5. Lucifa 14-5 v. 6. Pain 3-1 (Vote Now!)

[Quriosity]

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[Lucifa]

what it's all about ..

Votes
1 9. Stars€reen 0-2 v. 10. Daht Cahm 1-1 (Vote Now!)
2 11. Sephiroth 2-3 v. 12. Inkwell (chris) 3-2 (Vote now!)
3 13. Dougie G 2-3 v. 14. Master Peace 0-1 (Vote Now!)
4 21. Condescending 0-0 v. 22. DeadKing 0-0 (Vote Now!)

15. TheReturn 10-2 v. 16. LDogg 4-3 (Vote Now!)
19. Cereal Killa 0-0 v. 20. Alias2 0-0 (Vote Now!)

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Championship Match: 1. Metasin 3-0 v. 2. Got Life? 14-4 (Vote Now!)

[Lucifa]

I Just Called To Say

I owe you an apology..solemnly
cos honestly..it wasn't me
it couldn't be..but clearly
because of me..your trust in me
my spite for you..in spiteful youth
..I lied to you..
and I'm really really fucking sorry Bill
..I feel so fucking horrible..
I've been through this..finding excuses
the self inflicted brusies are fruitless
..it's useless..
I remain miserable
and I don't expect forgiveness Bill
..if I can't forgive myself..
I sure as hell can't wish you will
....but....
I owe you an explanation still
....you see....
that lottery win..it got me to sin
hard to explain the mind set I was in
when I struck the rave
strutting straight..cutting shapes..something great
in a drunken state..I spotted your good looking mate
my unlucky mistake..but it was too fucking late
..I was on my knees and sucking Jake..
with my morals drown..I swallowed down
my conscience cast to hollow ground
and I'm really really ashamed of that Bill
..I take full blame for that thrill..
but it gets worse Bill..as I let words spill
with a jaded tongue..I played you wrong
I told Jake of your win..Jake told Jim
Jim told his boys who then told him
..they knew where you lived..
Bill, I'm being honest..it wasn't to my knowledge
I didn't know they were from your college
I couldn't have predicted..they would have a dipshit
a twisted sick kid..social misfit
whose body tingled with delight
..as money symbols lit his eyes..
....I'm sorry....
your angel of death was me incognito
only I wasn't there to tell you to keep low
try helping you beathe slow..panting lightly
my belt on the bleed's flow..clamping tightly
..where I'd ask you kindly..
"your life, fight for it!"..see, I'm not such a spiteful bitch
or maybe I am, as it's too late and you died for this
..for, well atleast, because of me..
the repercussion of my actions that I couldn't see
....so now....
..I make you a solemn vow..
I will call you weekly..if only briefly
just to speak..see..your memory keeps me
from feeling sleepy..feeling guilty
the guilt is mine..since I spilt that line
..and now here I am Bill, sat cryin'..
wishing I could hear your voice one last time
making me smile whilst you're acting goofy
doing impressions so well, it's kinda spooky
I feel lost in a world where directions fall
from my peripheral vision with text too small
..and me?..I'd give my all..
..just to have you on the other end of this call..

[Quriosity]

posting for pain, he wont be around to post it so here it goes....

The Comeback Kid

You ready for this?
Take another breath, let stress be dismissed,
Take another glance at my wrist,
While I raise the cutter, waitin' for the blood as it drips,
Shakey hands holdin' a razor,
A shakey mind, hopeless, tried to be supportive, but faithless,
So wasted was emotions and struggle,
That's why I'm sittin' in a bathroom, focused on rubble,
So cold and it thunders, the wintery mix,
Knife covering my wrist, what a bitter eclipse,
Press deep, then pull with rigorousness,
Close my eyes, hope to die, envisioning bliss,
Start to cry without even knowin' why,
Rivers of sin flow from the eyes of a broken mind,
A trigger, a switch, for the hopes that hide,
Where a lingering wish and it's road reside,

I was born into reality and lost my dreams,
So I had to ask hope to take a walk with me,
And as late as it was, it was hard to see,
But I handled the situation artfully,
I was on the edge of a cliff, on a bad day,
I was pressured to skip, and be on my sad way,
That was until I stopped and looked backways,
Then I saw it as another drop in the cascade,

So I sit, feelin' faint, ache in my arm,
I'm not impatient, just rather wait in the stars,
I feel so fuckin' tired of playin' my part,
The acid of labels has been decaying my heart,
Boredom and drugs got the best of me,
So I'm sittin' with a blunt as my flesh just bleeds,
I stare at my hand as I plummet,
Also as the feeling of death extends to my stomach,
And I, I feel worthy of Hades,
Don't care where you go, as long you take me,
A faint breeze feeds the nerves and endings,
Whispering things, this ain't worth it, letting
all the emotions I had in my grasp,
take a moment to talk, and give me a pat on my back,
I throw down the knife, bleeding I panic,
Open the medicine cabinet and reach for a bandage,

