Round 2: 2. nah son vs. 10. RICO VOTE!

J o o k · 01-14-2008, 11:41 AM

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Verses posted after the deadline will not count! UNLESS you post your verse before mods close threads (for some odd reason), and your opponent agrees to let your verse stand.

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Amendments

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2. You're opponent automatically gets the same extension deadline.

3. You cannot win a championship by no show. You will become the number #1 seed, but you must win by vote to be a champion. This does not apply for defenses.

RICO · 01-15-2008, 01:25 PM

ummm, Cheq

Nah Son, best of luck to you......i'll be posting toawrd the deadline

nah son · 01-17-2008, 07:17 PM

ay rico

actually i'm going to need a day extension

so if it's cool we can post tomorrow night

got some fam shit to take care

but i give my word i'll be here

RICO · 01-19-2008, 12:45 AM

...dogg you know its koo. i aint never trippen....ima post my verse......and i'll prolly add to it if i got some time...if not goo shit

RICO · 01-19-2008, 01:03 AM

I worked soo hard, my feet was throbbing with pain,
Back was getting tense and I remember the saying,
“if it don’t kill you it makes your stronger….
But never kept that in my brain,
Until the first time I needed to come up with your name.
Anyway though, on the subway , I was waiting to get home,
while In the back of the cart sat a man, with some head phones,
I kept my head low, watching him while i messing with my cell phone
I worked late, that’s the only reason I’d be in this hell hole
I noted that he would glance at every chance he had to,
Undress me with his eyes, like if for some reason he’d be glad to
With every sound of the tracks squeaking, my heart was beating faster
Its like I could hear his thoughts and knew what he was fiening after
Just then he stood up, and noticed he had snicker’n grin
Lights was flicker'n untill they all went dim,
And then………………………………................... .PitchBlack

I couldn’t see a thing all I could hear was my own breating,
I was sitting quietly, wating for tha lights but inside I was screaming,
Grabbed the phone again, pushing the buttons for light,
After I unlocked it the screen light up that’s when I felt a hand on my thigh,
I screamed but just then he had pushed my back on the bench,
And held me down tight as he put his hands on my chest,
Wrestling with my pants, I was kicking and screaming,
But that only seemed to fuel him, damn I couldn’t believe it
Now with my pants off and his hand with a fist full of tits,
I was trying to bite, kick, and yell, hell I was trying to spit.
Only after the panties was ripped off, I thought why even fight if it hurts,
Cause I wasn’t gonna stop him, so refusing would just be making it worse,
So I opened my legs wide, and began moaning in pleasure,
while he was thrusting his body into me, making me wet’er
Now it was ecstasy, agony, pain. all mixed into one,
And I began blame’n god for what he has done.
And in that moment of prayer, this situation, had stopped,
Along with the train, at our stop, then the lights flickered on.

He was standing over me close, as he put back on his clothes,
Put his dick back in his pants watching me as I rose,
then He gave me my pants, and sat down in the back,
I looked as I limped off the train, but strange, his just tilted his hat.
As I walked home every step felt as if it was my last,
And I couldn’t stop think of him, slapping my ass.
But the real matter at hand, was what my husband will say,
Only im gonna tell him that I just fell getting off of the train.
Funny, that night in the shower, I think I cried for an hour,
Washing my body from the filth thinking that guy was a coward,
But in a way I enjoyed it, it was sick, and I know it.
My body hurting all over he never stopped he kept going.
Which leads us to now, you’re the best thing in my life,
Loving you every minute as im holding you tight,
What a strange way god has given you to me, my beautiful daughter,
I just wish I could tell daddy, that he’s not really your father…..

ShhhHHhhHhhHHHHHHHhhhhhhhhHHHhHHHHH hHhHhHhH!!!!!!!

