15. Wisdom 7-2 Vs 16. Den-S 1-0

Nebz · 09-24-2003, 12:03 AM

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Den-S · 09-24-2003, 01:07 AM

checkin in...

WiSDoM · 09-24-2003, 12:55 PM

damn didnt realize they were due today lol...im here

1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide

also doing that topic..

WiSDoM · 09-24-2003, 09:46 PM

kinda glad there not due 2morrow lol..would of had to rush it..had sum shit i had ta do..props to tek

..

WiSDoM · 09-27-2003, 02:04 PM

have u finished ur verse yet?

Den-S · 09-27-2003, 03:55 PM

#10: America is dying slowly
=============================

The hardships and struggles, troubles through society//
Another day is in crumbles, for what suffers is humanity//
The prominent poisons that plague the politics of this prison//
To which no one sees, no one listens, so now hell is rechristened//
The drugs that consume our children, the youth are at a loss//
For living life so foolishly, and not recognizing all the costs//
That it must be a mentality only offered by one’s own good will//
And they still play amidst the streets, while a heart cries, still//
Instead of playgrounds, there are grounds of play, of reckless abuse//
And toys are no longer plastic swords, but now gats and knives are at use//
If they so choose, their fate lies in their decisions that are made today//
And enforce a feeblish fortune of living, and preys them into this craze//
In many ways, they are at fault for these consequences, dire inferences//
For knowing what is play and what is for kill, there are no major differences//
So the children are out an about, in yells and shouts, for here and the now//
So they succumb to the drastic evils of sin, and then wonder why and how//
Yet while the children are at odds with the documentation of what’s right//
The parents are at ends with themselves and others, and provide no such light//
For jobs are at a few, and the economy welts under the boulders of precedence//
A hierarchy of a hypocrisy that hastens the free, it’s been death ever since//
Under this distressful foundation lies a castle that can never be mended//
And no solution is sought, under vicious plots, a family’s future has ended//
Once a society of families have been shot, the trouble now mounts to the top//
Of a government of little action, assuming the words can add a positive clout//
These words of promise, of hope and adulation to unforgivable situations//
End up being preposterous lies that enforce a haunting sensation//
It started with a war against a fellow foe, that attacked our country//
And ended up a war against our homeland, we became our own enemies//
Ignorance is the most supreme child amongst a people willing to follow//
No matter how grandiose the proposition, no matter if the plan is shallow//
A democracy of fellow wrong-doers that see no laws to abide by//
But you can see the sin and deceit as you glare into each of their eyes//
The corruption that is swimming through our politics, brainwashed our leaders//
To see them break all the Commandments of a better life, and still see no sinners//
Poverty is at a great peak, affecting the streets and imprisoning the mentally weak//
Falsity is rampant among the Christ's people, and no minds want free of this seed//
Instead what lies in the wake of this great supernatural mission in which we encounter//
Is that America no longer hold no merits, just a disgrace to our Founding Fathers//
A slow death has crept into the steps of regreat, and is a threat to all that is set//
To offset this neglect, or dissect this social debt- to be assure of this verbal preset//
No not yet

WiSDoM · 09-27-2003, 05:06 PM

guess so...bout to drop mine cause i just saw u posted yours..not trying to be all shady bout it..gimmie 2 mins to do the html shit with the bolding and what not..peace bro..

WiSDoM · 09-27-2003, 05:29 PM

1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide

*A Stormy night outside, lighting, thunder, pouring rain..while I sit alone inside my room..hoping to ease the pain..I pick up a pen, and begin to write, this is my note, this is my suicide letter*...

*Letter One*

Dear Friends and Family,

A rotten smile on a sickening face waits inside this game
I never asked for much, but the things I want I just cant gain
Contained within a bubble, scorned and beaten while I bleed
Had everyone turn there backs on me, instead of fulfilling what I need
I believed that I was useless, trapped without any hope
Lost my mother last year to a murder, and my brother to an overdose
Pretty soon we'll all be close, resting within eternal bliss
Holding hand and hand, explaining to you the things that you missed
and how you left me stranded, with a father who screams and is abusive
Ive stayed strong, but my esteem is low and im extremely lucid
Im confused with life, and how many more letters I can write
Each day that goes by, the knife inches closer by night
To tired to fight, why wasn't I given a second chance?
Have a girl, and understand true love and romance
I glance into the mirror, images of my past are revealed
the night the breaks died, and I crashed through the windshield
I should have been killed but for some reason I pulled through
cause 2 days later, I had to be present when they buried you...

