[Wk 4] 19. Craccer_Jacc 0-1 v. 20. Blackanese 0-1 v. 21. Bodian 0-1 (Vote Now!)

Quriosity · 03-03-2008, 03:19 PM

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Craccer_Jacc · 03-03-2008, 03:40 PM

*strolls in looks at Got Life?* check'n in *strolls out*

Bodian · 03-05-2008, 04:10 PM

Im here. ( Rhymaholik )

I should be 0-0 since I started over again, but its all good.

I may need a slight extension if possible as Im just now seeing this.

- wP.

Blackanese · 03-06-2008, 02:51 PM

im here

Craccer_Jacc · 03-06-2008, 07:43 PM

http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464302
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464338
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464385
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464441

*strolls out*

Blackanese · 03-06-2008, 08:52 PM

cool with me so ill post tommorrow also.....

Insanevillian · 03-07-2008, 01:38 PM

Blackanese... i just saw one of your votes and i have to give u a warning...

votes are supposed to have two lines of criticism on each verse...

for the vote to be valid...

or it doesn't count...

i lost two votes myself last week because of this mistake and i'd hate to see u lose on a technicality...

Blackanese · 03-07-2008, 01:47 PM

You're standing at a grave. Who's grave is it? What type of thoughts/feelings rush through your mind? What happens? Expand.
(Author NYSE)

She's Gone....

so this is my "Long Distance Kiss"

excuse me miss sweet dreams i'll prolly see you on the downtime...
i dreamt about you last night and got to see you smile...
it was a strawberry scent so strong i forgot to breathe...
nah im kidding, but really it took my breath away...
im guessing yesterday you didnt hear me calling you...
i had to talk to you ive fallin for youima a mess today...
if i could walk with you id prolly have a better day...
its not possible or probably just forget it then..
so whats your favorite song and we could sing along...
or i could write another one and riddle you a poem...
i remember all the things you love and how to make you laff...
come on laff, its a good thing to help the time pass..
cuz september was another month 2 years to be exact..
forever isnt what it seems forever never lasts.
but the time is moving too fast im lost in the mix...
so i really cant miss on this long distance kiss...

16 g/l to rymaholik and craccer jacc

Craccer_Jacc · 03-07-2008, 10:08 PM

You awaken to find that your whole life been a lie. What were you lied about? How was this discovered? What will you do now? Expand.
(Desenuts)

my head leaves my pillow eyes playen peek a boo with the sun focus still owed
still cold from the tale told 16 years old dont know my dna... so
i was sold a new name new family dressed in clones clothes
modern day pinochio triple helix plays the strings
my life is pipe dreams emotion fiends stole seamless
mission impossible obsticles from a lacc of fetis
taken from the cleaners yea moms playing genius
i was in the car seat screaming at the demons
grab my mouth barely breathing choken on tears n cheezits
quietly defeated can hear moms cryen "HAVE U SEEN HIM"
then her memories vacant her smell can almost taste it in my baby blanket
your tellen me it's all a lie baccs feeling the shank's lips
it hurts to much to die or try to change my bum luck
i know i'm not dead so i must be strong as fuck
almost choked on my brunch when my fake moms bursts in the kitchen screaming .... DUCK!!

You wake up to make breakfast when suddenly there's a knock at the door. You look outside and the police are waiting impatiently. Expand.

i hit the floor with this whore called mom johnny law at the door guns drawn
had to force my arms to pull my body to the bacc
moms grabben saccs choppen plants gas'n down hallways.... i'm stucc tryna light a match
could hear the sound of dispatch armed n dangerous out the window crowden neighbors
and the strangest part is i'm tryna help save us
mom shoots into the garage and starts the range up
i spark up a flame
police smash the door and start the raid
toss the match with a flash of 2 fingas
hop in the passenger acten singer
moms smashes the gas past the poparazzi blinkers
but these flashes have features
bullets flyen through as i'm try'n to regroup then i see my moms shirt is inked up
barley missed the tree trunk
moms telling me she's sorry about the lies tryna stay alive Mary J on the speakers
i wanna live to see her die
on the blocc weeven moms screaming like heathens
we're spotted like cheetahs
chased by a heard of hallucinaten zebras
notice the man with the trash dosent see us
i yell Jesus the range crashes into his ass tires screachen and 3 flips
juss as i see this evidant doom Got Life? shakes me out my stuper and hands me a couple more shrooms..

