[DF:WK6] Chin Kwon vs Restproof (Vote!)

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Chin Kwon
Active Worth: 002pts
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Restproof
Active Worth: 000pts

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[Restproof]

Hello. Alternate, please.

[DF:WK6] CHAMPIONSHIP : .:Pain:. vs Vern Acular vs Atheist (Vote!)
1. [DF:WK6] CONTENDERSHIP : Got Life? vs nom de plume. (Vote!)
2. [DF:WK6] Red Contenders : Lucifa vs Bonnie Bathory (Vote!)
3.[DF:WK6] Khoi NguJin vs MC M-16 vs Lotus (Vote!)
4.[DF:WK6] Jimmy Eles vs oNeiRiC (Vote!)
5.[DF:WK6] Blue Contenders : Cormier vs Scatterboxx (Vote!)

[Chin Kwon]

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[DF:WK6] CONTENDERSHIP : Got Life? vs nom de plume. (Vote!)

[DF:WK6] CHAMPIONSHIP : .:Pain:. vs Vern Acular vs Atheist (Vote!)

[DF:WK6] Blue Contenders : Cormier vs Scatterboxx (Vote!)

[DF:WK6] -Atreyu- vs BaySick (Vote!)

[DF:WK6] Red Contenders : Lucifa vs Bonnie Bathory (Vote!)

[Chin Kwon]

extension??

[Restproof]

idc

[Chin Kwon]

"Only two things are infinite, the universe and human stupidity, and I'm not sure about the former."
- Albert Einstein


I'm one who likes to find the brighter side of humanity
Where lies aren't really lies...but, rather, a most slyest of flattery
The source of vanity that had structured our fantasy
though distorts what we were taught
has reward us with grandest sweets
But i fear the plan we seek, as our times moves forward
can prove a horrid paradox; as our hands and knees
scrapes and bleed faking deeds just to haste the scene
to find ways to feed, one's force to create deceits
placing needs beyond the concepts of pain and sleep
and even moral takes a seat behind the faintest dreams.
I've gain much widom over time as i survey the scene;
It's a dog eat dog world...this place just ain't for me;
as i gaze the TV screen a fit of laughter breaking free
from my great serene; i watch how vile and hateful beings
seems to take the cream in every single rating joints
case in point...
take Flavor of Love for example as New York grace the screen
showcasing great disdain for her mates and teams
only to be made a sort of semi star and labeled queen
of reality?! Of coursed it baffled me; my slate was clean
must i remake myself to gain the wealth and stake my dreams?
Another case? Let see, let's take 50; Millenium's favorite king
who's claim to fame was 9 bullets that shaped and grazed his skin!
as fake as it seems, it may reflect our basic beings;
how we're attracted to loud colors and faces that seems
to be what we're not; and in itself it's fate that we
are drawn to the most harden of characters;
victorious in their own ways, though dishonest and mean
i guess every success story has it's plots and schemes
and we often soften ourselves before their hardened deeds
yet enthralled deeply; buying into their shock routines
but we all scoff as their story unfold with lonely rethoughts
that life's a mountain climb and it does gets cold at the top
still, why are we infatuated with these dangerous fiends
praising them with attentions and wonders...just....creating their needs
basically it freakin pains me to see this way to succeed
i guess the road to success is more or less.....paved on the screen
So be crazy, cause you'll always have an audience paying to see
the most insane antics. A surefire tactics to fame?
Shiet..that aint hard son,
take a cue from this guy; g'head, count the views he's gotten....

[Restproof]

Pilsner ftw.

written to the following beat: "To Catch A Thief" - Lovage



____________

shirts tucked in... pleats folded neatly
the teacher... is speaking. one minute left-
-just a few more seconds... anticipant. restless.
trying to do their best, not to fidget as the stress hits.

fingers drum desks as the energy pervades-
every limb, and then they shake- this persists in every grade,
as the second hand approaches near its slowest in the day,
kids can feel it thick as syrup and it's coursing through their veins...

RING RING RIIIING!!!! ...Recess strikes-
Children fly out of their seats, and they file into a line-
-Mrs. Highland just reminds them don't be violent, do be kind.
...she lights a cigarette, as she marches them outside.

Black-top speckled with plaid skirts and slacks-
Teachers huddle in a corner for a smoke and just relax
turn their backs to the kiddies, who are giggling and giddy
they all divy up into their silly cliques and little packs

third grade's on four square. fourth's on the court there.
...second grade invades their kickball game...
while...
Other kids are scattred, scratching brightly colored patterns
and engaged in idle chatter on the asphalt that is paved.

