Contenders: 4. Shrug 2-0 VS 5. Opera toonist 5-3

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RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

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The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced

Due Dates

VERSES DUE: Saturday, 11:59PM PST/2:59AM EST
Verses posted after the deadline will not count!

VOTES DUE Monday, 11:59PM PST/2:59 EST
Votes posted after the deadline will not count!
[list][*]Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
[*]Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
[*]Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
[*]RECYCLING IS NOT STRICTLY PROHIBITED. You may not use any verse that you have previously used within the league at any time. Whether it was a no show, tournament verse recycled for the league or visa versa or any verse that have ever been used within the league perimeters.
[*]During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
[*]Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a

[Annihilation]

ill be here.


could someone edit the title thread, I'm 5-2. thanks

[Shrug]

word up, Im in. good luck. be well and breathe easy.

[Shrug]

The meeting of two personalities is like the contact of two chemical substances: if there is any reaction, both are transformed.
Carl Jung


That One Place

When I was a sophomore, every body dropped drawers for hot whores.
But I thought more than others could with their distraught cores and gaping hugs. “Fucking is something different than making love!”
Yeah, no huffing and puffing for me, I did other things to please,
what ever the lover singed or teased,
and funnily my cunning mother thinks
I do “nothing but cuddling, then cease”.

Then, I met Kim Hennigan my senior year,
A descendent from heaven
sent with a demeanor unclear.
I’d seen her getting some beer at 7-11 with Stephan Deveer,
(He was an ungenuine gentleman and she was in Cheer)
He saw her as a sexual specimen, but I saw her more dear;
her elegance was excellent and evident, but what had spawned from my leer
was her resplendent intelligence that had gone thru my ear.

The next week in history class, we had to tutor a peer.
I picked Kim with precedence
I just wanted to help; but to her, a suitor appeared.

The lessons started shaky, largely
cause this daisy’s remarks were shady. [16]
She’d been regarded lately as a scarlet lady.

“Hey, turn out the lights, I study better in the dark”
“Your crazy”

She was my fantasy, and I knew she’d dismantle me
as gradually her grandeur reaped my handle squeeze.

“Hey, if you want to, I think I might have people over tonight,
you should come thru! You can drink, and mingle sober if you like!”

Sure enough, she came to the party and we drank hardily.
Shots of Bacardi off of a body, “Hot toddies”,
What ever it was that levered are buzz,
till it was hard to see.

I was kickin’ with other peeps
in the kitchen when suddenly
my lovely study buddy comes up to me lustfully
and presumptuously whispers me,
“Trust in me, I’ll be upstairs, come up and see.”
Kimberley’s mystery hinted trickery,
but lust is bleak.
As she hithered me,
my dignity blissfully kissed my weak
inside, as it swiftly seeped to retreat and hide
from chivalry, seeked by pride. [16]

See, her signs dismayed my frail mind the way
she arrayed “P-I-N-K” on her behind that day
to display the design to play.
That baffled me.

I find my way as we talk through her cavities of cranial casualty,
Then time delays, as she casually saddles me.
And shows me what “I have to see”
She gestured it, I told her I was celibate
in the most correct rhetoric she’ll ever get.
Then this clever chick’s tether ripped,
Which is when the weather hit…

(Clouds mustered under a cluster of my shrouded lust for her.)

I’ve never tipped
even though my stance was wide in a scandalous tide.
But she fantasized with vividness my innocence vandalized
before my wedding band and bride.
Letting plans deprive, The timid less man inside,
excreted might and ceased to vice..
As the damsel in shambles handled my handsel
With greed and blight in the heat of night….

Grabbing my underwear, thrashing with thirst,
unaware of the passion that lurked for grasping my “first”
while I had belated relent.
Faded and tense this avis invaded intent [16]
as her fate slaved revenge came with sedated clement
which created intense and jaded repent.

I lasted two seconds, but it didn’t matter to her.
As long as she got her due sentence and captured it first
With her rapturous curse, that grew into the penitence
That adjured this verse.

The afterglow resembled a battle blow.
I tremble as I reassemble the facts I had to know
about the night I traveled low
as fast as the wing flap of a crow
to capture a “ho’s” tattered rose.

“Was it lust or love?!” …the latter I chose…

It wasn’t even romantic
I took a deep breath, and tried not to be frantic
from the fact I had sex unlike I had planned it.
“DAMNIT!!”

“Just wait until a relationship, and don’t let it be taken quick”

It started as a simple vision,
but was bluffed when conniption was driven rough
and the mission rushed when lips did erupt
into kiss given lust under our linen hut. [13]



One's dignity may be assaulted, vandalized and cruelly mocked, but cannot be taken away unless it is surrendered.
Michael J. Fox

Dignity: bearing, conduct, or speech indicative of self-respect or appreciation of the formality or gravity of an occasion or situation.

[Pent uP]

claus no shows
vote on 2

[Annihilation]

sorry shrug, i got wasted last night and forgot.

good luck in the champ match man.

[Mr. Mynd]

DaMn, claus you were steadily climbing in my books too. I was looking forward to this match up. Ive read a few from you know, dont know if you would of beat this though man, Shrug actually dropped pretty hard here this week. One of the best Ive seen from him thus far.

Madd props.

[TheReturn]

Well done shrug. I liked how this stayed on topic the whole way through, it was really well written too. The rhymes were all solid and didn't really seemed forced that much. I, too, was looking forward to this battle, but I also support getting wasted so props to Opera on that haha. Good verse though, Shrug, hope you stay in the league.

[Shrug]

computer froze. fuck. here are two votes.

1. http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...0#post14062760
2. http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread...0#post14062760

[Shrug]

p.s. thank you for the feedback. you two, i too was looking forward to this match, ay Opera Toonist tho, if we battle again, let me know if your gonna go get smashed, that way i know i can post 16 and do the same. I gave up a beer pong tourney for this verse. =-P peace breathe easy.

[blackwell]

yo this was piece had a good flow but I didnt like how you approached the topic. Thought it sounded a bit ironic and corny with the whole girl situation but ur flow and multies were •••••••s. Very tight rhyming and a good piece overall

[Shrug]

Dearest Blackwell,

(i?ro?ny1? [ahy-ruh-nee, ahy-er-] Pronunciation Key - Show IPA Pronunciation
–noun, plural -nies.
1. In Literature.
a. a technique of indicating, as through character or plot development, an intention or attitude opposite to that which is actually or ostensibly stated.
b. (esp. in contemporary writing) a manner of organizing a work so as to give full expression to contradictory or complementary impulses, attitudes, etc., esp. as a means of indicating detachment from an emotion
2. the use of words to convey a meaning that is the opposite of its literal meaning)

corn?y1? [kawr-nee]
1. of or abounding in corn.
2. Informal.
a. [[[old-fashioned,]]] or trite.
b. mawkishly sentimental

Im confused, in this particular case with this particular story, as to why irony is a negative attribute to my piece. And by stating that you thought it sounded a bit corny, were you just inadvertantly stating an inability to connect with a certain sentimentality that you dont share with the character in the story? Things like this do happen often, many in the same scenario as portrayed in the story. so i cant help but inquire about the origins of your commment. I thank you for your constructive feedback, I am just perplexed by the the productive nature of your comment. Thank you for your positive feedback as well. Much appreciated, at least Im doing something well. Breathe easy.

Shrug

[blackwell]

lol no I didnt mean it in a negative way mr im an english proffessor just the whole girl situation and how you envied her for ages is just played out and boring. Thats just my opinion so dont hate. Your story read well It had nothing to do with me not being able to connect wit ur piece just i've seen it a hundred times over.period