Lucifa · 01-19-2008, 04:27 AM

change that font or make it bigger .. or I ain't reading and voting on this shit ..
Fuck-a-Jook
I am the law!

nah son · 01-20-2008, 12:18 AM

Burned flesh,
Smoke filled lungs, she took one stern breath
Turned left, Ryan had passed out near the rug
So Stacy stalled hoping for a pause, but fear's enough
To keep her in the doorway, not saving her lover
She took a step, one more, and bravely another
Ryan's skin was bubbling, melting off his facial structure
She decided to get closer, but her grace was ruptured
By falling debree, and she was near that
But there was still time ... and a clear path
Her gut is saying save him, fear is saying leave
She thought .. "I know Ryan, would be saving me"
She yelled and hollered his name, tried to shout it out
Then turned ... and ran out the house..
Ryan died that night at age 23, what a poor kid
This is the night Stacy will never forget

While Stacy was at the hospital getting treated for minor burns
She kept talking to herself, saying it wasn't Ryan's turn
To go, so she thought back to the church plays
They were both in, and how they went on their first date
Ryan took her bowling, then out for ice cream
Now Stacy was asleep and this turned into a nice dream
Of all past events, which were all pleasant
He even got her the best of all present
That she'd ever received, on last Decembers eve
A puppy!.. that together they named Kimberly
Just then she felt something lodged in her chest
But awoke to her mom, who had been watching her rest
"I'm sorry Stacy, know that God has his own way kid"
"Ready to go home?".. So home they went

Stacy's not the same, she coughs like her chest is ill
And now .... she's addicted to depressant pills
Her mother sees a change in the way she acts
They try to show Stacy love, but she retracts
Keeps to herself, but in a while she'll cheer up
Because it' really didn't crush her, just made her tear up
You see Ryan wasn't her true love, no at all
Her true love is the same complexion, just not that tall
They've been together ... since she could remember
Her love was even there ... that December,
But Ryan had no idea, he didn't come first
He believed it was true love, but what's worse
Is Stacy didn't even love him, it was only like
She enjoyed his company, he filled the void on lonely nights

See, that night instead of being brave and help
She decided .. to save herself
So when Ryan was burning alive on that rugged floor
She knew there was nobody she loved more..
..than herself ..

-nahsy

Lucifa · 01-20-2008, 10:45 AM

cool battle guys .. makes up for enduring the Vada vs GL? battle ..

RICO - thanks for improving the experience by increasing that font size .. it does help .. now although not original in conept I did find this a rather refreshing read .. now you had typos that hurt the read and a few out of place syllables that hurt the flow .. but in general this was a good verse .. with some tweaking it woulda been better but I enoyed it .. the imagery was quite good with the emotional aspect to the piece also being conveyed to a decent standard .. however .. these along with the descriptive work could also have been improved with some tweaking .. it's a good verse that simply could have been a really good verse ..

Nah - feeling the use of that pic I submitted .. I enjoyed the story and the 'twist' to the tale .. all the mechanics of writing were put into good use here .. not really a lot to fault .. I enjoyed the read and the approach you took .. flow was smooth which added to the enjoyment quality put forward with the content .. good stuff ..

Vote = Nah Son .. not a lot seperating these 2 which is a bit of a surprise .. RICO gave Nahsy a real good run for his money here .. I think the fact that RICO's verse lacked the polish to really showcase a solid verse was the deciding factor here .. a few flaws which shouldn't have really been present left me splitting hairs on this as I enjoyed both stories .. good battle ..

Mound 10 · 01-20-2008, 11:10 PM

Rico you had a good start, I thought it was fresh and was wondering where you were going to go with the story. Where you ended was uncreative, because this type of story line has been done before. Your mechanics are improving with each piece and I think you have stepped your game up a lot for the playoffs, and I can definitely see that clearly. Overall the piece lacked creativity, the flow was cool, and the mechanics were on point.

nah son when I was reading I was like oh no, not another gore piece. But evidently it turned into something much more, something that I think each of us can relate to. It shows us the line of loving yourself more than anything else, and made me think what I would have done in the situation given. I think the twist at the end was kind of refreshing. I wasn't thinking it was her, but when I found out it was, it wasn't like a shocker. Very cool piece overall.

vote - nah son, but good run rico

Got Life? · 01-21-2008, 12:43 AM

rico - the whole rape bit can be pulled off, but the way you did it added nothing beyond what we've all seen plenty of times before...the piece wasn't bad by any means, but it wasn't great.

nah - this piece wasn't anything really over the top, but it was pretty fresh and I like the way that the ending panned out...also your mechanics and flow carried this through for you convincingly.

vote = nah son.

