TITLE MATCH:1 Dahlohner Champ 33-11 Vs #1 Richard Corey 8-1

Nebz · 09-23-2003, 11:54 PM

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DahLohner · 09-24-2003, 01:41 PM

I'll try my best to be here and defend this championship.

IMOUT

Richard Corey · 09-24-2003, 06:44 PM

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Tha Talent · 09-24-2003, 08:58 PM

read the stickied threads
they are due Saturday but nebz is a little slow

Richard Corey · 09-26-2003, 08:34 PM

12. Living in the ghetto

Ghetto Cause and Effect

Eight grade Monica stops playing her harmonica
When Mrs. Faye promised to, in a rage, admonish her
for playing by the monitor up on the hallway wall
blocking the security camera! In a bawled face, all
little, itty-bitty pretty Monica really wanted to do
was run tumbling to the city bench, in front of the stoop
that witchy bitch got nothin' to do!
Here comes momma
with the blue blouse covering her pink slip
here comes drama...

Momma Mosley worked for Donald closely stockin' groceries
supervising over Donald's son, the very obnoxious, Cody
who liked to pocket mostly small trinkets for free
but in the end the inventory likes to tell a different story
So Ms. Mosley gets sent home to a whinin', cryin' child
just when her anger at the world was finally dying down
But she couldn't relax, so her daughter's quick squeals
was the mule's broke back and Don's shattered windshield..

Now Don's gettin' his windshield fixed, "That n*gger Bitch!"
As quick as this, Cody's got a new word for the quicker kids
cuz he's a little illiterate, and all the Black kids are smart
the pain, a little bit, attached and grew in the back of his heart.
So when Chastity Hart, danced in gym class, her talent and art
Cody screamed, "n*gger" smacking her ass as fast as a dart
as fast as that, Chastity’s heart tragically shattered apart
she was ugly, she didn't have to hear half their savage remarks

She made it home to her bathroom, quietly cried at the mirror
the sight of her broad nose made her bright eyes fire and tear up
She was just an ugly Black Bitch, a n*gger, a Black fool
she took two Advil capsules...then grabbed another cap full...

she left them in the sink and frantically cried...
she couldn't do it...
but her little brother Cassidy tried...
nothin' to it...

Everyone was asleep, he shouldn't have really been up
he had to pee... when he saw all the pills still in the cup...
Now his itty-bitty stomach's making little fidgety sounds
and white foam is coming out of his itty-bitty mini-me mouth...
His eyes glass over, as he chokes so hard his chest caves
he dies scared and alone and not found until the next day

The story gets played over and over on every T.V. station
The drug sensation, Ricardo Vaz's looking for inspiration
"I could chop up extacy and lace it with Advil for filler
take 'em to the club tonight, and call em' Cassidy Killers!"

CK was a huge hit at the teen rave, they quickly replaced
other club drugs, cause "Hey, Ric says they're totally safe!"
fuckin' dopamine slaves, ravers with disposable brains
almost choke on the smoke as the club gets closed in a raid
But Pam wasn't close to afraid...she'd already ingested
four pills! Two more while watchin' Ric gettin' arrested...

She jumped in her car with her friends, the fun died down
when she started wondering why they were all upside down...
She hit Tom's car so fast, he couldn't protect his child
who flew thru both windshields and turned into a projectile
the kid hit Pam in the face so hard, he snapped her neck
everyone else was thrown clear with only fractured legs

The little boy, Austin, was an awesome prodigy flute player
He asked to pray before the crash; probably a soothsayer,
Now he's getting arranged by autopsy doctor Betty Faye
who thinks he reminds her of a child she yelled at yesterday
for playing in front of the apartment's security camera...
what was her name Shondra? TaWana? Wanda? ... Tamera?
Monica? Whatever, she groaned, rippin' his carcass apart
"These people need to learn to solve the problems they start!"

edited to replace the n-word

DahLohner · 09-27-2003, 08:29 PM

7. "All That I Got is You"

*READ it well..it's two parts of a story, wrapped up in one, one told as a stream of conscienceness, the other a narrative*

***

After the third kick it was simple to stay down.../
We met and held hands as we sat in the playground/

Ever since I stepped foot in this palace of rust.../
I complimented him, with hugs, established a trust/

It's been hell, each day surpassed by the next.../
He gasped when I said Spongebob is the best/

Cuz they learned of the crime I committed and knew.../
I asked "Do you mind it if I'm visiting you?"

