29. Copywritten Vs 30. Nebethian

Nebz · 09-14-2003, 03:36 PM

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Nabethian · 09-14-2003, 03:47 PM

you lose

Gimick · 09-16-2003, 05:38 PM

ok, im going to start writing now, but, if you make me write a whole verse, and then not show, you will officially be a newbie faggot

Gimick · 09-16-2003, 05:39 PM

8 Insanity
You’re being pursued by the police for a murder you did not commit. Who was the real killer? Why have you been framed? Who got killed? How do you avoid capture AND manage to clear your name from wrong-doing??

hooray then

Copywritten · 09-16-2003, 10:40 PM

Word.

Copywritten · 09-16-2003, 10:48 PM

6 Insanity
On the eve of your wedding night you come home to find… you’re best friend and your fiancée both naked, dead… in each others’ arms. WTF happened and tell your thoughts.

Gimick · 09-17-2003, 11:15 PM

You’re being pursued by the police for a murder you did not commit. Who was the real killer? Why have you been framed? Who got killed? How do you avoid capture AND manage to clear your name from wrong-doing??

Siryns,tires screamin,head thumpin,i've really caused quite a muck
Lien to my self and my self esteem, why am i runnin?..just my luck
That I've landed myself in this position, i'm actually innocent-
For the first time and I find myself running like some de-generate
I probably should just pull over,lay out the situation in a whole
To be honest they'll shoot first and rather put my head on a pole

My mind races what happen...door opens, shes laying there dead-
I hear siryns,instead of helping they wanna lock me up instead
It wasnt me I swear it, I was miles away, im along for the ride
What was she doing with our neighbour, was she seeing him on the side?
She said they just liked to bike, and I had no reason to not beleive
Now as they both lay dead on my kitchen floor I see Ive been deceived
What was really happening when they met their end? was it intimate?
Or was it just a friendly gathering...totally common and innocent
Not like it really matters now, they're both gone and Im a 'killer'
The details are sketchy and I apologize, most of this rambling is just filler-
For the real story who's plot I dont know, all I know is this gas wont last-
Forever, we'll have to stop sometime and when we do they'll be on me
Panicking and sweating, acception, i dont see a way out in all honesty
Seeing my tank, a pinky away from empty, I'm thinkin about life behind bars
If I get off, wont be the same, my love is gone, leaving me emotional scars
My life is over, ended in an instant, the fact that Ive eluded police amazes-
me, wonder why I even try, I'll never get away, I bring myself to face this
As I pull off the road I think to myself, my chances of parole...not good
Comparing the facts of what I'm going to do and what i really should
Thinking 'Hey, everything happens for a reason, maybe this is god sent'
And as they hurl me to the ground I have one thing to say-
'Call the lawyer, the name's cochran'

copywritten likes young boys

Gimick · 09-17-2003, 11:25 PM

i hope you show...seriously

Copywritten · 09-18-2003, 06:01 PM

Copywritten · 09-19-2003, 12:46 AM

8 Insanity
You’re being pursued by the police for a murder you did not commit. Who was the real killer? Why have you been framed? Who got killed? How do you avoid capture AND manage to clear your name from wrong-doing??

It all started out, got lost in the wrong neigborhood
The stakes weren't good, So I knew I wouldn't escape the hood
Fate had stood, when these doods came up askin' questions
So I taught these 3 fags a lesson, stealin' their crack and screwin' up their back complexions
Sprinted, track trekin', so they didn't see the cab that I had left in
Threw out my hidden weapon, my smith and wesson
Took the police a while to find me, lookin' in the wrong direction
Drove by the places Tracy's momma slept in', kids in the window flexin'
Checken their reflection, when just then, it led to deppression
Hopped out the door, from the left end, asks for a minute, just for a blessin',
Wouldn't believe what happened next and, well, the unthinkable occurred
They handcuffed me, and I was carefully observed
This the man who did it? Hell, yeah, I'm pretty sure
The root taken was neverending, on a non-stop city tour
I felt it, my kidneys tore, I felt sick, the feelin's back in'
My nerves were rackin, thought about me leavin' 3 children...
And them havin' their dad deceased, I know I didn't kill the men
After they got healthy, I was goin' to go back and kill them then
But I heard the story, someone went back and shot them
Story was told, they didn't know, but they thought that I got em
Non-stop around the clock, cops was bossin'
For something I didn't do, fell a victim to the mobs in Boston
While still, causin' problems when the slobs was flossin'
Salad was tossin', I couldn't believe the bitch did this,
I hid in bliss, knew I was gettin' this
Give this man a hand, Chris, and dismissed my hypnotist

