40. <maven> 1-0 vs. 41. Krisp 1-2

Omen · 07-05-2003, 07:57 PM

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krisp · 07-05-2003, 09:02 PM

checking in

krisp · 07-06-2003, 11:15 PM

ima do FEAR as my topic...g'luck maven

<maven> · 07-07-2003, 06:32 PM

In, damn I didn't even see this.
good luck, I'm probably doing "Pictures On The Wall", but it might change.

krisp · 07-08-2003, 02:48 PM

kwel, i think im doing fear....g'luck

krisp · 07-09-2003, 02:10 PM

TOPIC-FEAR
A topic thats not touched ofen enough, its ruff
but some people aint got the balls for this stuff
Fear, Is walking outside and hearing an air raid siren
You was just in the wrong place, you didn’t have good timin
Fear can be seen at the bottom of a bottle of gin
Or 1000 leagues under the sea with no oxygen
Fear, can consume you and it can eat you alive
Kill you inside, stop you from your everlasting climb
Fear, is bein imprisoned in a 9 by 9 wall
With no 1 to call, only reading your writings on the wall
waiting to be freed, with a second chance at life
or until you get meet by a funny looking man with a knife
fear, is knowing cats in your neighbrohood want you dead
so instead, of going outside, you lay in fear in bed
fear, is being hunted, then shipped in the first wave
to a hole new world just to become another slave
fear, is being infected with a flesh eating disease
first the amputate your arms then they go for your knees
fear, seeps threw the body faster then blood threw vains
it can be seen by your enemys, more visible then rain
fear, is not making enough money to support your family
watching your kids starve, and blackout periodically
fear, can be a good distraction, or an immediate reaction
it can make or break a faction, depends how its rationed
fear, is getting into a fight in front of the hole school
100’s of kids watch as you get mad a fucking fool
fear, is triyng to make a living off selling trees
but you can C, cause the cops are gaining rapidly
they caught on to your operation, now you facin
11 blue suits, whos skin colors are casion
fear, is knowing that his versus is better for certain
cause his rhymes twist and connect like letters in cursive..(echos)

<maven> · 07-10-2003, 01:24 AM

Pictures on the Wall
Pale moonlight pierced into the blackness of the room
giving just enough light. It can never be safe to assume
that you will forget the past, times that never last
and all those Kodak moments put me in a mental cast
I look onto the card paper, and you smile back at me
the light in your eyes enchants. I cannot joyously
tear your smile in half, because you're up on the wall
and like so many pin ups I will never let you fall
because I don't want to forget the way you always smiled
it's desirable at times. My memories have been defiled
for a while, and when I think of you they rush right back
picking out the negative parts. My 3rd eye has Cataracts
I can't see deeper into the sinking depth of your mind
These pictures on the wall leave my love for you undefined
so I back away, to the very farthest side of the space
because this chamber of despair is just emotion's disgrace
"Why are you always so happy?!" you just keep smiling
the other pictures blurr, while 911 I should be dialing
I need help. I'm talking to an image caught of a time
when you loved me too, acting emotions out in mime
cause it was just a Sharade, just another party game
cold spring water of your greed extinguished love's flame
But theres a flame I can ignite, that will begin to spark
this is one of cupid's arrows that definatly met it's mark
so I raise the can of gas and soak your perpetual grin
I watch it stream down the wall covering Fugifilm's kin
Striking the match on my thigh, I toss it into the liquid
the wall woofs into flame, slightly toasting my eyelids
pictures curl and fall, this is a storm they cannot weather
you smile melts instantly, a memory that is lost forever...
Moral:
except in my mind, I surprise myself to find
that there were no pictures and no wall
this was my emotional downfall
You can never know what I do
images don't matter, there was only you

Peace

Resilient. · 07-10-2003, 02:08 AM

.. ^ Over No Shows

-Weez

Entrensical · 07-10-2003, 03:02 AM

vote-maven

just a better story

a more pleasant read

krisps was corny

but its whatever

kaszmo · 07-10-2003, 03:28 AM

vote- maven

krisp:
nice concept, i liked how u explained the word fear in all the different situations but the constand repetition made ur whole verse feel more like a poem and not a rapable verse, u know? the flow was there but here n there a bit choopy.. but overall u had a nice verse but to me it was more of a poem..

maven:
jus str8 up beautyful.. they way u set the whole story up already got my vote.. u always kept sumthin open, like i had to read it to the end cus i wanted to know who this person was.. even tho u never revealed her i still loved the ending it made me think.. u also kept ur flow up throught out the verse so u get my vote!

nice battle

iceheart · 07-10-2003, 12:29 PM

Vote: Maven

krisp's sounded like he wasn't exactly sure of how to use his vocabulary, while on the other hand maven just fit together like a puzzle. it wasn't perfect but it was better than krsips, and it had a better storyline to it. plus that little moral thing at the end didn't hurt - thought it was creative

DahLohner · 07-10-2003, 02:45 PM

Hmm..
Krisp- Man that was awkward. you had ok flow, and some of your fear situations were cool..but the ending was just bad, and bitten I think (canibus)..oh well.

