23. HighpawTheCyst 1-0 Vs 24. Desenuts 7-4

Nebz · 09-24-2003, 12:06 AM

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HighPawTheCyst · 09-24-2003, 10:04 AM

checkmate

Desenut§ · 09-24-2003, 10:58 AM

check-bloke! and good luck..

HighPawTheCyst · 09-24-2003, 01:23 PM

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HighPawTheCyst · 09-24-2003, 04:16 PM

15. Apartheid

It's 1968 in August, my name's Jason Hodges
and im a victim to the hate an many racial comments
it's everyday the harsh reality decays my conscience
so i state a promise to myself that i'll remain as calm as
i can, but i cant if im in a state of wrong it's
like the pain's a false display of art opague to make me vomit
see the base of honesty is based upon the ways we draw it
but the rage is falling at a rate unwanted fate's uncomplished
i sit and wait but politics pollute our mind with laws
and since im african american then i apply to all
see im quite alive but flaws are what the whites have tried to toss
cause in there eyes we're not equivalent and put our lives on pause
to live deprives us all, but i believe that peace will levatate
and then decrease the segregation sending me to hesitate
and keep a weapon placed with me beneathe my leather cape
i breathe and yes i make a leap for death then i awake
to be free's inept and vauge, i hate it cause i see the light
but wish to see the whites and blacks together like a zebra's stripes
preachers write, we the people, demons fight releasing evil
even whites repreive a sequel, see it's like bereavements equal
to a night of dreams so lethal that is causes most to immitate
their inner state on how they really feel and then the shit just drapes
in a dismal place topicaly it all begins with race
and the skin you shade is reasons why these peeps discriminate
this is fate, this is war, kids are placed with rapport
when your race, is a mobrid , interstate to the morgue
it's discrace, it's a force, mixed with rage, the report
gives us haste intercourse, in a way it's support
when we make different forms of life, a child mixed creates
then black and white populations just unite and intergrate
but thats many years away and it's unrighteous anyway
i would like to demonstrate, but it's just 1968
so as life begins to fade, i just sit and hope for change
and jot my thoughts inside my journal clogging every open page
it's only fate, stuff'll change, im only 8, but my age
strolls my brain and sufficates, my soul's enslaved because of race
an ugly face this is the racism it really needs to stop
cause it's leading us to not acheiving peace within out blocks
color schemes'll seem to drop, and all indecentcy'll hault
they say that only time can tell though, so we all just need a watch

Desenut§ · 09-25-2003, 04:41 PM

DAMNITT I thought this was due thursday.. well count it or don't.. but i'm putting up a verse regardles.. I'm sorry hyp.. your choice as to whether it counts..

11. A conversation with God

Dear Father,
You can walk on water.. so answer this..
why can't you make temptations state a little harder to resist..
I try so hard to hit the mark but miss.. perfections blessins out of reach..
I could never walk the road he walked... to calvery.. with two left feet..
and so I struggle through this sleep.. feeling lifeless in desire..
knowing in my heart of hearts.. I'm doomed to feel the devils fire..
at the thought my skin perspires.. picture flames and cracking flesh..
blackened blood set to boiling as my hands melt off my wrists..
then I shudder back to this.. and in the end... is it much better?
So I've chosen to cast this prayer.. to the winds.. upon this letter..
If you don't answer Lord.. I'll severe.. give up and cease this plight..
cuz I feel I've paid my dues.. PLUS this lease on life..

he folds the pieces right.. and sets to flight his souls request
as he slowly turns away with smoldering hope and feels the cold breeze soft carress
a voice calls from his breast..

................................... ..Am I still so far away?
I've been here all along.. through each step of the way..
forget footsteps in sand.. my plan has played a greater part..
for when you accepted my sacrifice.. I took my place here in your heart...
I've seen your endless struggles.. the pain when daddy died..
The nights your momma left for sex n drugs.. as you hid your head and cried..
I gave what warmth I could provide.. though you never noticed me..
I wasn't so far away.. I was as close as close could be...
take hope in what you see.. I forgive.. I understand..
and in this world of sin.. theres bound to be those circumstance
that rip you from your stance.. of how you think you ought to be..
but the only thing I truly ask.. is that you keep your thoughts on me...

His words melted all my grief.. and my head rose up in pride...
for I finally understood.. the Truth I held inside...
I'm never good enough... though I should try my best.. no doubt..
but Jesus loves me regardless... from the inside out..

