[DF:WK1] 3. Lucifa v 12. MetaSin (VOTE NOW!)

Lucifa · 07-07-2008, 03:10 AM

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Lucifa
Active Worth: 003pts
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MetaSin
Active Worth: 000pts

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Lucifa · 07-07-2008, 03:22 AM

MetaSin · 07-07-2008, 07:13 AM

check: alternate (I guess lol)
Votes:

I'll be here.

Lucifa · 07-07-2008, 07:42 AM

The RSTL Outing

They pulled up to the cabin with dusk falling
"Pain should be here already, let me just call him"
but Infinite's phone told him he had Limited Service
no reception found in the surrounding primitive surface
the desolate terrain fills the field of vision
Got Life? is suddenly struck with fits of indecision
"Yo LDogg, this is creepy, remember your RSTL verse?"
everyone laughs and claim "yo, those were just words"
"a story-telling piece of work from his composition"
but there was an eerie undertone of nervous disposition
light fills the car windows as Pain pulls up
"Waddup? Oh shit yo, this place looks fucked!"
Jook jumps out Pain's car and stretches his legs
wiggles his arms to loosen up and flexes his pecks
"Let's get in there and start this vacation"
TeKneeK steps out last with his laptop, camcorder and PlayStation
...
..
.
As they enter, Got Life? looks and laughs at TeKneeK
"TeK, you know we're not even gonna be here for a week?"
"You're such a fucking geek" "Fuck you" "Blow me princess"
"Go fuck your sister in an RSTL verse of incest"
LDogg falls to the floor in a fit of utter laughter
Jook interupts "Help set up and bitch at each other after"
back and forth from the cars with beer and clothes
Infinite insists "I still think we shoulda invited some hoes"
and he's quickly shut down by Jook who repeats
"This is a MAN's weekend, not for chicks and skeets"
Pain throws the bong in Infinite's direction
"Chill, relax amongst the RSTL's higher echelon"
so as night draws in..their fatigue kicks in
Pain looks to Jook "6 hours is not a quick spin"
the room ignites with drug induced laughin'
Jook replies "It's worth it, just look at this cabin"
...
..
.
Infinite sprawled out on the sofa, sleeping, dribbling
Got Life? and Pain on the floor, weaping, giggling
"We should shave his eyebrows or even his legs"
"Ha yeah, but I'm still pissed LDogg and Tek got the beds"
Jook sat in the arm-chair and finished his bong
closed his eyes and thought about how he misses his mom
all falls silent as everyone drifts in slumber
suddenly woken up by the blitz of thunder
Tek and LDogg walk in the lounge "Something's not right"
Pain rubs his eyes, looks around, "Yo, where's Got Life??"
Jook stirs in his chair "Hey man, what's tha fuss?"
Tek gives him a stare and says "We're missing the fat fuck"
"Ok guys" said Jook "Let's go find him then"
"Pain check the cars, you 2 outback, I'll check the den"
They split up in search and returned to the lounge
"Can't find him" "Us either, but look what we found"
...
..
.
Tek held Got Life?'s bag of candy bars
"He doesn't go anywhere without this, he can't be far"
LDogg shrieked and panicked until he was breathless
as he pointed at Infinite's body, lifeless, headless
he ran to his room and Jook followed "I'll calm him"
Pain cried "I don't get it. Why would anyone harm Inf?"
Tek was uneased but knew the internet would like to see
"I'm gonna get my camera and film this scene"
but as he entered his room he just stood startled
saw LDogg dismembered and suddenly his voice gargled
as a knife slid his neck and exposed his larynx
a figure stepped out "I guess you're next to have it?"
Pain was confused "Jook?" "No bitch, this is Nah Son"
"What you doing?" "Continuing my fantasy from part one"
as he plunged the knife in to Pain and hacked off his limbs
then Jook walked outside, hung his other-self and sat on his swing
..preparing his next cast of victims..
...
..
.

In The Memory Of:
(in order of appearance)

Infinite Truth
Got Life?
LDogg
.:Pain:.
TeKneeK

The Only Image Found On Tek's Cam:

MetaSin · 07-09-2008, 07:04 PM

I need an extension. Im sorry man, but got some real shit to deal with for the next day or two, and Im not sure if Ill have time to write for either league

MetaSin · 07-11-2008, 11:58 PM

I owe u better than this...

