21. Condescending 0-0 v. 22. DeadKing 0-0 (Vote Now!)

[Quriosity]

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[Condescending]

check.......

[DeadKing]

good luck

[DeadKing]

day in and day out, the weeks amount to years
as i feel the breeze between my knees and up around my ears
i fear what i know, it's the pain beneath my skin
its the guilt associated that i can never be with him
i can never be the one, for i am just a tool
i am just an echo shouting back at me from you
growing like a shade in the way of your parade
cast by a mountian that was risen from betray
so i say, i always knew, it wasnt meant to be
and sometimes i wish that this life wasnt me
but i need another touch, your fingers can caress
up my thigh, deep inside, and full across my breast
breath into my hair, want me just this moment
i'd give you all my heart if you promise just to hold it
but you know its been eroded from the weather of our past
and yet i'm dumb enough to still want you to come back
and walk in through my door and tell me that it's done
you left your wife for good and you need another one
you want it to be me, i could love you now
like i already do cause i've never been too proud
so if your down to be around, i'd just like for you to know
that my door is always open, and i'll never keep it closed
or we can stay the pace, i can be your little secret
my moans are a language, but you dont know how to read it
instead i lay here empty, i hear your footsteps leave
knowing you'll be back to come and rescue me
so i guess i stay contempt, but inside i really know
you have a healthy marriage, because i........


am just your hoe.

[Condescending]

"Just another statistic"

Im part of the brother hood, just from another hood
and like overcaring mothers our wraith will smother you
Best run for your life, others would, wer'e living this life
where gangbangers decide if your worthy of rights
In the heart of cali, our chests and faces present cuts
No hidden identity as our bandanas represent us
Im twenty now, a gangbanger, im sure ma mama miss me
But I was inspired by gangbangers eversince I was sixteen
The rocks glistening, diamonds dripping and reflecing the sun
I was inspired by the whole lifestyle...especially the guns
I was in the crips and we'd hang around on the blocks
Making money for the gang in terms of powder and rocks
and if it went down,i'd participate in shoot outs with the cops
Stashing weed down in my socks, leafs hugging my toe-nails
On the block allnight if we were making no sales, simple!
When I was in highschool we'd hang out on the streets
Seeing gangbangers in action as they rivalled the police
Staring at a new life from a distance, our eyes stalking
Me and my boys were inspired which slowly got us drawn in
Walking past outlines of chalk as well as seeing body bags
Rumours of cold ambushes that reflected mob attacks
A piece of mind and guidance is obviously what I lacked
A young dawg led astray, so at which point did my collar snap
My freinds grew out of it and they all finished school
I was a gangbanger at last and my gun was my pinacle
Part of the crips, hanging with robbers and arsonists
That were selling drugs whilst on bail for grand larsony
Cali is a hot spot and were running, weary of bloods
Breathing in drugs like they were part of the air in our lungs
We had corners to mark, hanging in different hoods
To fund our gangbanging life, so drugs we would push
But the click I was part of got hit by some masked men
I let of a clip that just blasted but got lift of my ass when
bullets shattered my legs, my trigger finger dropped
In a blood infested area so I realised i'd been shot
But for the 1st time in my life I really wanted the cops
I could feel I was dying, shit my mum would be ballistic
If her son died a criminal, just another gangbaning statistic.....

[Daht Cahm]

Not too sure if I can vote, being as one was past the due date. So if not.. delete this.




Dead- I liked the story. The girl in love with the man, hoping she'd become more than a booty call. I think you could have made it longer. But over all it was well done. For the most part it flowed well. And I liked the ending, subtle.


Con- As far as yours goes.... meah. It was bland. It wasn't anything in spectacular. Not a whole lot for imagery. It was just... sorta there. The "dawg" collar line was pretty clever. But honestly I JUST read it and that is one of the very few lines that I can remember. And you ended with "if I died" so did the kid die or not? I don't know. Just wasn't too into it.


Vote- Dead.

[Got Life?]

verses aren't due till tonight...

this was honestly a really dry battle on both parts...

Dead - I know you can write a whole lot better than this...and you seriously need to advance that boring simple scheme because it's not like you just keep your rhymes simple but slay us with content...the story was cool for what it was but more development and emotion would have made it better...writers voice was present though and it's a straight take on the topic.

