29- MadDawk MKN (2-0) vs 30- Everkleer (2-1)

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[Key-Low]

chezeckin in..............not ta be a dick head or anythin but my name is MadDAWG with a G, and i requested to get my record switched over to tha name Key-Low, but whateva, peace, 1

[Everkleer]

chin check.......and these topics suck

[Everkleer]

2 Topics: Racism and Anger Management

Red Text: Doctor Speaking
Yellow Text: Patient Speaking

Now, Sir, I understand you have a problem with controlling your anger?
When it hits do you ever feel inclined to thow a fit involving a stranger?
Well, Doc, first things first...you should know that I'm active in the Klan
Prepare for the worst, cuz when I release fury I aint passive on a man
Actin with my hands, see a Chi.nk running, but blood runs fastest in Japan
I love watchin em scream, swingin in trees, brains plastered in the sand
And the faster they ran, the quicker you'd see us chasing them down
Rubbin their face in the ground, hands tied, feet embraced and bound
Present them at our Klan meetings, have them facing the crowd
Lookin like their flying, bringin a new meaning to "hangin around"
Interrupting abrubtly, your story's malevolent, is it safe that you're tellin it?
Shutup Doc, I ain't done yet, and I'm sure your comments are irrelevant
I'm tellin you my problems, so why can't you start helpin them?
I'm paying you to listen, I don't wanna hear you preach benevolence
I know you ain't lackin intelligence, you fat Middle Eastern prick
Teachin your mathematics, and I've about had it, so go eat a dick
I don't need you bitch, fuck feet - you got problems tryna see your tits
Please refrain from the nationality or weight jokes
They're touchy subjects, God damn I really hate those
So no jokes for me, you can say my Lord's name in vain tho?
I'll give you some pain, ho, heard your wife's a fuckin •••
And I bet your religion's one of your touchy subjects too
Cuz not only are you fat, but I hear that you're a Muslim too
Lemme call your wife now, tell her that her husband's screwed
Can't keep shut the news that he's gonna get punched and bruised
And you can try to fight back, but I gotta hunch you'll lose
I bet Allah looks up to you, but only when your laying down
Cuz then your twice as tall, with your fat stomach hangin out
FUCKING BITCH, WHAT DO YOU THINK OF MY ANGER NOW?!
Quite frankly it doesn't bother me, in fact I'll be laughing soon
NO I'MA LAUGH AT YOU! CAUSE I HEAR YOUR A FAGGOT TOO!
Yes, actually I am, but does that really matter to you?
Hold that thought, because I don't give a damn if it does
It's my decision if I wanna take a man in the butt...
And don't ever say you hate and wanna kill a nig.ger
Check out this gun, tell me when the bullet's bigger
You'll get a better look, just wait till I pull the trigger
**BAM!**

[Everkleer]

Here's my votes...

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...44#post8300944
21- Muti (11-8) vs 22- Eyedill (3-0)
37- Malosovich (0-1) vs 38- Worst Attitude
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...33#post8302633
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...70#post8302970
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...97#post8306097

[Key-Low]

Topic: Irrelevance

Intro: Some things will never change, no matter what you do. No matter what…even if you were there a few minutes before it happened…even if you gave advice and guidance a few days earlier or reached out to help and comfort many weeks ago. It’s amazing how one action performed in a matter of seconds and a decision made in merely a few minutes can affect weeks, years, decades, and centuries of life. But that’s not always tha case…

Michael…born in Alabama, most importantly…The United States/
In a Tyme of Haste, one day in tha skool yard…he’d Find his Place/
Loved by many…that Kind of Face, 20/20 vision, but Blind of Hate/
Time and Space…distraught, blacks n whites weren’t Designed ta Play/
Shot down…Denied by Race, confused…determined to Find a Way/
Or a reason, Hide tha Rage…Bind his Race…cease Crime and Hate/
His Mind just Raced…now 2 skools, two fountains, 2 Lines for Cake/
HonestLay…Inclined ta Break…knees buckled…but Stood Strong/
In tha south…tha Good’s Gone, soon…wasn’t allowed to Look Wrong/
Slowly read tha Books of Psalms…did I mention, his Dad’s a Pastor/
At Ebenezer Baptist, M taught to turn his cheek and not Stab tha Bastard/
His stories Grabbed and Captured…no slurs and don’t Laugh at ••••••••/…
Whites, how you Acts a Factor, rebellion translates to bad…Bad is Disaster/
But Michael…indifferent…Had an Answer, gain More Clout and Knowledge/
Maintained his brain at Morehouse College, More Doubts Demolished/
Soon…his record was Rather Impressive…and earned his Doctorate/
Whites and men alike Gathered Against him…but no could Stop this Kid/
Wouldn’t stop until people Acknowledged Him, his pants were Pocket Less/
Nothin’ to hide…spoke with Honest Lips…patient…with no Violent Fists/
Whites in tha north would Denied tha Ish, southerners Supplied with Bricks/
And police with water hoses…peacefully, he reacted with a Bus Boycott/
Southern Racists lost bank…young white children Deployed with Rocks/
Blacks slowly Anoint tha Block (U.S.) and angry politicians Point at Cops/
Tha Boy was Hott, no ways feasible could they Destroy his Plot/
Enjoyed tha Props…but he also new their minority had a long Way to Go/
Tha ability to look passed Racist Jokes…nothin’ vivid…just Basic Hopes/
Erase tha Foes…use white bathrooms, white fountains…Make it Known/

