7. Mr.Mister 9-4 v. 8. Linxz 3-3

[DiC GeTs GuLLy]

RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

RULES AND REGULATIONS - THERE'S SOME NEW SHIT SO CLICK AND READ

The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced

Due Dates

VERSES DUE: Sunday12:00am PST/3:00am EST (this means Sunday, early early, start of the morning)
Verses posted after the deadline will not count!

VOTES DUE Tuesday: 12:00am EST PACIFIC 3:00am (also meaning early early morning Tuesday for people in the US)
Votes posted after the deadline will not count!
[list][*]Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
[*]Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
[*]Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
[*]During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
[*]Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a “show” but will not result in a match. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent posts between 16-64, you will lose the match but you will remain in the league. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent does not show, you will “Win by no-show”.[/list]
Voting:[list][*]If you do not show you can’t vote in any matches. .

[*]No bias votes! If you have a personal investment in wanting someone to lose, whether because that member voted against you once, or you just don’t like that person, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match. If have a personal investment in wanting someone to win, whether because they’re crew member, or because you want to face that person in the next week’s brackets, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match.
[*]”Bias” must be confirmed by a Moderator.
[*]If there is a match which you will not be able to vote on, due to “Bias” of any type, state so within your match prior to Verses Due Deadline. If this reduces the number of matches available for you to vote on to the point where you are unable to vote on at least 4 matches, the point scale will be adjusted according to how many matches you do vote on.
[*]3-ways are inevitable. In order to provide a tie-breaker in a 3-way, you are now required to indicate in what order the contestants finished (1st, 2nd, 3rd).
anyone who does not show or vote is suspended one week and must sign-in again to be inserted the following week.[/list]


Topics Submissions And Ranks Are HERE!:
http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1036561

[Linxz]

THE WEIRD INTERVIEW

The reporter^^^^^

Reporter: What do you have to say?

“Razpy”
roll a spliff inhale the scene embed'n a gift
light is serve when knowledge is born talents are giv'n
most lose control feed'n into unstoppable desires
something that a God should only require to expire
equivalents want'n to be mo'immortal than human
brought into civilization so they can ruin
Now look oppressed cause society is far mo'wicked
no explanation or say so in what they created
so we hope and pray as if we the ones out dated
inslave'n build'n pyramids to treasure haunt'n to stunt
bodies was trade for whale tooth?
if not its whatever ya tell me huh!
mo'wise than ya think though I try never acquire a taste for pork
in these days and times other than thug I’m a modern cowboy
my gang stay strap, isn't scare to drop ya where ya stand at
not mad?
cause through history the life scares made me a man black
to justify justice in common good I write shadow box'n my raps
disregard'n to type whatever I feel its enough garbage up in the air
as you can already hear, odds strengthen walk'n towards fear
fucked up not only against peers but who survived outta here
done paid homage and drop'd tears pain that old folks feel 4'years
something young shorties indulged to embrace to be near
call a spade a spade call that bullshyt crap
I’ve grown to realize the same…BllllaaaAT!

Razpy: You feel me its more cultural than anything.

Reporter: Yea I feel, so what express yourself in the way you do?

Razpy: As we live through journeys in life, I feel that when we are faced with obstacles, we are going through trail and error.

Reporter: In other words trails and tribulations?

“Razpy”
A lot of peeps don’t listen to feel outta touch
So Its many forms of this lyrical clutch
Some get stuck hook on a formula
few would down but a couple would son ya
shouldn’t take it for joke or sit back and post
grab attention mix’n what ya feel as suppose
learn to call ya shots cause ya make host
stand behind every word you speak
by this only real men of god could actually bring heat
got those thatz street, but whose make’n a kill’n
Mr. camel toe got stacks plus he still build’n
As for the rat make’n a liv’n, you can see he chill’n
The rest is either lost in the sauce try’n 2’cope wit immunity
Its crabs in this music thing high grass in this business fling
My people need to raise up and get wit me BllllllllaaaaaaAT!

Reporter: So Razpy you feel applying what ya know….

“Razpy interrupts the Reporter”

Razpy: Look! Applying the knowledge I know in my raps, is just a small part of what I got to do as a person. Now to some it’s viewed as a big part, cause of the silver and gold. But as we all know everything, isn’t always crack up to what it pose to be. Life was never attended for us to have it easy, shyt aint peaches and cream mayne. I see everyday like I’m at trail with Jesus, so to each its own.

Reporter: WELL!

Razpy: WELL MY AZZ, I’m STILL TRY”N TO FIGURE OUT,WHY I’m AT THE BOTTOM Of THIS SO CALLED FOOD CHAIN!



Razpy^^^^

Hope yall like and Remember

The most valuable skill you can possess is the ability to acquire useful knowledge and apply it to solve real problems. Once you own this skill, you have all the education you'll ever need.