Bahhh, keyed in 5 minutes, forgot about this

Papa_Smurf · 09-19-2003, 01:06 AM

Both were pretty good, my vote however goes to Gimick, he had a better story and flow to his, both were pretty good though

Vote:Gimmick

Peace

Nebz · 09-19-2003, 02:13 AM

Up over No shows

Gimick · 09-19-2003, 02:34 PM

fat ass hooray for a 1-0 lead

Gimick · 09-19-2003, 02:48 PM

5. Stony Vs 6. Tha Talent

15. Muti Vs 16 Rhymeageddon

27. J Rocca Vs 28. Papa Smurf

Copywritten · 09-19-2003, 05:19 PM

Word.

MC4SiGHT · 09-19-2003, 10:08 PM

vote-gimick
overall bettery story and better imagery...some of copywrittenss bars seem strechted and his verse wasnt as orignal as gimicks

DahLohner · 09-20-2003, 01:10 PM

Word..

Gimmick- Nice verse, the flow was just ugly, shorten the bars or try some interrhyming or do SOMETHING, but that was awkward, other than that tho, the verse is jampacked with imagery, and the story moved along at a somewhat brisk pace.

Copywritten- luv ya flow, jus work on those storytelling skills and you could be the next big name around here.. ending was interesting, but you didn't transition into it well. some interesting details thruout, but not as creative as your opponent.

Vote-Gimmick

IMOUT

Copywritten · 09-20-2003, 04:13 PM

Thanks DL, nice verse Gimick. I just wish I got to take my time on this. =)

Access Denied · 09-21-2003, 04:33 AM

Nice match up here. I liked both stories. copy nice flow, decent story. gimick, i remember thinkin part way thru is this gonna be oj. lol cool ending with the cochran thing. i liked u'r story a lil better than copys thats why i'm givin gim the nod. the hypnotist thing was straight, but kind of like the easy twist(way) out i felt. Vote- gimick for a better story, with the better ending. copy was dope too though. pz

Nebz · 09-21-2003, 02:27 PM

Nebthian/Camber-Wins
Copywritten-Losses

09-14-2003, 03:36 PM	#1 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	29. Copywritten Vs 30. Nebethian VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST Get Your Topics The RSTL Topics - 9/13! LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!! __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

09-14-2003, 03:47 PM	#2 (permalink)
Nabethian I Make Fun Of People Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: RSTL 1-1 Posts: 69	you lose __________________ and if this was the war son, you could hardly match us I'd be the general - you'd be the cat we'd use for target practice so I'll launch you into the sky - watch you whistle through... ...you'll hit Baghdad before the fucking missiles do - Shadows Of Darkness BEST the CHAMP: sup with all the names? Aka Demik416: im demik....the hell kinda question is that?

09-16-2003, 05:38 PM	#3 (permalink)
Gimick Is It In You? Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Somewhere In The Under Belly Of Unicef Invaded Plains Of Former Forgotten Countries Such As Hickalumdanko Posts: 1,425	ok, im going to start writing now, but, if you make me write a whole verse, and then not show, you will officially be a newbie faggot __________________ Terry Nelson: i go to an inner city public school Terry Nelson: so all the underground people i know i learned from u Terry Nelson: do you know what its like,, Terry Nelson: to walk into the cafeteria in the morning and hear songs about spinning rims every day? Aka Demik416: bwhahahhahaaa MIC

09-16-2003, 05:39 PM	#4 (permalink)
Gimick Is It In You? Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Somewhere In The Under Belly Of Unicef Invaded Plains Of Former Forgotten Countries Such As Hickalumdanko Posts: 1,425	8 Insanity You’re being pursued by the police for a murder you did not commit. Who was the real killer? Why have you been framed? Who got killed? How do you avoid capture AND manage to clear your name from wrong-doing?? hooray then __________________ Terry Nelson: i go to an inner city public school Terry Nelson: so all the underground people i know i learned from u Terry Nelson: do you know what its like,, Terry Nelson: to walk into the cafeteria in the morning and hear songs about spinning rims every day? Aka Demik416: bwhahahhahaaa MIC