*strolls out*

Bodian · 03-08-2008, 06:10 AM

Alice came to a fork in the road. "Which road do I take?" she asked.
"Where do you want to go?" responded the Cheshire cat.
"I don't know," Alice answered.
"Then," said the cat, "it doesn't matter."

Farley was an ill-tempered, cantankerous old bastard,
His own master,
And the man of the house... that very seldom would show laughter.
So one would suppose after the beatings he'd bludgeoned her with...
...That his wife had become numb to the hits,
From his thunderous fists.
But not numb in the sense she no longer felt his hands...
...More numb in the sense she'd turn away those who tried to help her stand.
And not numb in the sense that she never yelped or sang,
Over the welts that stang...
...But his consummate efforts devoured her -
In the clutches of this rabid wolf she became a helpless lamb,
Without a leg to stand.
A mere fallen star that glowed in the distance,
As her world was transformed from technicolor to monochrome in an instant.
But that first time he struck her,
It also choked her of the only pride she felt.
And that night she fell, but refused to retreat inside her shell...
...and issue any cries for help,
Instead she waited, to make sure this tyrant dwelled in a life of hell...

...So beside herself, she plotted and planned,
To greet his rotten demands,
With the firm reposte of her hands.
And unbeknown to this villainous raptor, she was filling with rapture...
...at the sheer thought me killing this bastard.
She tried for weeks,
Until eventually he was resigned to sleep...
...and mesmerised so deep,
He didn't even notice her dive to reach,
A hacksaw thats pristine silver blade shines with each,
And every thrusting stroke against his flesh, in the nights deceit.
An evil smile wryly creeps, across Alice's smiling features...
...As with the hacksaw held firmly,
She cuts through the limbs of this violent creature.
In the kitchen she sits and wickedly picks through flesh and bone,
With his head mounted upright on the table,
She had kept it cold, refusing to let him go...
Then suddenly, she thought she heard his booming footsteps cascading the stairs,
It was the way he had always done,
Its distinct sound had now made her aware,
So from her quaint worktop in the kitchen, Alice patiently stared...
...again clutching the hacksaw tightly, as she was unstable and scared.
The looming shadow grew closer,
And she felt the first signs of passing guilt...
...but as it drew towards the light,
She realised it was their boy, Ryan, only wrapped in quilts.
He dropped his glass of milk instantly,
Upon exposing his mother's confounding secret...
...the tumble glass was fumbled and smashed into more than a thousand pieces.
And Ryan burst into tears after confronting her with stark dismay,
As his eyes bled the words only his heard could say.
In the darkness lay his Father,
Decapitated of his limbs and his head,
But "Don't cry over spilt milk..." was the only thing that she said.
So one would suppose after the beatings he'd bludgeoned her with...
...That his wife had become numb to the hits,
From his thunderous fists.
But not numb in the sense she no longer felt his hands...
...More numb in the sense she'd turn away those who tried to help her stand.
And not numb in the sense that she never yelped or sang,
Over the welts that stang...
...But his consummate efforts devoured her -
In the clutches of this rabid wolf she became a helpless lamb.

No Use Crying Over Spilled Milk

Got Life? · 03-08-2008, 09:27 AM

I don't understand what's going on in this thread .. can a mod clean or atleast clear up why there are 3 verses in here? ..

nvm.

ohhhhhhhhhhhh makes a LOT more sense now

Got Life said my verse stood in his earlier post, whats up with this?

The verse isnt recycled from ANYWHERE. I swear. Check wherever you must, if you find it anywhere then I'll accept the loss but as it stands I showed up and posted a fresh verse. I did nothing wrong here man. Come on now...

I just wanna compete.

editted out.

Lucifa · 03-08-2008, 09:53 AM

fuck it .. I'll just vote ..

1. Bodian
2. Craccer_Jacc
3. Blackanese

I think Blackanese gave this up without any struggle or hint of fight .. 16 lines aren't going to win against 2 verses that are using more toward to the limit allowed .. so there was only 2 verses in the running here .. and of them the one I enjoyed most was the guy I don't understand why he's posting in here .. Craccer's verses was straight and the use of 2 scenarios actually worked with this piece .. story was decent and the verse was competently written .. however I just felt that Bodian edged that contest with marginally better mechanical aspects whilst being on par if not slightly more interesting with his content ..