Jagged Shards Of Broken Dreams

Hindsight Is A Wonderful Thing
Anon

we had enough of the games and enough of the struggle
and enough of the shame, through the love and the blame
as acoustics serenade, and start strumming my pain
but I couldn’t pull the strings so our love would remain
throughout constant monotony still nothins the same
I cant keep trying to fix it when theres nothin to gain
Love is insane; like a drug flooding my brain
Got me stressin like I can’t inject enough in my veins
As my fingers get numb, and I remember the times
I was touchin her frame, but my memory’s blind
To lies that eat me up, tho the deception was kind
Designed to stifle anger, but neglected my mind
Trying to save me the grief, hiding me from myself
When the real truth of it all was I needed some help
I needed reflection, but wat I feared was the truth
N the worst thing about it is u mirrored me too…..

Unfinished.

Got Life? · 07-12-2008, 12:28 AM

Lucy - you know this wasn't the most original piece as you pretty much ganked the idea from a few other people who brought back this type of piece, but aside from that I found this hysterical...not to the point where i was crackin up loud as hell, but the whole piece kept me in a comedic mood and i found it rather enjoyable...nicely done.

Meta - damn right you should have brought more to the table...lazy bastid...I hope whatever came up gets handled and that you're back next week with that proper fire...this was disappointing though what you had was pretty solid...it just obviously didn't progress anywhere as you didn't really write much.

vote = Lucy for obvious reasons.

Lucifa · 07-12-2008, 05:18 AM

^ vote makes it 2-0.

3-Planes · 07-12-2008, 12:18 PM

Lucifa

lol...? though it's pretty safe to write with league writers in the cast like this because alot of the people signed in right now are probably loyal patrons so to speak but me, i'm only on a need-to-know basis in this league and haven't really spent e-time with many of you.. with that being said this was pretty funny, it had this good vibrations type of humor to it from start to finish with a sweet flow to.

MetaSin

can't say that what little you had drew me in as it felt like a pretty cliché ordeal about to happen, if you know what i'm saying.. mechanics were nice but that matters not since you only brought the intro to a piece (and i like i said: this time around i can't say that it seemed all that intruiging either)

vote: Lucifa

for the more complete verse, though to me personally that verse wasn't all that hard to beat (it was quality, it's just i don't have the frame of reference)

.:Pain:. · 07-12-2008, 02:05 PM

Luc - lol, You did this concept better than anyone else that has ever tried it I think. You kinda took the plot from identity, but not really, and twisted it into a piece with rstl characters. I don't like how I died, but I do like how I smoked weed. All in all, great verse, flow wasn't great, and neither was the rhyme scheme, sometimes the lines didn't really rhyme at all, but the concept and the execution made this a very enjoyable read.

Metasin - The flow was actually pretty beastly. not a huge fan of rhyming the same word more than once though, and you did nothin' and love a lot in those opening lines. Really had the makings a great verse, I mean, it's a concept everyone has done, but you approached it in a different manner. Really good shit. Just try harder next time so I can read a real verse!!!

Vote - Luc...

T.a.C · 07-13-2008, 03:10 AM

lucifa- damn. this seemed to me like a diss story verse. maybe its just me. LOL @ the dick bong. your verse was tight. great detail, great story, dope rhymes. total package

meta- damn not sure what to say. i gotta somehow stretch this to 2 lines. what you did drop i was feeling. i see you moving up in the league. ima jus savor these last few moments where im actually ahead of you in a league. lol

vote-lucifa

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DeadKing · 07-13-2008, 08:10 AM

luc - i read this earlier in the week, lol, a very good read and prob. match of the week i assume. not sure if i can remember you ever writing a humorous piece or not but this verse was very relevant with the current drama of jook and alias' or whatever the deal was with that, and i loved how you conveyed allthat drama intoa verse. dope flow and visual writers voice, dope verse all around

meta - dammit you,lol............. continue to shred the rbl and i wont be such a bastard to you, but you know as much as i know that you want to duel wield that crown, all in due time i suppose, all in due time.

vote - luc

TR NOTE: 2 full lines of critique or the vote doesn't count. I know you were close, but look at the first half of your first line haha.

