53. Fatal Literature 1-3 vs. 54. Stiffaz 1-2

Omen · 12-15-2003, 10:24 AM

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Stiffaz · 12-16-2003, 01:12 AM

i'm in..gonna win this time...i'm serious about this shit..

Stiffaz · 12-17-2003, 01:13 AM

i can't make some story from that picture..so it's more topical..my minds on white, blank and wrinkly paper...enjoy da read..btw, nice new design of forum..keep goin'...

TOPIC: baby on the hands...

[part one]

life and birth..knife or dirt..what to choose?
wife or skirt..deep shit when u have nohing to lose
nice livin' of course everyone nice with givin'
but you're angry when your kindness glass is riven
things that are beautiful and sparkling like stars
really are freak..not stoppin' and goin' crazy far
so what's the reason why are u livin' on this world?
why u're the same in any season? why not prayin' to Lord?
i know it's rhetorical question u won't answer it
but do u have any suggestion or u just waitin' cancer bitch
flowers of the world, man, our virgin and dear kids
without them it'll be cruel u don't need to furtive hid
from this fact u have to realise that is true
no stupid act..don't hurry..wait for calmness crew

[part two]

what lonely is little soul flying here and there
sad, all red, old and rotten eyes without any tear
what cost of angelic birth if u live only one day
it's worth nothing especially if u take the death way
but they can't choose it's all in mother's hands
such plenty to lose, they can forget a wonderlands
those cloudy castles, those visions, those dreams
those lovely toys, those candies and sweet ice-creams
infinity of merry-makin' and raffish lack of care
but everything disappears with sudden inhuman fear
it isn't terrible when die old people or grown-up
they lived but innocent baby doesn't had his shown up
killing breath is more terrific than slow death
more awful than feral die on big and painful kef
not to see light, not to hear birds, not to smell
but be calm cuz those angels don't goin' to hell

FATAL literature · 12-17-2003, 06:16 AM

i got the joint with the warrior on the horse at the grave yard.

FATAL literature · 12-17-2003, 06:50 AM

together as one, are bond tighter than a passion
rise and set like the sun, so it's much more than an accident
that are paths met, when you sweat i sweat
when you cry then i cry, i already know you expression as i smile torwards the sky
me and you were like two smoking guns, yet they say the good die young
you don' finished your course, thy servant your job is done
you having any fun up there, son i shed so many tears
with you i was invincible, now i seem to see i have fear's
at your funeral it was all sad and dear, for you it was 21 gun salute and three cheers
it's funny how you see life when your lonely, dark and void
life's a bitch when u live it without your homie
a solider, i reminisce on all the lesson u taught me
a long way you brougth me, side by side u fought with me
we was raising up a army, a new meng dynasty
why u had to die and leave me, and go without me
dog what is life after death, if your life is without me
dam dog could it be true, that your phoney too
u was suppose to be my numerator, and i was the denominator
can u answer this, for us to be together, either now or later
now only if you could see me, i though u promise to never leave me

voice say's : and my word is my bond please believe me

Omen · 12-18-2003, 02:24 AM

Over NS

Stiffaz · 12-18-2003, 05:50 AM

VOTES:

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...31#post7973031
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...51#post7973051
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...08#post7978908
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...16#post7978916
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...22#post7978922
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...29#post7978929

Methodine · 12-18-2003, 08:36 AM

both nice verses but i felt fatal didn't come to his full potential...some decent lines were amonst your piece but iv'e seen better from you...stiffaz...same..seen better but still enough to win here...a nice piece...some nice lines and a enjoyeable story

vote=stiffaz

I just enjoyed reading his piece more and felt like he put more effort into it

FATAL literature · 12-18-2003, 09:44 AM

they go here............

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...51#post7973451

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...61#post7973461

MC Greg Braid E · 12-18-2003, 02:05 PM

I thought Fatal did alright .. it was basically the length that let it down, if he'd of carried it on, expanded the piece further and got more indepth with his, i think he could of taken this match up .. but as it was, i felt Stiffaz got this match .. he started off a little shaky, but it picked up as it went on.

Not a bad match up.

Vote:Stiffaz

ErykahCaine · 12-18-2003, 06:13 PM

nice showing from both:

Fatal:
ok..i liked the way you added some gutter shit and mixed it with some ancient medevil times joint..very nice...flow was cool i just feel like it was too simplistic and you broke it down to a point where you couldnt put alot of imagery and content into it...which really took away from the story...but still a cool piece..

Stiffaz:
ok...in the first little stanza i was like WTF? you started off really whack but you brought it back and accelerated ya game in the second stanza...i've read some of your other battles and this was below par for you but it wa cool

overall this was a pretty close battle neither came with anything to special but stiffaz took it with more imagery in his piece

Stiffaz · 12-19-2003, 01:04 AM

3 - 0..nice...good verse FL..i think we can go to the rstl team tag tourney if u want..so what do u think man?