Daht Cahm · 03-08-2008, 02:18 PM

I agree, it's very hard to compete with such a short verse. Especially when it lacks a lot of content. The verse about the mom decapitating her husband was good in depth, could follow the story and had very nice imagery. But the one part where it says this is the first time he hit her... I was sort of confused, because before that it was talking about him hitting her all the time.

The one about the lie and the cops, what was the lie? That he was adopted? That what I got out of it but why were the cops there? It was very "in the moment" and without a back story or anything it's hard to follow. One could assume he was adopted and pissed off, which is okay. But I have no idea why the cops were there. And I was confused about the zebras and such until the end.

Pretty close, both good in different ways. But my vote goes to Bodian.

Daht Cahm · 03-08-2008, 02:19 PM

Well then I guess by default my vote goes to Craccer haha. (Not to down play his verse in the least).

C.Jacc · 03-08-2008, 02:42 PM

i'm gonna win by default... *YES YES HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA*

bodian had a more complete verse then mine i was rushen.. so hats off to u kiko...
no i dont think u got me by a landslide but u did get me ..get me ontime next time. yo blacc knees i dont even gotta say nutten u seasoned enough to already know.

the lie was he was kidnapped
spotted like a cheetah hallucinaten zebras = chased by cops ..... juss the way i see things

i only did this cause without bodians verse it's kinda redundant.

Insanevillian · 03-08-2008, 05:14 PM

well...

Blackanese posted a decent piece... 16 lines... i think the flow was off but i'd most definantly have to hear it in audioi cuz some people can speak lines differently than read...

craccer jacc posted an abstrakt piece... it was pretty dope if i can get through the rhyme structure of the piece... i think u need to take that bold shit off though... it really messes with reading the verse... i originally posted ALL my verses in bold and i learned myself that people prefer the skinny...

also it was weird how got life apeared out of no where...

and Baron... what can i say? he had the best piece across the board... and why do i say this? it had better flow, better vocab... and the story interstined me more...

if Baron can compete my vote goes to him... because it WAS the best verse in this thread period...

but if not...

vote craccer jacc... for putting more effort into his piece than blackanese...

Got Life? · 03-08-2008, 07:09 PM

Dude, I asked you and you said it was cool. Lol.

Please dont do me like this now.

Its not like Jacc will catch a loss anyway even if I win (as votes stand of course...) and my reason for posting 'late' was genuine, and agreed by you in this thread up until you editted.

Like I said, Im just here to compete, the verse is fresh and you will not find it re-used from anywhere. I can guarantee that. Just lemme take part...

Ok...the rule currently stands as:

If grante

03-03-2008, 03:19 PM	#1 (permalink)
Quriosity Michael Clayton of Text Join Date: Nov 2001 Location: Atlanta, Ga Posts: 19,097	[Wk 4] 19. Craccer_Jacc 0-1 v. 20. Blackanese 0-1 v. 21. Bodian 0-1 (Vote Now!) ----- The RSTL Official Rules & Regulations ----- "GENERAL RULES" VERSUS DUE: Every Thursday @ 11:59 PM EST LINE LIMIT: 16 ≤ YOUR VERSE ≤ 64 NO RECYCLING, NO EXCEPTIONS • Recycling is the equivalent to that of a no-show and will be treated as such, thus resulting in a loss in favor of the participant whom chose to recycle and a win in favor of his/her opponent • Extensions may only be granted if a moderator has given consent prior to a verse being posted in the match OR your opponent gives his consent • If granted, the extension will override deadline for both participants • CHECK-INS are encouraged, but not required • Verses MUST incorporate AT LEAST 1 of the provided topics • A failure to show will result in a loss by default • If your opponent fails to show, you MUST STILL post AT LEAST 4 lines (4-15) AND 2 voting links in order to claim victory • A Championship Title WILL NOT be decided by way of no-show!!! • If an opponent fails to show in a Championship match, the remaining participant will be ranked as the number 1 seed, but will not be considered a Champion until a win by vote • Upon your second no show, you will be suspended for two weeks of competition. A third no show will result in a three week suspension and a fourth will result in a suspension for the remainder of the season. There is no suspension for first time no showers. "VOTING RULES" VOTES DUE: Every Sunday @ 11:59 PM EST • You MUST vote on AT LEAST 4 matches AND post links in your thread • EACH link NOT POSTED will result in a 1 vote DEDUCTION • You MUST also vote on the Championship and Contender matches and LABEL your links accordingly • Your votes MUST be AT LEAST 2 lines in length per verse to be counted • If your opponent fails to show, you are still accountable for voting on AT LEAST 2 matches as well as posting those links in your match!!! • Votes posted AFTER DEADLINE will NOT COUNT in a TIE or CLOSE match, thus possibly resulting in a loss!!! • Voting is open to PARTICIPANTS, RSTL MODERATORS, and PAST CHAMPIONS ONLY!!! • PAST CHAMPIONS MUST vote on a MINIMUM of 4 matches in order to be counted as a legitimate voter • Switch-votes must be changed within the hour of their original post time. Otherwise, the vote will be deemed void. ---------------------------------------------------------------- Any changes must be agreed upon by both participants and cleared by a moderator *MODERATORS ARE LAW OF THE LAND* __________________ .textmastersoftheuniverse. calefaction lucifa thereturn alias2 magus quriosity speedycalhoun johndough bonniebathory metasin sephiroth ((JOIN THE RBL NOW)) ►► CLICK ME, CLICK ME ◄◄

