13. TheReturn (9-1) vs. 14. DaAlmightyDolla (6-4)

[J o o k]

The New RSTL Rules and Regulations

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Amendments

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3. You cannot win a championship by no show. You will become the number #1 seed, but you must win by vote to be a champion. This does not apply for defenses.

[TheReturn]

1 5. Got Life? (9-4) vs. 6. Macmili (2-0)
2 15. .ApoGee. (4-3) vs. 16. Bonnie (4-1)
3 17. Condescending (2-2) vs. 18. Lucifa (9-4)
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EDIT: Rofl @ babality, MK2 is the greatest game ever, off any platform. Fuck what you heard, anything else is a lie.

[DaAlmightyDolla]

1. Contendership: 3. Juked (3-0) vs.4. S. Issue (6-3) contender
2. 5. Got Life? (9-4) vs. 6. Macmili (2-0) champ match replacement
3. 7. vada (7-2) vs. 8. TeKneeK (3-1)
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4. 17. Condescending (2-2) vs. 18. Lucifa (9-4)

[TheReturn]

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I remember, it was only a few years ago,
Walking to the pier alone,
Leaving all my fears at home, and just going...
Knowing here, I could clear my dome
And relax with no peers, no phone,
No memories of the divorce that split my home.
I remember, walking to that golden beach
By that pier so well known to me,
Where I witnessed that mind-blowing feat
Of a guy twice as old as me.

Wide-eyed I watched, with stolid feet
As his motions leap,
And his boombox blares,
So his dance moves can hold the beat.
No home, he just roams and eats...
And he told me "B" is what he goes by
While he's on the streets.

So the next day, ready to start it off
With my fresh shoes and a cardboard box.
I went to see "B" by the harbor docks...
...I can't remember how far I got
Before it hit
That "B" would've been forced to quit
And moved to a new spot to explore a bit.
So I flattened my cardboard to sit,
Bored as shit,
And decided to practice till the soreness hit.
Simple headstands was all I did
And already I felt the freedom running its course within.

Then after a week I was twisting and turning,
With ligaments burning
As I perfected the art of all the tricks I was learning.
People hoped to glimpse the emerging
Of the remix of the version
Of that kid by the pier, all sickly and hurting,
Who was now turning flips
With the precision of surgeons.
Dancing by the pier, emptying purses
Of the onlookers who stood by and witnessed his purpose.

I danced for a few years by the pier alone
Leaving all my fears at home, and just going...
Knowing here, I could clear my dome
And relax, with no peers, no phone
No memories of the divorce that split my home.
I never saw "B" again ever since he'd gone
But within me, his spirit keeps livin' on,
And every day I whisper as I sit alone
Thanking him for inspiration, that lifts my soul.
And when you see me on the street today
Bobbing my head to the beat that plays,
Don't pay attention to what the speakers say.
Don't be fooled when you read my face,

I'm one of B's boys...

And this outer shell I show is just a silly scam,
A coverup,
Simply a shadow of who I really am...


...A b-boy...

.

[DaAlmightyDolla]

Rosalinda Santa Torres de Leon

She was the talk of the town and the life of the party
until the men who claimed loved her treated her harshly
her mom warned her but her rebellion proved to be costly
because she went from alive in the BX to dead in Canarcy
from walking down Fordham Road to laying in the BK
but thats what happens when you don't behave
your time gets wasted faster than a prepaid
you've been dead for 3 days, but why...
because your life's been filled with the wrong guys
guys who promise the sky but in the end treat you like dirt
fill you up with lies, trying to see who can claim you first
while under a disguise they plagiarize with every verse
give you 1 name 1 day, next day something different
yet you're blinded and cant tell the difference
while your father acts blind while in the distance
at a time when you need the most assistance
your names been dragged through the mud..
but no guilts been shown in the way its been depicted
a young girl just wanting to be loved...
but keeps getting dropped instead of lifted
and its a damn shame....
because she represented the skilled and gifted
but now the times have shifted
she held up the brass ring while we tried to grip it
but shes fallen now and so too that artifact
but niggas aren't trying to hear all of that
and rather pass judgment without all the facts
because to them Rosie isn't dead and still breathing
so I check her heart and see if its still beating
and what do you know, it is but just barely
but lets see who would stop what they're doing to help out the young lady
because if the abuse doesn't stop she will end up the good and buried
so with each day I try to breathe life into her spirit
make her laugh with some words, make her smile with a lyric
tell her that I love her and make she can hear it
I may not be the greatest guy for her but who cares
because all a woman want is some attention and for a guy to be there
and I can easily lie to her but what do I get from it
if I lie to her than I lie to myself so fuck it.....
...theres no other woman in her league....
.....no other female who can compete......
....becuase they all fall to here feet....
and I love it
so let my Rosalinda mi nena linda* shine
let my lines refine what her name defines
a moment in time entwined with gods design
a woman who combines a hundred minds with mine
and I don't mind unless they all take the time...

..to appreciate Rosalinda Santa Torres de Leon

May I never have to light a candle by that name
place it in front of your picture with golden frame
and I know a handful of guys who would say the same
who would reflect the darkness from whenst it came
just so you can get back to the way you once were
because lately your greatness has become blurred

but not for long

*mi nena linda= my pretty girl

[TeKneeK]

Ain't voting this match just a FYI to you DAD ... and in fairness to R ... since we riffin' .... whether or not i vote against him .. theres gonna be suspicion....

[TheReturn]

Preciate the honesty, I'll return the fairness.

[Got Life?]

This is honestly tougher than I really expected it to be.

