CONTENDERSHIP:: 3.Addderal XR 30 4-1 vs 4. Opera toonist 3-1 vs 4. Woe 2-1

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[[woe]]

Hi. I'll try writing before Friday this time.

[Annihilation]

what up.

[Adderall XR 30]

Wonderful

23. MrMister 0-0 VS 24. David Lama 0-0
17. Client 1-0 VS 18. Juked 0-0
15. TheReturn 0-0 VS 16. disused hero 0-0
9. GotLife 28-14 VS 10. Vigil 22-15
5. Pent Up 34-13 vs 6. SacriFice 1-0

[Adderall XR 30]

What's in a name? More than you'd imagine and less than you think...



I used to catch a smack from Pop every time I acted out
So it was a massive shock when he packed and trafficked south
Leaving Mom and myself to pick up the pieces and make
A decent attempt at creating a cohesive estate

The reasons he left aren't as vital as the things he left with
Most notably the sternness that he'd keep my ass in check with
It wasn't that my mother lacked in strength
It was more the fact that, without Dad, my mind entered a drastic state
Of fragility, I was only 2 at the time
And Mom didn't know exactly what to do in this bind
She figured, if she chose to punish me for my discretions
That I might just crack, or plummet deep into depression
Seeing the expression on my face resemble blessedness
Was all the reinforcement that she'd need to clean the hectic mess
That I had a tendency to leave where I'd go
If only she'd known how this would have impeded my growth
Maybe she wouldn't have done it, nevertheless, it happened
So I never really learned how to take account for my actions

This showed itself in school; all my papers got scribbled on
I only shined while in gym class getting my dribble on
There was so much in my locker that it would hardly stand
Books, letters, papers; packed in like a sardine can
K through 12th grade presented a daunting challenge
Cause' I was a shaky kid in a world that was awfully balanced
And all my off-beat talents, such as drawing and writing
Never seemed to translate into careers that were all that exciting
So often you'd find me off on the block lighting a Dutch
Rotting my brain rather than hitting the books and rising to clutch
All the opportunities that flew to me in flocks
I quickly lost motivation and grew to be distraught

After I left home, a new batch of problems arose
Suffering from lessons that I was never taught and it showed
I was there, but I rarely ever used college for growth
Only thing I gave a shit about was concocting some prose
Posting it on a site to garner applause from my foes
And though I had success, I ended up caught in the throes
Of monotony, I thought, my god, there's gotta' be a way
For me to find something I love to do and possibly behave
Long enough to see it through till the end and make a living
Social Sciences became the game that I thanked for giving
Me some purpose, still, despite of my best intentions
It was an infinite battle to fight for my heads attention

Then one day, I thought I magically stumbled across the reason
That I couldn't concentrate and it seemed like an awesome thesis
Basically, the chemicals floating inside my brain
Were not firing at the pace needed to sustain my train of thought
I sought out a specialist, she provided some medicine
And I'll be damned, the shit worked like it was heaven sent
Bills were paid on time and my house was markedly clean
Not to mention, I could finish things that I started, it seemed like
A green light flashed, I was aggressive yet still in peace
But after a few of weeks the effects of the pills decreased

And suddenly I was back to my old habits and such
Harnessing my will to work cause' I didn't have it that much
Once again, I put my efforts into crafting masterpieces
Cause' they were the only things that would grant me massive releases
Of stress, I rejoined the league and had extensive success
But left cause' I was burnt out from always testing the best
Good news is that I'm back and I gave up the happy pills
Plus I got my Masters degree, I'm sure you're glad to have me, still

There's the question of the name, at first I made it to hide
But now it serves as a reminder of that phase of my life
Cause' now I am what I am, regardless of whether it fits in the mold
And that's cool as long everything I do drips from the soul

[OperaToonist]