03-03-2008, 03:40 PM	#2 (permalink)
Craccer_Jacc got Purpose? Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: who's liven? Posts: 245	strolls in looks at Got Life? check'n in strolls out __________________ I'm Wacc?? we spend our whole lives developen our minds and in the end alls we wanna do is turn it off........... (miles) Fraiser

03-05-2008, 04:10 PM	#3 (permalink)
Bodian Mahatmaghandi Warholishit Join Date: Feb 2008 Posts: 89	Im here. ( Rhymaholik ) I should be 0-0 since I started over again, but its all good. I may need a slight extension if possible as Im just now seeing this. - wP. __________________ My pee-pee brings all the girls to the yard. "I swear though... Bodian put the goddamn laughter into manslaughter!" - Advent

03-06-2008, 02:51 PM	#4 (permalink)
Blackanese Got Flow Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: In yo sisters bedroom Posts: 5,963	im here __________________ Blackanese Music@Myspace Nese@Myspace Turndown Mag

03-06-2008, 07:43 PM	#5 (permalink)
Craccer_Jacc got Purpose? Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: who's liven? Posts: 245	http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464302 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464338 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464385 http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...1#post15464441 strolls out __________________ I'm Wacc?? we spend our whole lives developen our minds and in the end alls we wanna do is turn it off........... (miles) Fraiser Last edited by Craccer_Jacc; 03-07-2008 at 11:21 PM.

03-06-2008, 08:52 PM	#6 (permalink)
Blackanese Got Flow Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: In yo sisters bedroom Posts: 5,963	cool with me so ill post tommorrow also..... __________________ Blackanese Music@Myspace Nese@Myspace Turndown Mag

03-07-2008, 01:38 PM	#7 (permalink)
Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Oakland, Ca Posts: 16,322	Blackanese... i just saw one of your votes and i have to give u a warning... votes are supposed to have two lines of criticism on each verse... for the vote to be valid... or it doesn't count... i lost two votes myself last week because of this mistake and i'd hate to see u lose on a technicality... __________________ ELITE

03-07-2008, 01:47 PM	#8 (permalink)
Blackanese Got Flow Join Date: Jun 2000 Location: In yo sisters bedroom Posts: 5,963	You're standing at a grave. Who's grave is it? What type of thoughts/feelings rush through your mind? What happens? Expand. (Author NYSE) She's Gone.... so this is my "Long Distance Kiss" excuse me miss sweet dreams i'll prolly see you on the downtime... i dreamt about you last night and got to see you smile... it was a strawberry scent so strong i forgot to breathe... nah im kidding, but really it took my breath away... im guessing yesterday you didnt hear me calling you... i had to talk to you ive fallin for youima a mess today... if i could walk with you id prolly have a better day... its not possible or probably just forget it then.. so whats your favorite song and we could sing along... or i could write another one and riddle you a poem... i remember all the things you love and how to make you laff... come on laff, its a good thing to help the time pass.. cuz september was another month 2 years to be exact.. forever isnt what it seems forever never lasts. but the time is moving too fast im lost in the mix... so i really cant miss on this long distance kiss... 16 g/l to rymaholik and craccer jacc __________________ Blackanese Music@Myspace Nese@Myspace Turndown Mag

