WEST: 08- Yo Momma 2nd vs 09- Noib da Mutt

This is a discussion on WEST: 08- Yo Momma 2nd vs 09- Noib da Mutt within the RapMusic's Storytelling League forums, part of the Text Battle Leagues category; 2004 RSTL TOURNEY topics http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=739537 bar limit 24 bars min 48 bars max due dates verses due thursday 11:59 pm ...


Go Back   Rapmusic.com > Text Battle Leagues > RapMusic's Storytelling League

Closed Thread
 
LinkBack Thread Tools Display Modes
Old 05-09-2004, 11:41 PM   #1 (permalink)
12x RSTL Champ
 
Join Date: Oct 2001
Location: NC
Posts: 5,027
Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!
WEST: 08- Yo Momma 2nd vs 09- Noib da Mutt

2004 RSTL TOURNEY


topics

Submit Tourney Topics Here

bar limit

24 bars min
48 bars max

due dates

verses due thursday 11:59 pm eastern
votes due sunday 11:59 am eastern

voting standards

anyone can vote
only broken down votes will count
you must vote on atleast 5 battles
you dont have to post links
but dont expect votes if you dont give them

misc. rules

you may not recycle verses
use only the topics provided
please only post verses, check ins, and votes
no freeposting

Good Luck
__________________
TH3 3LIT3
2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER
1x POET TREE CHAMP
12x RSTL CHAMP


Yes...I've Beat You Before
www.soundclick.com/eulogy
www.myspace.com/eulogy46

Vern Acular is offline  
Old 05-10-2004, 10:42 PM   #2 (permalink)
Registered User
 
Noib Da Mutt's Avatar
 
Join Date: Dec 2001
Posts: 7,510
Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!
in...



good luck...


votes...
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...867post8843867
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...448post8845448
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...472post8845472
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...492post8845492
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...509post8845509
__________________
Dune Wolf...

Strength is all that matters, everything else is just a delusion for the weak...
Beats Lyrics And Hip Hop

myspace^^^

HEAR BEATS AND SONGS

Last edited by Noib Da Mutt; 05-16-2004 at 02:58 AM.
Noib Da Mutt is online now  
Old 05-11-2004, 08:38 AM   #3 (permalink)
More then meets the eye
 
6th_plague's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2001
Location: Georgia
Posts: 26,465
6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!
either the aids awearness or 6th sense

luck man
__________________
Fortune 5 Hunned - Behind the Smoke and Mirrors
May 2007

are you ready?


New Single -Hi Haters

Last edited by yo momma 2nd; 05-12-2004 at 06:16 PM.
6th_plague is offline  
Old 05-13-2004, 05:52 PM   #4 (permalink)
...
 
A.S.K's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2003
Location: Some University, UK
Posts: 5,003
A.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All Star
This yo momma's verse....pz

Even though people surrounded me when I roam,
Some how I was alone in my own desolate zone,
Enclosed in kids sporting uniforms akin to clones,
I was like the pimple people politely looked past,
Every time I crossed them they grew stiff like a mast,
In class I began to fail fast, tests like an obstacle I couldn’t pass,
No matter my effort the only A’s I got were absent,
For absence advent every of week that I went, - to
School so I gave up, as my presence was looked through,
I thought the crushing mute was over when my boy Stu,
Come through on a bike we was fixing up,
But my calls fell on deaf ears; I was luck – less,
He threw over the bike bellowing ‘fuck this!’,
His face undecorated, lacking emotion,
His hands disconcert, sweat pooling, fingers open,
I reached out but he withdrew looking up,
Crying ‘Kid I miss you… but what the fuck…’
I carried on home hoping mum had picked up,
She been down a lot, depressed, stressed,
She wasn’t at her best, kept forgetting to dress,
Looking a mess, she must a knew I failed the tests,
She looked right through me at an old pic,
Of me, Back when I was ‘good’ in spring 93,
She couldn’t stand me, telling me to sit,
My pops was pacing whilst his teeth would grit,
The tension was suffocating so I vacated,
Thinking of school and how im gunna change it,
Cause I couldn’t take it, being this hated….

So I walked down the street when my eyes,
Fell shy upon my girl cuddling some other guy,
I couldn’t maintain scream who, what and why,
I called out to her jumping flowers on the Island,
Wrapped to the traffic cones and potted in polystyrene,
When a car came screaming down the road,
As it approached it ripped right through me,
As I was left standing I realised rapidly.....

