The RSTL FINAL 4: Dahlohner VS L-Dogg

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Old 09-24-2003, 12:19 AM   #1 (permalink)
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The RSTL FINAL 4: Dahlohner VS L-Dogg





DAHLOHNER



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THE FINAL 4 IS HERE!





WHICH WILL MAKE IT TO THE CHAMPIONSHIP?
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Old 09-24-2003, 01:37 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Ok then.

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Damn I didn't even get to vote this week, work and school are kicking my ass. So go ahead and take the prerequisite three votes away from me.


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A Conversation With God

The Man...

why do you do this... hide and influence
above the blue sky an make me highly influenced
catch an arrow from cupid.. an have a marriage then ruin it
can I pass your white gates or do you care that I’m stupid
what is religion... can a slut be forgiven
so she can make food while you stair at her butt in the kitchen
I’m in love but I’m missin... the hugs an the kissin
do I get the cold shoulder because I wouldn’t listen
what’s with a nice ride... to get highs when I ride by
or to get swat like Colin Farrell for thinking I’m fly
does life even matter... is there something there after
or was I reading lies from the bible chapter to chapter
some cry or bring laughter... some die in disasters
should I believe in you too and rely on my master
or forget about that... an start attacking a flask
so I can get all crunk an start unmasking my task
is it good, a companion... can chicks live with a man when
there 2nd to the money and all the shit that can happen
I’m loving this life god... determined to fight odds
even if I gotta use a little help from a tripod
the devil isn’t my prob...I let him go when I write songs
wrong or right the drive for life more clear with the lights on
was the world meant to be strange... program cents in our brains
the hand with sense gets restrained, to handle life as it change
how about over population or hate on land not near our nation
was our 51 states a mistake an will they break in an invasion
stakes to hi to be taken... grow an continue to jump
slow mo ya mind when its stuck.. and the winning is slumped
see, I have advice...people are even glad I’m nice
I do this all so you will greet me in the afterlife


The God...

well..to answer your question I’m a lot like a weapon
people have the wrong idea I’m in your head for protection
in all of your blessings...apart of all of your sorrow
I be teaching all these lessons so that your seein tomorrow
it doesn’t matter your race... an you don’t want me to start
do you really think I wouldn’t let you pass for not being smart
religions a message...an see, sluts are neglected
people fuck the pussy all the time but I’m the only to bless it
don’t mess with me kid... its not I care that u asked
I’m only human since I made em, what, I cant stair at an ass
as for the next question stop... u deserved to be socked
wouldn’t u be pissed too if she ditched ya thoughts when you talked
nice cars like mustangs... are so things are material
kids who don’t want to look good are full of more bull then your cereal
the secret about the bible... don’t deserve getting out
pretend its all made up to help the church bring in clout
you should believe in me if u think I’m in control of your fate
or else when ya come to stand in line ill be closing the gates
don’t be attacking no flasks.. the alcohol will react
no leaves with your fall.. just a bruise an collapse
if your after the money... leave the hunnies for hero's
an stay a lonely man who gamble his life away at casinos
and yes things can be odd but I’m doin my job this way
when I pulled my hand back u took life as it came, it wasn’t restrained
an to hell with population rise.. there’s ways to make them die
put your guns down, start poppin Satan while your saying goodbye
as for the hate for your country.. the problem is soon solved
from fatsos by the name of A-Bomb, USA’s future doom resolved
so save all your kindness, dream of heaven.. wait to see it
believe in guiding blindness, and soon you will be greeted...thats all that's needed...
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We had no line limits for these battles?? nice..

19. 1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide

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1946

My momma always said she had a sickness, this bitch,
My momma's mistress, worked her like a slave, whipless
Ever since momma witnessed my daddy's lynching
Miss White was a hindrance to all the pinching
From the white men, who said Mom's a "fine nig*er factory"
I listened to her denounce future kids after me
Asking me to ignore the horrible stories
That came up before the war of the Forties
Poorly told, my momma scolding Sam and them
She reminded me that dad was A MAN in Ten
But that supposedly Miss White attacked him
Drove him mad with lusty animal passion

So I gave em sass when they said I'm next in line
Ain't no girl gonna kill me,...but, with sex in mind
I find myself bored with the girls from church
And attracted to the denied world from birth
But I kept it in the closet like a good pair of shoes
Cuz it's far from holy and it wears the blues
and blacks of bruises shared, but i'm scared to lose
Control of emotions, hoping this explosive Dynamite
Loses its bite and turns to dust, I'm a tight
Bundle of nerves when Miss White bunches her purse
Under voluptous milky white breasts and a terse
frown followed by a wicked grin glow on her face
When she catches my glances, cuz she knows that I hate
And need her at the same time to affirm my manhood
Take her, Make her MINE till she LIKEs it cuz I'm damn good

Didn't think my chance would arrive so soon
OUr home was raided by a mob of loons
Raving and razing, claiming that my momma was a thief
Blatently taking at least three appliances a piece
Per week, they screamed this while they raided the home
They "found" so much, no way she'd take it alone
So of course I was blamed and taken to Miss White
For a private conference to discuss why I tried
To break the sacred trust, cuz my nig*erish ways
Led me astray from the Christian trail she blazed
Sat in her room, she soon revealed her tru agenda

"Listen..you think my body's soft and tender"
She sent a hand across my lap and whispered
"I'll make your dreams come true" I bent and kissed her
I wish that I could burn my lips off since then
Cuz she made me a devilish offer, "Listen..
I'll let ya momma keep working in peace
If you let me get a piece of that dick that I need.."
How could I refuse? She was granting my wishes
So I shared her bed, her kisses, her lips, delicious
Her tits and skin soft like silk and plush
Like making love to pillows and milk and such...