I was born into reality and lost my dreams,
So I had to ask hope to take a walk with me,
And as late as it was, it was hard to see,
But I handled the situation artfully,
I was on the edge of a cliff, on a bad day,
I was pressured to skip, and be on my sad way,
That was until I stopped and looked backways,
Then I saw it as another drop in the cascade,

The next day, looking at the scars I served,
For the next week I'll be wearin' long-sleeve shirts,
Hopin' nobody sees my laundry's worth,
So I'll play it smooth, in truth this hardly works,
My friends know I'm a tad fucked up and violent,
Heavy, like the bags under my eyelids,
My crisis, it consumes my light,
Cuz I'm the only one wishin' that I'll lose my life,
My friends are support, and I love 'em for that,
But they can't help me out with the stuff in my past,
So I keep it low, tell peeps it's the L,
Cuz the only person that can help me is myself,
Last night, I figured I was due for death,
Cuz the rain was frozen and the mood was set,
Lost and confused I was losin' my head,
The only thing to do is hope I never do it again…

"To the question whether I am a pessimist or an optimist, I answer that my knowledge is pessimistic, but my willing and hoping are optimistic”

-Albert Schweitzer

[Kid Phikshen]

Lucifa: i actually enjoyed this piece a lot, flow was not necessarily fluid as it was unconventional for the most part, but it definately did this verse good in making for a quick progression through the story, the short lines were a plus here although when it started i felt as though it was a tad elementaryish, the rhythm definately grew on me and by the end i was hooked to the words, some good descriptions/imagery in there and some nice lines, the emotion was present and overall the plot was a good, simple, and yet equally effective one that related to the picture well and was rather creative not so much in plot scheme but in connection with the picture, a solid ending for an somewhat EMO piece with no real twist but a definitive image left in the reader's head solidified by the picture which inspired the words, overall this was a very solid drop

pain: another thoroughly enjoyable piece, deep words to a deep song, the imagery was strong here in both major stanzas but the stand out was the attempted suicide scene, flow was on point for the most part with a steady rhythm, the story itself was rather bland in my opinion, although i enjoyed it i feel as though creatively lucy had the edge here and his verse was slightly more enjoyable, your verse was rather dark and morbid with an unsatisfying ending, i mean the ending fit but it just didn't do much for me with such a dark tone/setting and yet nothing ever actually happened, the entire third verse was moreso filler than plot as the climax took place in the first and second, once it was revealed that he decided not to do it i expect him to faint from loss of blood or some other accident to take place or something but in the end you rounded it up with some rhyming words and good imagery describing much of nothing, the ending fit the script i suppose but not my tastes, too dark of a setting to end the way it did, overall this was another solid drop however and a good read

candidate for battle of the week here, although it is the first match to be finished and 3 days before the deadline, neither emcee disappointed here, i enjoyed both verses from both cats but one stood out to me the most, mechanically both were solid but when looking at the story as a whole i think lucy's was far more enjoyable to me, the mood was consistent with the plot throughout a long with a good flow and good imagery and solid ending where as the mood and plot were inconsistent in my opinion of pain's verse, either that or he just didnt effectively pull the ending off, the flow was just as good if not better and all other things were equal, therefore lucifa gets my vote

lucifa, stick to this formula and you'll do just fine, the flow was good and if you can keep the creativity at the same level i think you'll be a true winner, i enjoyed this and i enjoyed your approach to writing

pain, you have proven to be a solidified author and yet i seem to keep voting against you, i just dont feel as though you finish well, this was a strong verse and would/could beat a lot of competitors and there isn't much necessarily wrong with it, but my opinion is that the ending felt rushed or too subtle for the tone, something significant should have happend or either the ending as is should have been delivered more effectively, it just lessened the impact of the verse in my eyes, good shit though

[Everest]

okey dokey .. lemme start with lucifa.

Lucif- i don't really get it.. not fully..someone won the lotto, then got robbed cause a gay dude sucked some dick at a rave.. this shit was WAAY out there. however, your writing was quiet good, good use of short flow to indicate coversation , feelings were conveyed well. I don't fully understand the picture playing into this aside from the phone.