…This was the second time this week this shit had happened to me…


Topic: sixth sense
__________________
For years in Europe, Christianity was law
so how many deaths were caused in the name of Our Lord
Sense would tell me it aint the words on the pages
but the interpretation of it that fuelled the crusaders

Last edited by rapter2k; 05-13-2004 at 06:13 PM.
A.S.K is offline  
Old 05-14-2004, 12:51 AM   #5 (permalink)
Registered User
 
Noib Da Mutt's Avatar
 
Join Date: Dec 2001
Posts: 7,510
Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!Noib Da Mutt will do you doggie style!
I remain enclosed in hair, clothes, and mental prevention
essentially pent inside of the home that has been fenced in
but I am the main blockage, nothing shall ever pass me
I'm nasty yet innocent unless somebody looks at me
my strength is lacking, but my owner hopes to have me longer
if only she had a father and her fucking will were stronger
but right now I'm a goner, and destined to be old news
when I'm of old use because when broken I won't hold juice
I feel the heat rising, and fluids behind me churning
chemicals react so intensely that I feel as if I'm burning
but there is no descerning, one thing behind me from the next
I know that my end is here if this girl starts havin' sex
but I haven't gone yet, still holdin' myself together
well hell, aint none of my kind ever last forever
I feel the pressure pushing, as I fold in with the weight
if you wanna break me a full thrust is what it takes
I would face my fate with a grain of salt and spill my guts
before the fort I defended became the full reign of them nuts
but you see I'm touched, and it's my purpose to rip
my last sight was a shot and the competition from the dick...



I am a wall...


Bored and dormant forever, I'm glad to be let out
and in the place of new homes, instead of a mouth
you see, my life has just consited of swimmin' around the distance
of this dome home I exist in just to prepare for this instance
of final release, but see, there are millions here to compete
these fuckers think they're stronger, but you see this life aint for the weak
I am a warrior, genetically tied to acestrial depths
but fuck these other kats, I'm the one they like the best
I've grown strong, and yet I still don't have a body
plus I knew to pray that I have the hand of God on me
I won't be left here rotting, my swim is against the strong
future doctors, lawyers, and cops, all following along
but i will not be gone until a span of oxygen I've breathed
while the others were expectations i would strain to remain me
see, my father's wishes would be reflected in his seed
but i was the only one that varied and still carried his same gene
the world would blame me, for causing the changes that it feared
my aura weird, but still something easy for God to steer
to my home I'm near, an egg I was soon to make fertile
see, beating out the millions would only be my first hurdle
I had a life full of years, that would determine where I ended in
my final home of rest, this is the one I'm just beginnin' in


I am a sperm...
__________________
Dune Wolf...

Strength is all that matters, everything else is just a delusion for the weak...
Beats Lyrics And Hip Hop

myspace^^^

HEAR BEATS AND SONGS
Noib Da Mutt is online now  
Old 05-14-2004, 08:46 AM   #6 (permalink)
More then meets the eye
 
6th_plague's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2001
Location: Georgia
Posts: 26,465
6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!
Votes:-

Dishounor vs Jweaks
Erykah Caine
Trap vs Musik
Vern vs Smurp
__________________
Fortune 5 Hunned - Behind the Smoke and Mirrors
May 2007

are you ready?


New Single -Hi Haters

Last edited by yo momma 2nd; 05-15-2004 at 10:55 AM.
6th_plague is offline  
Old 05-14-2004, 09:58 AM   #7 (permalink)
...
 
A.S.K's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2003
Location: Some University, UK
Posts: 5,003
A.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All StarA.S.K is an RM All Star
OKay nice battle guys

Yo momma: I didnt actually read this before youi posted it, but it plays along line to line to that advert on TV wid de kid wid long hiar. I like the structure and flow you came with here, alot different to usual and actually nice. Your flow is improving. Vocab is a bit basic and i hate the way you do 3 lines rhyming cos it throws me off. Nice story though, simple but played well.

Noib: Lol thats first bit i thought i was reading come pron thing, dont know why. Just the way you said about fucking and juice, i was expecting you to say 'i am a dildo' Not bad, flow was okay but i found your use of multi's made the reading hard, the way they were placed directly after. Nice vocab though, lost me on the spem one. Just wasnt feeling it and it got boring. I'm more of a story guy. But nice piece

Good battle, but im just goign for Yo momma slightly, cos i found it a easier read and though i knew the ending, it was still enjoyable. Noib was nice i just wasnt liking his topic choice

Vote: Yo momma

And no, its not cos i posted his verse. I was doing that as a mod.
__________________
For years in Europe, Christianity was law
so how many deaths were caused in the name of Our Lord
Sense would tell me it aint the words on the pages
but the interpretation of it that fuelled the crusaders
A.S.K is offline  
Old 05-14-2004, 10:49 AM   #8 (permalink)
Registered User
 
Join Date: Oct 2003
Posts: 302
...Sherlock... takes it up the butt!
vote= Noib,

yo momma shit, was plain and simple, flow was short and sweet
but ya imagery on hear was aight, i mean good verse/story,
you kept losing my interest on certain points

the wall idea was awesome, it kept my attention more, the sperm you could of did witout, but still decent good reading, imagery was decent
i cant really say it was creative, bcuz maybe someone did it b4, iono

