1. nah son v. 9. Infinite Truth (VOTE NOW!)

[Quriosity]

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[Infinite Truth]

czech.

votes:
1. 14. Vada v. 11. DaAlmightyDolla (VOTE NOW!)
2. 5. Eye-Rime v. 13. Pent Up (VOTE NOW!)
3. 10. LDogg v. 15. Got Life? (VOTE NOW!)

dad's vote didn't give enough breakdown so that shouldn't count.

[nah son]

republic

[Infinite Truth]

{“laurie”.}

antwan damns god, while he stand on black cracked concrete,
he drags tracked long feet… leavin’ footprints on streets
his razzle-dazzle shines… while it’s pawned cheap…
evil shadows travel by - lofty; long gone free…
born amidst the rain, the lord’s eclipse- it came.
with cracking deep in his brain- his chastity has been slain.
asking, “please” in his vain, he’d poorly spit his game.
basking, he’d refrain - or try - or be blitzed by pain.
her name was laurie… lorraine -
a product of truth, as if reduced to shove on a train.
he’s reeking of bud, his every movement swaggering.
he rocks a a creed with evil love. deeply stuck – it’s staggering.
his dreams race… as if he’s chased on a field
full of life - his skull in strife - he’d never embrace or yield,
lonely, grooving, only moving on to hold her tight,
passion eclipsing his imagination, he’s got a prose to write….

"I'll be back."
The Terminator

blah.
scratched the original.
gotta post what i got.

[nah son]

The peasants hunger grows
Weak, dropping flesh to rock, under crows
Picked apart, gaping wounds is where the blunder loathes
The ships wreckage fed the belly of the undertow


Stranded on a foreign beach, scorned in heat
The ships rations gone, no more to eat
....The people stand famished,
Plus it's only been hours since the last mans vanished
Into the woods that scream and heckle
Trying to find food and dreaming to eat a seckel
The captain is Oleg, he's the brains
That feeds the stranded, words of hope, to ease the pain
Praying to god, seeing what role heaven plays
But they're growing antsy, they haven't eaten in seven days

"We're going to die!!" a frail man causes an uproar
A woman yells "enter the woods if it's death you lust for".


No one who has entered, has ever returned
So the heap of hope they once had was rarely heard
It started off with the first two men who volunteered
Then another 2 to deem true what they all had feared
2 more followed each day so a total of fourteen
None ever seen again,
Only the remaining peoples minds hoard the screams

Captain Oleg decides no more will enter the woods


The change


On day eight, a rescue ship approached in the distance
That gave everyone a glimpse of hope in an instance
When the ship arrived, it lit their eyes
Plus they were all given, shrimp and rye
As they boarded the rescue ship, they heard hoots
Then cheered with joy as out from the woods emerged the first two
With blood stained teeth, and flesh in their fingernails
The people sat with anticipation waiting for eager tales
But none arose, the first two just sat in silence
One of them had a crazed grin and he would bat his eyelids

Captain Oleg knew what happened but he behaved in fact
He didn't tell a soul how he thought the first two made a pact
To go in first, and not come back so when the time ends
The group will send more people in to try and find them
And they would eat whomever was sent in after them
Cannibals trying to survive, and they mastered it


When they reached home, they seemed prone to wanting to be alone
And no longer seen in public, only reachable via phone
Rumor has it, they still eat people til this day
Scouring eyes and sharpened teeth that lead to dismay
In a place, not too different from your home
But being a cannibal is not too distant from your own
In a world where survival of the fittest reigns true
How can you honestly say what you would sink your fangs through?



There is insanity in every man.

[Got Life?]

IT - really disappointed me here man...and yeah I said I wasn't going to vote on this, but I don't think anyone will mind what I have to say...what happened here dude...lol...between me and you, you know you shoulda had a full verse guy.

Nah - this was a pretty cool piece...I like the whole cannibal pact and how it got twisted...though how'd they survive w/o food and water for so long, it was a little bit of lost meets robinson crusoe meets a non-funny gilligans island in a really compacted timescale of 1 week...lol...i mean it worked for me, but there's so much I can put as a frame of reference to this, including lord of the flies, but yeah...it was well written, flowed well, and obviously the superior piece.

but as I said, I ain't votin on this match, and lucy cleared that so yeah.

[Lucifa]

IT - anyone who enters will surely be disappointed with what you gave them to read and critique .. I don't know what you scrapped but surely it was better than this .. if not only to give this battle more than the one-sided fight we're left with .. a shame since people were backing you to go all the way in this tourney ..

nah son - this was cool .. I personally feel there were aspects to the plotline that could have been worked on to really make this piece shine .. but as it is it will clearly win this battle .. it made for a rather interesting read and had a chilling feel to it from the start .. I wasn't overly keen on the final section of "still do it to this day" kinda perspective but at the same time it didn't ruin the piece .. overall a very enjoyable read that could have been 'dope' but remains good ..

Vote = nah son .. clear why ..

[J o o k]

This battle is a let down. IT didn't give us a showing and nah just did him as always. I would have liked to see how this played out. Shouts to nah for going to the final four. Make sure you vote duke so we can keep this shit going nicely. I think you have Eye next week so see you then. IT, smh.

[vada]

IT...

you know what you're capable of and i dont have to say much, do i wish you had an actual verse, yea, but we all know things come up or we just get writers block sometime, so i understand and i aint mad you, elite like whoa...

Nah Son...

this was an average piece for me, the mechanics were good not great, rhyme scheme simplistic but for the most part i liked it, didn't really like the whole story about canabalism, i would've liked it to be more vivid with some good imagery, but it was still a good piece


overall...not much to say there's a clear winner here, no reason to breakdown my reasons

[DaAlmightyDolla]

vote - IT sike lol

it- damn man u were my dark horse. wat can i say shit happens. better luck next time. i still liked this short appitizer.

nah son

wasnt bad. i know u could have done better. was feeling the concept though. at first i thought of the movie ghost ship than u went with the cannibal idea. plot was told nicely. it was on some campfire shit. nothing really that caught my eye. step it up 4 the next round dude.

v- nah son

[Lucifa]

nah son wins 5-0. (GL? did vote and as mod I accept it was true say).
nah doesn't vote/post links.
nah son still wins 2-0.