Ok pain.--
well as far as writing goes.. nothing to complain about. and I do like when people throw in a chorus. However. I didn't love the story really. I mean what we really have here is about as generic a attempted suicide story as you can get. Literally there are probably 200 of these in "open mic" just probably most not as well written fundamentally. I vaguely understand the "comeback kid title"
but the quote hardly plays into the story in a concrete sense. I just wish you would have told us more about the person's reasons for suicidal thoughts aside from his " blue feeling" ya feel.

Honestly i thought the "writing" skill was a wash between the two, but based on creativity (however hair brained) and actual story telling,, I'll award my vote to

LUCIFA

[SpeedyCalhoun]

Luc:
Ridiculous. You managed to hold my interest from beginning to end. I peeped the way you broke up the phrases, setting up this sense of un-stability as she's confessing. And overalll, it was just a fresh take on the phone pic...

Pain:
This verse had several ups and downs. I love the way it draws you to see the negative. However, it parts it just seemed like pessimistic rambling. And it was just a general use of the topic/quote.

V=Lucy

[TheReturn]

Lucifa - Well this was rather emo so I'm not taking any points off for that lol. I guess the wife or girlfriend cheated and told of the lottery winnings to someone that killed her husband or boyfriend and now she calls him every week hoping that one day he will answer. Pretty cool take on the pick, liked the rhyme scheme for the most part, flow was fast, overall a good verse.

Pain - Some good wording and description, flow was good like always, but the story never really grabbed me. I read it through pretty quickly and it didn't really lose my attention, but it never forced me to want to pay attention either.

I see Lucy taking this one here.

[DeadKing]

lucifer had a pretty straight forward verse, it was simply in alot of aspects, but it kept my attention and i just assumed the writer was a male, judging by your name, and it was kinda disturbing to read about a guy who blew another dude and what not, lol........

but nice verse, none the less.....



pain, your verse started off, and i was immediatly infuriated, lol. i hate reading about death in so many rstl threads. i aint been around in a minute but even 2 years ago, writing about suicide, IMO is kind of like a cop out, its just easy to do, but you turned it around it wasnt all that bad of a read. you actually had a better structure than lucifa in my opinion.

but lucifa kept my attention more so, and i just overall liked the read more.


so vote goes to lucifa


but nice drop from both

[Daht Cahm]

Im gonna sound like a broken record right now. But an opinion is an opinion.


Pain- Your writing is grand in the mechanics. Flow was on for basically the whole time making it an easy read. But as far as the read itself went. It was just sort of... there. I'm not the type of person who NEEDS some outlandish story, or some crazy twist. But I DO need something a little more than a razor to wrist.



Luc- I didn't get lost at all reading yours. It flowed great. I liked the repetition of it, and the use of the name Bill. The story was a little odd just because it was the lottery. I liked the plot, but I'm not sure the lotto is a reason to kill someone haha. But over all it worked out, I could in vision it all in my head. And I thought it was very well done.


Vote- Luc

[Lucifa]

I need to use my 3rd post rule here .. cos .. erm .. I really don't see where the wording confused people here ..

Important to note:

Originally Posted by SpeedyCalhoun

as she's confessing

So comments like:

Originally Posted by DeadKing

it was kinda disturbing to read about a guy who blew another dude and what not

are somewhat confusing to me .. how are people thinking this is a guy? .. even the pic is a female ..

The plot:

Originally Posted by TheReturn

the wife or girlfriend cheated and told of the lottery winnings to someone (..who told someone else..who told someone else..) that(/who then) killed her husband or boyfriend (taking the money) and now she calls him every week hoping that one day he will answer.(ED: well, this is technically the 1st call)

^we have a winner ..

thanks for the votes though ..

Oh .. and I have an open mic up for feed ..

Flexing the fingers ..

[Got Life?]

Lucifa: I thought this was great, probably the most enjoyable piece i've read from you...period...also, I think anyone that didn't get this needs to go back to 3rd grade and learn to fucking read...clear cut, smooth progression, a little emo, but clever...good emotion, good imagery...great take on the picture...

Pain: This was cool for what it was, but it wasn't much really brought to the table or offered...it was just one of those pieces that you can pull out of a bag and flow smooth as fuck, but it's not that compelling...would have liked to have seen more from you.

Vote = Lucifa (SHOCKER!)

[DaAlmightyDolla]

lucifa...
sick verse. start 2 finish. easy 2 say cuz it felt like i never had 2 pause. good story telling. almsot felt like a tarintino movie. alot of twists and characters. very enjoyable read. i agree i dont know how ppl got things mixed up when theres a girl present in the pic. 8.5/10

pain.
not a bad read from u either. i liked the content. good 2 see some1 live in an emo verse. flowed great and i liked the chorus. maybe aginst a different opponent u could have gotten the vote but lucifas verse was to entertaining. 8/10

v .. lucifa