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Old 07-12-2004, 02:44 PM   #1 (permalink)
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The Olympics is nothing but a full political scene—everything in world athletics is. You tell a kid the Olympics is the highest form of athletics. That it's man against man, soul against soul. But when you get to the Games it's all different from what you've been told all your life. It's country against country, ideology against ideology. - john carlos





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A Moment In Time
...its the thoughts of an American Soldier during the D-Day Invasion...Not your typial 2 line rhyming, so dont think it doesn't rhyme/flow...Enjoy


Everything is crazy as I creep through these muddy waters...
My baby, the only thing I can think of is my lovely daughter...
I'm trying my best to not let her live without her only father...
Surrounded by death, machine guns, and these Nazi fuckers...
Puttin' faith in my men, beause I know they got me covered...
As soon as I'm off the boat I'm feelin' clumps in my throat...
From the tear gas filling the air with it's posionous smoke...
As I'm slowly making my way to the shore, I'm nervous..
What does the Lord have in store when I reach the surface?...
Everywhere I look, I see human beings dying in pain...
And not a single one of them is fighting for fame...
They're fighting for justice, truth, equality, and freedom...
Fighting against Hitler and the people that believe him...
We have to put a stop to these brutal and evil heathens...
Approaching the sand, I see a man that can barely stand...
He's been shot like so many others in this scary land...
Damn, this place is full of barbed wire and machine guns...
Ahead I see some fellow soldiers, I get between some...
Opening fire on the towers ahead, I want them dead...
Because they've been filling evil things into peoples heads...
I started to fire as I make my way towards the barbed wire...
Until this battle is over, I garuntee that we will not tire...
Bullets whizzing past my hair, I admit that I'm scared...
But I will not let these prisoners die, my commitment is there...
I take cover behind the barbed wire, next to my company...
Then I'm off in a hurry, kicking sand up from under me...
"Hey Joey, I'm going in! Stay behind and cover me!"...
Quickly, I make my way up the hill while opening fire...
Relentless, the enemies stronghold is opening wider...
I got Nazi's to the side of me, one in each direction...
So I gotta be careful, and walk with smart selection...
With all this going on, I can still only think of my daughter...
I hope when I get back that she'll be proud of her father...
I duck behind some crates to hide from an enemy soldier...
Probably twenty-one years of age, or not very much older...
Walking around with a heavy gun slunk over his shoulder...
I don't wanna have to kill him, but its mine I choose his life over...
A quick shot to the head and this young man is now dead...
Now the ground surrounded him is covered in red...
On my backpack I feel..someone pullin...tryna attack me and kill..
*wakes up* Damn, these flashbacks are so real...



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My name is John, Im happy with the life I live
A nice neighborhood, good job, beautiful wife and kids.
Jane's so pretty, Taught me how to live the right way
Kind, Loving, Compassionate ..w/ a nice rack I might say.
My baby girl, JoJo. Wouldn't let anyone take her from me
She has such a beautiful smile, although missing her front teeth . .

JoJo turned 7 today, a day filled with suprises
. . My wife and I bought her a bike, and tried to teach her to ride it.
Training wheels still attached, but man she could soar
. . Until she couldnt turn, and fell face first into the floor.
I thought nothing of it, just a bump or bruise
. . But she came up gushing blood, and missing her front two
teeth. My wife took JoJo inside to make things perfect n fine
. . I figured I'd let JoJo know about the Tooth Fairy, it was worth the time.
She was very fascinated with the story, it weighed her head
. . But I was happy, because w/ no complaints she headed straight for bed . .

Im awaken by the small screech of sneakers
. . Without a doubt, get up, and reach for the heater.
It's for protection. Maybe Im trippin, so I sit down - creek -
I know someone's in JoJo's room, her door has a distinct sound.
My daughter's only 7, she knows her way around the home
. . But terrified of the dark, so I know she aint walking around alone.
I know someone is here. They're gettin' dealt, lights out
. . Got me fucking creeping around, silent, inside my house!
Im creeping against the hallway wall, moving squalid n quick
Moving like a stealth warrior, on some Metal Gear Solid type shit.
I reach JoJo's room, I knew to settle this, he dies.
I peek in through the slip, b/c it's about the element of suprise.
It's actually a female, perched over JoJo ready to do stuff
Seems like the stalker type, who loved my child a lil too much.
She raises her hand to JoJo's face, no intent to lower it
At this moment I stirke, smack open the door, and unload the clip.
This silhouette drops, gripping a bag that's sorta filled
And as that reaches the floor, nothing but quarters spill.
Along with a poem, reading . .

" I come in the night as the kids lay fast asleep
Exchange a few coins, and in return the teeth I keep. "

By this time, JoJo and Jane are embracing as just one
Coming to a harsh realization of what I have just done.
Their tears soak the body, as we all stare down.
Shells surrond the body, as I let off one sqaure round.
All of a sudden, lightning abrews and thunder rolls in
How such a calm night became stormy is so unknowing.
I bend down to reach the bag, as the wind blows.
One last glare at my family, from the reflection of the window.
As I grasp the bag, I feel as if my spirits empty
And everything I once knew is gone, fear has lead me
. . to this bedroom, standing at the foot of the hall
Thinking what has just happened, going thru withdrawal.
I loved wifey and my girl, plus waiting on a son was great
But oh how things could change so drastically with one mistake.
From one round of one gun to protect my one kid
I've been different for a few mins., but I loved the life I lived.
I knew I had to pick up the slack, and I grew weary
I had to take the job, Because who know's
. . what would happen to the world without the Tooth Fairy.

I had to rush to finish,
but it's all good. G'luck Kon,
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Old 07-16-2004, 12:03 AM   #7 (permalink)
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i felt the flashback thing for real because my neighbor was in that war and he always talks about it...so it felt really familiar...i liked the rhyme scheme and sudden ending...really caught me off gaurd...i liked this peice alot

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you had a really nice piece and it was sad and mad me really feel emotional for the father but the fact that it was kind of like this could never happen kind of dented the story...you had a better flow but i just felt like kon pieced his story together better...this was really close though..i had to read 2 times...good job yall
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