31- Harlequin (1-0) vs 32- Labour pariah (1-0)

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[Labour Pariah]

In...Best of luck playa.

Edit: And i know yours...shhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

[Harlequin]

same to you
playa

and i know yer alias!!!!!

lol...o got you man, safe with me

*hush'es*

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[Labour Pariah]

In an over-populated box, an emotional melting pot
No escape from the lock, a vagabond settling at the top
Stuck between a rock n a hard place with caged feelings
Anorexic ceilings revealing me cowering in a corner bleeding
Pain kneeling sticking the needle in, I’m lonely shivering
Boxed within, catatonic rocking from livening with sin
Superfluous whims of fear falling appallingly on deaf ears
Left tears painting a purgatory revere, oceans reclined to rivers
The streams left bitter scars like bars holding my face prisoner
Watching the world from afar waiting like a Ringwraith listener
…
..
.
Outcast daggers thrashed my consciousness spiralling me into depression
Helpless to climb ladders so the sadder I get when mad blurs facture lessons
Ambivalent actors stressing, left me guessing if this was fate's catharsis
Torrid emotions beating the blessing, displacement of hatred in large hits
Bullied in the box until my confidence broke, eloped and disappeared
Quick to retreat, I do everything in no time since the world is what I fear
The futures unclear and until you reach where you wanna be I’m here
Stuck in the struggle n alleviate myself when its clear like I’m not sincere
Death’ s door is near n I’m in shear shock unable to cogently knock
Trapped parallel to happiness in the cell spelled ‘Pandora’s Box’
…
..
.
In darkness never getting to see the light of day, I live with misery
Once the hardship is over completely there is no need for me
Never come out to play and full of resent, I’m Hope bitch!
Ever present in depression, can’t escape I’m fucking agoraphobic

Topics:pandora's box, Depression & Acrophobia

[A.S.K]

UPping for Harlequin

nice drop from labour

[A.S.K]

Get at me on aim labour

[Harlequin]

As I stand on the edge of the room, my eyes blink back an ocean
now Niagara falls runs as my tears, I struggle with my emotion
How can one be so frail, and the other much too vicious
And how can God carry on, surely he must see this
How could he have…….
Sorry im choking on my tears, and my speech is mixed with slurs
Let me tell you all this story, and how it will come to be your words

The piece of paper in my hand dripped, the words smudged from the rain
I closed my eyes and tilted my head, trying to shut out the pain
As the drops of water hit my pale face, and slid to hit the floor
I gripped the paper tighter, hoping he would do no more
I want to let my spirit soar, I want to explore this earths wonder
I no longer want to ponder about what is to be discovered over yonder
The pain grips me again, and i scream out the lord name
How could this fucker ever indulge in this Child play and game
And as the climax of the events hits it then will hide us
Because it can provide us with the features that can slide us
Past the overtime of beginning, so I looked for better days
As the knife slit my throat, lying bleeding as a 8 year old,such a young age

Im guessing you still don’t see, maybe I didn’t make this clear
Sacrifice a few seconds of your time, and lend me you ear

And now I stand where happened, where I was taken for this earth
Travelled to God, body broken, laid on my back in a black hearse
This curse of men was all I was shown for, I was just another victim
Yet god gave me another chance, another way to say I missed him
I now stand upon this world as a spirt, a ghost, some shall name me a sage
This destiny of life was never foreseen to be written on the page
You see, what I see I what you shall see in times that are yet to pass
Your life will be shattered singly like mine, a broken pane og glass
In just another window, youre not special, its just what it is
And as I stand waiting for you I only now begin to realise this
The man raped me, not because it was destined, but because its life
And seeing god is the actual ending of it all, not the slice for the knife
So this night you will not surive, because I was brought back to view
Because what happened to me, will happen to many others, maybe you

Oh and the words on the paper….they were your words
Words you will soon speak…words many others will speak in turns

Why Me?

[Harlequin]

Topics

Paedophilia
your words
re incarnation

[ErykahCaine]

nice battle

Harlequin:

this was a pretty cool piece, you fused the three topics together pretty nicely. Flow was mediocre, it started off pretty smooth, then it fell off in places. The overall storyline was O.K nothing eye popping, but nothing too dull. IMO it was a cool drop.