*Speaking with my physicatrist*

Physicatrist = Mary(Bold)
Me = Danny (Italics)

Danny, have things gotten better since your last visit?
Not really Mary, I hate myself more every single minute
Life isn't worth living, I gave up cause I have nothing to lose
Im a struggling invidivdual, trapped in ever lasting solitude
But what can I do?, my inner spirit is no longer whole
Extort your weaknesses, except the things you can't control
Cajole your friends to help, instead of sitting alone
Cause if not, your next to be placed under a tombstone
You've grown as a person, I have seen it over time
I've been here for 6 months, been with you through your prime
Find the strength inside, Im not trying to lecture you
Don't let people hurt, bring down, or pressure you
I just approve everyones plans, jumping on command
Reaching for help, with no one to recieve my hand
Stand on my own, the storm surrounding me pulls me under
I wish I could fall in love, and never awake from its slumber
My heart pounds like thunder, stressing over others problems
I have enough of my own Mary, and I cant even solve them
Your not alone, this struggling of yours wont last forever
I haven't lied before, and I promise you it will get better
Remain strong, please come back for your next session
Okay Mary, thank you, Ill be back to see you Decemeber 7th...

*Back at home, a late night before I lay my head down to rest*

(Bold = Mom Talking)

Freezing outside, hoping the night would soon come to end
Blew out the candle, laid down, its time to go to bed
I remember what Mary had said, I'll be strong and try to fight
Outside my window appeared a large translucent light
A white gown arose, a women with long brown hair
Spoke of my name, "Son I have heard all your prayers"
I was not prepared for this, my hands shook with fear
I knew it was my mom, the women I lost last year
The image was so clear, tears rolled down my cheeks
I wanted to ask her questions, but I wasn't able to speak
My body went weak, she spoke again with her soft toned voice
"I didnt mean to leave you Danny, but I had no choice"
I was overwhelmed with rejoice, to see her once again
"Pray to me at nights, I'll always be here to answer them"
Then I broke down, now somebody is here to help and provide
I mean Mom, this is the 5th time I've attempted suicide
"I was by your side, I helped you always pull through"
"I love you Danny, from above Im watching down on you"
The light faded quickly, this is what I've waited to feel
Inside Im finally happy, the wounds and scars have been healed....

good luck kidd..peace

*EDITED TO FIX THE BOLDING*...

TeKneeK · 09-28-2003, 02:06 AM

WiSDoM · 09-28-2003, 03:07 AM

surprised there havent been any v0tes..

votes:

1.23. HighpawTheCyst 1-0 Vs 24. Desenuts 7-4
2.19. God Extensions 1-0 Vs 20. Papa Smurf 1-0
3.#1 Contendership: 3. Tha Talent 23-11 Vs 4. Patriarch 15-2
4.The RSTL FINAL 4: Dahlohner VS L-Dogg
5.47. Adversary Vs 48. Smoke Trail
6.http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/642693-5-liquidlife-11-1-vs-6-unavailable-31-19-a.html#post7380845

LDogg The King · 09-28-2003, 05:27 AM

both came real well.. never peeped den s.. i like his style.. but wisdom had a great story.. very vivid.. had some real deep emotion to it..

great battle..

vote wisdom.

Den-S · 09-28-2003, 04:10 PM

Votes...

5. Liquidlife 11-1 Vs 6. Unavailable 31-19

47. Adversary Vs 48. Smoke Trail

TITLE MATCH:1 Dahlohner Champ 33-11 Vs #1 Richard Corey 8-1

19. God Extensions 1-0 Vs 20. Papa Smurf 1-0

#1 Contendership: 3. Tha Talent 23-11 Vs 4. Patriarch 15-2

23. HighpawTheCyst 1-0 Vs 24. Desenuts 7-4

trapezoidal. · 09-28-2003, 06:17 PM

i agree w/ L dogg. den came with a dope verse, full of thoughtfulness and it made you think beyond the picture. choppy in a few sections, perhaps misplaced. but a good drop.

wisdoms was pretty damn amazing. the storyline on this shit was crazy ... vivid images of a child on the brink of suicide. really his was better written then den's on a whole. but a good battle from both sides.

vote = wisdom.