Jack
Satan



He waits behind the gates of hell compelling the masses
As caskets swell with whispers expelled as he passes
A man patiently dwells as he awaits his fate
Draped in darkness’s cape Satan makes no mistake
Confessional box a cage that man cannot escape
Serrated words await as sinister plots take shape
Jack Bates has had an epiphany of deduction
Soon to be placated by the Symphony of Destruction
Light pours upon the decorum like the after storm
Every piece carefully crafted like the words he forms
For out of humanities torment grew his master thesis
Transforming his victims into masterpieces
Satan replaces the Priest, and so it begins
Father, please forgive me, for I have sinned
Every action brims with Good and Evil within
Every king bears a crown of sorrow, even with Him
Sin and Virtue are views taken hereafter the fact
I took a prostitute’s life shortly after the act
I cracked, I was disgusted by what I’d done
Her lungs expanding, pantin’ like the slut she’d become
My hands strung her neck like I burned from her sins
Father, what have I done, I must turn myself in
Foregone conclusions do not constitute my realm
But seldom do higher callings put you at the helm
You were overwhelmed by God’s love in her release
You follow a greater calling that’s above the police
What of my sins, I slid in between the whore’s thighs
It must be fresh in her mind right before she dies
Try as he might God is no suppressor of upheaval
The Kingdom of Heaven’s but the lesser of two evils
You must teach these unsavory temptresses the price
Of enticing good men into possessing their vice
If I slice them up I become just as worse as them!
If you don’t how many men will be cursed n’ condemned!
Embark on God’s task and shine his light in the dark
The blood must flow like the floods of Noah’s Ark
A stark landscape it is, our city drowns in sin
Like a poisoned corpse the town rots from within
I see the pleasantries of high society’s vanity
Pride, Lust, Greed and certainly gluttony
What of the sins you see in the lower class
Sloth and Envy
And you?
I am God’s Wrath
Oh how the Symphony rang in Lucifer’s ears
As if all Seven Sins sang he nearly reveled in tears
His Piece de Resistance, its final hour at hand
Time to unleash the beast and devour the man
One final thing, my son, she’s your first amassed death?
Yes, as I confessed, right down to her last breath
You lie, but I forgive you, you’d seen her a year before
Had you killed her then your bastard children wouldn’t lie dead on the floor
Tha- that ransom letter- truly she bore my sons?
The little ones starved in a cage once the whore was gone
A proper surgeon of respect out fucking a slut
You called her bluff and snuffed her windpipe shut
My own flesh and blood, god… you’re no infernal priest!
And you’re no Saint, but I offer you eternal peace
Let the wrath of vengeance in my heart never waver!
Do so and I will forever look upon you in favor
Adorned with fire was his path as he hacked up strippers
And born was the legend of none but Jack the Ripper.

[blackwell]

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[Atheist]

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[SacriFICE]

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Adderall XR 30, first off before I say anything about the piece specifically, I just want to note that I felt like I was reading my life story. Everything appealed to me about your piece, not only the particulars, flow, rhyme scheme, content, depth, relatedness, but you took on a topic that might have seemed like an "easy way out", or to some more of a challenge to draw people in. I think people should be drawn in with this, being that it's probably the story of many individuals, including me.

A life story I'm guessing will leave some people put off, maybe because it's not as twisty and turny and edgy or whatever. But I feel like in this cage, the human interest result of a broken family and a misunderstood child should create that edginess for the folks that can relate. Lyrically and flow wise it was perfectly written, each line blended together, allowing the story to follow a nice path to it's end. The rhyming was neccessary, with nothing forced and nothing too outstanding that the story was overshone. It flows like a song would. The parts of it all that I could really relate to, feel and definitely understand were the first through third verses. Specifically my favorite lines were:
"The reasons he left aren't as vital as the things he left with
Most notably the sternness that he'd keep my ass in check with
It wasn't that my mother lacked in strength
It was more the fact that, without Dad, my mind entered a drastic state
Of fragility, I was only 2 at the time
And Mom didn't know exactly what to do in this bind
She figured, if she chose to punish me for my discretions
That I might just crack, or plummet deep into depression".

All in all, for me it would have taken alot to compete with this, in my opinion.

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Opera toonist:
I'll start by saying the concept was dope, but not super original, but in this case it doesnt take away at all from the piece. The structure was also dope, as it allowed me to follow the story easily, seeing as the the flowing and the rhyming wasn't superb. But the storytelling was excellent, and the dialogue was appropriately twisted. Hell, even the colors chosen gave the piece a twisted feeling. It progressed well and the conversation being carried on was interestingly ambiguous, allowing the story to remain uncertain as to its ending until the end. Good job there. You didn't sacrifice plot for pointless rhyming but the rhyming even so wasn't too impressive. The flow was up to par for the most part, and the wording was ok, but I still think alot more could have been done with the rhyming to make the piece even more vicious. Alot of it was fairly predictible and seemed without effort, for instance, "master thesis and masterpieces" and the only symphony of destruction bit. While appropriate, those two concepts are wholly more interesting and deep then presented here. The very strength of this piece was again, the dialogue that carried the piece through all the way to the end, as well as the narration at the beginning and the end. It was presented well structurally, but the rhyming just wasn't too impressive for me.

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VOTE: This was tough at first, because Adderall's piece hit home immediately, and I couldn't find many faults, and Opera's piece had some strengths that alot of people lack in this league so far that I've read, a well structured and well told story. However, I have to give this to Adderall for the simple fact that I feel his verse was executed better ALL AROUND, rhyming, flow, content, progression etc etc. However, this was really close and both efforts were impressive.

Peace.

[SacriFICE]

woo, double post, my bad.

[SteveThaGreat]

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[Insanevillian]

remember kids to vote in the tag tourney...

ill be back to vote on this in a few...

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Insane Villian is BANNED from voting on this match

thats what your shameless plug gets you
vote first, drop shameless plug last
makes you look better, less flakey

[Annihilation]

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[David Lama]

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[Insanevillian]

Getting tired of editing your bullshit. Votes only in matches or you will be subtracted a vote from ur own match. Read the fuckin rules

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