[MrMister]

Chaos Lust

The last thing I wrote as a free man
My vivid tales of horrid events always lead to a response
This infuriates me to my very essence
I’m amazed each time so my reply is similar in every occurrence
Why would you say such a thing is it insanity to create a world
You view as the one you live, or would it please you if I were to
Let loose whispers of a happy end, in each of my poetic fantasies
If it weren’t torture pain and screams
But flowers laughter and happiness
But let it be just these things which disgust me
Since life itself does not give it to anyone why should I
I’m am not crazy nor insane I just let my emotions which I keep locked
Free once I try to imagine my stories
Life has scarred me and so the picture I paint will display this
If there ever were a message within my pieces then it would be that
I hate you humans

Why it happened
My hands are shaking and my palms are moist
And as I sit I can feel my legs tapping without a rhythm nearby … I am nervous
I look around the square room filled with chairs and those filled with writers
Just as anxious as me to meet the one who holds their future in his palm
Well maybe not their future but their motivation and creativity at least
As the door to his office opens a broken man comes through it
His head down and a tear rolling down the lines of few that went before it
I follow his departure, mesmerized thinking that could be me
I’m quickly relieved from my trance as I hear my name called “Vino”
I look at the lady who asked for me to come in
A brunette with freckles and a million dollar smile
As I pas her by her fragrance mellows the butterflies in my stomach
But they quickly return as she leaves the room and I’m alone with him

How it happened
The conversation was brief and one sided
He was disgusted and didn’t understand all the rhyming
Told me to never come back but that I should seek help
Better yet he already did that for me because after several reviews it was clear
I was mentally disturbed
thought it his duty as a moral citizen to report it to the proper authorities
I was forced to see a psychiatrist to help with a problem non existent
after several sessions he realized that I didn’t see the problem which they saw
Prescribed me pills to take, but that is something I didn’t do
Why repress what I love, why lock away a side which we all have
This I guess made him angry
Because after several months of ignoring his advice he locked me away
Placed in a place where dementia, insanity and all out incapability were the norms

The first thing I wrote as a locked man
Discarded by society into a realm where screams are daily and keep me up
Sleep is now a commodity which is seldom so I try to steal it during the day
but after two weeks finally they gave me a pen and paper
so instead of my nap I will once again disappear into my own world
Where I can dream and tell my old self the one that lives in the past
To stop writing tales circling around death, maiming and sin
Because those around him do not see it as creative writing
But rather spews of a wicked mind a vile process which will lead to murder
Not once thinking this is his outlet of his fears, views and pain
So Vino please stop before its to late
now that they have placed me here, the voices which help you to write your tales
Have been whispering other things and I’m inclined to listen
I was always obsessed with the bad things in life and how to hurt some one
That is what got me here and now there is no way out
And in 5 minutes I’m going to see the one who put me here
its already to late for me and I’ve never tasted the sweet things I write about
Today I promise you I’m going to murder somebody

[Linxz]

so did the character give up, with the nonsense or did he actually kill hisself?

[MrMister]

no he went to the dude who put him there and killed him
but that is like something I wanted the reader to figure out for himself
and he cant quit what he is that is the whole point
he uses words to escape the the every day life shit

[SacriFICE]

Vote: Linxz

Linxz, I see where you were going with this, and it was a nice attempt at something more profound than your weeks past. However, once again you're struggling with clarity in a lot of your lines. Some of them just don't make any sense at all, or they just don't really involve a complete idea. What won you this match however is you actually rhymed..., and that's what we do here, we rhyme.

Mr. Mister: I see where you were going with the story, cool idea... but, where's the rhyming? The only way to improve your rhyming is to write rhyming pieces... I maybe some in there that were just coincidental, other than that, it read like a poem/story with no flow and no rhyming. It really made it difficult to get into. I appreciate you trying something different I guess but the problem with that is, this isn't a poetry league, or a story telling league. It's a league where those elements are included in rhyming verse, hiphop, rap.. whatever you want to call it....

Vote: Linxz

[Vigil]

Linxz - The story was grand, and i liked it. The rhyming and flow were okay. The writing itself wasn't bad, the storytelling was better and that's a good sign. I think you'll get better at rhyming, that's the easy thing. The important thing is imagination and creativity and this verse has that.

Mr. Mister- I agree with what Sacrifice said, this is a rhyming league above anything else. Very few writers have the capacity and skill to carve a story without rhyming. Baron Mynd is one of those few writers but even he lost when he wrote a non-rhyming piece in the tournament. So what chance does a guy like you or me have in winning a match without rhyming? There are other websites on the net where you can submit your short stories and poems that don't rhyme. But like Sac said, this is a rhyming league, storytelling comes second. With that said, I do respect and somewhat like the story you wrote, its just not my cup of tea, I guess

vote - Linxz

[Shrug]

Linxz- this is my first time reading one of your pieces. and enjoyed your concept on this piece, useage of topics, development could have used some work as far as the overall flow of things but that comes along the more you write and embellish ideas you have in verse. and like sac said man. you rhymed. props. you had a few fun multis in there which were definitely nice. and in all honesty those few alone won you the battle

Mr. Mr.- im not going to be a broken record here. you know what you need to do to win a battle. the past two votes have explained the pinnacle elements. definitely could have tried that this time. sorry homie wasnt feelin it. next week maybe

Vote Linxz

[DiC GeTs GuLLy]

Lin, the strongeast part of this was the way you narrated it, it held a strong voice and the format you used to display it was pretty cool too. Seems like it had a bit a filler that just said a lot of the same things, but it was still cool


Mr, you had a better developed verse, but where's the flow? It lost it's appeal because it had no flow to follow as a verse. It was just a continuous thought, which is cool if this was a creative writing class, but it isn't. It's a rap verse writing league. Kind of dissapointed because you could of won this with some devleoped rhyme scheme

Vote Lin