1. TheReturn - (39) vs. 16. ApoGee - (4) VOTE NOW!

[J o o k]

The New RSTL Rules and Regulations

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[.ApoGee.]

In This....G-Luck.

[TheReturn]

Yessir.

1 6. Lucifa - (16) vs. 11. Trybz - (7) VOTE NOW!
2 5. Vada - (19) vs. 12. DaAlmightDolla - (7) VOTE NOW!
3 7. S. Issue - (11) vs. 10. RICO - (8) VOTE NOW!
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[TheReturn]

"Shadowdance"



Little Linda likes to spend her time alone
Dancing in the alley right behind her home.
Her own little private zone
Where she escapes from the striking tone
Of her mother's voice, away from the sighs and moans
Of a new guy in Mommy's life that she likes to bone.
It's times like this Linda goes outside and hopes
For alittle bit of peace as she writes her songs,
While her shadow dances hand in hand
With the shadows that she hides in her head,
The secrets deep down that she tries to forget,
Long nights, awake, and tied to a bed
Forced upon by a guy her mother's dying to wed.
So Linda quietly rests, she keeps lying instead,
Saying the bruises that arise on her chest
Are the same ones caused by the bike that she wrecked,
Cause she knows she couldn't fight the regret
If the man her mother loved got up and left
Just cause Linda couldn't keep a secret with him like she had said.
And so now she cries as she steps,
Watching her shadow dance in the alley alone
Silently wishing that her Daddy was home
To dance with her at night when her shadow is gone
And protect her from the things this other bastard condones.
Daddy can only watch unhappily though
Watching the attacks on his own
In heaven, after finding out he's accident prone.
Mommy spent the night crying, attached to the phone
That fateful night he crashed off the road
Leaving Little Linda lonely, dashing her hopes...

Ever since, she's found solace in this stretch of path
Where she's freed from the troubles of where she's at
No unwanted sex, no wrath
From the man whose hands rest heavily on her chest and ass.
No traces of the alcohol that makes his breath so bad,
No drugs in her little alley, no death, no trash
No one in her life expecting her to forget her Dad.
All she knows in her alley is that she's free from the dread,
The movements of her feet and the beat in her head
The words that she whispers, the things that she says,
As she turns each night's horror into freedom instead,
By forcing out the memories and frequent regrets.
She thinks of her mother, and the man that freed her from stress
The man that brings her pleasure, screaming in bed
And Little Linda cries,
Knowing that keeping it all a secret is best
If she wants to keep her mother away from being depressed.

So Little Linda dances in her alley, starting to sing
In that flat black dress that gets darker with each
Of the long nights
She's forced to wear her heart on her sleeves...

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[Sumreyez]

**NOTE** - I'm posting for Apogee because he's having trouble accessing RM.

I look at this blank sheet of paper
& my thoughts is similar to a hanger,
can’t put them down, mind to stiff
trying to ‘shoot’ for sentences but hitting bricks.
Shit, so what should I write about?
My brain cells is filled with fear & doubt.
It says “Why you should be admitted?”
I’m still wondering if I’m going to make it-
far in life throughout this while bull-shit.
Teacher say “Let them know the real you.”
So, as the time ticks I go back to elem.School.
That’s the era when I entered the abyss,
in the devils tongue, swallow-spit & swallow again.
My mother was heavily consumed by poison,
at times while blurr she slurr “who you son?”,
Dad was no-where found like rain in desert.
Till the drug vultures had him for dessert.
Saw him abused & bruised on the TV screen,
said to myself like father like son that’s going to be me.
Every Morning I’m hungry, there’s no hot breakfast,
Breathing to live; live to breathe-I’m feeding on breath.
Not stacking chips-I eat chips off the concrete,
not going to school to busy begging money.
That’s how it was until I turned ‘six’,
Devil triple that and clogged mom’s wrist. (666)
Branches & Leaf’s is dead in my family tree,
I’m the last seed as I moved to a orphanage
No ‘Rich’ soil here-Still a Poor kid.
When beaten by the hand, time quickly flies,
don’t worry about nothing but staying alive.
When my food gets on the silver spoon,
my taste-buds scream not to let it through.
Some nights I sleep while my stomach growls,
but I have to be aware because ‘he’s on the prowl.
But you know what keeps me at ease-poetry,
those words from stanza’s that I read.
They take me to another world, another life,
that’s better than this; this pain and strife.
When I ever I read, I take the words and dream,
Illusions, so beautiful they take me from reality.
One Night,
I snapped back like a bone was put back in place,
hands over my mouth, my eyes screamed when I saw his face.
Reached for my pants as if it’s a prize to him,
won by votes, no, by forced. I felt the agony within,
every thrust I thought “when is it going to end?”
Everything was taken including my pride
I fled that same night with only little inside.
Found myself a cardboard box, heavily cried
leaked my scars and wonder when will I die....

Now here I am, at this college building
figuring out what major should I start pursuing.
Looking for a new life out of this hell-hole,
Paper in hand “Why you should be admitted?”
After all the bull I’ve been through, it ask me this?
I take out a pen in my ragged pockets,
and with the motion of my fingers and eye sockets.

I write

“My scars Proves my Worth”

[J o o k]

Over the no shows

[Lucifa]

this league is bloody obsessed with child molesting ..