RICO · 07-13-2008, 08:21 AM

hahaahahah luc.

i like this very much. very creative. although i wasnt in the story...it worked for me. flow was a lil choppy at time's but the story was inviting enough to not make a difference. end was awesome though. the whole jook/nahson contreversy. good shit.

i dont need to say much more

LUC gets the vote for a lack of story from metasin

TR NOTE: 2 full lines of critique for each writer or the vote won't count.

Scatterboxx · 07-13-2008, 04:17 PM

lucy... i read your verse much earlier this week & thought it was fucking hysterical - potential for verse of the week. the storytelling was incredibly entertaining. the deaths were hysterical, though i think jook shoulda spiked the bong with like 50 strips-worth of acid to kill me instead. nah just playing. mechanics were solid for the most part, but not as tight as meta's - your rhyme scheme was just above decent, whereas your flow was very strong & rarely fell off. merely by entertainment factor you probably could have won this verse had meta dropped. then again, what meta had was nice as fuck imo. so who knows. good shit homie. i was cracking up the whole time. still potential for verse of the week based on what i've read. you, 3pa, & pain have seriously impressed me this week so who knows.

meta... well... as i said, what you had was nice as fuck. everything seemed so natural. the emotion of the piece, had you lengthened it, could have been explained in further depth, & that would have been seriously nice, cuz this piece had the potential to have that. your mechanics alone, out of the 16 bars you had, were stronger than lucy's. but the lackluster depth of the content obviously lost it for you. def straight enough for a 16 bar verse audio tho. ha.

v- lucy.
obviously.

nom de plume. · 07-13-2008, 04:35 PM

luc - i read through this just after you posted it and found it to be a highly enjoyable piece. it doesnt really need a break down of 'the rhyme scheme here was etc etc'. because it a fluidly paced and written story that was easy to get in to and was bloody entertaining along the way. probably one of the best verses i've seen from you. good times had by all.

meta - for what there was it was alright eh. the flow and what not were all good. just something that, obviously, would have been far more interesting as a full verse. hopefully see a full piece from you next week. obviously you knew that this piece wasn't going to win it for you. but who knows, it could've as a full length piece. i guess we'll never know eh haha.

vote - luc.

07-07-2008, 03:10 AM	#1 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	[DF:WK1] 3. Lucifa v 12. MetaSin (VOTE NOW!) Welcome to your match-up thread. Click Here For Rules & Regulations Quick Over-View: 12-64 lines to a topic provided in the [TOPICS] thread of the sticky area. Do not post more than 3 times within your own match-up thread. ^No more than once in anyone elses either!^ Stay fresh, no recycling. Opt-In to the "Alternate" scheme before posting a verse. This will increase your chances of obtaining feedback and votes via another opponent. Just check in and state you wish to alternate, should you suffer a no-show. Down To Business. This Match-Up is between: In Rank Order Lucifa Active Worth: 003pts Vs. MetaSin Active Worth: 000pts Good Luck Ladies. Prove Your Worth __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running Last edited by Lucifa; 07-13-2008 at 06:42 PM.

07-07-2008, 03:22 AM	#2 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	check : alternate Votes: [DF:WK1] 5. 3-Planes v 10. NOBLE SOLDIER (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 3. TheReturn v 12. MC Guttso (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 4. Scatterboxx v 11. sfsportsfan (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 2. .:Pain:. v 13. SpeedyCalhoun (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 4. nom de plume. v 11. _KDP_ (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 7. Chin Kwon v 8. tbone (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 1. DaAlmightyDolla v 14. Calibre (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 1. Got Life? v 14. rocket (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 2. Vern Acular v 6. Mic-illaH (VOTE NOW!) [DF:WK1] 10. Saga v 13. Bonnie Bathory (VOTE NOW!) __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running Last edited by Lucifa; 07-13-2008 at 06:42 PM.

