49. Spartoz [4R] 1-1 vs. 50. FATAL Literature 1-2

Omen · 12-07-2003, 02:21 AM

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Spart0z[4R] · 12-07-2003, 11:15 AM

The name is Spartz.. I'll edit this for votes

--> topic: Wisdom's ghost topic

votes:
29. Magic Johnson 3-0 vs. 30. Stayt of Mynd 3-0

Spart0z[4R] · 12-08-2003, 04:38 PM

Can you believe it...
My former fatality granted me immortality
With that, the power to challenge these mad at me
The strike of their item, made out of metal
Makes me want to fight them, left business unsettled
I don't need tools made of iron, only need to find them
I'll have 'em sightless like blind men-
and bite 'em like pythons.. Crying like sirens-
I drifted into their place of residence
It's time for me to pay back their 'benevolence'
"Thank you for killing me, did me a real favour
Even considered my life good enough to pay for
But still you killed me" wrote that on a paper
Slid the paper I wrote, into one of their coats
Watched the other choke on razors in his throat
Haunted the third guy's bedroom, his restin' seized
Desperately commited suicide, now he rests in peace
Wrote 'murder' on walls, made the contours black
And the inside red, increased the fright he had
He put on his jacket and ran out into the rain
Think he got the message, cuz I can feel his pain
Read what was in his pocket, eyes turnin' in sockets
Now he's just like a toddler, he wants his mother!
Get ready for slaughter, the butchered becomes butcher
He gunned at the current hunter.. But I'll fuckin' put ya-
in more pain than a burning train going through ya brain
droppin' acid at every cell it passes, fuck it, I'm too insane
His limbs slowly get torn off, his nose just falls off
leave him to rot 'till his body gets hauled off
Got my vengeance... and hopefully
I gave them repentance, now I'll go to sleep

R.I.P. Patrick Swayze
You've been reading 'Ghost: the immoral version', based on the movie 'Ghost' :D

FATAL literature · 12-08-2003, 09:16 PM

Wisdom
You are a ghost, one who died before his time. You come back to finish unsettled business. What does u do? What are your actions..etc

hit it up 2morrow that's what's up

nice spartz

FATAL literature · 12-09-2003, 02:54 AM

didn't know'em all like that, but i still called him my man
reminded me a lot of myself, broke and couldn't give a dam
street's we ran, from dusk til dawn
we both felt like kings surrounded by a realm of pawns
and who woulda thought
bitch feelings woulda got caught, when in the mist money was brought
it was a lesson taught
see i had the most planned thought out scheme
and u know i had to have my man spartoz on my team
the hiest went perfect, like magic the way me and him worked it
but back at the pad is when the green fien surfaced
had to ask " spart u aight, u seem to be acting nervous"?.
he say's " yeah i'm cool, dog how bout you",?
and as i looked up to respond i saw the flash of his tool.......

O IT AIN'T OVER

let the truth be told hoe, thugs don't die
in flesh or in death, forever we ride
see if i wasn't a niccuh
they wouldn't of closed the case as gang related or suicide
see when alive i was doctor jekyl, that died into mr. hyde
living in the world between life and death, i'm immortal
and i just can't rest in peace until i murk you
driving around in his big fancy car
living straight hood rich like he was a ghetto fabulous superstar
but ah ha, just when u thought shit was kosher
the streets get the talking, u on one of life's rollercoaster's
cuz what goes up must come down
and the ride doesn't stop til u 6 ft deep underground
as the time goes by you puffing more and more lye
stress getting the best of you alone you start to cry
wake up in the bed with your chick in cold sweats
cuz your dreams turns to nightmare's, when u close your eyes and i'm there
now your conscience getting to you, and your going to church
but you can't even stand it there, cuz the truth hurts
leaving cursing the preacher out, on your way home
mad cuz it seems like he was directing everything he was saying to u
throwing stone's
now u in the crib all fucked up in the game
my case reopened, and your the only witness named
and u know witness turns to suspect real quick
the hood is watching, the street's is talking
you scream 'life's a bitch"
now you drinking heavy, and your nerve's are unsteady
you hear "it's time to go home, are u ready",?
spart : who's there
FL : who you think, the god of course, heard you say life's a bitch well i'm your lawyer for the divorce
spart : what do u mean stop playing

