beaten In/
Tragically…she realized too late…that her Grandma was a Beast Within/

Nice wordplay here, I enjoyed reading it.

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Old 07-30-2004, 01:46 PM   #8 (permalink)
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...tactics...
...nice verse, short but fresh and original, nice ending...

...key...
...nice imagery, well written story...
...nice werewolfy twist...

...v/key...
...his story beat it out...
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Old 07-30-2004, 02:24 PM   #9 (permalink)
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i had written a very long summary for the both of you but my computer had a boot disk failure in the middle of it lol .. so heres the shortened summary;

keylow - good topic, but i dont think you really modernized the little red riding hood nursery rhyme at all. now you did by the language and lyrics you presented, but for the story i thought you could've done better with the ending .. perhaps instead of the beast / werewolf normal approach went with how little red hiding hood's grandma was actually being EATEN alive by Cancer .. and that struggle. all in all it was an alright verse though.

tactics - i wish you had more time to write this verse. perfect in almost all aspects minus the actual length and not as much detail as i'd hoped. im guessing this story is on a selfsuicide by arson using that fire ashes topical or whatever? if so, i like the way you alluded to it ..

hard choice but im going to go against the grain and say tactics got this one.
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Eh@that topic and eh@you doing lil read riding hood, but it had imagery and I guess some type of creativity.

tactics was too short..

Both real simplistic too.

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Old 07-30-2004, 06:00 PM   #12 (permalink)
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key low...
you stretched shit to make it look like a box
i hate that.
plus it wasn't very original at all..not even an attempt
i can see a little talent, but it hasn't budded yet.
just try to write naturally, rather than confining yourself.

tactics:
you've been in the rstl like 4 times
every time you start fresh
but your probably close to seven or eight wins, with only one or two losses
i'm obviously not sure.
still, you have a great writing style.
its a shame you wrote so short.
still, it was very polished and nice
and i liked the ending.

i'm with trap on this one
quality over quantity
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Old 07-31-2004, 03:28 PM   #13 (permalink)
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this is weird, all i can say is i really wish that tactics could've posted a whole verse, cause what he did write was good, and eventhough i've never your work, i can honestly say you'll make an impression of you stick around, on the other hand key-low, your verse wasn't bad, it was just too simplistic, i just couldn't get into it, although you had a whole verse, im sory to say im going to vote for tactics, like talent said it really was quality over quanity here
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Phone vote* yeah i'm going to have to agree with the others this is a case of quality over quanity key your verse wasn't terrible but you need to polish up ya writin a little tactics just had tho short better writing vote- tactics
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yeh ima also have to go with the quality over quantity

cause tactics verse was better and woulda been pure flamez if he had written a full verse

key-low you werent original at all, i hate that in the rstl
its all about originality and story tellin

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Tac:
I enjoyed this, nice, quick and to the point. I like the fact to get famous you have to do something big, he wants to go down in flames very clever.

7/10

KL:
I took this as the grandma was dieing, death was the beast with in. I also thought this was a good verse, though loose those ///// and work on your flow. Otherwise all good.

6/10

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Haha @ all the 'yeah I'm going with the other votes' votes. Anyways. That said, Vote: Tactics. He had the mechanics down, the repeating chorus was really nice, flow straight, just a good verse, though short, he got his story across more smoothly than Key.
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Thanks for voting everyone.

My votes:

Straight Up vs. Part II
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...09#post9616709

Brandon Thompson vs. Ibeechu Farensquare
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...34#post9616734
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