07-07-2008, 07:13 AM	#3 (permalink)
MetaSin I Don't Believe In You... Join Date: Jan 2002 Posts: 2,040	check: alternate (I guess lol) Votes: I'll be here. __________________ TMU Precision "Ol school vibe, cuz I'm smokin reefer... and the blunt burn slow, like ya soul on ether... listenin to nasty nas and jay.... cuz ion like what other rappers got to say... blueprint, stillmatic, and yea I'm still at it... cats is lookin at me like I'm a real addict... cuz smokin that green is a real habbit... folk call me knowin that I will have it..."- Loot You don't wanna see the drama I could really Bring... I'll let that milli ring and turn ya body into silly string."- Loot

07-07-2008, 07:42 AM	#4 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	The RSTL Outing They pulled up to the cabin with dusk falling "Pain should be here already, let me just call him" but Infinite's phone told him he had Limited Service no reception found in the surrounding primitive surface the desolate terrain fills the field of vision Got Life? is suddenly struck with fits of indecision "Yo LDogg, this is creepy, remember your RSTL verse?" everyone laughs and claim "yo, those were just words" "a story-telling piece of work from his composition" but there was an eerie undertone of nervous disposition light fills the car windows as Pain pulls up "Waddup? Oh shit yo, this place looks fucked!" Jook jumps out Pain's car and stretches his legs wiggles his arms to loosen up and flexes his pecks "Let's get in there and start this vacation" TeKneeK steps out last with his laptop, camcorder and PlayStation ... .. . As they enter, Got Life? looks and laughs at TeKneeK "TeK, you know we're not even gonna be here for a week?" "You're such a fucking geek" "Fuck you" "Blow me princess" "Go fuck your sister in an RSTL verse of incest" LDogg falls to the floor in a fit of utter laughter Jook interupts "Help set up and bitch at each other after" back and forth from the cars with beer and clothes Infinite insists "I still think we shoulda invited some hoes" and he's quickly shut down by Jook who repeats "This is a MAN's weekend, not for chicks and skeets" Pain throws the bong in Infinite's direction "Chill, relax amongst the RSTL's higher echelon" so as night draws in..their fatigue kicks in Pain looks to Jook "6 hours is not a quick spin" the room ignites with drug induced laughin' Jook replies "It's worth it, just look at this cabin" ... .. . Infinite sprawled out on the sofa, sleeping, dribbling Got Life? and Pain on the floor, weaping, giggling "We should shave his eyebrows or even his legs" "Ha yeah, but I'm still pissed LDogg and Tek got the beds" Jook sat in the arm-chair and finished his bong closed his eyes and thought about how he misses his mom all falls silent as everyone drifts in slumber suddenly woken up by the blitz of thunder Tek and LDogg walk in the lounge "Something's not right" Pain rubs his eyes, looks around, "Yo, where's Got Life??" Jook stirs in his chair "Hey man, what's tha fuss?" Tek gives him a stare and says "We're missing the fat fuck" "Ok guys" said Jook "Let's go find him then" "Pain check the cars, you 2 outback, I'll check the den" They split up in search and returned to the lounge "Can't find him" "Us either, but look what we found" ... .. . Tek held Got Life?'s bag of candy bars "He doesn't go anywhere without this, he can't be far" LDogg shrieked and panicked until he was breathless as he pointed at Infinite's body, lifeless, headless he ran to his room and Jook followed "I'll calm him" Pain cried "I don't get it. Why would anyone harm Inf?" Tek was uneased but knew the internet would like to see "I'm gonna get my camera and film this scene" but as he entered his room he just stood startled saw LDogg dismembered and suddenly his voice gargled as a knife slid his neck and exposed his larynx a figure stepped out "I guess you're next to have it?" Pain was confused "Jook?" "No bitch, this is Nah Son" "What you doing?" "Continuing my fantasy from part one" as he plunged the knife in to Pain and hacked off his limbs then Jook walked outside, hung his other-self and sat on his swing ..preparing his next cast of victims.. ... .. . In The Memory Of: (in order of appearance) Infinite Truth Got Life? LDogg .:Pain:. TeKneeK The Only Image Found On Tek's Cam: __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running Last edited by Lucifa; 07-07-2008 at 12:08 PM. Reason: spelling