J o o k · 01-21-2008, 01:35 AM

Nah wins.

01-14-2008, 11:41 AM	#1 (permalink)
J o o k free the oppressed. Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Bay Area, Ca Posts: 9,653	Round 2: 2. nah son vs. 10. RICO VOTE! The New RSTL Rules and Regulations VERSES DUE:Friday 11:59 pm EST. NO RECYCLING. Verses posted after the deadline will not count! UNLESS you post your verse before mods close threads (for some odd reason), and your opponent agrees to let your verse stand. VOTES DUE: Sunday 8 PM PST. 4 votes per participant, POST LINKS in your match. Each link not posted will result in a 1 vote deduction up to 4 votes obviously. Votes posted after deadline will not count in a tie or a close match, thus possibly resulting in a loss. GET YOUR VOTES IN. You are also required to vote on the Championship, and Contendership match which will be included in your 4 votes. If you are not in the league you cannot vote, unless you are an ex champion. Ex champions must vote on a minimum of 4 battles for their votes to count. Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required. Verses MUST incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines. Anyone who does not post at least 4 lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show. During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit. Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a no-show. * EXSTENSTIONS will be granted on a case by case basis. If your opponent no shows you will still be held accountable for posting TWO VOTES. Votes must at least be 2 lines in length for each verse. NO SHOWS WILL COUNT AS A LOSS. Lastly: Moderators have FINAL say over all situations that arise. Amendments 1. Mods can vote. 2. You're opponent automatically gets the same extension deadline. 3. You cannot win a championship by no show. You will become the number #1 seed, but you must win by vote to be a champion. This does not apply for defenses. __________________ "Somewhere a True Believer is training to kill you. He is training with minimal food or water, in austere conditions, training day and night. The only thing clean on him is his weapon. He doesn't worry about what workout to do - his ruck weighs what it weighs, his runs end when the enemy stops chasing him. This True Believer is not concerned about 'how hard it is;' he knows either he wins or dies. He doesn't go home at 17:00, he is home. He knows only The Cause." Win or Die. Still want to quit? Last edited by J o o k; 01-21-2008 at 10:41 AM.

01-15-2008, 01:25 PM	#2 (permalink)
RICO my daughter right there Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Greatness: Capital R.I.C.O Posts: 4,920	ummm, Cheq Nah Son, best of luck to you......i'll be posting toawrd the deadline __________________ WhereMusicGoes "NewTrack" I got the Timbalands in steel toe, Cause rap is a hobby I got a 9 to 5, thats how life goes"-RICO

01-17-2008, 07:17 PM	#3 (permalink)
nah son the hundredaire Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: ny Posts: 936	ay rico actually i'm going to need a day extension so if it's cool we can post tomorrow night got some fam shit to take care but i give my word i'll be here __________________ RSTL CHAMPION OF SEASON I Yes, as in the entire season. A bitch tried to stick me Cause you fuck me don't mean you can kiss me Last edited by nah son; 01-18-2008 at 05:59 PM.

01-19-2008, 12:45 AM	#4 (permalink)
RICO my daughter right there Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Greatness: Capital R.I.C.O Posts: 4,920	...dogg you know its koo. i aint never trippen....ima post my verse......and i'll prolly add to it if i got some time...if not goo shit __________________ WhereMusicGoes "NewTrack" I got the Timbalands in steel toe, Cause rap is a hobby I got a 9 to 5, thats how life goes"-RICO