03-07-2008, 10:08 PM	#9 (permalink)
Craccer_Jacc got Purpose? Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: who's liven? Posts: 245	You awaken to find that your whole life been a lie. What were you lied about? How was this discovered? What will you do now? Expand. (Desenuts) my head leaves my pillow eyes playen peek a boo with the sun focus still owed still cold from the tale told 16 years old dont know my dna... so i was sold a new name new family dressed in clones clothes modern day pinochio triple helix plays the strings my life is pipe dreams emotion fiends stole seamless mission impossible obsticles from a lacc of fetis taken from the cleaners yea moms playing genius i was in the car seat screaming at the demons grab my mouth barely breathing choken on tears n cheezits quietly defeated can hear moms cryen "HAVE U SEEN HIM" then her memories vacant her smell can almost taste it in my baby blanket your tellen me it's all a lie baccs feeling the shank's lips it hurts to much to die or try to change my bum luck i know i'm not dead so i must be strong as fuck almost choked on my brunch when my fake moms bursts in the kitchen screaming .... DUCK!! You wake up to make breakfast when suddenly there's a knock at the door. You look outside and the police are waiting impatiently. Expand. i hit the floor with this whore called mom johnny law at the door guns drawn had to force my arms to pull my body to the bacc moms grabben saccs choppen plants gas'n down hallways.... i'm stucc tryna light a match could hear the sound of dispatch armed n dangerous out the window crowden neighbors and the strangest part is i'm tryna help save us mom shoots into the garage and starts the range up i spark up a flame police smash the door and start the raid toss the match with a flash of 2 fingas hop in the passenger acten singer moms smashes the gas past the poparazzi blinkers but these flashes have features bullets flyen through as i'm try'n to regroup then i see my moms shirt is inked up barley missed the tree trunk moms telling me she's sorry about the lies tryna stay alive Mary J on the speakers i wanna live to see her die on the blocc weeven moms screaming like heathens we're spotted like cheetahs chased by a heard of hallucinaten zebras notice the man with the trash dosent see us i yell Jesus the range crashes into his ass tires screachen and 3 flips juss as i see this evidant doom Got Life? shakes me out my stuper and hands me a couple more shrooms.. strolls out __________________ I'm Wacc?? we spend our whole lives developen our minds and in the end alls we wanna do is turn it off........... (miles) Fraiser

03-08-2008, 06:10 AM	#10 (permalink)
Bodian Mahatmaghandi Warholishit Join Date: Feb 2008 Posts: 89	Alice came to a fork in the road. "Which road do I take?" she asked. "Where do you want to go?" responded the Cheshire cat. "I don't know," Alice answered. "Then," said the cat, "it doesn't matter." Farley was an ill-tempered, cantankerous old bastard, His own master, And the man of the house... that very seldom would show laughter. So one would suppose after the beatings he'd bludgeoned her with... ...That his wife had become numb to the hits, From his thunderous fists. But not numb in the sense she no longer felt his hands... ...More numb in the sense she'd turn away those who tried to help her stand. And not numb in the sense that she never yelped or sang, Over the welts that stang... ...But his consummate efforts devoured her - In the clutches of this rabid wolf she became a helpless lamb, Without a leg to stand. A mere fallen star that glowed in the distance, As her world was transformed from technicolor to monochrome in an instant. But that first time he struck her, It also choked her of the only pride she felt. And that night she fell, but refused to retreat inside her shell... ...and issue any cries for help, Instead she waited, to make sure this tyrant dwelled in a life of hell... ...So beside herself, she plotted and planned, To greet his rotten demands, With the firm reposte of her hands. And unbeknown to this villainous raptor, she was filling with rapture... ...at the sheer thought me killing this bastard. She tried for weeks, Until eventually he was resigned to sleep... ...and mesmerised so deep, He didn't even notice her dive to reach, A hacksaw thats pristine silver blade shines with each, And every thrusting stroke against his flesh, in the nights deceit. An evil smile wryly creeps, across Alice's smiling features... ...As with the hacksaw held firmly, She cuts through the limbs of this violent creature. In the kitchen she sits and wickedly picks through flesh and bone, With his head mounted upright on the table, She had kept it cold, refusing to let him go... Then suddenly, she thought she heard his booming footsteps cascading the stairs, It was the way he had always done, Its distinct sound had now made her aware, So from her quaint worktop in the kitchen, Alice patiently stared... ...again clutching the hacksaw tightly, as she was unstable and scared. The looming shadow grew closer, And she felt the first signs of passing guilt... ...but as it drew towards the light, She realised it was their boy, Ryan, only wrapped in quilts. He dropped his glass of milk instantly, Upon exposing his mother's confounding secret... ...the tumble glass was fumbled and smashed into more than a thousand pieces. And Ryan burst into tears after confronting her with stark dismay, As his eyes bled the words only his heard could say. In the darkness lay his Father, Decapitated of his limbs and his head, But "Don't cry over spilt milk..." was the only thing that she said. So one would suppose after the beatings he'd bludgeoned her with... ...That his wife had become numb to the hits, From his thunderous fists. But not numb in the sense she no longer felt his hands... ...More numb in the sense she'd turn away those who tried to help her stand. And not numb in the sense that she never yelped or sang, Over the welts that stang... ...But his consummate efforts devoured her - In the clutches of this rabid wolf she became a helpless lamb. No Use Crying Over Spilled Milk __________________ My pee-pee brings all the girls to the yard. "I swear though... Bodian put the goddamn laughter into manslaughter!" - Advent Last edited by Bodian; 03-08-2008 at 08:51 AM.

