41. KIT 1-1 vs. 42. Mysterious 1-1

Camber · 08-04-2003, 05:40 PM

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?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-05-2003, 01:12 AM

topic: you stumble on to a time machine... you go back in time to see your entire life so far.... if you change somethingwhat would you change to improve you life now......and how would your lie be improved from it?

workin at the junk yard....
makes one feel like a retard....
everyday be the same but i can only find myself to blame...
until one day this old man came...
dragin this big piece of metal that resembled a mirrorless frame...
after he left i took it towards the back of the yard...
on the way back i tripped ova a piece of wood that was chared...
i fell through the center...
flashing back i can see the hospital and i see my parents enter....
suddenly i flash forward to a fight between my parents over a sunday dinner...
i appear at age 3 and visually i see them...
my mom walked out her name is kim...
my dad fucked up but i dont blame him...
jolting forward i find myself at disneyworld with my grandparents ...
that would be the last time i would see my grandfather i have cryed myself to sleep ever since...
at his funeral my family was so tence...
flashing forward a lil more findin my self in my girls room...
back in the corner i loom i see my virginity loss ....
that girl sealed my certain doom..
then boom to my senior year in high school....
i had everyone laughin being the class fool...
thats when i thought they were under my rule...
speeding ahead to graduation day...
not shocking to hear my name not read...
the town i grew up in, is the place i fled...
off to a new town is where no one knew i was a sped....
no having my diploma left my life closed in like a coma...
flashing back to resent day now i drivea 1990 beat up tocoma...
living in a small town in oklahoma...
where the air smells like shit but you get used to the eroma..
lookng back now dispite all that went wrong...
i wuldent chage anything because it made me emotionally strong...
life is ight in this trailor park......
life is pretty good being a undercover nark....

(this story is backround story for the agent)

first time i have done a rstl verse since last year kinda rusty

K.I.T. · 08-06-2003, 01:48 PM

check-in.

K.I.T. · 08-07-2003, 12:44 AM

TIME MACHINE

I'm a loser, same thing everyweek//
Work, text, than maybe go out an emcee//
Ball kinda too, suck tho, uh-oh, I know believe me//
Heard it all before, what life has in store. bitter realities//
Occasionally I jerk-off. only cuz I ain't got hoes//
Been like that for a minute, fuck life. Jesus take me, I wanna go//
I seen my high school buds the other day//
They graduated, while I dropped out. Now I see why my life's this way//
Rollin in a hooptie, tryin to get bitches. but they say no//
Soo poor I ride 8" wheels. but I keep them clean tho//
When it breaks down I walk. my house not that far//
So one day guess what I found par?//
A Time machine. I found it close to home//
says it promises past. Left moms a letter, "I'm gone"//
Now I'm off on my course, forget remourse//
Cuz if life was a bitch. then I'd want a divorce//
I don't know how to control it. but I know how to drive//
So anything that goes is all the same. right???//
guess so. hit the ignition, and all I seen was a flash//
Next thing you know I'm waking up on the ground next to trash//
Felt myself for my limbs. "are they still here?" check//
Got out the Time Machine. I got things to correct//
Lookin' around, and I can tell it's 92//
Cuz it's the "LA Riot's" and I see my old crue//
On Manhattan Place. where active lootin is taking place//
Next thing you know I see the same face//
"Midnight" the 92 version. with a jerry-curl flat-top//
A "Malcom X" tee-shirt. and the new "Pumps" by Reebok//
I immediately hide. to keep anonymous//
Got a disguise. thought "now I'm more fit for this"//
So I pulled my younger version aside. we had a talk//
Jabbed back in forth. as I took him on a walk//
Spoke with him. told him to "hold on, bitches will come"//
"You keep fuckin' you'll have a son, and life's all about the long-run"//
"The rich and poor", "College grads and the ones that did'nt"//
"The government is set up to honor those, and put the rest in prison"//
"Like good riddance...So droppin out is like suicide"//
"It may not seem like it now, but I am your future, and I wanna die"//
He took it serious. told me thanks, and he'll stay in school//
After that I left and told my younger version to play it cool//

1~

Camber · 08-07-2003, 02:16 AM

upp over no shows

prophetional · 08-07-2003, 06:46 PM

vote = mysterious.

his story itself was told better: and every other aspect of his verse was also slightly better. (ie; flow, construction, creativity, etc...)