Now... you can spot Jimmy from a mile away.
Orange-haired twirp... smirk... freckles on his face
Stocky frame... Furrowed brow... Scowling gallery
Held back a grade- today he'll take it out on Mallory

Kicking rocks at her face... children flock to the space
...the vulture circles closer as he's ...mockin' his prey
Mikey drops in the fray, commandin' "Stop it, Okay?!"
he's walkin' in, brave, like he won't catch a rock to the face

deep gasps from the crowd...
(ooooooooooo)
what the fuck is happening now?
Mikey's toe to toe and doesn't seem to be backing down
Mallory's on hands and knees, crawling off in horror
Mikey doesn't waver, fuck if Jim's a full head taller!!!
Tired of his shit, peers are wired and they're lit
Fists ball up. Swings are fired and they miss
Tension's dire and a riot opens wide into the rift
kicks are flying as the kids are fighting, mired in abyss...

white shirts stained... by random bloody running noses
standing dummies frozen catch a blast of knuckle doses
girls start pulling hair.... guys are locked in grapples
everyone is apt to catch an asswhoopin' at that school
even the autistics find a niche in the ballistics
the retards pick up sticks, begin to dish out the sadistic
massacre hits a pitch when Jim's aperture gets split
He cries out... but motherfucker that's what you should get...

RING RING RIIIING! ...Recess is done...
the dogpile scatters and runs, class has begun...
kids file up again according to classroom and height
but something bout the headcount just isn't right...
Mrs. Highland spies her eyes into the distance
...insistent that one of these little bastards is missin'...
She searches the black top, wandering... then stops...























Little Mallory's passed out... glassed-eyed on the asphalt.

[-Atreyu-]

Pshhhhhht...battle of the week here folks:


Chin Kwon-
Damn good verse!The mechanics were nice and the flow was sort of choppy at parts,but it putted along quite well.The content was amazing and thought provoking...although Ive thought of this topic and will flip it later on...you did a decent job.This verse was ntohing but the truth,and I hope it gets made into an Audio.
"But i fear the plan we seek, as our times moves forward
can prove a horrid paradox; as our hands and knees
scrapes and bleed faking deeds just to haste the scene
to find ways to feed, one's force to create deceits
placing needs beyond the concepts of pain and sleep
and even moral takes a seat behind the faintest dreams.
I've gain much widom over time as i survey the scene;
It's a dog eat dog world...this place just ain't for me;
as i gaze the TV screen a fit of laughter breaking free
from my great serene; i watch how vile and hateful beings
seems to take the cream in every single rating joints
case in point..."
Dopeness
Chin Kwon=A/98.5

Restproof-Pure fire.This piece was extra original and constructed brilliantly.It kept me guessing what exactly the outcome would be and it was totally unexpected.This is a classic.
"deep gasps from the crowd...
(ooooooooooo)
what the fuck is happening now?
Mikey's toe to toe and doesn't seem to be backing down
Mallory's on hands and knees, crawling off in horror
Mikey doesn't waver, fuck if Jim's a full head taller!!!
Tired of his shit, peers are wired and they're lit
Fists ball up. Swings are fired and they miss
Tension's dire and a riot opens wide into the rift
kicks are flying as the kids are fighting, mired in abyss..."
Your flow was incredible and easy to spit.
Restproof=A/99

This was an extremely hard decision,but im give it to Restproof for a better flow.Peace.

[Jimmy Eles]

this was a very nice battle..

chin - this was a well thought out topical...and a interesting read...content was good and you expressed your thought nicely on the subject....scheme was also good...you had mid bars rymes....multi's on the endings..so your mechanics all round where good..i also liked that you used current people and shows to get across the point of where you were comeing from..your flow was also on point though feel off in some spots....little mistakes i seen like the begining of one bar was......I've gain much widom...useing gain instead of gain'd....simple mistake....you rhymed scene twice..within like 5 lines..but you used the same end rhyme throughout...which is hard....and i think useing another end rhyme word or two would of helped the verse...kinda got repetitive to me.. .but thats just nitpicking....all in all a very well thought out and executed verse..
i guess every success story has it's plots and schemes
and we often soften ourselves before their hardened deeds
yet enthralled deeply; buying into their shock routines<---fav bars...



rest - you went for the story approach..and since i never have read anything from you im pleasantly surprised...you had very good imagery and where great with the emotional aspect of your charecter's also..and very creative take on your topic of choice to..so props on that..your mechanics were'nt as nice as chins...flow was better imo....scheme was simple on the multi tip....but it was differant and still flowed......but like i said not much use of multi's ...you threw mid bars in there though and threw the ending rhyme in the middle of the next bar whiched helped the flow and verse alot so it wasn't all basic a/a / a / a/a / all the way threw........with out them it would of been real real simplisticbut the story itself was very enjoyable read....so instead of sacrifice your content for your mechanics your did the oppisite and when for content....which i prefer...
third grade's on four square. fourth's on the court there.
...second grade invades their kickball game...
while...
Other kids are scattred, scratching brightly colored patterns
and engaged in idle chatter on the asphalt that is paved.<-- fav bars..




hmmm..chinyou went the topical route and had better use of multi's and a more complex scheme.....rest you went for a story and while your mechanics were't where chins was you told a very good story with nice imagery and emotional depth...and was also worded very good...so ima give it to you rest ...chin would have had it if it was someone telling a lesser story ...imo

vote - restproof...