then in your house you notice bodies laying
spart : ma....boo.... o my god this can't be true
fl : yeah niccuh it's your time and there both waiting for you

you pull out your cannon and start shooting everywhere
after you emptied and reload you noticed ain't nobody really there
start crying saying that this shit ain't fare
then i see your hope's and your faith crushed now u taken over by dispare

fl : are you prepared, for a better place everyone's there , just squeeze your shit, and you'll be right there

you look up crying and i reveal myself
you think you going crazy and silently, ask for help
i look smile and point at my temple
i see u pinch yourself thinking that it can't be that simple
your thought's totally fucked up between reality and dream
confused on what to do, so all you do, is just laugh
put the desert to your head and pull back and blast..........

return of the makaveli

Methodine · 12-09-2003, 01:05 PM

ok...i dont wanna be harsh but i felt somone took this easily...fatal...ok verse...not a great use of vocab..you expressed what you felt well but didn't write it extremly well...it flowed pretty good but wasn't the most interesting piece and for the length of it you need to make it alot more interesting...spartz...nice...ok use of vocab but flow was dope...nice short lines but to the point...expressed your ideas well and had a very interesting verse...not too long either...ehm..

vote=spartz

i enjoyed reading his verse alot more and it looked to me as he put in alot more effort than fatal...ive seen better from you...but props for showin up...pz

Street Dreamz · 12-09-2003, 03:01 PM

^^î feel the same as meth

i really enjoyed readin spartz verse more i dunno..both styles were different and spartoz verse struck me more

sometimes i felt that both of you wrote it and the flow didnt follow.

spart took the wordplay and vocabulary part also

i think that fatal shouldve put in a bit more into it..it was ok but we can cleary see that both styles were diff and i was feeling spart.

vote=spartoz

*ghetto*

Omen · 12-11-2003, 02:17 AM

Over NS

Spart0z[4R] · 12-11-2003, 03:49 PM

This isn't a no-show...

TeKneeK · 12-11-2003, 11:59 PM

Im gonna say that fATAL's verse was confusing... im sorry it had me lost.. ur structure is off.. the syncopation is off... the rhyme strength was good at points and then lacked.. the storyline lost me.... i dont know if u were tryin to combinate ur lines or to rhyme in a rather unique way... but i jus couldnt ttouch grasp of it... and felt that 3x reading... it made some sort of sense of the story.....

SPARTOZ- some of ur lines were 2 short and some meaning to ur topic was a bit confused.. however.. the story led thru and the overall depiction was set nicely... the structure jus was uneven in readability... but still.. it came out thorough..

vote: SPARTOZ

peep my match dogg: ChampionShip: 1. Author NYSE 21-1 vs. 2. TekNeeK 31-6

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A.S.K · 12-12-2003, 04:42 AM

over NS just means that this match is over the no shows, prority wise

okay....this was an okay battle, both can work on flow and wording and all. spartz, this was a nice piece but it all seemed a bit simple to me. vocab was nicely used but just dull and flow was off at times. first 4 lines were nicest in there, just work from there in the future. fatals verse was damn long and i had to reread the ending again to refresh my memory cos it was that long..... nice vocab and the imagery was nice as well. just a bit off in flow at times, but overall a nice verse

vote-fatal

retunr the favour---top 40 battles, wise punchlines vs rapter2k

peace

Lokternal · 12-12-2003, 04:50 AM

Spartoz: Your verse was okay, the flow was real off though. The overall story wasnt too bad, but didnt reall capture me much at all. Still put in a pretty good effort.

Fatal Literature: Where to start. You had some alright stuff in here, and I think if you organized it more it would work out better. The story was so up, and down I really couldn't get into it. I think if you focused more and tried to be more direct with your story you'd get better results. Pretty good showing this week

Vote= Spartoz

You took it because I liked your story better, and had a better flow.

6th_plague · 12-12-2003, 06:02 AM

Spartz got this, he had a good writers perspective, came correct with the vocab, seemed a bit unfinished in places but still a nice interesting read...

Fatal, you still improving man but i just felt his a bit more, it was more the wa he took the topic into more depth and was more interesting to read

good battle pz

FATAL literature · 12-12-2003, 09:57 PM

yeah your boy fatal gon' work on his length ima get a hold to this topic batte sooner or later, big ups to spartz and i'll hit up all these votes b4 deadline.