HighPawTheCyst · 09-25-2003, 05:36 PM

you cool, verses weren't due til SAT, but im glad you posted, i would've let it count anyway i hate win by default bull shit, props on the verse, ( 1 )

trapezoidal. · 09-25-2003, 08:23 PM

2 more real nice verses.
high had a tough subject to tackle but actually made it read very polished and relevant. the story of jason was going well until you got to this point:

to a night of dreams so lethal that is causes most to immitate
their inner state on how they really feel and then the shit just drapes
in a dismal place topicaly it all begins with race
and the skin you shade is reasons why these peeps discriminate
this is fate, this is war, kids are placed with rapport
when your race, is a mobrid , interstate to the morgue
it's discrace, it's a force, mixed with rage, the report
gives us haste intercourse, in a way it's support
when we make different forms of life, a child mixed creates
then black and white populations just unite and intergrate
but thats many years away and it's unrighteous anyway

right there you kind of got away from the story and started to preach a little bit, then later on you got right back on track. that just kind of messed up your actual story, but not the topic.

dese dropped a good verse, better then demiks version imo. chock full of alliteration and very well-written in the first person. you never really faltered on making the story not only simple for the readers but also stayed on point scheme and flow wise.

i personally think dese got this one, only by a few nuts though. great battle guys.

vote = dese

Jon T. Fogelman · 09-26-2003, 05:17 PM

dese had a real nice flow and rhythym going to his topic, the story all gelled together and didnt fall off for a second, high was good, but was kinda choppy flow and story wise

Vote= Desenuts

TeKneeK · 09-28-2003, 02:03 AM

LDogg The King · 09-28-2003, 05:50 AM

i really liked high paws story.. it was somthing differnt which i like to see.. and what i mean by differnt im talkin bout the flow, it went real nice to guide the verse... nuts, you have a great story.. really got into reading it.. but i just didnt get into it as much as i did high paws..

great match

vote high paw the cyst

good luck to you both on winning!

WiSDoM · 09-28-2003, 12:25 PM

My vote goes to Highpaw, he had a dope story, was very consistent in the flow of it, and overall he had the better content in his verse...

Desenuts had a nice verse as well..but to me it seemed rushed, kind of seemed a little simplistic...but i dont know..thas just mah opinion..good battle y'all..but my vote goes to HighPaw

vote= HighPawTheCyst

peace

Den-S · 09-28-2003, 04:13 PM

vote- Highpaw TheCyst

He had the better flow and really ripped a tough topic...had nice multis and vocab, and his imagery was nice...Desenuts had a dope drop, but I felt HTC got this cuz he had the harder topic and managed to just kill it, he made it look simple...

dope battle from both...

g'luck

Tha Talent · 09-29-2003, 10:42 PM

Desenuts -
it seems like you have talent in the writing department, but you looked at this topic in such a plain way.
you just wrote about a conversation with God
when you really should have done more
it would have helped if you had more wordplay and creative lines or great rhyme scheme
but you didn't.

Hypothesis -
your flow just was killer by the middle of the verse.
you really showed some knowledge
and you had some very well worded lines
it would have been nice if you had stuck to the story a little more
but its alright
i'm impressed
i'd like to see what you can do when you actually find a storyline you want to develop fully

vote=HighPawTheCyst

Patriarch · 09-30-2003, 10:40 AM

vote: hptc

def had more of a story that i lean too, dese story just turned me off completely for some reason, both had some decent points in each story, but high had the most consistentncy(sp),flow, structure, content.. period.

nice job tho.. pz

Papa_Smurf · 09-30-2003, 01:26 PM

A hard decision in this case, both came with pretty good verses, and both shined enough to win this one, but I was just feeling hptc's verse more.

Vote:Htpc

Nebz · 09-30-2003, 04:42 PM

HighPaw Wins

09-24-2003, 12:06 AM	#1 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	23. HighpawTheCyst 1-0 Vs 24. Desenuts 7-4 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST Get Your Topics The RSTL Topics this week! - TOPIC WEEK! LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!! __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

09-24-2003, 10:04 AM	#2 (permalink)
HighPawTheCyst Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 523	checkmate __________________ im your baby's daddy

09-24-2003, 10:58 AM	#3 (permalink)
Desenut§ Lean mean nuttin machine! Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: H-Town Posts: 739	check-bloke! and good luck.. __________________ Fuckin a sig since the 80's

09-24-2003, 01:23 PM	#4 (permalink)
HighPawTheCyst Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 523	:: VOTES :: http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/642694-7-l-dogg-13-4-vs-8-mc4sight-5-0-a.html#post7353775 http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/642702-21-nabethian-1-0-vs-22-konvikt-6-1-a-post7353826.html http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/642693-5-liquidlife-11-1-vs-6-unavailable-31-19-a.html#post7380448 __________________ im your baby's daddy Last edited by HighPawTheCyst; 09-29-2003 at 11:21 AM.