09-17-2003, 11:15 PM	#7 (permalink)
Gimick Is It In You? Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Somewhere In The Under Belly Of Unicef Invaded Plains Of Former Forgotten Countries Such As Hickalumdanko Posts: 1,425	You’re being pursued by the police for a murder you did not commit. Who was the real killer? Why have you been framed? Who got killed? How do you avoid capture AND manage to clear your name from wrong-doing?? Siryns,tires screamin,head thumpin,i've really caused quite a muck Lien to my self and my self esteem, why am i runnin?..just my luck That I've landed myself in this position, i'm actually innocent- For the first time and I find myself running like some de-generate I probably should just pull over,lay out the situation in a whole To be honest they'll shoot first and rather put my head on a pole My mind races what happen...door opens, shes laying there dead- I hear siryns,instead of helping they wanna lock me up instead It wasnt me I swear it, I was miles away, im along for the ride What was she doing with our neighbour, was she seeing him on the side? She said they just liked to bike, and I had no reason to not beleive Now as they both lay dead on my kitchen floor I see Ive been deceived What was really happening when they met their end? was it intimate? Or was it just a friendly gathering...totally common and innocent Not like it really matters now, they're both gone and Im a 'killer' The details are sketchy and I apologize, most of this rambling is just filler- For the real story who's plot I dont know, all I know is this gas wont last- Forever, we'll have to stop sometime and when we do they'll be on me Panicking and sweating, acception, i dont see a way out in all honesty Seeing my tank, a pinky away from empty, I'm thinkin about life behind bars If I get off, wont be the same, my love is gone, leaving me emotional scars My life is over, ended in an instant, the fact that Ive eluded police amazes- me, wonder why I even try, I'll never get away, I bring myself to face this As I pull off the road I think to myself, my chances of parole...not good Comparing the facts of what I'm going to do and what i really should Thinking 'Hey, everything happens for a reason, maybe this is god sent' And as they hurl me to the ground I have one thing to say- 'Call the lawyer, the name's cochran' copywritten likes young boys __________________ Terry Nelson: i go to an inner city public school Terry Nelson: so all the underground people i know i learned from u Terry Nelson: do you know what its like,, Terry Nelson: to walk into the cafeteria in the morning and hear songs about spinning rims every day? Aka Demik416: bwhahahhahaaa MIC Last edited by Gimick; 09-17-2003 at 11:24 PM.

09-16-2003, 10:40 PM	#5 (permalink)
Copywritten Copy Me Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,570	Word.

09-16-2003, 10:48 PM	#6 (permalink)
Copywritten Copy Me Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,570	6 Insanity On the eve of your wedding night you come home to find… you’re best friend and your fiancée both naked, dead… in each others’ arms. WTF happened and tell your thoughts.

09-17-2003, 11:25 PM	#8 (permalink)
Gimick Is It In You? Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Somewhere In The Under Belly Of Unicef Invaded Plains Of Former Forgotten Countries Such As Hickalumdanko Posts: 1,425	i hope you show...seriously __________________ Terry Nelson: i go to an inner city public school Terry Nelson: so all the underground people i know i learned from u Terry Nelson: do you know what its like,, Terry Nelson: to walk into the cafeteria in the morning and hear songs about spinning rims every day? Aka Demik416: bwhahahhahaaa MIC

09-18-2003, 06:01 PM	#9 (permalink)
Copywritten Copy Me Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,570	Bad

09-19-2003, 12:46 AM	#10 (permalink)
Copywritten Copy Me Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,570	8 Insanity You’re being pursued by the police for a murder you did not commit. Who was the real killer? Why have you been framed? Who got killed? How do you avoid capture AND manage to clear your name from wrong-doing?? It all started out, got lost in the wrong neigborhood The stakes weren't good, So I knew I wouldn't escape the hood Fate had stood, when these doods came up askin' questions So I taught these 3 fags a lesson, stealin' their crack and screwin' up their back complexions Sprinted, track trekin', so they didn't see the cab that I had left in Threw out my hidden weapon, my smith and wesson Took the police a while to find me, lookin' in the wrong direction Drove by the places Tracy's momma slept in', kids in the window flexin' Checken their reflection, when just then, it led to deppression Hopped out the door, from the left end, asks for a minute, just for a blessin', Wouldn't believe what happened next and, well, the unthinkable occurred They handcuffed me, and I was carefully observed This the man who did it? Hell, yeah, I'm pretty sure The root taken was neverending, on a non-stop city tour I felt it, my kidneys tore, I felt sick, the feelin's back in' My nerves were rackin, thought about me leavin' 3 children... And them havin' their dad deceased, I know I didn't kill the men After they got healthy, I was goin' to go back and kill them then But I heard the story, someone went back and shot them Story was told, they didn't know, but they thought that I got em Non-stop around the clock, cops was bossin' For something I didn't do, fell a victim to the mobs in Boston While still, causin' problems when the slobs was flossin' Salad was tossin', I couldn't believe the bitch did this, I hid in bliss, knew I was gettin' this Give this man a hand, Chris, and dismissed my hypnotist Bahhh, keyed in 5 minutes, forgot about this

09-19-2003, 01:06 AM	#11 (permalink)
Papa_Smurf Junior Jedi Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Baltimore Posts: 397	Both were pretty good, my vote however goes to Gimick, he had a better story and flow to his, both were pretty good though Vote:Gimmick Peace __________________ Fuck Your Sig. Rules.