X sample · 12-12-2003, 11:20 PM

hmm, close IMO

spatoz - decent verse, cool ending i guess
imagery and description were lacking in places, but u got ya story across...it was kinda boring to me though..

fatal - coo verse...u had a wacko rhyme scheme, but your imagery was better then spartoz'
i liked your story better to, though it was to long...
decent shit though

vote = fatal

sorry for the brief votes im real busy

Spart0z[4R] · 12-13-2003, 01:02 PM

Not gonna make the deadline probably... But I'll try.

TeKneeK · 12-13-2003, 09:53 PM

Spartoz wins

12-07-2003, 02:21 AM	#1 (permalink)
Omen O Luh Da Kids Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: IND INC Posts: 21,058	49. Spartoz [4R] 1-1 vs. 50. FATAL Literature 1-2 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST VOTING RULES No beef votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes, Once and Done VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! This week and following we will enforce this rule 4 lines - NO SHOWS 12 lines - MIN 60 lines - MAX Fail to Post URL's all those votes will not count Your Topics are here RSTL Topics !!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! NEW RULE: Voting On a No-show Verse does not Count as your vote, Both Competitors must show. Go Forth And Produce __________________ *The Elite* *Starving Artist*

12-07-2003, 11:15 AM	#2 (permalink)
Spart0z[4R] shower to the people Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Utrecht, Holland Posts: 185	The name is Spartz.. I'll edit this for votes --> topic: Wisdom's ghost topic votes: 29. Magic Johnson 3-0 vs. 30. Stayt of Mynd 3-0 __________________ ---Ravenous Angels--- "Shujo muhen seigando bonno mujin seigandan Homon muryo seigangaku butsudon mujo seiganjo" Last edited by Spart0z[4R] on yo momma's birthday, bitch! Last edited by Spart0z[4R]; 12-10-2003 at 04:21 PM.

12-08-2003, 04:38 PM	#3 (permalink)
Spart0z[4R] shower to the people Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Utrecht, Holland Posts: 185	topic = ghost with unfinished business Can you believe it... My former fatality granted me immortality With that, the power to challenge these mad at me The strike of their item, made out of metal Makes me want to fight them, left business unsettled I don't need tools made of iron, only need to find them I'll have 'em sightless like blind men- and bite 'em like pythons.. Crying like sirens- I drifted into their place of residence It's time for me to pay back their 'benevolence' "Thank you for killing me, did me a real favour Even considered my life good enough to pay for But still you killed me" wrote that on a paper Slid the paper I wrote, into one of their coats Watched the other choke on razors in his throat Haunted the third guy's bedroom, his restin' seized Desperately commited suicide, now he rests in peace Wrote 'murder' on walls, made the contours black And the inside red, increased the fright he had He put on his jacket and ran out into the rain Think he got the message, cuz I can feel his pain Read what was in his pocket, eyes turnin' in sockets Now he's just like a toddler, he wants his mother! Get ready for slaughter, the butchered becomes butcher He gunned at the current hunter.. But I'll fuckin' put ya- in more pain than a burning train going through ya brain droppin' acid at every cell it passes, fuck it, I'm too insane His limbs slowly get torn off, his nose just falls off leave him to rot 'till his body gets hauled off Got my vengeance... and hopefully I gave them repentance, now I'll go to sleep R.I.P. Patrick Swayze You've been reading 'Ghost: the immoral version', based on the movie 'Ghost' :D __________________ ---Ravenous Angels--- "Shujo muhen seigando bonno mujin seigandan Homon muryo seigangaku butsudon mujo seiganjo" Last edited by Spart0z[4R] on yo momma's birthday, bitch!