07-09-2008, 07:04 PM	#5 (permalink)
MetaSin I Don't Believe In You... Join Date: Jan 2002 Posts: 2,040	I need an extension. Im sorry man, but got some real shit to deal with for the next day or two, and Im not sure if Ill have time to write for either league __________________ TMU Precision "Ol school vibe, cuz I'm smokin reefer... and the blunt burn slow, like ya soul on ether... listenin to nasty nas and jay.... cuz ion like what other rappers got to say... blueprint, stillmatic, and yea I'm still at it... cats is lookin at me like I'm a real addict... cuz smokin that green is a real habbit... folk call me knowin that I will have it..."- Loot You don't wanna see the drama I could really Bring... I'll let that milli ring and turn ya body into silly string."- Loot

07-11-2008, 11:58 PM	#6 (permalink)
MetaSin I Don't Believe In You... Join Date: Jan 2002 Posts: 2,040	I owe u better than this... Jagged Shards Of Broken Dreams Hindsight Is A Wonderful Thing Anon we had enough of the games and enough of the struggle and enough of the shame, through the love and the blame as acoustics serenade, and start strumming my pain but I couldn’t pull the strings so our love would remain throughout constant monotony still nothins the same I cant keep trying to fix it when theres nothin to gain Love is insane; like a drug flooding my brain Got me stressin like I can’t inject enough in my veins As my fingers get numb, and I remember the times I was touchin her frame, but my memory’s blind To lies that eat me up, tho the deception was kind Designed to stifle anger, but neglected my mind Trying to save me the grief, hiding me from myself When the real truth of it all was I needed some help I needed reflection, but wat I feared was the truth N the worst thing about it is u mirrored me too….. Unfinished. __________________ TMU Precision "Ol school vibe, cuz I'm smokin reefer... and the blunt burn slow, like ya soul on ether... listenin to nasty nas and jay.... cuz ion like what other rappers got to say... blueprint, stillmatic, and yea I'm still at it... cats is lookin at me like I'm a real addict... cuz smokin that green is a real habbit... folk call me knowin that I will have it..."- Loot You don't wanna see the drama I could really Bring... I'll let that milli ring and turn ya body into silly string."- Loot

07-12-2008, 05:18 AM	#8 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	^ vote makes it 2-0. __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running

07-12-2008, 12:18 PM	#9 (permalink)
3-Planes the assman Join Date: Oct 2007 Location: sweden Posts: 517	Lucifa lol...? though it's pretty safe to write with league writers in the cast like this because alot of the people signed in right now are probably loyal patrons so to speak but me, i'm only on a need-to-know basis in this league and haven't really spent e-time with many of you.. with that being said this was pretty funny, it had this good vibrations type of humor to it from start to finish with a sweet flow to. MetaSin can't say that what little you had drew me in as it felt like a pretty cliché ordeal about to happen, if you know what i'm saying.. mechanics were nice but that matters not since you only brought the intro to a piece (and i like i said: this time around i can't say that it seemed all that intruiging either) vote: Lucifa for the more complete verse, though to me personally that verse wasn't all that hard to beat (it was quality, it's just i don't have the frame of reference) __________________ Three Planes Aligned

07-12-2008, 02:05 PM	#10 (permalink)
.:Pain:. Right In Your Ass... Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Upstate, NY Posts: 4,617	Luc - lol, You did this concept better than anyone else that has ever tried it I think. You kinda took the plot from identity, but not really, and twisted it into a piece with rstl characters. I don't like how I died, but I do like how I smoked weed. All in all, great verse, flow wasn't great, and neither was the rhyme scheme, sometimes the lines didn't really rhyme at all, but the concept and the execution made this a very enjoyable read. Metasin - The flow was actually pretty beastly. not a huge fan of rhyming the same word more than once though, and you did nothin' and love a lot in those opening lines. Really had the makings a great verse, I mean, it's a concept everyone has done, but you approached it in a different manner. Really good shit. Just try harder next time so I can read a real verse!!! Vote - Luc... __________________ I don't mind, not bein' known, But bein' an example that will only be cloned, I don't mind, bein' myself, Even if it holds me from possible wealth... O.G. Bad Guy Myspace Still Blazin Bitches...