01-19-2008, 01:03 AM	#5 (permalink)
RICO my daughter right there Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Greatness: Capital R.I.C.O Posts: 4,920	I worked soo hard, my feet was throbbing with pain, Back was getting tense and I remember the saying, “if it don’t kill you it makes your stronger…. But never kept that in my brain, Until the first time I needed to come up with your name. Anyway though, on the subway , I was waiting to get home, while In the back of the cart sat a man, with some head phones, I kept my head low, watching him while i messing with my cell phone I worked late, that’s the only reason I’d be in this hell hole I noted that he would glance at every chance he had to, Undress me with his eyes, like if for some reason he’d be glad to With every sound of the tracks squeaking, my heart was beating faster Its like I could hear his thoughts and knew what he was fiening after Just then he stood up, and noticed he had snicker’n grin Lights was flicker'n untill they all went dim, And then………………………………................... .PitchBlack I couldn’t see a thing all I could hear was my own breating, I was sitting quietly, wating for tha lights but inside I was screaming, Grabbed the phone again, pushing the buttons for light, After I unlocked it the screen light up that’s when I felt a hand on my thigh, I screamed but just then he had pushed my back on the bench, And held me down tight as he put his hands on my chest, Wrestling with my pants, I was kicking and screaming, But that only seemed to fuel him, damn I couldn’t believe it Now with my pants off and his hand with a fist full of tits, I was trying to bite, kick, and yell, hell I was trying to spit. Only after the panties was ripped off, I thought why even fight if it hurts, Cause I wasn’t gonna stop him, so refusing would just be making it worse, So I opened my legs wide, and began moaning in pleasure, while he was thrusting his body into me, making me wet’er Now it was ecstasy, agony, pain. all mixed into one, And I began blame’n god for what he has done. And in that moment of prayer, this situation, had stopped, Along with the train, at our stop, then the lights flickered on. He was standing over me close, as he put back on his clothes, Put his dick back in his pants watching me as I rose, then He gave me my pants, and sat down in the back, I looked as I limped off the train, but strange, his just tilted his hat. As I walked home every step felt as if it was my last, And I couldn’t stop think of him, slapping my ass. But the real matter at hand, was what my husband will say, Only im gonna tell him that I just fell getting off of the train. Funny, that night in the shower, I think I cried for an hour, Washing my body from the filth thinking that guy was a coward, But in a way I enjoyed it, it was sick, and I know it. My body hurting all over he never stopped he kept going. Which leads us to now, you’re the best thing in my life, Loving you every minute as im holding you tight, What a strange way god has given you to me, my beautiful daughter, I just wish I could tell daddy, that he’s not really your father….. ShhhHHhhHhhHHHHHHHhhhhhhhhHHHhHHHHH hHhHhHhH!!!!!!! __________________ WhereMusicGoes "NewTrack" I got the Timbalands in steel toe, Cause rap is a hobby I got a 9 to 5, thats how life goes"-RICO Last edited by RICO; 01-19-2008 at 01:54 PM.

01-19-2008, 04:27 AM	#6 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	change that font or make it bigger .. or I ain't reading and voting on this shit .. Fuck-a-Jook I am the law! __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running