12-08-2003, 09:16 PM	#4 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	Wisdom You are a ghost, one who died before his time. You come back to finish unsettled business. What does u do? What are your actions..etc hit it up 2morrow that's what's up nice spartz __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG

12-09-2003, 02:54 AM	#5 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	didn't know'em all like that, but i still called him my man reminded me a lot of myself, broke and couldn't give a dam street's we ran, from dusk til dawn we both felt like kings surrounded by a realm of pawns and who woulda thought bitch feelings woulda got caught, when in the mist money was brought it was a lesson taught see i had the most planned thought out scheme and u know i had to have my man spartoz on my team the hiest went perfect, like magic the way me and him worked it but back at the pad is when the green fien surfaced had to ask " spart u aight, u seem to be acting nervous"?. he say's " yeah i'm cool, dog how bout you",? and as i looked up to respond i saw the flash of his tool....... O IT AIN'T OVER let the truth be told hoe, thugs don't die in flesh or in death, forever we ride see if i wasn't a niccuh they wouldn't of closed the case as gang related or suicide see when alive i was doctor jekyl, that died into mr. hyde living in the world between life and death, i'm immortal and i just can't rest in peace until i murk you driving around in his big fancy car living straight hood rich like he was a ghetto fabulous superstar but ah ha, just when u thought shit was kosher the streets get the talking, u on one of life's rollercoaster's cuz what goes up must come down and the ride doesn't stop til u 6 ft deep underground as the time goes by you puffing more and more lye stress getting the best of you alone you start to cry wake up in the bed with your chick in cold sweats cuz your dreams turns to nightmare's, when u close your eyes and i'm there now your conscience getting to you, and your going to church but you can't even stand it there, cuz the truth hurts leaving cursing the preacher out, on your way home mad cuz it seems like he was directing everything he was saying to u throwing stone's now u in the crib all fucked up in the game my case reopened, and your the only witness named and u know witness turns to suspect real quick the hood is watching, the street's is talking you scream 'life's a bitch" now you drinking heavy, and your nerve's are unsteady you hear "it's time to go home, are u ready",? spart : who's there FL : who you think, the god of course, heard you say life's a bitch well i'm your lawyer for the divorce spart : what do u mean stop playing then in your house you notice bodies laying spart : ma....boo.... o my god this can't be true fl : yeah niccuh it's your time and there both waiting for you you pull out your cannon and start shooting everywhere after you emptied and reload you noticed ain't nobody really there start crying saying that this shit ain't fare then i see your hope's and your faith crushed now u taken over by dispare fl : are you prepared, for a better place everyone's there , just squeeze your shit, and you'll be right there you look up crying and i reveal myself you think you going crazy and silently, ask for help i look smile and point at my temple i see u pinch yourself thinking that it can't be that simple your thought's totally fucked up between reality and dream confused on what to do, so all you do, is just laugh put the desert to your head and pull back and blast.......... return of the makaveli __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG

12-09-2003, 01:05 PM	#6 (permalink)
Methodine Registered User Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Uk Posts: 362	ok...i dont wanna be harsh but i felt somone took this easily...fatal...ok verse...not a great use of vocab..you expressed what you felt well but didn't write it extremly well...it flowed pretty good but wasn't the most interesting piece and for the length of it you need to make it alot more interesting...spartz...nice...ok use of vocab but flow was dope...nice short lines but to the point...expressed your ideas well and had a very interesting verse...not too long either...ehm.. vote=spartz i enjoyed reading his verse alot more and it looked to me as he put in alot more effort than fatal...ive seen better from you...but props for showin up...pz __________________ Logical

12-09-2003, 03:01 PM	#7 (permalink)
Street Dreamz the future Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: where shit pops off Posts: 211	^^î feel the same as meth i really enjoyed readin spartz verse more i dunno..both styles were different and spartoz verse struck me more sometimes i felt that both of you wrote it and the flow didnt follow. spart took the wordplay and vocabulary part also i think that fatal shouldve put in a bit more into it..it was ok but we can cleary see that both styles were diff and i was feeling spart. vote=spartoz ghetto __________________ tha future

12-11-2003, 02:17 AM	#8 (permalink)
Omen O Luh Da Kids Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: IND INC Posts: 21,058	Over NS __________________ *The Elite* *Starving Artist*

12-11-2003, 03:49 PM	#9 (permalink)
Spart0z[4R] shower to the people Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Utrecht, Holland Posts: 185	This isn't a no-show... __________________ ---Ravenous Angels--- "Shujo muhen seigando bonno mujin seigandan Homon muryo seigangaku butsudon mujo seiganjo" Last edited by Spart0z[4R] on yo momma's birthday, bitch!