Until the door busts and in barge the mob
Just in time for me to discharge my cock
She goes from love nibbles to screams in split seconds
I'm hit with weapons, dragged in a field with flames
To be lynched, like Father like Son, sealed with blame
And as I'm pinned to the pinnacle of splintery posts
Her faint smile haunts me like a wintry ghost..



*Back then, it was suicide to sleep with a white woman*

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damn....both emcees came nice

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I felt this cause i wrote to tha same topic...u did this well....nice structure but the story i didnt reall enjoy...

Dah came all out nice...all around ur flow and concept was hittin....luved this verse right hea...

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K well im going to drop the reply as im reading..quoting things from each story..etc..so as a start off

L-Dogg:

catch an arrow from cupid.. an have a marriage then ruin it
can I pass your white gates or do you care that I’m stupid
what is religion... can a slut be forgiven
so she can make food while you stair at her butt in the kitchen

this whole start off was really nice...nice way to inch urself into the story..props on that..

does life even matter... is there something there after
or was I reading lies from the bible chapter to chapter
some cry or bring laughter... some die in disasters
should I believe in you too and rely on my master

can relate to that whole part of that...who is to say the bible is all the truth..ya know..nice way to put some thoughts into peoples heads..

how about over population or hate on land not near our nation
was our 51 states a mistake an will they break in an invasion

very true...

well..to answer your question I’m a lot like a weapon
people have the wrong idea I’m in your head for protection
in all of your blessings...apart of all of your sorrow
I be teaching all these lessons so that your seein tomorrow

story is getting better and better throughout..feeling that a lot..

the secret about the bible... don’t deserve getting out
pretend its all made up to help the church bring in clout
you should believe in me if u think I’m in control of your fate
or else when ya come to stand in line ill be closing the gates

damn dropping some knowledge right here...dope shit right there as well..

if your after the money... leave the hunnies for hero's
an stay a lonely man who gamble his life away at casinos
and yes things can be odd but I’m doin my job this way
when I pulled my hand back u took life as it came, it wasn’t restrained
an to hell with population rise.. there’s ways to make them die
put your guns down, start poppin Satan while your saying goodbye

dope story man..this whole verse had a lot of quoteables..stuck to the topic, dropped with some heat this round..flow was on point definalty..sick verse..

on to Dahlohner..i hope i dont get booted after this damn reply lol..shit will fucking suck..

Dahlohner:

My momma always said she had a sickness, this bitch,
My momma's mistress, worked her like a slave, whipless
Ever since momma witnessed my daddy's lynching
Miss White was a hindrance to all the pinching


that flow right there was damn flawless..sick

But I kept it in the closet like a good pair of shoes
Cuz it's far from holy and it wears the blues
and blacks of bruises shared, but i'm scared to lose
Control of emotions, hoping this explosive Dynamite
Loses its bite and turns to dust, I'm a tight
Bundle of nerves when Miss White bunches her purse
Under voluptous milky white breasts and a terse

god damn..that was also flawless..this content is sick as fuck so far..

Listen..you think my body's soft and tender"
She sent a hand across my lap and whispered
"I'll make your dreams come true" I bent and kissed her
I wish that I could burn my lips off since then

That buring ur lips off was extremly nice..good content right there...vivid..

that ending was just dope..the whole story was written so well..great concept..

this was prolly the best battle i have seen so far..

I felt that ldogg came out with the better verse this week..well structred and well written..overall this battle was off the chain..and this is the most indepth ill go on a vote lol..took me like 25mins to do all this and read thru it all...so yeah...

vote = ldogg


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THIS is what i mean when i say DahLohner is dope.
i loved this whole verse
you developed it well
and the ending was just dope
it had every element
and was just a great story.

L-Dogg went with the topical side of things
really, it was a good verse
a lot of talent shown in writing
but i am not sure the whole concept was good enough to beat Lohner's
it was a very nice verse though
flow was great throughout and you hit a lot of key points
just not quite enough
some really witty wordplay might have won this but for now.

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yeah, I'm a have to go with Dahloner too. I liked his piece and his take on the idea of "suicide." Cause that's basically what it was back then. I liked his flow a lil' better than L's. Although L had a cool verse too (I really liked the question answer aspect) it was relatively simple: ask questions, answer questions. No real truth was discovered or uncovered.

Dahloner's verse was a little "deeper." And I liked how he flipped his concept, so I'm going with him.

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good shit loner.. congradulations.. but dont u gotta post your 6 url's or else ya get a 3 vote subtraction? making it 1-0 me... an seeing how deadline is over.... that makes me the weener?
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