Hint: Michael was renamed Martin at 6, he brought Tears in Streams/
Not only blessed tha world with his presence but…Shared his Dreams/
People acted…Embarrassing…to diminish evil…God Shared tha King/
Not one black through Jealous Fits for “Negroes” hope Developed Quick/
It’s a good thing…Martin Luther King Jr.’s words weren’t Celibate/

They reproduced like wildfire and strengthened tha movement enough…so when Martin’s lyfe stopped after a rifle shot…it all was Irrelevant/

[Key-Low]

i'll drop votes soon..........my bad sum gramatical errors and some words missin, had to key it........very rushed, good luck man

[Key-Low]

lyft it for votes, peace, 1

[Wise-Punchlines]

damn..good battle..

Everkleer-your verse was cool..personally i never really liked role playin in verses unless it was in bigger parts like responses to soemthing but you did it good..your flow was cool imagery was alright..rhyme scheme was kinda basic and story was alright but nothing that really pulled me in too much but you did a good job and keep at it

MadDawg-Your verse was great..the innerbar rhyming was perfect kept the flow and didnt seemed forced..imagery was good and told the story very well..your writers voice is good you pulled me into the story and the twist that is was martin was very cool and that last stanza was hot..
so overall on a more creative better written piece i gotta go with maddawg..please change the name lol but good battle by both props

go vote on me vs. infinite truth fairly please its in top 40

[Stiffaz]

Everkleer:

it wasn't too bad..kinda funny
maybe I'll show it to my honey
but i know that u're quiet good
elevate..don't hide yourself with hood

MadDawg:

I appreciate serious stories
which deserve all my glories
it was with some historical feeling
i find this verse more appealing

and vote = MadDawg

[Everkleer]

0-2, uppin for votes

[6th_plague]

Originally Posted by Stiffaz

Everkleer:

it wasn't too bad..kinda funny
maybe I'll show it to my honey
but i know that u're quiet good
elevate..don't hide yourself with hood

MadDawg:

I appreciate serious stories
which deserve all my glories
it was with some historical feeling
i find this verse more appealing

and vote = MadDawg

going through your votes im speachless...

seriously... you just...eh

ima have to get back to you on your position in this league... seriously thats just taking the pisss...

[Muti]

Everkleer...

interesting story...i liek how u focused on the anger points of your main person in the story..and then countered it with the doctor killing him at then end... nice..showing of emotion.. props.... detailed pretty good..the whole story was not very unfolding but it still did its well...

MadDawg...

your story was nice...detailed very well... you had a lot of information for us to read.. I kind of got to a point where I was saying I hope this get to its point... cuz u sort of dragged it out...still not bad.. the endign was good also...

Both of you did nice stories but I'll choose
MadDawg

[Anaphora]

Everkleer: Verse was a solid mediocre. Very solid. There's been a lot of crap this week, but your verse was decent. Flow was... there. Not great, not bad... The story was, also, there. Could've given a good explanation as to what set off the guy's temper this time, didn't seem like anything... the shrink asking if he's sure he should tell the story? but hey, it's about a racist, I guess you don't need logic with those guys. You may wanna make your character the protagonist, unless you have a real real good verse...

Maddawk: Nice verse, some of the inner rhymes forced some odd syntax, like: deployed with rocks, didn't make a whole lot of sense, well, it's understandable, but not very proper... but if it's a key like you say, it happens... nice story, don't think that it really fit in to irrelevant, as in, I didn't like the ending two lines, or, one line or whatever, but eh... the verse was good regardless.

Vote: MadDawk

[SeQueL]

vote=Mad


you need ta work on your wording Mad, cause sometimes you carried on a sentence too long but nonetheless I still felt u had a superior story and flow compared too klear

klear, u had an aiight verse lol@shrink killin dude... dat was sumthing unexpected but up until that point erything else jus kinda went without much detail ta go on ta the characters.
was kinda bland in adding the imagery and reasonin

[Atheist]

Vote: Key Low.

It wasn't as if his verse was brilliant, but it was great by comparison to Everkleer's. Everkleer, your story made no sense. Why the hell would a doctor shoot his patient? I know his buttons were being pushed, but it's his job to help sort out his patient's problems. So that was pretty stupid, and it seemed to me like you just created that ending in a rush to finish your verse. Next time, work a little harder on it. I see potential.

[Harlequin]

vote-mad

wasnt an amazing verse but stil gets my vote. alot of the sentnces were carried on too long so work on wording. good writers voice and vocab was nice

kleers' voice was there, but thats only due to rolpelaying allwoing that. vocab was aight and same with flow. Just seemed a bit bland

cheers

Key low takes this...

wasn't spectacular but still a nice read, kept me locked through out. good writtin, sorta lacked a meaning to it all... felt a bit unsatisfied at the end of the verse... but as i say it was well written had some nice vocab and touched on some imagry. Kleers wasnt bad but it fell below key's. pretty much the basics but nothing more than that. you had a good topic and a good take on the topic but it just didnt work. you didnt really push the boundruies and sorta left it half assed...

[Insanevillian]

Key Had Enough Votes For him To Win...

He Lost 6 But had an 8 Vote Margin...

U Kids NEED TO vOTE...

Key-Low wins.....