Cereal_Killer · 08-07-2003, 07:52 PM

vote = mysterious

both off at times but i just like the story better.....

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-07-2003, 08:32 PM

2-0 me uppin

http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615255
http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615253
http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615239
http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615256
http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615242
http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615244

HellRzah · 08-07-2003, 09:56 PM

aiight
I gotta go with Mysterious on this one..he came more consistant flow-wise and told an overal better story and put a lil more creativity in it..nice battle

pz!

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-07-2003, 10:02 PM

3-0 me up

Insanevillian · 08-08-2003, 12:42 AM

hmmmmm....

i liked KIT's structure better and he had better references in his verse to what he was taking about, but the flow and structure and everything was off... but, he had the right idea... focus on your structure...

Mysterious, i wasnt feeling the story as much, i didnt quite get it all, about the undercover narc. it seemed like an ending just thrown out there to me, but u had better structure and the story flowed better and u took it on better vocab and such...

Vote Mysterious...

?MYSTERIOUS? · 08-08-2003, 12:45 AM

4-0 me... up ......

Ruthless Mic · 08-08-2003, 05:12 PM

wack concept for both of yall to pick, it's severely played. but msterious had the upper hand.

Vote = Mysterious

Atheist · 08-08-2003, 06:54 PM

Hate to follow the crowd but,

Vote: Mysterious.

Better overall story told. KIT seemed iffy, parts
just seemed to be missing. I don't know if this
is true, but it seemed rushed. Is that true? If
so, it explains why your verse is the way it is.
Anyway, Myst just had the better content etc.
Simple as that.

DahLohner · 08-09-2003, 02:31 AM

OMG..

Mysterious- Not to dog you, but your flow was ugly. Work on that, and cohesiveness.. I understand how you flashed back and forth in time, but I just wasnt feeling the piece, or the explanation.

KIT- A bad verse as well, but not because you didn't try. Good flow tho, and I was feeling the ending, how you met up with yourself and reflected, plus some details from the past.

Vote-KIT

IMOUT

TeKneeK · 08-09-2003, 02:54 PM

Mys wins.

08-04-2003, 05:40 PM	#1 (permalink)
Camber I ♥ vagina Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Toronto Posts: 11,404	41. KIT 1-1 vs. 42. Mysterious 1-1 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST This Week Is A Free Topic Week, Meaning You May Choose A Topic Of Your Choice LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 60 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!! __________________ MIC If Imitation Was An Acid, There'd Be Nothing Left Of Me- But •••elry, Fifty Two Teeth And A Belt Buckle- Chino XL