(((( I usually dont read topicals, but i know what i like ))))
__________________
.........Sherlock...........
...Sherlock... is offline  
Old 05-14-2004, 01:25 PM   #9 (permalink)
^Greatest^
 
Join Date: Sep 2003
Location: BRONX, NY
Posts: 1,460
SMURP takes it up the butt!
I was serious when I said you didnt have to vote - Momma

Last edited by yo momma 2nd; 05-15-2004 at 09:42 AM.
SMURP is offline  
Old 05-14-2004, 09:47 PM   #10 (permalink)
Unbelievable
 
Join Date: Jan 2002
Location: Flow's alter-ego
Posts: 5,640
Awedishin takes it up the butt!
Quote:
Originally Posted by SMURP
vote= noib
i liked his verse better
both was hot to
nice vote retard

vote = NOIB

Yo Momma, honestly, I didn't like that flow/scheme at all....I mean, it would have been better had the verse held my interest, but it just seemed to drag on and on and I really couldn't stick with it. Not trying to clown ya but I know you can do better than that. Noib's ish wasn't a whole hell of a lot better, but his concepts were stronger and I think the storied ran a lot smoother...the wall twist was aight, and as a whole it was a stronger effort.

Good luck to whomever advances..

pz
__________________

fuck you I'm...Elite...bitches
4x RSTL Champ
....guess who's back....
Awedishin is offline  
Old 05-15-2004, 10:50 AM   #11 (permalink)
Black Hand
 
Join Date: Dec 2002
Location: 28-1
Posts: 1,166
AuThoR NYSE takes it up the butt!
Yo Momma 2nd
I got to admit...after about 10 lines in I new the direction the story was going and I was waitin for it. It was good but the way the lines would transistion between one another kind of threw the attention off a bit. The story itself was good. Just think the route you took the topic kind of hurt you.

Noib da Mutt
I'll give you the creativity portion of the match. But your verse wasn't all that thrilling to me. Reading about sperm was bad enough in sex ed class but then reading a verse about it was just pointless. Flow was good and it was written well. Like I said you did a good job with the creativity portion of this match and you wrote a good piece.. but it just didn't grasp my attention to much.


I don't think either one came all that sectacular. Perhaps...each underestimated the other. This is a close match and a hard one to decide on. I think both came decent. Neither verse grasped my attention greatly. No offense to either...because I think both are good.

Vote
Noib

I just think his creativity was what took this. While neither really fully pulled me in. But I just feel Noib put a little more into his verse and pulled this out by the hair on his ass.
AuThoR NYSE is offline  
Old 05-15-2004, 11:03 AM   #12 (permalink)
More then meets the eye
 
6th_plague's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2001
Location: Georgia
Posts: 26,465
6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!6th_plague will do you doggie style!
Thanks for the votes, I shoulda seen the trouble I had writing this style as a sign... Good shit Noib good luck for the rest of the tounry!
__________________
Fortune 5 Hunned - Behind the Smoke and Mirrors
May 2007

are you ready?


New Single -Hi Haters
6th_plague is offline  
Old 05-15-2004, 10:22 PM   #13 (permalink)
Watch the black panther..
 
MISSKEYdaQUEEN's Avatar
 
Join Date: Jul 2002
Location: Glenville REPPIN BIYAAAATCHES!!
Posts: 17,647
MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!MISSKEYdaQUEEN will do you doggie style!
My vote:Yo Momma

Contarary to popular opinion I was feeling the way you layed the verse dow. And call me just plain unobservant but I hadn't recalled the topic you chose and so...I guess it was a nice ending. I had no problem with your flow, imagery or structure...it lacked some detail..that woulda helped ..but hey..

Noib- I didn't like your subject. The story was aiight and flow and detail was on point but....I just feel like Yo Momma's grabbed me more. But I can't complain much on your verse. It was good!
__________________
Queen's MySpace Page
Queen's Other Myspace Page biaaatches
***********************
The battles that count aren't the ones for gold medals. The struggles within yourself—the invisible, inevitable battles inside all of us—that's where it's at.~Jesse Owens (1913-1980)
MISSKEYdaQUEEN is offline  
Old 05-16-2004, 02:26 PM   #14 (permalink)
12x RSTL Champ
 
Join Date: Oct 2001
Location: NC
Posts: 5,027
Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!Vern Acular will do you doggie style!
winner noib in a close one
__________________
TH3 3LIT3
2005 NO ID TOURNEY WINNER
1x POET TREE CHAMP
12x RSTL CHAMP


Yes...I've Beat You Before
www.soundclick.com/eulogy
www.myspace.com/eulogy46

Vern Acular is offline  
Closed Thread

Bookmarks


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On
Forum Jump


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 05:36 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.7.0
Copyright ©2000 - 2008, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
SEO by vBSEO 3.2.0
Copyright (c) 800Media.com
Copyright © 1998-2008 800Media, Inc. All Rights Reserved.
No portions of this site may be duplicated without permission from 800Media, Inc.
Advertising | Privacy Policy