07-13-2008, 08:10 AM	#12 (permalink)
DeadKing The Perfect Method Join Date: Oct 1999 Location: Fort Bragg, NC Posts: 1,416	luc - i read this earlier in the week, lol, a very good read and prob. match of the week i assume. not sure if i can remember you ever writing a humorous piece or not but this verse was very relevant with the current drama of jook and alias' or whatever the deal was with that, and i loved how you conveyed allthat drama intoa verse. dope flow and visual writers voice, dope verse all around meta - dammit you,lol............. continue to shred the rbl and i wont be such a bastard to you, but you know as much as i know that you want to duel wield that crown, all in due time i suppose, all in due time. vote - luc TR NOTE: 2 full lines of critique or the vote doesn't count. I know you were close, but look at the first half of your first line haha. __________________ PrecisioN an urban prowler type of thing DeadKing ~ Fracture ~ Serge ~ MetaSin ~ Retulen Reactus Magus ~ KungFuGrip ~ UserName Last edited by TheReturn; 07-13-2008 at 08:56 PM.

07-13-2008, 08:21 AM	#13 (permalink)
RICO my daughter right there Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Greatness: Capital R.I.C.O Posts: 4,920	hahaahahah luc. i like this very much. very creative. although i wasnt in the story...it worked for me. flow was a lil choppy at time's but the story was inviting enough to not make a difference. end was awesome though. the whole jook/nahson contreversy. good shit. i dont need to say much more LUC gets the vote for a lack of story from metasin TR NOTE: 2 full lines of critique for each writer or the vote won't count. __________________ WhereMusicGoes "NewTrack" I got the Timbalands in steel toe, Cause rap is a hobby I got a 9 to 5, thats how life goes"-RICO Last edited by TheReturn; 07-13-2008 at 08:55 PM.

07-13-2008, 04:17 PM	#14 (permalink)
Scatterboxx a.k.a. infinite truth. Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: four one three Posts: 363	lucy... i read your verse much earlier this week & thought it was fucking hysterical - potential for verse of the week. the storytelling was incredibly entertaining. the deaths were hysterical, though i think jook shoulda spiked the bong with like 50 strips-worth of acid to kill me instead. nah just playing. mechanics were solid for the most part, but not as tight as meta's - your rhyme scheme was just above decent, whereas your flow was very strong & rarely fell off. merely by entertainment factor you probably could have won this verse had meta dropped. then again, what meta had was nice as fuck imo. so who knows. good shit homie. i was cracking up the whole time. still potential for verse of the week based on what i've read. you, 3pa, & pain have seriously impressed me this week so who knows. meta... well... as i said, what you had was nice as fuck. everything seemed so natural. the emotion of the piece, had you lengthened it, could have been explained in further depth, & that would have been seriously nice, cuz this piece had the potential to have that. your mechanics alone, out of the 16 bars you had, were stronger than lucy's. but the lackluster depth of the content obviously lost it for you. def straight enough for a 16 bar verse audio tho. ha. v- lucy. obviously. __________________ s c a t t e r b o x x ...a.k.a. infinite truth 16-0 rstl debut. 3x rstl champ. 60+ rstl wins. {myspace.} {music.} {instrumentals.}

07-13-2008, 04:35 PM	#15 (permalink)
nom de plume. rumbrave. Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: portsmouth. Posts: 6,148	luc - i read through this just after you posted it and found it to be a highly enjoyable piece. it doesnt really need a break down of 'the rhyme scheme here was etc etc'. because it a fluidly paced and written story that was easy to get in to and was bloody entertaining along the way. probably one of the best verses i've seen from you. good times had by all. meta - for what there was it was alright eh. the flow and what not were all good. just something that, obviously, would have been far more interesting as a full verse. hopefully see a full piece from you next week. obviously you knew that this piece wasn't going to win it for you. but who knows, it could've as a full length piece. i guess we'll never know eh haha. vote - luc. __________________ been down so long it looks like up to me.