Tha Talent · 09-28-2003, 07:22 PM

i'm not in the mood to go tooo indept but anyway..
a while back i said wisdom would be a champ one day.
his story was colorful and nice.
and well told
just overall good

Den-S has potential maybe
but his verse was so plain and boring
and he didn't use multis with rare exceptions.

vote=Wisdum

WiSDoM · 09-29-2003, 02:36 AM

Patriarch · 09-30-2003, 10:36 AM

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ok ive just drove 12 hours from fla. and im realllly not in the mood to do deep voting..
------------------------------

den-s your pieces just need a little bit of work it seems like your trying to hard to force content flow and your point into one piece and its just makin it come out a wrong way, you def had some potential but just not the potential enough to beat wisdom in this battle, wisdom.. nice verse you come very well i havnt read any of your work to in depth so far but i kind of enjoyed this one, wasnt the best but def enough to win the battle.. nice work yall pz

vote::wisdom

Nebz · 09-30-2003, 04:38 PM

wisdom wins

09-24-2003, 12:03 AM	#1 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	15. Wisdom 7-2 Vs 16. Den-S 1-0 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST Get Your Topics The RSTL Topics this week! - TOPIC WEEK! LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!! __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

09-24-2003, 01:07 AM	#2 (permalink)
Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:. Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: RSTL...6-5 Posts: 855	checkin in... __________________ ThA KiD PrOdIgY Of DoPe "Life And Existance" "Question" "America's Death" "Stranded" "Loss" "Doubts"

09-24-2003, 12:55 PM	#3 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	damn didnt realize they were due today lol...im here 1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide also doing that topic.. Last edited by WiSDoM; 09-24-2003 at 12:56 PM.

09-27-2003, 03:55 PM	#6 (permalink)
Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:. Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: RSTL...6-5 Posts: 855	#10: America is dying slowly ============================= The hardships and struggles, troubles through society// Another day is in crumbles, for what suffers is humanity// The prominent poisons that plague the politics of this prison// To which no one sees, no one listens, so now hell is rechristened// The drugs that consume our children, the youth are at a loss// For living life so foolishly, and not recognizing all the costs// That it must be a mentality only offered by one’s own good will// And they still play amidst the streets, while a heart cries, still// Instead of playgrounds, there are grounds of play, of reckless abuse// And toys are no longer plastic swords, but now gats and knives are at use// If they so choose, their fate lies in their decisions that are made today// And enforce a feeblish fortune of living, and preys them into this craze// In many ways, they are at fault for these consequences, dire inferences// For knowing what is play and what is for kill, there are no major differences// So the children are out an about, in yells and shouts, for here and the now// So they succumb to the drastic evils of sin, and then wonder why and how// Yet while the children are at odds with the documentation of what’s right// The parents are at ends with themselves and others, and provide no such light// For jobs are at a few, and the economy welts under the boulders of precedence// A hierarchy of a hypocrisy that hastens the free, it’s been death ever since// Under this distressful foundation lies a castle that can never be mended// And no solution is sought, under vicious plots, a family’s future has ended// Once a society of families have been shot, the trouble now mounts to the top// Of a government of little action, assuming the words can add a positive clout// These words of promise, of hope and adulation to unforgivable situations// End up being preposterous lies that enforce a haunting sensation// It started with a war against a fellow foe, that attacked our country// And ended up a war against our homeland, we became our own enemies// Ignorance is the most supreme child amongst a people willing to follow// No matter how grandiose the proposition, no matter if the plan is shallow// A democracy of fellow wrong-doers that see no laws to abide by// But you can see the sin and deceit as you glare into each of their eyes// The corruption that is swimming through our politics, brainwashed our leaders// To see them break all the Commandments of a better life, and still see no sinners// Poverty is at a great peak, affecting the streets and imprisoning the mentally weak// Falsity is rampant among the Christ's people, and no minds want free of this seed// Instead what lies in the wake of this great supernatural mission in which we encounter// Is that America no longer hold no merits, just a disgrace to our Founding Fathers// A slow death has crept into the steps of regreat, and is a threat to all that is set// To offset this neglect, or dissect this social debt- to be assure of this verbal preset// No not yet __________________ ThA KiD PrOdIgY Of DoPe "Life And Existance" "Question" "America's Death" "Stranded" "Loss" "Doubts" Last edited by Den-S; 09-27-2003 at 03:59 PM.