01-20-2008, 12:18 AM	#7 (permalink)
nah son the hundredaire Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: ny Posts: 936	Burned flesh, Smoke filled lungs, she took one stern breath Turned left, Ryan had passed out near the rug So Stacy stalled hoping for a pause, but fear's enough To keep her in the doorway, not saving her lover She took a step, one more, and bravely another Ryan's skin was bubbling, melting off his facial structure She decided to get closer, but her grace was ruptured By falling debree, and she was near that But there was still time ... and a clear path Her gut is saying save him, fear is saying leave She thought .. "I know Ryan, would be saving me" She yelled and hollered his name, tried to shout it out Then turned ... and ran out the house.. Ryan died that night at age 23, what a poor kid This is the night Stacy will never forget While Stacy was at the hospital getting treated for minor burns She kept talking to herself, saying it wasn't Ryan's turn To go, so she thought back to the church plays They were both in, and how they went on their first date Ryan took her bowling, then out for ice cream Now Stacy was asleep and this turned into a nice dream Of all past events, which were all pleasant He even got her the best of all present That she'd ever received, on last Decembers eve A puppy!.. that together they named Kimberly Just then she felt something lodged in her chest But awoke to her mom, who had been watching her rest "I'm sorry Stacy, know that God has his own way kid" "Ready to go home?".. So home they went Stacy's not the same, she coughs like her chest is ill And now .... she's addicted to depressant pills Her mother sees a change in the way she acts They try to show Stacy love, but she retracts Keeps to herself, but in a while she'll cheer up Because it' really didn't crush her, just made her tear up You see Ryan wasn't her true love, no at all Her true love is the same complexion, just not that tall They've been together ... since she could remember Her love was even there ... that December, But Ryan had no idea, he didn't come first He believed it was true love, but what's worse Is Stacy didn't even love him, it was only like She enjoyed his company, he filled the void on lonely nights See, that night instead of being brave and help She decided .. to save herself So when Ryan was burning alive on that rugged floor She knew there was nobody she loved more.. ..than herself .. -nahsy __________________ RSTL CHAMPION OF SEASON I Yes, as in the entire season. A bitch tried to stick me Cause you fuck me don't mean you can kiss me

01-20-2008, 10:45 AM	#8 (permalink)
Lucifa Viva La Eva Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: United Kingdom Status: Rumba Raving Posts: 16,787	cool battle guys .. makes up for enduring the Vada vs GL? battle .. RICO - thanks for improving the experience by increasing that font size .. it does help .. now although not original in conept I did find this a rather refreshing read .. now you had typos that hurt the read and a few out of place syllables that hurt the flow .. but in general this was a good verse .. with some tweaking it woulda been better but I enoyed it .. the imagery was quite good with the emotional aspect to the piece also being conveyed to a decent standard .. however .. these along with the descriptive work could also have been improved with some tweaking .. it's a good verse that simply could have been a really good verse .. Nah - feeling the use of that pic I submitted .. I enjoyed the story and the 'twist' to the tale .. all the mechanics of writing were put into good use here .. not really a lot to fault .. I enjoyed the read and the approach you took .. flow was smooth which added to the enjoyment quality put forward with the content .. good stuff .. Vote = Nah Son .. not a lot seperating these 2 which is a bit of a surprise .. RICO gave Nahsy a real good run for his money here .. I think the fact that RICO's verse lacked the polish to really showcase a solid verse was the deciding factor here .. a few flaws which shouldn't have really been present left me splitting hairs on this as I enjoyed both stories .. good battle .. __________________ Boy Better Know TMU Na Na Nai RSTL Ironman Tournament is up & running

01-20-2008, 11:10 PM	#9 (permalink)
Mound 10 At peace Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Palestine Posts: 136	Rico you had a good start, I thought it was fresh and was wondering where you were going to go with the story. Where you ended was uncreative, because this type of story line has been done before. Your mechanics are improving with each piece and I think you have stepped your game up a lot for the playoffs, and I can definitely see that clearly. Overall the piece lacked creativity, the flow was cool, and the mechanics were on point. nah son when I was reading I was like oh no, not another gore piece. But evidently it turned into something much more, something that I think each of us can relate to. It shows us the line of loving yourself more than anything else, and made me think what I would have done in the situation given. I think the twist at the end was kind of refreshing. I wasn't thinking it was her, but when I found out it was, it wasn't like a shocker. Very cool piece overall. vote - nah son, but good run rico

01-21-2008, 01:35 AM	#11 (permalink)
J o o k free the oppressed. Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Bay Area, Ca Posts: 9,653	Nah wins. __________________ "Somewhere a True Believer is training to kill you. He is training with minimal food or water, in austere conditions, training day and night. The only thing clean on him is his weapon. He doesn't worry about what workout to do - his ruck weighs what it weighs, his runs end when the enemy stops chasing him. This True Believer is not concerned about 'how hard it is;' he knows either he wins or dies. He doesn't go home at 17:00, he is home. He knows only The Cause." Win or Die. Still want to quit?

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