08-05-2003, 01:12 AM	#2 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	topic: you stumble on to a time machine... you go back in time to see your entire life so far.... if you change somethingwhat would you change to improve you life now......and how would your lie be improved from it? workin at the junk yard.... makes one feel like a retard.... everyday be the same but i can only find myself to blame... until one day this old man came... dragin this big piece of metal that resembled a mirrorless frame... after he left i took it towards the back of the yard... on the way back i tripped ova a piece of wood that was chared... i fell through the center... flashing back i can see the hospital and i see my parents enter.... suddenly i flash forward to a fight between my parents over a sunday dinner... i appear at age 3 and visually i see them... my mom walked out her name is kim... my dad fucked up but i dont blame him... jolting forward i find myself at disneyworld with my grandparents ... that would be the last time i would see my grandfather i have cryed myself to sleep ever since... at his funeral my family was so tence... flashing forward a lil more findin my self in my girls room... back in the corner i loom i see my virginity loss .... that girl sealed my certain doom.. then boom to my senior year in high school.... i had everyone laughin being the class fool... thats when i thought they were under my rule... speeding ahead to graduation day... not shocking to hear my name not read... the town i grew up in, is the place i fled... off to a new town is where no one knew i was a sped.... no having my diploma left my life closed in like a coma... flashing back to resent day now i drivea 1990 beat up tocoma... living in a small town in oklahoma... where the air smells like shit but you get used to the eroma.. lookng back now dispite all that went wrong... i wuldent chage anything because it made me emotionally strong... life is ight in this trailor park...... life is pretty good being a undercover nark.... (this story is backround story for the agent) first time i have done a rstl verse since last year kinda rusty __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game" Last edited by ?MYSTERIOUS?; 08-05-2003 at 02:12 AM.

08-07-2003, 12:44 AM	#4 (permalink)
K.I.T. Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: L.A., California Posts: 605	TIME MACHINE I'm a loser, same thing everyweek// Work, text, than maybe go out an emcee// Ball kinda too, suck tho, uh-oh, I know believe me// Heard it all before, what life has in store. bitter realities// Occasionally I jerk-off. only cuz I ain't got hoes// Been like that for a minute, fuck life. Jesus take me, I wanna go// I seen my high school buds the other day// They graduated, while I dropped out. Now I see why my life's this way// Rollin in a hooptie, tryin to get bitches. but they say no// Soo poor I ride 8" wheels. but I keep them clean tho// When it breaks down I walk. my house not that far// So one day guess what I found par?// A Time machine. I found it close to home// says it promises past. Left moms a letter, "I'm gone"// Now I'm off on my course, forget remourse// Cuz if life was a bitch. then I'd want a divorce// I don't know how to control it. but I know how to drive// So anything that goes is all the same. right???// guess so. hit the ignition, and all I seen was a flash// Next thing you know I'm waking up on the ground next to trash// Felt myself for my limbs. "are they still here?" check// Got out the Time Machine. I got things to correct// Lookin' around, and I can tell it's 92// Cuz it's the "LA Riot's" and I see my old crue// On Manhattan Place. where active lootin is taking place// Next thing you know I see the same face// "Midnight" the 92 version. with a jerry-curl flat-top// A "Malcom X" tee-shirt. and the new "Pumps" by Reebok// I immediately hide. to keep anonymous// Got a disguise. thought "now I'm more fit for this"// So I pulled my younger version aside. we had a talk// Jabbed back in forth. as I took him on a walk// Spoke with him. told him to "hold on, bitches will come"// "You keep fuckin' you'll have a son, and life's all about the long-run"// "The rich and poor", "College grads and the ones that did'nt"// "The government is set up to honor those, and put the rest in prison"// "Like good riddance...So droppin out is like suicide"// "It may not seem like it now, but I am your future, and I wanna die"// He took it serious. told me thanks, and he'll stay in school// After that I left and told my younger version to play it cool// 1~ Last edited by K.I.T.; 08-07-2003 at 12:49 AM.

08-07-2003, 02:16 AM	#5 (permalink)
Camber I ♥ vagina Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Toronto Posts: 11,404	upp over no shows __________________ MIC If Imitation Was An Acid, There'd Be Nothing Left Of Me- But •••elry, Fifty Two Teeth And A Belt Buckle- Chino XL

08-07-2003, 06:46 PM	#6 (permalink)
prophetional hokey muh-fuckin' pokey Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: the shore Posts: 1,707	vote = mysterious. his story itself was told better: and every other aspect of his verse was also slightly better. (ie; flow, construction, creativity, etc...) __________________ ... RealisticImpressionz-CheckMate... ""i'ma pimp i'ma thief i'ma killer i'ma dealer i'ma holyman preacher i'ma teacher i'ma healer... i've been rappin' i've been mixin', i'm factin' and i'm fiction, i'ma walkin' talkin' livin' breathin' contradiction!"" -everlast Covert Opposition "writing rhymes makes you as much of a rapper as pouring syrup on your head makes you a mutha-fuckin' pancake..." -myself

08-06-2003, 01:48 PM	#3 (permalink)
K.I.T. Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: L.A., California Posts: 605	check-in.