Return - all the hype about Little Linda .. and this is it? .. big let down .. the writing was of the usual good standard with regards to mechanics of verses .. flowed well etc. .. but the theme of child molesting is seriously overused in this league .. I don't think a single week has gone by without atleast 1 story involving a kid being raped .. and the fact it's the mother's new guy is even less 'original' .. that aside however .. this was approached from a not so graphic and hands on (excuse the pun) narrative of the rapes .. so the fact it's more about how she deals with it is duely noted .. and yeah .. atleast it wasn't the old "so she killed him" kinda plot .. all in all .. it was uninspired by you standards but as with you standards ~ the level of writing was good ..

Apo - first things first .. proof read your shit kid .. spelling and grammar mistakes all over the show here .. and it's not me being picky but as a reader (and a voter) that can stick out like a sore thumb when it happens so often .. the story itself was ok .. again .. the child molesting business is starting to get tiresome .. but your story was a little more interesting than the usual child rape format .. this was more of a "moving on" kinda concept and fitted the topic rather well if a little predictable in approach .. short bars helped the flow but the grammar then hurt the flow as I was left stumbling over lines and having to repeat things ..

Vote = TheReturn .. this was close to a major upset .. and any TR haters could certainly create a breakdown fitting of voting the other way .. Apo had the chance to take down the top seed in the 1st round .. as TR didn't really bring an exciting or entertaining read this week .. his solid mechanics have helped here cos the stories themselves were about even for me .. close .. but the better writer takes it ..

[Quriosity]

thereturn, i'm mad that we basically had the same ideas, or very similar at nature although we executed it totally different, ofcourse you went the more EMO route presenting the girl and her hardships and how she's forced to cope with them for the sake of her mother's feelings, i wish i could say that the events that occured here were unrealistic but i know that is not true across the board, the emo worked for the most part and gave the verse what it lacked in other areas, however i do feel that you can have built an even stronger connection by not minimilazing her troubles in that last line and actually confronting them which would have taken the ending a different route, as is it still worked for me and left the story with a sort of abstract vibe or maybe even poetic but not in the sense of poetry, the antagonist was never defeated and the protagonist was left in agony in which she had only learned to cope with instead of confronting, the ending or last stanza was worded nicely and wrapped things up quite eloquently, overall this was a pretty good story, mechanics wise the flow started out nice and then the lengths and syllable counts began to differ and then it ended in the same fashion that it had begun, more than enough to keep the reader going however, the progression was smooth throughout and the overall content was a pretty good take on the picture and a somewhat entertaining verse

apogee, umm, this ended up being a great idea that could have gone a long way, but terrible writing here for the most part, at least mechanically, the flow was hardly ever on and was a big distraction for me as a reader, also the wording/spelling/grammar was a major distraction, i strongly disagree with lucifa here about this battle going either way, to me your writing was immature and ineffective in establishing a strong connection between the story and the reader, i was never pulled in or captivating by wording or imagery, even the flow suffered here and as is i feel that your verse has nothing more to offer other than a good idea gone terribly wrong, i did appreciate your effort and the tie in to the topic which i felt was good and would have been notable had your verse supported the potential of your thesis, good shot though homie but you still have a lot of work to do

overall, i think this was very clear cut and there is absolutely no chance of an upset, of course TR did not produce to his potential or what some may have grown to expect from him and rightfully so being that he is seeded at the number 1 spot, but he still did more than enough to flush out the competition and his verse was still a good read

therefore, vote - thereturn

[Lord Drama]

vote the return

I liked the way the story was told.. the ease of the wording, how natural the lines carry to the next, something which you seem to carry in each verse you write... although there was some lines like "dashing for hopes" that i didnt think worked.. the story theme itself was kinda plain and felt typical, but it was put together in a complete way.


Apogee, I liked the idea, thought it was better thought out then oponents, but all the lines had real quick instances where things would switch up real quick.. setting up each line to fit the next would have made it easyer for me to grasp all the things occuring in your verse.. without it, I had trouble following everything..cool drop though.

[J o o k]

TheReturn: The narrative voice in your piece is very strong. I appreciated it very much so. The storyline was so uncreative. I was hoping it didn't end in the direction you were taking it. I am just in need of something fresh, it seems as if 5 people wrote about the same thing. Nonetheless, the flow was very tasteful. Also alittle is actually two words, and the climactic ending or lack thereof, was no so bad using a cliche saying.

.Apo.: I would just like to congratulate you on your idea. The way the plot developed and unsure of the initial admit line, I read on and I just have to say although, it was also the same rhetorical story, the ending made it unique being in a college and putting everything together. Then the execution of tying in the quote with your admit idea was slightly dope. There were a few too many grammar and spelling errors for my taste. But overall I enjoyed it.


So you guys both wrote the same shit in a sense. So creativity of the plot is not even a factor. TheReturn had better mechanics. Apo ended better to me, and actually had the better story.

At the end of the day story always wins my vote and Apo's ending tying in with the quote was just more climactic then the heart on the sleeve.


Vote - .ApoGeee.

[RICO]

i also say apogee


only because i liked the fact that it wasnt really about the molestation itself but the forgeting and moving on. The Returns was awesome as well, and it hurts to vote against him, but the end of APs really got it for me. i mean he's going to college and the whole quote for his acceptance thing.

worked for me....


Vote Apogeee

only because i enhoyed his more not because it was written better.