03-08-2008, 09:53 AM	#12 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	fuck it .. I'll just vote .. 1. Bodian 2. Craccer_Jacc 3. Blackanese I think Blackanese gave this up without any struggle or hint of fight .. 16 lines aren't going to win against 2 verses that are using more toward to the limit allowed .. so there was only 2 verses in the running here .. and of them the one I enjoyed most was the guy I don't understand why he's posting in here .. Craccer's verses was straight and the use of 2 scenarios actually worked with this piece .. story was decent and the verse was competently written .. however I just felt that Bodian edged that contest with marginally better mechanical aspects whilst being on par if not slightly more interesting with his content .. __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running

03-08-2008, 02:18 PM	#13 (permalink)
Daht Cahm The Poster Child Join Date: Feb 2008 Posts: 143	I agree, it's very hard to compete with such a short verse. Especially when it lacks a lot of content. The verse about the mom decapitating her husband was good in depth, could follow the story and had very nice imagery. But the one part where it says this is the first time he hit her... I was sort of confused, because before that it was talking about him hitting her all the time. The one about the lie and the cops, what was the lie? That he was adopted? That what I got out of it but why were the cops there? It was very "in the moment" and without a back story or anything it's hard to follow. One could assume he was adopted and pissed off, which is okay. But I have no idea why the cops were there. And I was confused about the zebras and such until the end. Pretty close, both good in different ways. But my vote goes to Bodian.

03-08-2008, 02:19 PM	#14 (permalink)
Daht Cahm The Poster Child Join Date: Feb 2008 Posts: 143	Well then I guess by default my vote goes to Craccer haha. (Not to down play his verse in the least).

03-08-2008, 02:42 PM	#15 (permalink)
C.Jacc Registered User Join Date: Feb 2008 Posts: 11	i'm gonna win by default... YES YES HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA bodian had a more complete verse then mine i was rushen.. so hats off to u kiko... no i dont think u got me by a landslide but u did get me ..get me ontime next time. yo blacc knees i dont even gotta say nutten u seasoned enough to already know. the lie was he was kidnapped spotted like a cheetah hallucinaten zebras = chased by cops ..... juss the way i see things i only did this cause without bodians verse it's kinda redundant. __________________ I'll read your work and reply honestly.. so if your thin skinned buy a leather jaccet *Love me or hate me ... i have no emotions.. thats why I'm reading yours.*

03-08-2008, 05:14 PM	#16 (permalink)
Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE Join Date: Aug 2000 Location: Oakland, Ca Posts: 16,322	well... Blackanese posted a decent piece... 16 lines... i think the flow was off but i'd most definantly have to hear it in audioi cuz some people can speak lines differently than read... craccer jacc posted an abstrakt piece... it was pretty dope if i can get through the rhyme structure of the piece... i think u need to take that bold shit off though... it really messes with reading the verse... i originally posted ALL my verses in bold and i learned myself that people prefer the skinny... also it was weird how got life apeared out of no where... and Baron... what can i say? he had the best piece across the board... and why do i say this? it had better flow, better vocab... and the story interstined me more... if Baron can compete my vote goes to him... because it WAS the best verse in this thread period... but if not... vote craccer jacc... for putting more effort into his piece than blackanese... __________________ ELITE