08-07-2003, 07:52 PM	#7 (permalink)
Cereal_Killer California Cornflakes Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: In a tub of gutter glitter Posts: 3,180	vote = mysterious both off at times but i just like the story better..... __________________ :·.·: cocaine, genius, insomnia :·.·: .·.cereal killer . got life . inf truth.·. .. You're not likely to see a green CK Unless you've got a ticket with MDA ..

08-07-2003, 08:32 PM	#8 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	2-0 me uppin http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615255 http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615253 http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615239 http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615256 http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615242 http://www.board.rapmusic.com/showth...hreadid=615244 __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game" Last edited by ?MYSTERIOUS?; 08-07-2003 at 08:37 PM.

08-07-2003, 09:56 PM	#9 (permalink)
HellRzah PurE EviL Join Date: Mar 2001 Location: Ancient Realm of Gaul: Belgica Posts: 7,620	aiight I gotta go with Mysterious on this one..he came more consistant flow-wise and told an overal better story and put a lil more creativity in it..nice battle pz! __________________ E.P.I.C.

08-07-2003, 10:02 PM	#10 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	3-0 me up __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-08-2003, 12:42 AM	#11 (permalink)
Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Oakland, Ca Posts: 16,322	hmmmmm.... i liked KIT's structure better and he had better references in his verse to what he was taking about, but the flow and structure and everything was off... but, he had the right idea... focus on your structure... Mysterious, i wasnt feeling the story as much, i didnt quite get it all, about the undercover narc. it seemed like an ending just thrown out there to me, but u had better structure and the story flowed better and u took it on better vocab and such... Vote Mysterious... __________________ ELITE

08-08-2003, 12:45 AM	#12 (permalink)
?MYSTERIOUS? Keep Ya Eyez On Da Prize Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: C.M.D Posts: 1,470	4-0 me... up ...... __________________ "We can't all play a winning game-Someone is sure to lose;Yet we can play,so that our name No one may dare accuse that when the Master Referee Scores against our name it won't be whether we've won or lost But how we've played the game"

08-08-2003, 05:12 PM	#13 (permalink)
Ruthless Mic Registered User Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 84	wack concept for both of yall to pick, it's severely played. but msterious had the upper hand. Vote = Mysterious

08-08-2003, 06:54 PM	#14 (permalink)
Atheist Storyteller Join Date: Jul 2002 Posts: 1,700	Hate to follow the crowd but, Vote: Mysterious. Better overall story told. KIT seemed iffy, parts just seemed to be missing. I don't know if this is true, but it seemed rushed. Is that true? If so, it explains why your verse is the way it is. Anyway, Myst just had the better content etc. Simple as that. __________________ You’ve Got the Fear 4x RSTL Champion.

08-09-2003, 02:31 AM	#15 (permalink)
DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: B.I.G&P.A.C > B.iggie I.nstilled G.reatness & P.ac A.rroused C.onscienceness Posts: 8,947	OMG.. Mysterious- Not to dog you, but your flow was ugly. Work on that, and cohesiveness.. I understand how you flashed back and forth in time, but I just wasnt feeling the piece, or the explanation. KIT- A bad verse as well, but not because you didn't try. Good flow tho, and I was feeling the ending, how you met up with yourself and reflected, plus some details from the past. Vote-KIT IMOUT

08-09-2003, 02:54 PM	#16 (permalink)
TeKneeK The Heart & Soul of RMC Join Date: May 1999 Location: L.A. Californ: America's Best Posts: 26,160	Mys wins. __________________ .......................

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