09-24-2003, 04:16 PM	#5 (permalink)
HighPawTheCyst Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 523	15. Apartheid It's 1968 in August, my name's Jason Hodges and im a victim to the hate an many racial comments it's everyday the harsh reality decays my conscience so i state a promise to myself that i'll remain as calm as i can, but i cant if im in a state of wrong it's like the pain's a false display of art opague to make me vomit see the base of honesty is based upon the ways we draw it but the rage is falling at a rate unwanted fate's uncomplished i sit and wait but politics pollute our mind with laws and since im african american then i apply to all see im quite alive but flaws are what the whites have tried to toss cause in there eyes we're not equivalent and put our lives on pause to live deprives us all, but i believe that peace will levatate and then decrease the segregation sending me to hesitate and keep a weapon placed with me beneathe my leather cape i breathe and yes i make a leap for death then i awake to be free's inept and vauge, i hate it cause i see the light but wish to see the whites and blacks together like a zebra's stripes preachers write, we the people, demons fight releasing evil even whites repreive a sequel, see it's like bereavements equal to a night of dreams so lethal that is causes most to immitate their inner state on how they really feel and then the shit just drapes in a dismal place topicaly it all begins with race and the skin you shade is reasons why these peeps discriminate this is fate, this is war, kids are placed with rapport when your race, is a mobrid , interstate to the morgue it's discrace, it's a force, mixed with rage, the report gives us haste intercourse, in a way it's support when we make different forms of life, a child mixed creates then black and white populations just unite and intergrate but thats many years away and it's unrighteous anyway i would like to demonstrate, but it's just 1968 so as life begins to fade, i just sit and hope for change and jot my thoughts inside my journal clogging every open page it's only fate, stuff'll change, im only 8, but my age strolls my brain and sufficates, my soul's enslaved because of race an ugly face this is the racism it really needs to stop cause it's leading us to not acheiving peace within out blocks color schemes'll seem to drop, and all indecentcy'll hault they say that only time can tell though, so we all just need a watch __________________ im your baby's daddy Last edited by HighPawTheCyst; 09-24-2003 at 06:52 PM.

09-25-2003, 04:41 PM	#6 (permalink)
Desenut§ Lean mean nuttin machine! Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: H-Town Posts: 739	DAMNITT I thought this was due thursday.. well count it or don't.. but i'm putting up a verse regardles.. I'm sorry hyp.. your choice as to whether it counts.. 11. A conversation with God Dear Father, You can walk on water.. so answer this.. why can't you make temptations state a little harder to resist.. I try so hard to hit the mark but miss.. perfections blessins out of reach.. I could never walk the road he walked... to calvery.. with two left feet.. and so I struggle through this sleep.. feeling lifeless in desire.. knowing in my heart of hearts.. I'm doomed to feel the devils fire.. at the thought my skin perspires.. picture flames and cracking flesh.. blackened blood set to boiling as my hands melt off my wrists.. then I shudder back to this.. and in the end... is it much better? So I've chosen to cast this prayer.. to the winds.. upon this letter.. If you don't answer Lord.. I'll severe.. give up and cease this plight.. cuz I feel I've paid my dues.. PLUS this lease on life.. he folds the pieces right.. and sets to flight his souls request as he slowly turns away with smoldering hope and feels the cold breeze soft carress a voice calls from his breast.. ................................... ..Am I still so far away? I've been here all along.. through each step of the way.. forget footsteps in sand.. my plan has played a greater part.. for when you accepted my sacrifice.. I took my place here in your heart... I've seen your endless struggles.. the pain when daddy died.. The nights your momma left for sex n drugs.. as you hid your head and cried.. I gave what warmth I could provide.. though you never noticed me.. I wasn't so far away.. I was as close as close could be... take hope in what you see.. I forgive.. I understand.. and in this world of sin.. theres bound to be those circumstance that rip you from your stance.. of how you think you ought to be.. but the only thing I truly ask.. is that you keep your thoughts on me... His words melted all my grief.. and my head rose up in pride... for I finally understood.. the Truth I held inside... I'm never good enough... though I should try my best.. no doubt.. but Jesus loves me regardless... from the inside out.. __________________ Fuckin a sig since the 80's

09-25-2003, 05:36 PM	#7 (permalink)
HighPawTheCyst Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 523	you cool, verses weren't due til SAT, but im glad you posted, i would've let it count anyway i hate win by default bull shit, props on the verse, ( 1 ) __________________ im your baby's daddy