09-19-2003, 02:13 AM	#12 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	Up over No shows __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

09-19-2003, 02:34 PM	#13 (permalink)
Gimick Is It In You? Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Somewhere In The Under Belly Of Unicef Invaded Plains Of Former Forgotten Countries Such As Hickalumdanko Posts: 1,425	fat ass hooray for a 1-0 lead __________________ Terry Nelson: i go to an inner city public school Terry Nelson: so all the underground people i know i learned from u Terry Nelson: do you know what its like,, Terry Nelson: to walk into the cafeteria in the morning and hear songs about spinning rims every day? Aka Demik416: bwhahahhahaaa MIC

09-19-2003, 02:48 PM	#14 (permalink)
Gimick Is It In You? Join Date: Sep 2002 Location: Somewhere In The Under Belly Of Unicef Invaded Plains Of Former Forgotten Countries Such As Hickalumdanko Posts: 1,425	5. Stony Vs 6. Tha Talent 15. Muti Vs 16 Rhymeageddon 27. J Rocca Vs 28. Papa Smurf __________________ Terry Nelson: i go to an inner city public school Terry Nelson: so all the underground people i know i learned from u Terry Nelson: do you know what its like,, Terry Nelson: to walk into the cafeteria in the morning and hear songs about spinning rims every day? Aka Demik416: bwhahahhahaaa MIC Last edited by Gimick; 09-19-2003 at 02:53 PM.

09-19-2003, 05:19 PM	#15 (permalink)
Copywritten Copy Me Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,570	Word.

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09-19-2003, 10:08 PM	#16 (permalink)
MC4SiGHT JOE COMMiSSO Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: MICHIGAN Posts: 1,767	vote-gimick overall bettery story and better imagery...some of copywrittenss bars seem strechted and his verse wasnt as orignal as gimicks __________________ THE ELITE 1X RSTL CHAMPION 2004 RSTL TOURNAMENT CHAMPION RSTL League Record 27-9 Overall RSTL Record with tournies. 38-10 MYSPACE

09-20-2003, 01:10 PM	#17 (permalink)
DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: B.I.G&P.A.C > B.iggie I.nstilled G.reatness & P.ac A.rroused C.onscienceness Posts: 8,947	Word.. Gimmick- Nice verse, the flow was just ugly, shorten the bars or try some interrhyming or do SOMETHING, but that was awkward, other than that tho, the verse is jampacked with imagery, and the story moved along at a somewhat brisk pace. Copywritten- luv ya flow, jus work on those storytelling skills and you could be the next big name around here.. ending was interesting, but you didn't transition into it well. some interesting details thruout, but not as creative as your opponent. Vote-Gimmick IMOUT

09-20-2003, 04:13 PM	#18 (permalink)
Copywritten Copy Me Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,570	Thanks DL, nice verse Gimick. I just wish I got to take my time on this. =)

09-21-2003, 04:33 AM	#19 (permalink)
Access Denied Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 65	Nice match up here. I liked both stories. copy nice flow, decent story. gimick, i remember thinkin part way thru is this gonna be oj. lol cool ending with the cochran thing. i liked u'r story a lil better than copys thats why i'm givin gim the nod. the hypnotist thing was straight, but kind of like the easy twist(way) out i felt. Vote- gimick for a better story, with the better ending. copy was dope too though. pz

09-21-2003, 02:27 PM	#20 (permalink)
Nebz Mod God Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: West Coastin it. Posts: 24,476	Nebthian/Camber-Wins Copywritten-Losses __________________ *N.iggas E.nvy B.ill'z* See Martin, see Malcolm You See Biggie, see Pac, see success and its outcome See Jesus, see Judas, see Caesar, see Brutus See success is like suicide Suicide its a suicide If you succeed, prepare to be crucified Media meddle's, nigga's sue you, you settle Every step you take, they remind you, "you ghetto"

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