I'm a predator too weak to pick on his own.../
"I'm pretending to be a king who sits on his throne.."

Despised despite expressed self-revulsion.../
And I need a prince" then after his expulsion

At least I could have followed biological laws.../
He came to see ME! He had no logical cause

My myopical flaws, at the time went unconsidered.../
Just wanted to pause for a minute, he tittered

Cuz my lust blustered up in a bubble, explosive.../
I squeezed his hand, hoping he'd catch emotions

Now my outbursts get paid in full by the inmates.../
A rise in his pants with my hands in his lap, his skin tastes/

How could he BLAME me, stranded to ROT here../
Like dirt and grass, I whispered "Do not fear.."

It took two to do what he says I forced on him../
Exposed him to the sun and my love scorched, droppin

At least now I'm reading in between the beatings../
To my knees and leaving teeth marks drenched in semen/

In between the bleeding, I still fantasize/
Everything was fine until I hastily grabbed his thighs

Cuz his skin was pure flame as I pressed my flesh to it../
Then he changed his mind when he felt the wet fluid

But those thoughts are what got me trouble to start with../
Crawl down his leg, he bled..ran to my apartment/

My cellmate hated how I'd jerk it at night.../
I gave chase, and we started to curse and to fight/

Screaming out his name, until the fists flew forth.../
I ask "What's wrong??" "My dick hurts like I pissed 2 quarts"/

But it made my skin tingle, as the pain numbed slow../
"You'll get used to it" but that jus got my thumb broke/

I realized that I really liked the knuckles and bruises/
As he ran out, pants off, I wasn't gonna lose him!

I climaxed as the impact of kicks rammed in.../
I fired three shots, each hot lick landed

Now my soap never stays in one place for "some reason"../
I cried and screamed, I didn't mean to leave his chest steamin

Hehe, I've come to love receiving the gift I used to give/
And without him, I simply refuse to live/

Especially when it's given with a fist, a curse, and spit/
But before I had a chance to put two bullets in my wig/

Shit, what I did isn't exactly a sin though../
Two cops caught a glimpse of me thru their car window

Then burn Socrates for educating the masses/..
They'll never understand a man's love for boys, those fascists..

IMOUT

LiQuiDliFe · 09-27-2003, 08:32 PM

im not gonna vote...

for one when i first viewed this thread....Richard coreys was the only verse posted....i gave him props for his verse...then like 1 minute later...dalonher posted his verse...so if i was to vote it would be kinda bias already...so i wont vote

but this shit was definetly the best match i've seen posted...word

TeKneeK · 09-28-2003, 02:07 AM

uppin

Den-S · 09-28-2003, 04:01 PM

This is one of the best topical battles I have ever seen...I liked Dahloner's verse, it was unique in structure, had a nice story and imagery, but had little detail and could have developed some lines in his verse...

RC had the best verse, IMO...his multis were crazy and flow were sick, but he also exaggerated on the storyline and his imagery and detail to the topic was excellent...

dope battle, but my vote goes to Richard Corey

Tha Talent · 09-29-2003, 10:35 PM

i read Dah's verse twice
once as a whole, then once reading only the italics first, then only the plain text.
that was a dope verse, though i must say i've read far better from you.
the concept itself was pretty good
and you developed it
but the flow wasn't up to the standards you have set for yourself
and it needed a little more..