Labour:
this was a nice piece. you had a consistently smooth flow. overall storyline was good and the twist was nicely done. I really enjoyed your writers voice and the words you used, which really brought out the imagery...nicely done

"Anorexic ceilings revealing me cowering in a corner bleeding"
very nice imagery, as well as word usage nicely done

"Left tears painting a purgatory revere, oceans reclined to rivers
The streams left bitter scars like bars holding my face prisoner"
again nice word usage and great imagery


"Ambivalent actors stressing, left me guessing if this was fate's catharsis
Torrid emotions beating the blessing, displacement of hatred in large hits
Bullied in the box until my confidence broke, eloped and disappeared
Quick to retreat, I do everything in no time since the world is what I fear
The futures unclear and until you reach where you wanna be I’m here
Stuck in the struggle n alleviate myself when its clear like I’m not sincere
Death’ s door is near n I’m in shear shock unable to cogently knock
Trapped parallel to happiness in the cell spelled ‘Pandora’s Box’"
i was feeling this entire section, your writers voice was so strong right here

VOTE= Labour P.

[Harlequin]

cheers for the explained vote

0-1

upping

nice ill edit a vote later...

[Wise-Punchlines]

harlequin you had a good verse..some bars in the middle were kinda stretched but your flow was cool..the story itself was nice molded them all together real well dawg..vocab was there and you had a strong writers voice..You kept to your style..one of your best drops since our battle and yea i know who you are

Labour-i dont know who you are but this is a very well written piece..your vocab is great painted a great picture..drew me in with your writters voice..your story was very creative..i liked it alot and you took this with a more creative story and better mechanics writing..

props to both on a good battle..go vote on my vs. truth fairly in the top 40 if ya can peace

[Tha Talent]

Harlequin:
this was a great verse...it went from confusing to focused and very pointed...i really liked the way you ended it...wrapt everything together so well...i thought the last paragraph and the last couplet combined to make this piece into a top 10 nominee...very solid piece of writing, though sometimes i wonder if you are just trying to make things sound nice.

Labour Pariah:
genius combination of topics...really...i loved the whole "trapped in pandora's box" thing, it brought the whole verse together...this was a very well written and poetic verse, kinda reminscent of a poor man's Author NYSE...maybe not, but whatever...i felt this...overall, i liked the idea, the way you told it...just a very dope verse.

vote=Labour Pariah
more original
dope battle

Vote- Harlequin

I gotta wonder if these people are reading the same battle.

I could follow along with Harlequins verse, it was nicely worded and easy to pay attention to. Labour's piece had some lines that were kinda stretched, the flow was off, I didn't like the style of writing really at all. I know what you were going for, but even the pieces meaning didn't mean much to me. I'm giving this to Harlequin, just more interesting and well written to me, no offense meant to Labour.

[SeQueL]

^^ word I have too agree
Vote= Harlequin


LP's style of writing and wording, dragggedddd on and on with his lines, there was no real feel/flow to it. It was just like reading a book although it was a nice attempt, you need to learn that having vast ammounts of dictionary type wording isnt nessacary ta get your point across.. harle quins was an easy read an easy ta follow through an get into

[Harlequin]

3-2

upping for the last few votes

Harla (ima call you that, we knoe i cant spell my own...)

Harla : nice verse, good that you got op this week. yours wasn't excelently written and if anything a slight step down from that last weeks one but still this was an interesting peice... a bit basic but grabbed my attentions and kept me with it through out. I think your content out shined your writting alot here... theres potential (i know how irritating that is to hear) but youve got the basics down but your writing dont complement it to give it the effect it needs.

Labour : nice verse too. I gotta admit you too didn't come well this week either. Last weeks verse from you was nice. You still kep that same strength in content in this. I liked the topic and your take. exceelent to say the least but it just wasnt as invigerating (sp) as harls...

over all = harl... it was more of who had the more interesting peice, labour took this with writing but harls was simply more appealing. but nby all means nice battle...

[Insanevillian]

This goes to Harlequin...

4-2... and with the votes....

Labor Loses....