12-11-2003, 11:59 PM	#10 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	Im gonna say that fATAL's verse was confusing... im sorry it had me lost.. ur structure is off.. the syncopation is off... the rhyme strength was good at points and then lacked.. the storyline lost me.... i dont know if u were tryin to combinate ur lines or to rhyme in a rather unique way... but i jus couldnt ttouch grasp of it... and felt that 3x reading... it made some sort of sense of the story..... SPARTOZ- some of ur lines were 2 short and some meaning to ur topic was a bit confused.. however.. the story led thru and the overall depiction was set nicely... the structure jus was uneven in readability... but still.. it came out thorough.. vote: SPARTOZ peep my match dogg: ChampionShip: 1. Author NYSE 21-1 vs. 2. TekNeeK 31-6 1. __________________ .......................

12-12-2003, 04:42 AM	#11 (permalink)
A.S.K ... Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Some University, UK Posts: 5,003	over NS just means that this match is over the no shows, prority wise okay....this was an okay battle, both can work on flow and wording and all. spartz, this was a nice piece but it all seemed a bit simple to me. vocab was nicely used but just dull and flow was off at times. first 4 lines were nicest in there, just work from there in the future. fatals verse was damn long and i had to reread the ending again to refresh my memory cos it was that long..... nice vocab and the imagery was nice as well. just a bit off in flow at times, but overall a nice verse vote-fatal retunr the favour---top 40 battles, wise punchlines vs rapter2k peace __________________ For years in Europe, Christianity was law so how many deaths were caused in the name of Our Lord Sense would tell me it aint the words on the pages but the interpretation of it that fuelled the crusaders

12-12-2003, 04:50 AM	#12 (permalink)
Lokternal Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: On a Boat in the middle of Alaska frozen to the ice looking at polar bears who are really horny and want to fuck penguins and eskimos and also ice sculptures Posts: 577	Spartoz: Your verse was okay, the flow was real off though. The overall story wasnt too bad, but didnt reall capture me much at all. Still put in a pretty good effort. Fatal Literature: Where to start. You had some alright stuff in here, and I think if you organized it more it would work out better. The story was so up, and down I really couldn't get into it. I think if you focused more and tried to be more direct with your story you'd get better results. Pretty good showing this week Vote= Spartoz You took it because I liked your story better, and had a better flow.

12-12-2003, 06:02 AM	#13 (permalink)
6th_plague More then meets the eye Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: Georgia Posts: 26,465	Spartz got this, he had a good writers perspective, came correct with the vocab, seemed a bit unfinished in places but still a nice interesting read... Fatal, you still improving man but i just felt his a bit more, it was more the wa he took the topic into more depth and was more interesting to read good battle pz __________________ Fortune 5 Hunned - Behind the Smoke and Mirrors May 2007 are you ready? New Single -Hi Haters

12-12-2003, 09:57 PM	#14 (permalink)
FATAL literature NEW AGE HITCHC*CK Join Date: Jul 2000 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 529	yeah your boy fatal gon' work on his length ima get a hold to this topic batte sooner or later, big ups to spartz and i'll hit up all these votes b4 deadline. __________________ now the years new, i lay my game flat, i want my spot back take 2. MUTHA FUCKA'S mad cuz i blew niggaz envious to many niggaz on my dick shit's strenuos, when my man bust you just move with suck stamina, slugz missed ya. i ain't mad at ya - BIG

12-12-2003, 11:20 PM	#15 (permalink)
X sample watch me shine Join Date: May 2003 Location: in yo sisters bed Posts: 11,367	hmm, close IMO spatoz - decent verse, cool ending i guess imagery and description were lacking in places, but u got ya story across...it was kinda boring to me though.. fatal - coo verse...u had a wacko rhyme scheme, but your imagery was better then spartoz' i liked your story better to, though it was to long... decent shit though vote = fatal sorry for the brief votes im real busy __________________ http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...?bandID=104229 "Only Mike puts up numbers like these, and hes no longer playin'.. but, neither am i" - Joe Budden

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12-13-2003, 01:02 PM	#16 (permalink)
Spart0z[4R] shower to the people Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Utrecht, Holland Posts: 185	Not gonna make the deadline probably... But I'll try. __________________ ---Ravenous Angels--- "Shujo muhen seigando bonno mujin seigandan Homon muryo seigangaku butsudon mujo seiganjo" Last edited by Spart0z[4R] on yo momma's birthday, bitch!

12-13-2003, 09:53 PM	#17 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	Spartoz wins __________________ .......................

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