22. Sign7 0-0 vs. 23. Manute Bol 0-0

[Baron Mynd]

RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

RULES AND REGULATIONS - THERE'S SOME NEW SHIT SO CLICK AND READ

The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced

Due Dates

VERSES DUE: Sunday12:00am PST/3:00am EST (this means Sunday, early early, start of the morning)
Verses posted after the deadline will not count!

VOTES DUE Tuesday: 12:00am EST PACIFIC 3:00am (also meaning early early morning Tuesday for people in the US)
Votes posted after the deadline will not count!
[list][*]Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
[*]Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
[*]Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
[*]During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
[*]Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a “show” but will not result in a match. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent posts between 16-64, you will lose the match but you will remain in the league. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent does not show, you will “Win by no-show”.[/list]
Voting:[list][*]If you do not show you can’t vote in any matches. .

[*]No bias votes! If you have a personal investment in wanting someone to lose, whether because that member voted against you once, or you just don’t like that person, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match. If have a personal investment in wanting someone to win, whether because they’re crew member, or because you want to face that person in the next week’s brackets, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match.
[*]”Bias” must be confirmed by a Moderator.
[*]If there is a match which you will not be able to vote on, due to “Bias” of any type, state so within your match prior to Verses Due Deadline. If this reduces the number of matches available for you to vote on to the point where you are unable to vote on at least 4 matches, the point scale will be adjusted according to how many matches you do vote on.
[*]3-ways are inevitable. In order to provide a tie-breaker in a 3-way, you are now required to indicate in what order the contestants finished (1st, 2nd, 3rd).
anyone who does not show or vote is suspended one week and must sign-in again to be inserted the following week.[/list]


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RSTL Ranks and Topics

[Insinerhate]

Who is deserving of the Savior?

We prosper here inviting comfort and shun regret ...
Hope is founded on every surface the sun reflects ...
We practice religion not based on a purse or a wallet ...
Never discouraged because our church is the smallest ...
Traditional cash is honored we don't favor debit ...
Cus locals shops are trusting of good neighbor credit ...
Everyone is a friend that is perfectly open ...
No one criticises any word that is spoken ...
I recommend the house on the hill if you buy a new place ...
I built it myself plus it's quite a display ...
We all work at the plant in the back, pack fish with a smile ...
No one complains we've lived in bliss for awhile ...

And I don't want to leave

but........

Lately we've noticed strange movements from mountains around ...
Negligent we wave off the sounds underground ...
Becky told me she hears voices of crying at night ...
And sometimes loud noises of dying in fights ...
Rumors are developing and many stories are told ...
By elders, of times when this valley was horrid and cold ...
When unnamed beings would walk around in packs an' ...
Destroy every living thing as they stalk the ground with axes ...
I hope it isn't true but these sounds can't be silenced ...
What is really inside these mountains behind us ...

Maybe I worry too much

maybe...........

I must be dreaming, it's dark, I squint and choke ...
Why am I waking to the scent of smoke? ...
I see no flames the sky isn't brightened at all ...
What was that flash of light in the hall? ...
I'm safe in my bed and it's best left alone ...
I'm a man, I WILL protect my home ...
The flames are brilliant, I manage to pray ...
Cuz nothing is being burned by this savage display ...
I walk outside everyone looks shook but in grace ...
From glances I receive I must have the same look on my face ...
Exquisite flames of vengeance roar, I'm amazed ...
Nothing is burned just simply absorbed by the blaze ...
No sky is visible, no clouds, no stars ...
No sounds, only the rhythm of my pounding heart ...

what is this?.......

A figure appears with such a divine appeal ...
That everyone is forced to whine and kneel ...
It has a companion, be begins speaking with grace ...

"IN THE NAME OF THE FATHER, I LAY SIEGE TO THIS PLACE!
NO LONGER SHALL YOU DEFY HIS EMINENCE!
NO LONGER SHALL YOU SACRIFICE THE INNOCENT!"

I understand now, we knew the truth but boldly obscured it ...
That's why I haven't told you of tourists ...
We've always been told visitors are the beasts of the past ...
So we would smile and greet as they passed ...
Then we sacrificed them cuz their faces were cold ...
I thought we were right, we were saving their souls ...


I guess not.

[DiC GeTs GuLLy]

Sign7 wins, vote on 1 tournament match and the contender's match to advance in ranks

[Manute Bol]

its sunday, i cant still post?

[Insinerhate]

verses were due at midnight on Saturday, meaning Sunday morning, it's stated in the rules above, but if a mod don't mind I'm definitely cool with you posting as long as you do it within the next 2 hours

rules are there and stated plainly

[Manute Bol]

Laws are silent in times of war.
Cicero


So im really not supprised with the crimes abroad....