Richard Corey - mannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
i love your verses - and this was one of the best
such wonderful character development and internal rhyme that made it flow so well
beautifully told, tapestried to let us into the scenario
and you used a writers voice more exposed to the vernacular you were dealing with
what can i say - you know how to write.

vote=Richard Corey

LiQuiDliFe · 09-30-2003, 01:32 AM

this is gay how the title match only has 2 votes so far

LDogg The King · 09-30-2003, 03:52 AM

^^ yes i agree.. this was really some good story by both... however one of them stuck out more then the other after reading them a few times.... gotta say richard corry def stepped up his game after taking a loss last week in the tourny.. i see how u sorta changed ya writing into a more story form style this week an i really enjoyed it..
dah.. what can i say man u dropped another great verse.. just not as eye catching as ya oponents this time..

vote richard corey

best luck to whoever win.

Papa_Smurf · 09-30-2003, 01:29 PM

Two very nice verses here, both did a good job at staying on topice. I was feeling one more than the other though, and I'm gonna have to go against the grain and vote for Dahloner, just something about hooked me, nice battle peeps.

Vote: Dahloner

Nebz · 09-30-2003, 04:40 PM

Richard Corey Wins, Damn only 3 Votes

RC New Champ

09-23-2003, 11:54 PM	#1 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	TITLE MATCH: Champ - Dahlohner 33-11 Vs #1 Richard Corey 8-1 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST Get Your Topics The RSTL Topics this week! - TOPIC WEEK! LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!! __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto" Last edited by TeKneeK; 09-24-2003 at 12:37 AM.

09-24-2003, 06:44 PM	#3 (permalink)
Richard Corey King Richard Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: Laurel, MD Posts: 1,519	well, I guess unifying the titles isn't going to happen Votes: Last edited by Richard Corey; 09-26-2003 at 06:02 PM.

09-24-2003, 08:58 PM	#4 (permalink)
Tha Talent , Tha Master. Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: in the hall of fame. Posts: 3,588	read the stickied threads they are due Saturday but nebz is a little slow __________________ elitely smo

09-26-2003, 08:34 PM	#5 (permalink)
Richard Corey King Richard Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: Laurel, MD Posts: 1,519	12. Living in the ghetto Ghetto Cause and Effect Eight grade Monica stops playing her harmonica When Mrs. Faye promised to, in a rage, admonish her for playing by the monitor up on the hallway wall blocking the security camera! In a bawled face, all little, itty-bitty pretty Monica really wanted to do was run tumbling to the city bench, in front of the stoop that witchy bitch got nothin' to do! Here comes momma with the blue blouse covering her pink slip here comes drama... Momma Mosley worked for Donald closely stockin' groceries supervising over Donald's son, the very obnoxious, Cody who liked to pocket mostly small trinkets for free but in the end the inventory likes to tell a different story So Ms. Mosley gets sent home to a whinin', cryin' child just when her anger at the world was finally dying down But she couldn't relax, so her daughter's quick squeals was the mule's broke back and Don's shattered windshield.. Now Don's gettin' his windshield fixed, "That ngger Bitch!" As quick as this, Cody's got a new word for the quicker kids cuz he's a little illiterate, and all the Black kids are smart the pain, a little bit, attached and grew in the back of his heart. So when Chastity Hart, danced in gym class, her talent and art Cody screamed, "ngger" smacking her ass as fast as a dart as fast as that, Chastity’s heart tragically shattered apart she was ugly, she didn't have to hear half their savage remarks She made it home to her bathroom, quietly cried at the mirror the sight of her broad nose made her bright eyes fire and tear up She was just an ugly Black Bitch, a ngger, a Black fool she took two Advil capsules...then grabbed another cap full... she left them in the sink and frantically cried... she couldn't do it... but her little brother Cassidy tried... nothin' to it... Everyone was asleep, he shouldn't have really been up he had to pee... when he saw all the pills still in the cup... Now his itty-bitty stomach's making little fidgety sounds and white foam is coming out of his itty-bitty mini-me mouth... His eyes glass over, as he chokes so hard his chest caves he dies scared and alone and not found until the next day The story gets played over and over on every T.V. station The drug sensation, Ricardo Vaz's looking for inspiration "I could chop up extacy and lace it with Advil for filler take 'em to the club tonight, and call em' Cassidy Killers!" CK was a huge hit at the teen rave, they quickly replaced other club drugs, cause "Hey, Ric says they're totally safe!" fuckin' dopamine slaves, ravers with disposable brains almost choke on the smoke as the club gets closed in a raid But Pam wasn't close to afraid...she'd already ingested four pills! Two more while watchin' Ric gettin' arrested... She jumped in her car with her friends, the fun died down when she started wondering why they were all upside down... She hit Tom's car so fast, he couldn't protect his child who flew thru both windshields and turned into a projectile the kid hit Pam in the face so hard, he snapped her neck everyone else was thrown clear with only fractured legs The little boy, Austin, was an awesome prodigy flute player He asked to pray before the crash; probably a soothsayer, Now he's getting arranged by autopsy doctor Betty Faye who thinks he reminds her of a child she yelled at yesterday for playing in front of the apartment's security camera... what was her name Shondra? TaWana? Wanda? ... Tamera? Monica? Whatever, she groaned, rippin' his carcass apart "These people need to learn to solve the problems they start!" edited to replace the n-word* Last edited by Richard Corey; 09-26-2003 at 08:38 PM.