[Lucifa]

I echo the sentiment of this being a real nice match-up .. very much enjoyed the read here ..

Chin - steadily climbing my personal fav list as you avoid cliche pieces and deliver your writing with flair .. solid mechanics and some nice use of multies in this piece made it a fluid and enjoyable read .. the content was straight and lol @ the vid (have seen it before) but yeah .. that's stupidity for stupidity's sake .. what I think it slightly lacked was being bold in statement .. it was a good read but it didnt have any kind of profound impact on me with the message the topic/quote opened up .. good shit though .. I liked it ..

Rest - what an introduction to the 'new' rstl .. this was a real pleasure to read .. the scene played out visually and you delivered it with some real nice writing .. the flow was cool and the rhyming was on point IMO .. the storyline wasn't all that interesting in concept but you made it interesting .. or atleast 'entertaining' .. by how you went about writing the piece .. really enjoyed reading this verse ..

nice match-up here and well worth the read ..

Vote = Restproof .. it is a close call of sorts .. but at the same time the winner is clear for me .. I enjoyed reading both verses and both had solid mechanics and few negatives to their respective pieces .. but I enjoyed reading Rest's verse slightly more by way of the content and visual aspects .. good job both of you though ..

[BaySick]

chin - good peice nice flow, lol at that youtube shit fuckin hilarious...but i mean i liked to meaning of this verse not as nicely composed as rest but good emotion...

rest, good verse akward flow but it worked good story developed nice, and good use of this pic and good imagery...

vote - restproof for a more polished verse better scheme and smoother storyline it just was easy to follow....chins was good just a tad be more choppy of a read either way a good battle.....

[Got Life?]

Chin - to me this was nothing new here...a basic quick glimpse at society without really saying anything of your own or adding anything new to the discussion...really all you did was tried to pound the entire scope of what you were saying into a few basic examples and because of that it did nothing for me as a reader...the read itself was smooth for the most part, but there were a lot of typos throughout the piece...making certain words plural when they shouldn't have been and vice versa...all in all the mechanics really could have been tightened up a whole lot better than they actually were...decent piece, but like I said...nothing special.

Rest - loved it...the story started out a little bit slow in that first bit, but man did it pick up pace and held my interest all the way through...it flowed like fucking butter to that beat and I thought the story was great/hysterical when the retards start getting in on the brawl with sticks and stones...if you keep this up i'ma def make sure to keep reading your pieces...one of the better verses I read this week.

this wasn't even close in my eyes.

vote = Restproof.

[Cormier]

Chin- pretty decent verse. i thought the writing itself outweighed the content here. the content just really wasn't anything that special. i don't know, it just didn't do a lot for me. i don't think you really made any strong statements and the whole verse didn't have many, if any, quotable lines. However, it flowed nicely and the rhyme was pretty complex. there were defintiely some times where you forced some rhymes where i ink you tried to carry out the same patter a couple lines too long. Overall, this was a solid piece, but nothing about it really stood out to me.

Rest- i liked this. the story itself wasn't anything amazing, but the way you wrote itand let the story unfold was really nice. you really captured the sense and feel of being a young kid waiting for recess and standing up to a bully. took me back to my good old days when i kicked the piss out of a kid on the playground. this was just an enjoyable read that really progressed nicely and read very naturally.

VOTE= Restproof

[Lucifa]

Note: BaySick's vote does not count.

[Khôi NguJin]

Chin Kwon - cool piece that is really relevant to american's obsession with reality tv and the media gettin' all the ins and outs of celebrities lives. it was a socially aware piece that is aware of the youtube generation and how we just feed of this shit. sensationalist media is all we see, and we just crave it more and more. good job with that. you got your point across, but your flow and scheme suffered because of it. although it did flow okay to me, some parts could have been more polished...overalll, i enjoyed this one.

Restproof - nice descriptions here..i could see this shit unfolding all the way through. extremely strong piece that will be hard to beat. the way the story progressed was perfect i think, and it wasn't too long winded or too short either. i love how you used that picture and crafted such a vivid story of recess, all joyous and full of laughter, however tragedy strikes when little mallory went down. all around awesome job.

vote - Restproof, it's safe to say rest took this one. nice battle here guys.