FATAL literature · 12-20-2003, 12:07 AM

cool stiff

A.n.g.e.l.i.c · 12-20-2003, 01:48 AM

Neither of these verses did nothin' special for me, they were both mediocre at best. I see room for improvement in both opponent's.

As far as the verses..
Stiffaz took this shit, barely.

I was jus' feelin' the content of his story more, though he coulda been a little more descriptive and had better imagery & emotion.

FL, the verse was very basic, the idea behind his story was good, but I feel it could of been played out and planned a little better.

Like I said.. both peices lacked the necessary elements to keep a reader intrested, so I basically voted on whose STORY seemed more developed.

Lokternal · 12-20-2003, 04:15 AM

Fatal Literature- Expand more. Very basic, but not so bad was feeling it. You need to get more indepth, focus more and generally put more thought into your writing.

Stiffaz- Was decent like everyone pointed out your first verse was really hurting. In general wasn't that good, but you took this battle. Just felt your verse more and it was more in-depth.

Vote= Stiffaz

dagrinch_15 · 12-20-2003, 05:53 PM

after readin both verses i felt dat Stiffaz was better. By all means they were both good but you can only choose one

Vote - Stiffaz

-1-

TeKneeK · 12-20-2003, 09:30 PM

Stiff wins

12-15-2003, 10:24 AM	#1 (permalink)
Omen O Luh Da Kids Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: IND INC Posts: 21,058	53. Fatal Literature 1-3 vs. 54. Stiffaz 1-2 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST VOTING RULES No beef votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes, Once and Done VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! This week and following we will enforce this rule 4 lines - NO SHOWS 12 lines - MIN 60 lines - MAX Fail to Post URL's all those votes will not count Your Topics are here http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/683737-rstl-topics-post7951990.html if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! NEW RULE: Voting On a No-show Verse does not Count as your vote, Both Competitors must show. Go Forth And Produce __________________ *The Elite* *Starving Artist*

12-16-2003, 01:12 AM	#2 (permalink)
Stiffaz I'm White Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Northern Europe Cave Called Lithuania Posts: 750	i'm in..gonna win this time...i'm serious about this shit.. __________________ R hyme A nd P hilosophy

12-17-2003, 01:13 AM	#3 (permalink)
Stiffaz I'm White Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Northern Europe Cave Called Lithuania Posts: 750	i can't make some story from that picture..so it's more topical..my minds on white, blank and wrinkly paper...enjoy da read..btw, nice new design of forum..keep goin'... TOPIC: baby on the hands... [part one] life and birth..knife or dirt..what to choose? wife or skirt..deep shit when u have nohing to lose nice livin' of course everyone nice with givin' but you're angry when your kindness glass is riven things that are beautiful and sparkling like stars really are freak..not stoppin' and goin' crazy far so what's the reason why are u livin' on this world? why u're the same in any season? why not prayin' to Lord? i know it's rhetorical question u won't answer it but do u have any suggestion or u just waitin' cancer bitch flowers of the world, man, our virgin and dear kids without them it'll be cruel u don't need to furtive hid from this fact u have to realise that is true no stupid act..don't hurry..wait for calmness crew [part two] what lonely is little soul flying here and there sad, all red, old and rotten eyes without any tear what cost of angelic birth if u live only one day it's worth nothing especially if u take the death way but they can't choose it's all in mother's hands such plenty to lose, they can forget a wonderlands those cloudy castles, those visions, those dreams those lovely toys, those candies and sweet ice-creams infinity of merry-makin' and raffish lack of care but everything disappears with sudden inhuman fear it isn't terrible when die old people or grown-up they lived but innocent baby doesn't had his shown up killing breath is more terrific than slow death more awful than feral die on big and painful kef not to see light, not to hear birds, not to smell but be calm cuz those angels don't goin' to hell __________________ R hyme A nd P hilosophy Last edited by Stiffaz; 12-18-2003 at 03:30 AM.

12-17-2003, 06:16 AM	#4 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	i got the joint with the warrior on the horse at the grave yard. __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG

12-17-2003, 06:50 AM	#5 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	together as one, are bond tighter than a passion rise and set like the sun, so it's much more than an accident that are paths met, when you sweat i sweat when you cry then i cry, i already know you expression as i smile torwards the sky me and you were like two smoking guns, yet they say the good die young you don' finished your course, thy servant your job is done you having any fun up there, son i shed so many tears with you i was invincible, now i seem to see i have fear's at your funeral it was all sad and dear, for you it was 21 gun salute and three cheers it's funny how you see life when your lonely, dark and void life's a bitch when u live it without your homie a solider, i reminisce on all the lesson u taught me a long way you brougth me, side by side u fought with me we was raising up a army, a new meng dynasty why u had to die and leave me, and go without me dog what is life after death, if your life is without me dam dog could it be true, that your phoney too u was suppose to be my numerator, and i was the denominator can u answer this, for us to be together, either now or later now only if you could see me, i though u promise to never leave me voice say's : and my word is my bond please believe me __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG

12-18-2003, 02:24 AM	#6 (permalink)
Omen O Luh Da Kids Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: IND INC Posts: 21,058	Over NS __________________ *The Elite* *Starving Artist*

12-18-2003, 05:50 AM	#7 (permalink)
Stiffaz I'm White Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Northern Europe Cave Called Lithuania Posts: 750	VOTES: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...31#post7973031 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...51#post7973051 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...08#post7978908 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...16#post7978916 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...22#post7978922 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...29#post7978929 __________________ R hyme A nd P hilosophy Last edited by Stiffaz; 12-19-2003 at 12:59 AM.

12-18-2003, 08:36 AM	#8 (permalink)
Methodine Registered User Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Uk Posts: 362	both nice verses but i felt fatal didn't come to his full potential...some decent lines were amonst your piece but iv'e seen better from you...stiffaz...same..seen better but still enough to win here...a nice piece...some nice lines and a enjoyeable story vote=stiffaz I just enjoyed reading his piece more and felt like he put more effort into it __________________ Logical

12-18-2003, 09:44 AM	#9 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	they go here............ http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...51#post7973451 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...61#post7973461 __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG Last edited by FATAL literature; 12-18-2003 at 09:47 AM. Reason: votes

12-18-2003, 02:05 PM	#10 (permalink)
MC Greg Braid E Baron Mynd Join Date: Jan 2002 Posts: 687	I thought Fatal did alright .. it was basically the length that let it down, if he'd of carried it on, expanded the piece further and got more indepth with his, i think he could of taken this match up .. but as it was, i felt Stiffaz got this match .. he started off a little shaky, but it picked up as it went on. Not a bad match up. Vote:Stiffaz __________________ Urban Legends · Eyedill · Defcon_5 · Vern Acular · Mc XxL · Booga · · Verb · Tri Optix · Imperial · Cryogen · Baron Mynd · MFB · · Omnific · IgloS · Formal Logic · Adema · Wise Punchlines · Crew Battle Record: 4-1 Last edited by MC Greg Braid E; 12-18-2003 at 02:06 PM.

12-18-2003, 06:13 PM	#11 (permalink)
ErykahCaine Black Hand Bittcchhhess!! Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Cali Posts: 1,042	nice showing from both: Fatal: ok..i liked the way you added some gutter shit and mixed it with some ancient medevil times joint..very nice...flow was cool i just feel like it was too simplistic and you broke it down to a point where you couldnt put alot of imagery and content into it...which really took away from the story...but still a cool piece.. Stiffaz: ok...in the first little stanza i was like WTF? you started off really whack but you brought it back and accelerated ya game in the second stanza...i've read some of your other battles and this was below par for you but it wa cool overall this was a pretty close battle neither came with anything to special but stiffaz took it with more imagery in his piece

12-19-2003, 01:04 AM	#12 (permalink)
Stiffaz I'm White Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Northern Europe Cave Called Lithuania Posts: 750	3 - 0..nice...good verse FL..i think we can go to the rstl team tag tourney if u want..so what do u think man? __________________ R hyme A nd P hilosophy

12-20-2003, 12:07 AM	#13 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	cool stiff __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG

12-20-2003, 01:48 AM	#14 (permalink)
A.n.g.e.l.i.c cash-flow. Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: 313. Posts: 11,807	Neither of these verses did nothin' special for me, they were both mediocre at best. I see room for improvement in both opponent's. As far as the verses.. Stiffaz took this shit, barely. I was jus' feelin' the content of his story more, though he coulda been a little more descriptive and had better imagery & emotion. FL, the verse was very basic, the idea behind his story was good, but I feel it could of been played out and planned a little better. Like I said.. both peices lacked the necessary elements to keep a reader intrested, so I basically voted on whose STORY seemed more developed. __________________ Bum ass niggas need to step their game up, cus I'm the bitch your connect gets his work from.

12-20-2003, 04:15 AM	#15 (permalink)
Lokternal Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: On a Boat in the middle of Alaska frozen to the ice looking at polar bears who are really horny and want to fuck penguins and eskimos and also ice sculptures Posts: 577	Fatal Literature- Expand more. Very basic, but not so bad was feeling it. You need to get more indepth, focus more and generally put more thought into your writing. Stiffaz- Was decent like everyone pointed out your first verse was really hurting. In general wasn't that good, but you took this battle. Just felt your verse more and it was more in-depth. Vote= Stiffaz

12-20-2003, 09:30 PM	#17 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	Stiff wins

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12-20-2003, 05:53 PM	#16 (permalink)
dagrinch_15 Registered User Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: T-dot Posts: 7	after readin both verses i felt dat Stiffaz was better. By all means they were both good but you can only choose one Vote - Stiffaz -1-

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