09-27-2003, 08:32 PM	#7 (permalink)
LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: On the stairway to heaven Posts: 983	im not gonna vote... for one when i first viewed this thread....Richard coreys was the only verse posted....i gave him props for his verse...then like 1 minute later...dalonher posted his verse...so if i was to vote it would be kinda bias already...so i wont vote but this shit was definetly the best match i've seen posted...word __________________ The lord is my guiding light and salvation.....whom shall I fear Last edited by LiQuiDliFe; 09-27-2003 at 09:11 PM.

09-24-2003, 01:41 PM	#2 (permalink)
DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: B.I.G&P.A.C > B.iggie I.nstilled G.reatness & P.ac A.rroused C.onscienceness Posts: 8,947	I'll try my best to be here and defend this championship. IMOUT

09-27-2003, 08:29 PM	#6 (permalink)
DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: B.I.G&P.A.C > B.iggie I.nstilled G.reatness & P.ac A.rroused C.onscienceness Posts: 8,947	7. "All That I Got is You" READ it well..it's two parts of a story, wrapped up in one, one told as a stream of conscienceness, the other a narrative *** After the third kick it was simple to stay down.../ We met and held hands as we sat in the playground/ Ever since I stepped foot in this palace of rust.../ I complimented him, with hugs, established a trust/ It's been hell, each day surpassed by the next.../ He gasped when I said Spongebob is the best/ Cuz they learned of the crime I committed and knew.../ I asked "Do you mind it if I'm visiting you?" I'm a predator too weak to pick on his own.../ "I'm pretending to be a king who sits on his throne.." Despised despite expressed self-revulsion.../ And I need a prince" then after his expulsion At least I could have followed biological laws.../ He came to see ME! He had no logical cause My myopical flaws, at the time went unconsidered.../ Just wanted to pause for a minute, he tittered Cuz my lust blustered up in a bubble, explosive.../ I squeezed his hand, hoping he'd catch emotions Now my outbursts get paid in full by the inmates.../ A rise in his pants with my hands in his lap, his skin tastes/ How could he BLAME me, stranded to ROT here../ Like dirt and grass, I whispered "Do not fear.." It took two to do what he says I forced on him../ Exposed him to the sun and my love scorched, droppin At least now I'm reading in between the beatings../ To my knees and leaving teeth marks drenched in semen/ In between the bleeding, I still fantasize/ Everything was fine until I hastily grabbed his thighs Cuz his skin was pure flame as I pressed my flesh to it../ Then he changed his mind when he felt the wet fluid But those thoughts are what got me trouble to start with../ Crawl down his leg, he bled..ran to my apartment/ My cellmate hated how I'd jerk it at night.../ I gave chase, and we started to curse and to fight/ Screaming out his name, until the fists flew forth.../ I ask "What's wrong??" "My dick hurts like I pissed 2 quarts"/ But it made my skin tingle, as the pain numbed slow../ "You'll get used to it" but that jus got my thumb broke/ I realized that I really liked the knuckles and bruises/ As he ran out, pants off, I wasn't gonna lose him! I climaxed as the impact of kicks rammed in.../ I fired three shots, each hot lick landed Now my soap never stays in one place for "some reason"../ I cried and screamed, I didn't mean to leave his chest steamin Hehe, I've come to love receiving the gift I used to give/ And without him, I simply refuse to live/ Especially when it's given with a fist, a curse, and spit/ But before I had a chance to put two bullets in my wig/ Shit, what I did isn't exactly a sin though../ Two cops caught a glimpse of me thru their car window Then burn Socrates for educating the masses/.. They'll never understand a man's love for boys, those fascists.. IMOUT