09-25-2003, 08:23 PM	#8 (permalink)
trapezoidal. dip - the wonder years. Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: maryland - the middle ground. Posts: 84	2 more real nice verses. high had a tough subject to tackle but actually made it read very polished and relevant. the story of jason was going well until you got to this point: to a night of dreams so lethal that is causes most to immitate their inner state on how they really feel and then the shit just drapes in a dismal place topicaly it all begins with race and the skin you shade is reasons why these peeps discriminate this is fate, this is war, kids are placed with rapport when your race, is a mobrid , interstate to the morgue it's discrace, it's a force, mixed with rage, the report gives us haste intercourse, in a way it's support when we make different forms of life, a child mixed creates then black and white populations just unite and intergrate but thats many years away and it's unrighteous anyway right there you kind of got away from the story and started to preach a little bit, then later on you got right back on track. that just kind of messed up your actual story, but not the topic. dese dropped a good verse, better then demiks version imo. chock full of alliteration and very well-written in the first person. you never really faltered on making the story not only simple for the readers but also stayed on point scheme and flow wise. i personally think dese got this one, only by a few nuts though. great battle guys. vote = dese __________________ whyfebeater #1.

09-26-2003, 05:17 PM	#9 (permalink)
Jon T. Fogelman holla at ya boy Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 668	dese had a real nice flow and rhythym going to his topic, the story all gelled together and didnt fall off for a second, high was good, but was kinda choppy flow and story wise Vote= Desenuts __________________ nigga please

09-28-2003, 02:03 AM	#10 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	up. __________________ .......................

09-28-2003, 05:50 AM	#11 (permalink)
LDogg The King S E A T T L E Join Date: Jan 2000 Location: Seattle Posts: 16,637	i really liked high paws story.. it was somthing differnt which i like to see.. and what i mean by differnt im talkin bout the flow, it went real nice to guide the verse... nuts, you have a great story.. really got into reading it.. but i just didnt get into it as much as i did high paws.. great match vote high paw the cyst good luck to you both on winning! __________________ ELITE motherfuckers www.soundclick.com/downedshadow www.myspace.com/downedshadow I wish the game was reversed and my verse was the beat so you'd listen to me first, and then dance later... I aint dumbing down shit, you don't get it, get a fuckin translator - Bishop Lamont

09-28-2003, 12:25 PM	#12 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	My vote goes to Highpaw, he had a dope story, was very consistent in the flow of it, and overall he had the better content in his verse... Desenuts had a nice verse as well..but to me it seemed rushed, kind of seemed a little simplistic...but i dont know..thas just mah opinion..good battle y'all..but my vote goes to HighPaw vote= HighPawTheCyst peace

09-28-2003, 04:13 PM	#13 (permalink)
Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:. Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: RSTL...6-5 Posts: 855	vote- Highpaw TheCyst He had the better flow and really ripped a tough topic...had nice multis and vocab, and his imagery was nice...Desenuts had a dope drop, but I felt HTC got this cuz he had the harder topic and managed to just kill it, he made it look simple... dope battle from both... g'luck __________________ ThA KiD PrOdIgY Of DoPe "Life And Existance" "Question" "America's Death" "Stranded" "Loss" "Doubts"

09-29-2003, 10:42 PM	#14 (permalink)
Tha Talent , Tha Master. Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: in the hall of fame. Posts: 3,588	Desenuts - it seems like you have talent in the writing department, but you looked at this topic in such a plain way. you just wrote about a conversation with God when you really should have done more it would have helped if you had more wordplay and creative lines or great rhyme scheme but you didn't. Hypothesis - your flow just was killer by the middle of the verse. you really showed some knowledge and you had some very well worded lines it would have been nice if you had stuck to the story a little more but its alright i'm impressed i'd like to see what you can do when you actually find a storyline you want to develop fully vote=HighPawTheCyst __________________ elitely smo

09-30-2003, 10:40 AM	#15 (permalink)
Patriarch Pat knows.. Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Orlando Posts: 12,298	vote: hptc def had more of a story that i lean too, dese story just turned me off completely for some reason, both had some decent points in each story, but high had the most consistentncy(sp),flow, structure, content.. period. nice job tho.. pz

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09-30-2003, 01:26 PM	#16 (permalink)
Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Baltimore Posts: 397	A hard decision in this case, both came with pretty good verses, and both shined enough to win this one, but I was just feeling hptc's verse more. Vote:Htpc __________________ Fuck Your Sig. Rules.

09-30-2003, 04:42 PM	#17 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	HighPaw Wins __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

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