Con - this was yours to win considering what DK posted and you failed...you couldn't have possibly been more cliche with any of the images you used, with the topic you approached, and just the whole demeanor of your verse...it was really off putting.

vote = DK by a toe nail.

[MetaSin]

DK. I actually liked this, although very straight forward, and an obvious way to write about the picture. I don't always think obvious is bad, I just which this had been developed a bit more, and had more of a story feel. I like the style of writing used, it made the woman in the picture seem desperate for love, more so than some every day dialect would have.

Con... I was just a tad bit bored... Also, it seemed like it was a stretch for you to touch on this rather general topic... I didn't count how many times you said gangbanging, but it was waaaaaaaay too often... The mechanics were average, but again, although I don't need the most ridiculous story, this just wasn't enough for me...

vote: DK.

[DeadKing]

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votes

[Dougie G]

D. K.: Yeah I liked your verse alot, i mean the rhyme scheme was there and the flow was on point, but it was pretty basic, wasnt no big surprises or nothing, I mean you took the pic and just flowed with it.

Con: Well this look like something I would have done when I first started here in the RSTL, I honestly think you were writing from your life experiences, but you should have tried to bring the reader into it more, alot of the rhymes sounded forced.

Vote: D.K just for having a better overall verse

[Got Life?]

up over no-shows

4-0 DK

[Lucifa]

I'm getting a little reader fatigue right now .. (bulk reading) .. so if it's harsh .. sue me ..

Dead - this was ok .. a compact block of text with nothing fresh or gripping within .. it was a piece that was read and then instantly forgot about .. average at best ..

Con - disappointing verse son .. considering you were up against a very beatable verse .. spitting 2nd .. this was a let down of epic proportions .. you have written some cool verses before .. this was pretty bad though ..

Vote = Deadking .. as uninspiring and unimpressive as this was .. it was the better of the 2 ..

[Lord Drama]

vote deadking but not by much

I thought both verses didnt show a lot of effort. I did like the concept of the hoe but it really wasnt any greater of a concept then a gang-banging story, so it that sense both verses are pretty even. Although I didnt have any problem with cons, I think deadking just wrote slightly better and with the gangbang story, the ending came up too quick.. would have been more interesting with more detail.

[Condescending]

ok thx for votes im too busy to vote on battles this week but I will vote on everyones next week.peace

[Cereal_Killer]

DK:
I like this short but sweet.. Your wording was on fire and structure of the verse read well.. Good imagery like I wrote before im really a huge fan of the language you used..

i am just an echo shouting back at me from you
growing like a shade in the way of your parade
cast by a mountian that was risen from betray

very nice. Good drop n I hope you stay in the league..

Con:
Most of the time im like this type of story has been done but the first ten lines would of came of real fine on audio.. You started loosing the rhyme scheme you had by halfway which pissed me off a lil cause im like u can miss a line maybe two with out an end rhyme but half a verse is just a pain to read.. Anwywhoot ok verse keep droppen dude… pz

Vote: Dead King

DK is just a more developed writer and story teller.

Pz n gl guys

[.ApoGee.]

Deadking] Well damn, this was good. For a straight forward piece, I was surprised. Nicely done. The emotion was there, I felt the character feelings between your lines. The Imagery was a big aspect of your piece, I like how you twist it with the emotion. It wasn’t Much detailed but I could definitely see the setting of this whole piece; you don’t even need the picture to be shown. Your wording was good and it played bigger role along with your Imagery. The flow was good and made it very easy to read . This wasn’t much complex as I thought it would be, it was simple, get your point across. There wasn’t Much build up either but with the wording there wasn’t much to say. As for the concept, it wasn’t creative nor original, but the approach was but along with that there wasn‘t build up. Nonetheless, great write bruh.

Fav lines: “but i need another touch, your fingers can caress
up my thigh, deep inside, and full across my breast
breath into my hair, want me just this moment
i'd give you all my heart if you promise just to hold it
but you know its been eroded from the weather of our past
and yet i'm dumb enough to still want you to come back”


Condescening] This was ok. I was just bored. This wasn’t entertaining. There was some emotion but it was just dry, like a chicken with No juice; grease. You had Imagery but your description was every-where, the transaction wasn’t as smooth as it should be. You’re wording was ok, the flow was ok could’ve been better. I would say this, after reading DK verse, I really thought you had the chance to take it out the park and catch a win; you really lost your chance here.

Vote-DK overall better verse