TR - I don't know how you managed to, but you made a bboy piece insanely emo...also I wasn't a fan of this characters name, it was to cliche really...the character development was solid though, the way it built up really showed why someone could turn to that style, appreciate it and find their spirit truly free when in that zone...the flow and scheme was really good and your mechanics were really solid.

Dolla - So this started out surprisingly really good...then it took a quick dive, the whole she's dead, but she isn't thing...I don't know it doesn't really work for me as something that clever, with you as her savior by treating her right and trying to raise her spirits...I get the whole piece and I could relate to the emotion behind it although your mechanics were a little sloppy here and there, would have loved for them to be tighter and your flow smoother as some lines were stretched.

This is really tough to call, Return had the better flow and mechanics, Dolla had the better writers voice and imagery, Both had solid character development...Both stories have been done a million times...I guess what it comes down to is TR took the B-Boy bit and made it his own, made it unique from every other piece. All Dolla did was add some spanish and NY flavor to it, but that's been done by countless amounts of people, that's what seperates it, Dolla just rehashed a concept without making it his own whereas TR did make it his own.

vote = TheReturn, but I almost want to vote this a tie.

[CounterPart]

good battle...wish i could vote

[Lucifa]

I don't often read votes after I've read verses as it distracts my mind and I may forget points I want to make in my breakdowns .. but I did read GL?'s .. and I am wondering if he actually grasped DAD's concept or not .. maybe he did .. but has this concept really been used countless times before? ..

anyways ..

TheReturn - shit hot flow to this verse .. like 96% perfect .. with just 1 line being slightly stretched from the flow .. the multies came thick and fast in areas .. and although they weren't of any real high calibre they were smooth and not forced .. the content was straight .. took a fairly basic route from the pic but crafted a beautifully worded verse from it .. smooth, consice and a pleasure to read ..

DAD - like I say .. I'm not so sure about the concept being rehashed so many times .. but for me this was a first .. and I liked the whole metaphor approach to describing this league .. edging out Return on the side of creativity/imagination in writing .. however .. other mechanics fell short of the bar that TR set when posting first .. your flow was choppy and the other little tricks that catch the eye like multies and inners were lacking .. and on this basis ..

Vote = TheReturn .. just for a fully rounded mechanically sound piece of writing .. I liked DAD's idea of metaphorical piece about the RSTL and he did pull it off better than a lot of writers in the league could/would .. but I think Return just gave a far more solid read with a stronger grasp of the aspects used in writing beyond imagination .. real good battle though .. enjoyed both verses ...

[J o o k]

Up

[Condescending]

Dolla: Hmm I didnt know what to make of your verse, I liked the concept but didnt understand a few of the lines and just it confusing for me. I perceived the concept to be about this great beautiful lady (hence the white doves) who gets treated badly in relationships and is maybe naive, tell me if im wrong lol. I thought your flow was ok, some of the lines were a bit long but you got to the point. I didnt quite understand how people thought she was dead but she was really alive?anyways nice drop.

The return: I liked your concept, it was like the beggining of the b-boys lol was clever how you did it. It read really well as the flow was really smooth, nice multies. I liked by how seeing this guy dancing the kid discovers who he really is and what he wants to be. Couldnt really see any flaws in your peace man, really tight, well done.

Overall vote= the return, his verse was more complete and the story flowed better

[Smoke Trail]

TheReturn
Flow was great the part that stand out the most to me. This was a good approached to a played concept and it was actually the sameideai had before my dude no showed, so im feeling this piece....only thing is i felt it could have had a little more depth and substance to it.....the short lines take away frombeing able to do that i know cause i use that format alot, but u made the lines work with lacking some depth, good job

DaAlmightyDolla
Flow was skeptical, choppy, and switches were in it i felt not needed,but i feel this piece had equal emotion and things of that such....I fel this had more substance, imagery,etc. I vote more on emotion and things in that area than mechanics, format and all that, writing is from the heart and soul...i have to disagree with everyone else and give this one to you

Vote= Dolla

[Macmili]

return - compliments on your verse this week, you put the whole thing together very well, the flow was consistent and the content kept me reading, only thing I didn't like was how you repeated the same bars from the beginning towards the end, you could have switched up the wording and said the same message. you made good use of the pic and had good imagery etc etc. good shit

D.a.d - this was not a good week for you, it seems like you couldn't think of a good idea for a topic so just pieced together a piece about a hot girl. i could dig the flow but the story made my ADD kick into overdrive and I lost interest relatively fast. nice attempt anyway.

vote- return

[.ApoGee.]

TR. Man This was good bruh. This was a straight foward piece and sometimes straight foward pieces always don't go so well..But bruh you had the mechanics and the build up on lock. I like the Imagery, very deph and vivid. The character you've created at first was like ok the kid is inspired by b-boy, so? But again, the mechanics just kept this piece interesting. In addition, the approach was flawless as well. The flow was good, made it very easy to read, I like your rhyme-scheme. There we're tons of emotion in this piece, no metaphors or anything like that just the 'voice' nah mean. Overall this was a good drop.

Dad- This seems personal to you bruh. Oh shocky ducky now, Lol. The concept was cool and it could've been better though. The flow was a little bit meh but I got the hang of it. There tons of Imagery in this piece, but that didn't stand out the most. What did was your emotion, I loved it, you've def expressed some feelings here and the way you've wrote it, seems very personal to you. Whoever the girl is, show it to her bruh. Overall this was a good emotional drop, I like it.

V/ TR. I felt TR came more better. The mechanics were better and overall It was more interesting, the concept and all. But this could've gone to DAD favor if only he put down better wording and flow.