09-27-2003, 05:29 PM	#8 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide A Stormy night outside, lighting, thunder, pouring rain..while I sit alone inside my room..hoping to ease the pain..I pick up a pen, and begin to write, this is my note, this is my suicide letter... Letter One Dear Friends and Family, A rotten smile on a sickening face waits inside this game I never asked for much, but the things I want I just cant gain Contained within a bubble, scorned and beaten while I bleed Had everyone turn there backs on me, instead of fulfilling what I need I believed that I was useless, trapped without any hope Lost my mother last year to a murder, and my brother to an overdose Pretty soon we'll all be close, resting within eternal bliss Holding hand and hand, explaining to you the things that you missed and how you left me stranded, with a father who screams and is abusive Ive stayed strong, but my esteem is low and im extremely lucid Im confused with life, and how many more letters I can write Each day that goes by, the knife inches closer by night To tired to fight, why wasn't I given a second chance? Have a girl, and understand true love and romance I glance into the mirror, images of my past are revealed the night the breaks died, and I crashed through the windshield I should have been killed but for some reason I pulled through cause 2 days later, I had to be present when they buried you... Speaking with my physicatrist Physicatrist = Mary(Bold) Me = Danny (Italics) Danny, have things gotten better since your last visit? Not really Mary, I hate myself more every single minute Life isn't worth living, I gave up cause I have nothing to lose Im a struggling invidivdual, trapped in ever lasting solitude But what can I do?, my inner spirit is no longer whole Extort your weaknesses, except the things you can't control Cajole your friends to help, instead of sitting alone Cause if not, your next to be placed under a tombstone You've grown as a person, I have seen it over time I've been here for 6 months, been with you through your prime Find the strength inside, Im not trying to lecture you Don't let people hurt, bring down, or pressure you I just approve everyones plans, jumping on command Reaching for help, with no one to recieve my hand Stand on my own, the storm surrounding me pulls me under I wish I could fall in love, and never awake from its slumber My heart pounds like thunder, stressing over others problems I have enough of my own Mary, and I cant even solve them Your not alone, this struggling of yours wont last forever I haven't lied before, and I promise you it will get better Remain strong, please come back for your next session Okay Mary, thank you, Ill be back to see you Decemeber 7th... Back at home, a late night before I lay my head down to rest (Bold = Mom Talking) Freezing outside, hoping the night would soon come to end Blew out the candle, laid down, its time to go to bed I remember what Mary had said, I'll be strong and try to fight Outside my window appeared a large translucent light A white gown arose, a women with long brown hair Spoke of my name, "Son I have heard all your prayers" I was not prepared for this, my hands shook with fear I knew it was my mom, the women I lost last year The image was so clear, tears rolled down my cheeks I wanted to ask her questions, but I wasn't able to speak My body went weak, she spoke again with her soft toned voice "I didnt mean to leave you Danny, but I had no choice" I was overwhelmed with rejoice, to see her once again "Pray to me at nights, I'll always be here to answer them" Then I broke down, now somebody is here to help and provide I mean Mom, this is the 5th time I've attempted suicide "I was by your side, I helped you always pull through" "I love you Danny, from above Im watching down on you" The light faded quickly, this is what I've waited to feel Inside Im finally happy, the wounds and scars have been healed.... good luck kidd..peace EDITED TO FIX THE BOLDING... Last edited by WiSDoM; 09-27-2003 at 06:57 PM.

09-24-2003, 09:46 PM	#4 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	kinda glad there not due 2morrow lol..would of had to rush it..had sum shit i had ta do..props to tek ..

09-27-2003, 02:04 PM	#5 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	have u finished ur verse yet?

