45. Methodine 2-1 vs. 46. Street DreamZ 1-1

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[Methodine]

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[Street Dreamz]

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*ghetto*

[Street Dreamz]

it took the pic of the guy lookin through the sky
a quick lil verse cuz i dont got time


Mother: It's time to go to bed sweaty
Son: Not yet..Mommy..I want to know what this picture means
Mother: Which one?
Son: The one where you sea a man in the sky
Mother: Okay but just this lil story

This story is of One who sought for knowleadge in the Universe
Topics were his new curse..
As He gave birth to problems and the Earth was one to solve
Defying all the laws that He had set for himself
He let himself a guest in the world He was so fond about then
Snuck outta bed in secret and stopped the clocks of time
He walked out the Gates and travelled all the way to the Earth's denile
He watched the life of others saw the thunder crack the sky
But Lucifer was watching too and had to call His tribe
He opened up the sky and saw a man right by the sea
And gazed into His eyes...it was almost like a dream
Sirens up at home were ringing..damn his fun was gone
He ran along and got there people asked..
"Where were you mighty One?"
He sent them back to bed but then just there the Angel's from afar..said..
"You are under arrest for breaking sanction 1 of heaven's laws"
Which was no interaction with neutral beings..what He had done was wrong
They threw Him in his own prison..And that's the day they punished God


The End


good luck kid,i know you gonna come with some nice ish..just wish i had more time to work on this but schoo is tops

*ghetto*

[Methodine]

You claim to be imprisoned by earth, but I know otherwise
..cause you act life as normal..while I onlook from other skies
You see you know these as cloud's, but they play important parts
..such as gateway's, openeings and where our world starts
Winter is when your'e watched, throwing snow and giving gifts
..and in the summer your'e playin sports and jumping cliffs
We know you as human's..and your'e existence is the same as our's
..we eat, sleep, drink and have next to nothing in the ways of powers
We're all the same...just exist in different forms of earth
..but have same organs and limbs as each other from birth

This summer's morning, I found myself watching some fools
..through this one lonely cloud, I was still breaking the rules
I caught different views, images and scenery on my orbit trip
..people laughing and cheering..while others need to get a grip
Then the picture came..just a small boy enjoying this hot weather
..the cliff's and ocean's just put this perfect picture all together
My rules broken, but for this image it was worth a tiny peak
..and I think that I got away..with looking at something this unique
The waves rush ashore, and this kid hides away his possessions
..tidly under the sea blanket, with weird and wonderful expressions
I sense a storm coming, I think it's time I turned out the lights
..but I will remember this image..with forever dreaming nights
It wont ever hurt me, ok..I'll just take one last gaping look
..this isn't even imaginable..more like from a fairy book

*Crash - A Bolt Of Lightning Strikes From The Sky*

Child
Aaahh..The sound if thunder is near..I wonder where
..That cloud up their maybe...or maybe him up there

*Kid Is Woken Up By Mother*

What have I told you son...don't play games late at night
..cause you'll have dreams and nightmares that excite or fright

[Omen]

Over NS

[Stiffaz]

hmmm...street's verse was pretty nice with all good conditions but the last line killed me.."The End"...it's not good imho..so i gotta vote for Methodine..both verses seemed aight..but that last line fucked up my vote..

vote = Methodine

[Methodine]

1-0 ^

[MC Greg Braid E]

Methodine got this one in my opinion .. an all round better written verse .. nice storytelling .. good transition .. i liked how he ended it, rounded off the verse well. Street's seemed too basic to me, not really a lot of effort placed in to it and it showed throughout his verse .. It was a pretty one sided battle IMO

Vote Methodine

[A.S.K]

okay battle, methodine brought heat. good verse, nice structure and just kept me more entertained. i thought steet drifted away from the topic totally an right to the end i was just confused, seeing half the time the structuyre was out.

vote-methodine

sorry i cant give a bigger breakdown, but im at school

[Mandarin 2.0]

vote - Mehtodine

I think he just came a lot stronger in this one. His verse just held my attention through the entirety of of. The ending was a good and the verse itself was just overall nicely written. Streets was ok but nothing to special. His verse was lacking and at times my attention was diverted.

[CogzWell]

This was kind of one sided. Methodin brought emotion, imagery, and a well around good verse. His story was a nice read and unfolded well. Streetz was better than he was the past few weeks but his story was just hard for me to get into. I just couldn't get what was going on to well. I was just really feelin Meth's story.

Vote Methodine

[A.n.g.e.l.i.c]

Vote - Methodine

I've never peeped either of 'em so I can't really compare their verses to past verses sooo..

In my opinion, Methodine's story was fairly intresting, meaning it had a decent plot and it seemed to be well thought out. I liked the concept he used, and the way he let it play out. It didn't seem strained or rushed or anything. His flow was on point..

Where as SD'z verse had a choppy flow which made me not be able to get into the story properly. Though his concept was alright, he could have worked on the actual plot a little more.

[TeKneeK]

vote - Meth


Solidified a much more structured and strong-detailed rhyme... had alot more incite and emotional juice to really put this over...

STREET DREAMZ

lil note of helpfulness --- no matter if you did or didnt come strong in your rhyme... NEVER EVER consider that in ur remarks even if u say it was RUSHED blah blah blah..

that already provokes readers to say that "oh i didnt put effort in it" and that alone would already downplay ur verse and not consider 2 much expectation of the upper hand in the match.... --- also --- utilizing a story rhyme wouldn't done good to overcome a verse like METH's....

METH just brought it 2 2 strong and had more commitment to his on top.


end result - METH



9. TekNeeK 31-7 vs. 10. Vern Acular 47-9 - vote.

[Methodine]

thanx ya'll 7-0 ^

[Strike]

meth way more solid put more time inro it and everything..clear cut case

[Street Dreamz]

Originally Posted by TeKneeK

STREET DREAMZ

lil note of helpfulness --- no matter if you did or didnt come strong in your rhyme... NEVER EVER consider that in ur remarks even if u say it was RUSHED blah blah blah..

that already provokes readers to say that "oh i didnt put effort in it" and that alone would already downplay ur verse and not consider 2 much expectation of the upper hand in the match.... --- also --- utilizing a story rhyme wouldn't done good to overcome a verse like METH's....

word i hear ya...but i dropped first and didnt think about how he was gonna drop..i dropped so there can be a battle....and i dont want •••••s on here to react that this just looks like i cant drop a verse cuz i really had no other choice....anyways thanks for the advice tho ima keep it in mind...i signed out and aint gonna be on here until next year so its all good

meth got this one,nice verse kid

proly when ill be back youll still be in here and well get to battle again..next time come better lol

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[Vern Acular]

meth gets this due to plain ol effort...props to street for posting...but i just couldn't get into it...there was nothing but a lot of words throw together IMO...very bland structure...maybe you thought he'd no-show...meth put together a good verse...not one of the best i've seen...it read nicely...but just a word of advice...when you get hire in ranks throw a little more descriptiveness to your verse people like that...paint a better image,,you did ok here...but you coulda done better


vote - meth

[Spy2]

Yea, basically ditto... Meth had a stronger verse, story, flow... if you want me to say mroe I can, but I don't think it'd really benefit anyone... a couple of meth's lines got a little bit long, but nothing to throw a fit over.

Methodine

[TeKneeK]

meth wins