Maven- GREAT story, lovely poetry all over this, it looked like a verse by that rapper from Linkin park tho in its ambiguousness, but it was compelling nevertheless.

Vote-Maven

IMOUT

Cereal_Killer · 07-11-2003, 09:39 PM

vote = maven
good job to both but mav just had an actual story not trying to explain what fear is, sorry i couldn't get into krisp but you had good flow and ok word play keep it up both of u.

Cocaine Charlie · 07-12-2003, 06:46 AM

vote maven..

i pretty much agree with what entrens said..M had a better verse..kept me more interested..

Omen · 07-12-2003, 06:00 PM

Maven wins 2-0

Krisp Loss 1-3

07-05-2003, 07:57 PM	#1 (permalink)
Omen O Luh Da Kids Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: IND INC Posts: 21,058	40. <maven> 1-0 vs. 41. Krisp 1-2 VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST Choose 1 topic here: RSTL Topics !!!! and write your story for your match in this thread! LINE LIMIT: 4 lines - NO SHOWS 16 lines - MINIMAL 52 lines - MAXIMAL VOTING: No crew votes No payback votes No 2nd Chance Votes YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD.. VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!! FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!! if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!! GO FOR IT!!! __________________ *The Elite* *Starving Artist*

07-05-2003, 09:02 PM	#2 (permalink)
krisp you knowwwwwww Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 5,025	checking in __________________ THE RM POLICE: Locking up homo Posters since 2007. Currently in homo posting jail: On homo posting probation:

07-06-2003, 11:15 PM	#3 (permalink)
krisp you knowwwwwww Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 5,025	ima do FEAR as my topic...g'luck maven __________________ THE RM POLICE: Locking up homo Posters since 2007. Currently in homo posting jail: On homo posting probation:

07-08-2003, 02:48 PM	#5 (permalink)
krisp you knowwwwwww Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 5,025	kwel, i think im doing fear....g'luck __________________ THE RM POLICE: Locking up homo Posters since 2007. Currently in homo posting jail: On homo posting probation:

07-09-2003, 02:10 PM	#6 (permalink)
krisp you knowwwwwww Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 5,025	TOPIC-FEAR A topic thats not touched ofen enough, its ruff but some people aint got the balls for this stuff Fear, Is walking outside and hearing an air raid siren You was just in the wrong place, you didn’t have good timin Fear can be seen at the bottom of a bottle of gin Or 1000 leagues under the sea with no oxygen Fear, can consume you and it can eat you alive Kill you inside, stop you from your everlasting climb Fear, is bein imprisoned in a 9 by 9 wall With no 1 to call, only reading your writings on the wall waiting to be freed, with a second chance at life or until you get meet by a funny looking man with a knife fear, is knowing cats in your neighbrohood want you dead so instead, of going outside, you lay in fear in bed fear, is being hunted, then shipped in the first wave to a hole new world just to become another slave fear, is being infected with a flesh eating disease first the amputate your arms then they go for your knees fear, seeps threw the body faster then blood threw vains it can be seen by your enemys, more visible then rain fear, is not making enough money to support your family watching your kids starve, and blackout periodically fear, can be a good distraction, or an immediate reaction it can make or break a faction, depends how its rationed fear, is getting into a fight in front of the hole school 100’s of kids watch as you get mad a fucking fool fear, is triyng to make a living off selling trees but you can C, cause the cops are gaining rapidly they caught on to your operation, now you facin 11 blue suits, whos skin colors are casion fear, is knowing that his versus is better for certain cause his rhymes twist and connect like letters in cursive..(echos) __________________ THE RM POLICE: Locking up homo Posters since 2007. Currently in homo posting jail: On homo posting probation:

07-07-2003, 06:32 PM	#4 (permalink)
<maven> Vice Versa Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Toronto Posts: 14	In, damn I didn't even see this. good luck, I'm probably doing "Pictures On The Wall", but it might change.