09-27-2003, 05:06 PM	#7 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	guess so...bout to drop mine cause i just saw u posted yours..not trying to be all shady bout it..gimmie 2 mins to do the html shit with the bolding and what not..peace bro..

09-28-2003, 02:06 AM	#9 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	upin __________________ .......................

09-28-2003, 03:07 AM	#10 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	surprised there havent been any v0tes.. votes: 1.23. HighpawTheCyst 1-0 Vs 24. Desenuts 7-4 2.19. God Extensions 1-0 Vs 20. Papa Smurf 1-0 3.#1 Contendership: 3. Tha Talent 23-11 Vs 4. Patriarch 15-2 4.The RSTL FINAL 4: Dahlohner VS L-Dogg 5.47. Adversary Vs 48. Smoke Trail 6.http://board.rapmusic.com/rapmusics-storytelling-league/642693-5-liquidlife-11-1-vs-6-unavailable-31-19-a.html#post7380845 Last edited by WiSDoM; 09-29-2003 at 12:20 PM.

09-28-2003, 05:27 AM	#11 (permalink)
LDogg The King S E A T T L E Join Date: Jan 2000 Location: Seattle Posts: 16,637	both came real well.. never peeped den s.. i like his style.. but wisdom had a great story.. very vivid.. had some real deep emotion to it.. great battle.. vote wisdom. __________________ ELITE motherfuckers www.soundclick.com/downedshadow www.myspace.com/downedshadow I wish the game was reversed and my verse was the beat so you'd listen to me first, and then dance later... I aint dumbing down shit, you don't get it, get a fuckin translator - Bishop Lamont

09-28-2003, 04:10 PM	#12 (permalink)
Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:. Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: RSTL...6-5 Posts: 855	Votes... 5. Liquidlife 11-1 Vs 6. Unavailable 31-19 47. Adversary Vs 48. Smoke Trail TITLE MATCH:1 Dahlohner Champ 33-11 Vs #1 Richard Corey 8-1 19. God Extensions 1-0 Vs 20. Papa Smurf 1-0 #1 Contendership: 3. Tha Talent 23-11 Vs 4. Patriarch 15-2 23. HighpawTheCyst 1-0 Vs 24. Desenuts 7-4 __________________ ThA KiD PrOdIgY Of DoPe "Life And Existance" "Question" "America's Death" "Stranded" "Loss" "Doubts" Last edited by Den-S; 09-28-2003 at 04:18 PM.

09-28-2003, 06:17 PM	#13 (permalink)
trapezoidal. dip - the wonder years. Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: maryland - the middle ground. Posts: 84	i agree w/ L dogg. den came with a dope verse, full of thoughtfulness and it made you think beyond the picture. choppy in a few sections, perhaps misplaced. but a good drop. wisdoms was pretty damn amazing. the storyline on this shit was crazy ... vivid images of a child on the brink of suicide. really his was better written then den's on a whole. but a good battle from both sides. vote = wisdom. __________________ whyfebeater #1.

09-28-2003, 07:22 PM	#14 (permalink)
Tha Talent , Tha Master. Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: in the hall of fame. Posts: 3,588	i'm not in the mood to go tooo indept but anyway.. a while back i said wisdom would be a champ one day. his story was colorful and nice. and well told just overall good Den-S has potential maybe but his verse was so plain and boring and he didn't use multis with rare exceptions. vote=Wisdum __________________ elitely smo

09-29-2003, 02:36 AM	#15 (permalink)
WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity Join Date: Dec 1999 Posts: 4,285	3-0

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09-30-2003, 10:36 AM	#16 (permalink)
Patriarch Pat knows.. Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Orlando Posts: 12,298	(post on all replys) ok ive just drove 12 hours from fla. and im realllly not in the mood to do deep voting.. ------------------------------ den-s your pieces just need a little bit of work it seems like your trying to hard to force content flow and your point into one piece and its just makin it come out a wrong way, you def had some potential but just not the potential enough to beat wisdom in this battle, wisdom.. nice verse you come very well i havnt read any of your work to in depth so far but i kind of enjoyed this one, wasnt the best but def enough to win the battle.. nice work yall pz vote::wisdom

09-30-2003, 04:38 PM	#17 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	wisdom wins __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

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