We got insurgent murders with their hate just surging
Were over there to serve the people with the same plate Saddam served with
Thought the plan was to liberate, not to enslave
Same people we're supposed to save die withought the dignity of a gave
And that really and fair, I wish that on no man
Imagine submitting your values cause the man doesnt value your plan
How can you tell another his way of life isnt right
When you got theives in the night workin for the government robbin those for their rights
They aint no better then those dictators they hate
But put that on the backburner because their oil is high grade
All about the duckets, money aint nothing to fuck with
Get rid of Saddam and now Bush is the dictator they are stuck with
A man get out of line and i'mma put his ass down
Beleive it, the death in New Orleans didnt matter because its a predominantly black town
Kanye was right - so fuck George Bush
We need a new black panther movement - to keep these war lords shook
Africa is rich in resources but low on cash
How the hell is African diamons help fuel a Belgian mans stash
Its all politics and bullshit, they got us in a headlock
Most of yall dont know the time and I aint talkin about a wristwatch

[Bull Dog]

I would vote but this is a no-show, isn't it??

[TaLi RodrigueZ]

I'll vote on this anyways just in case lol..

Vote= Sign 7

Mr. 7, this was a damn good introduction into the league. Technically, the piece flowed nicely and the rhymes were rock solid. Conceptually, I was given that topic in the tournament and I thought there was no way I could do shit with it. Maybe there wasn't, for me, but you definitely went somewhere that I would have never thought to go. There isn't a whole lot I can say that I didn't like about this so I'm pretty much going to cut this shorter than I might normally.

Mr. Bol, I get the sense that you just sort of threw this together so you wouldn't no-show. All props in the world to you if that is the case, but it kind of showed. This piece sort of came off like a brief summary of every problem everybody always writes about. Someone might write on the Iraq war. Another person will write about Katrina. Some other bastard will write about how screwed up Africa is. That can work, if you really dig into any of them, but you didn't. You more or less gave them one line and moved on, minus the Iraq part. So, that would be my advice to you. Don't stretch yourself too thin trying to hit a lot of different subjects. Just pick one and destroy it. Other than that, the rhyming was alright and the flow, while a little stretched here and there, seemed decent enough. Just didn't have enough content..

And that is that. Sign 7 obviously spent more time on writing his this week and it showed pretty clearly. That doesn't mean Manute won't be something to fuck with in the following weeks. But as it stands, Sign is the better writer this week.

By the way, stick around. It looks pretty sloppy right now becasue we're JUST coming off of a tournament and nobody knows what in the hell is going on, but that always happens lol. It will get better from here on out..

[Warpaint]

*this is manute, thanks for the insight

atleast you took the time to really read it

[Insinerhate]

yeah, what manute said, 'ppreciate the looks

[oNeiRiC]

its like kat williams says, politics is bunch of pimps

tellin u to suck dick while u dont know whats goin on

anyway, the whole town of new orleans boos at their mayor, i was there at the bowl game between LSU and notredame, and the mayor just laughed

and iraq may have been for oil, but now, its either we stay or the madhi militia takes over, there are many ways of looking at it

sign, as an example
Becky told me she hears voices of crying at night ...
And sometimes loud noises of dying in fights ...
~these werent all that great, jus kinda filler

anyway vote sign he had more elements of poetry used well

peac

[Insinerhate]

no disrespect pal but if you're the Oniric I'm thinking about you're all about the feedback, and I have no idea what it is you just posted up there, you said some shit about a mayor and iraq then voted for me after a quote? elaborate no?

[oNeiRiC]

lol sorry i just started blazing again after 2 years so im naturally all over the place, one sec

[oNeiRiC]

ok basically bol didnt put his all into the verse, i need not give the usual feedback, because there are steps

for now just work on putting a little more effort into the verse, in any way shape or form you can, whether it be the rhyme scheme, the content, the wordplay, the build up of the story, the flow, the transition from one event or attempt at projection into the readers mind, as in, getting the reader to feel what your saying, just think about it

when you are talking to someone, it's not just the words they hear, in fact that accounts for not even 8 % of the message

over 30 percent of the message is tone of voice, in actual conversation
think about how this relates to different elements of poetry

over 50 percent of the message is based on body language
think about that when you write your next verse

you were basically brainstorming your true thoughts, and spending a little time for the topical element, but were not planning a message to tell us, the people, or a story to have us follow, or feel

think about it, you have the power to change peoples lives through your writing

stop fuckin around with a record, u know what im sayin

sign i talked to on aim already with his feedback