07-10-2003, 01:24 AM	#7 (permalink)
<maven> Vice Versa Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Toronto Posts: 14	Pictures on the Wall Pale moonlight pierced into the blackness of the room giving just enough light. It can never be safe to assume that you will forget the past, times that never last and all those Kodak moments put me in a mental cast I look onto the card paper, and you smile back at me the light in your eyes enchants. I cannot joyously tear your smile in half, because you're up on the wall and like so many pin ups I will never let you fall because I don't want to forget the way you always smiled it's desirable at times. My memories have been defiled for a while, and when I think of you they rush right back picking out the negative parts. My 3rd eye has Cataracts I can't see deeper into the sinking depth of your mind These pictures on the wall leave my love for you undefined so I back away, to the very farthest side of the space because this chamber of despair is just emotion's disgrace "Why are you always so happy?!" you just keep smiling the other pictures blurr, while 911 I should be dialing I need help. I'm talking to an image caught of a time when you loved me too, acting emotions out in mime cause it was just a Sharade, just another party game cold spring water of your greed extinguished love's flame But theres a flame I can ignite, that will begin to spark this is one of cupid's arrows that definatly met it's mark so I raise the can of gas and soak your perpetual grin I watch it stream down the wall covering Fugifilm's kin Striking the match on my thigh, I toss it into the liquid the wall woofs into flame, slightly toasting my eyelids pictures curl and fall, this is a storm they cannot weather you smile melts instantly, a memory that is lost forever... Moral: except in my mind, I surprise myself to find that there were no pictures and no wall this was my emotional downfall You can never know what I do images don't matter, there was only you Peace __________________ RaidersoftheLostArt

07-10-2003, 02:08 AM	#8 (permalink)
Resilient. ILLWEEMAN Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: En-Why Sucka Posts: 23,774	.. ^ Over No Shows -Weez __________________ I'M JUST A H O O L I G A N OF CYBER RAP (What The Shit is a Textmaster?) ------------------------- iLLWeeZGoD Baby! My RBL Battle Vs. Linesman

07-10-2003, 03:02 AM	#9 (permalink)
Entrensical still EXS and STC Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: play like a boss, die like a boss Posts: 9,367	vote-maven just a better story a more pleasant read krisps was corny but its whatever __________________ Trens & Tommy Best of Both Worlds A God Amongst Fools i bring the heat, in fact i get the drama blown, so far outta proportion, i even get ya mama known

07-10-2003, 03:28 AM	#10 (permalink)
kaszmo Registered User Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 128	vote- maven krisp: nice concept, i liked how u explained the word fear in all the different situations but the constand repetition made ur whole verse feel more like a poem and not a rapable verse, u know? the flow was there but here n there a bit choopy.. but overall u had a nice verse but to me it was more of a poem.. maven: jus str8 up beautyful.. they way u set the whole story up already got my vote.. u always kept sumthin open, like i had to read it to the end cus i wanted to know who this person was.. even tho u never revealed her i still loved the ending it made me think.. u also kept ur flow up throught out the verse so u get my vote! nice battle

07-10-2003, 12:29 PM	#11 (permalink)
iceheart The Frozen Poet Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: antarctica - they sent me here citin some shit like "you are a danger to society" wtf. Posts: 692	Vote: Maven krisp's sounded like he wasn't exactly sure of how to use his vocabulary, while on the other hand maven just fit together like a puzzle. it wasn't perfect but it was better than krsips, and it had a better storyline to it. plus that little moral thing at the end didn't hurt - thought it was creative

07-10-2003, 02:45 PM	#12 (permalink)
DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy Join Date: Dec 1999 Location: B.I.G&P.A.C > B.iggie I.nstilled G.reatness & P.ac A.rroused C.onscienceness Posts: 8,947	Hmm.. Krisp- Man that was awkward. you had ok flow, and some of your fear situations were cool..but the ending was just bad, and bitten I think (canibus)..oh well. Maven- GREAT story, lovely poetry all over this, it looked like a verse by that rapper from Linkin park tho in its ambiguousness, but it was compelling nevertheless. Vote-Maven IMOUT

07-11-2003, 09:39 PM	#13 (permalink)
Cereal_Killer California Cornflakes Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: In a tub of gutter glitter Posts: 3,180	vote = maven good job to both but mav just had an actual story not trying to explain what fear is, sorry i couldn't get into krisp but you had good flow and ok word play keep it up both of u. __________________ :·.·: cocaine, genius, insomnia :·.·: .·.cereal killer . got life . inf truth.·. .. You're not likely to see a green CK Unless you've got a ticket with MDA ..

07-12-2003, 06:46 AM	#14 (permalink)
Cocaine Charlie shock aka solution Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: militiasness Posts: 126	vote maven.. i pretty much agree with what entrens said..M had a better verse..kept me more interested..

07-12-2003, 06:00 PM	#15 (permalink)
Omen O Luh Da Kids Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: IND INC Posts: 21,058	Maven wins 2-0 Krisp Loss 1-3 __________________ *The Elite* *Starving Artist*

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