09-28-2003, 02:07 AM	#8 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	uppin __________________ .......................

09-28-2003, 04:01 PM	#9 (permalink)
Den-S .:.The Chosen One.:. Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: RSTL...6-5 Posts: 855	This is one of the best topical battles I have ever seen...I liked Dahloner's verse, it was unique in structure, had a nice story and imagery, but had little detail and could have developed some lines in his verse... RC had the best verse, IMO...his multis were crazy and flow were sick, but he also exaggerated on the storyline and his imagery and detail to the topic was excellent... dope battle, but my vote goes to Richard Corey __________________ ThA KiD PrOdIgY Of DoPe "Life And Existance" "Question" "America's Death" "Stranded" "Loss" "Doubts"

09-29-2003, 10:35 PM	#10 (permalink)
Tha Talent , Tha Master. Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: in the hall of fame. Posts: 3,588	i read Dah's verse twice once as a whole, then once reading only the italics first, then only the plain text. that was a dope verse, though i must say i've read far better from you. the concept itself was pretty good and you developed it but the flow wasn't up to the standards you have set for yourself and it needed a little more.. Richard Corey - mannnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn i love your verses - and this was one of the best such wonderful character development and internal rhyme that made it flow so well beautifully told, tapestried to let us into the scenario and you used a writers voice more exposed to the vernacular you were dealing with what can i say - you know how to write. vote=Richard Corey __________________ elitely smo

09-30-2003, 01:32 AM	#11 (permalink)
LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: On the stairway to heaven Posts: 983	this is gay how the title match only has 2 votes so far __________________ The lord is my guiding light and salvation.....whom shall I fear

09-30-2003, 03:52 AM	#12 (permalink)
LDogg The King S E A T T L E Join Date: Jan 2000 Location: Seattle Posts: 16,637	^^ yes i agree.. this was really some good story by both... however one of them stuck out more then the other after reading them a few times.... gotta say richard corry def stepped up his game after taking a loss last week in the tourny.. i see how u sorta changed ya writing into a more story form style this week an i really enjoyed it.. dah.. what can i say man u dropped another great verse.. just not as eye catching as ya oponents this time.. vote richard corey best luck to whoever win. __________________ ELITE motherfuckers www.soundclick.com/downedshadow www.myspace.com/downedshadow I wish the game was reversed and my verse was the beat so you'd listen to me first, and then dance later... I aint dumbing down shit, you don't get it, get a fuckin translator - Bishop Lamont

09-30-2003, 01:29 PM	#13 (permalink)
Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Baltimore Posts: 397	Two very nice verses here, both did a good job at staying on topice. I was feeling one more than the other though, and I'm gonna have to go against the grain and vote for Dahloner, just something about hooked me, nice battle peeps. Vote: Dahloner __________________ Fuck Your Sig. Rules.

09-30-2003, 04:40 PM	#14 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	Richard Corey Wins, Damn only 3 Votes RC New Champ __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

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