sex talk

[flaco_rivera]

this is the sex talk
better than a porno with chest shots
and the less talk the better
how do you like it?
ride it my pony
and get up on the saddle
my bed is a war zone
get ready for battle
so many positions
im like a surgeon
i put it in with exact precision
and i'll have you wishin for more
and more and more
the hell with the bed we'll have sex on the floor
and you can leave on what you wore
except your panties unless they're crotchless
are you ready for an all nighter?
are you ready to be a lip biter?
i'll have your lips whiter
cuz you know mmm is the best sound in the world
how bout some playtime?
i have some good toys
we can role play and i'll be a good boy
i got some new positions cuz the kamazutra book
aint got nothing on me
we could do a threeway
right after foreplay
or if you want we can do a fourway
like BK says you can have it your way
can i use a dildo?
or you can rest your head on a pillow
and let me do all the work
or you can watch as i jerk
don't want sex because you're scared of pregnancy?
and if your parents find out it'll shorten your life expectancy?
well you know there are "other" things we can do
but i need something cuz i get so hot when i look at you
how bout some fingering
i dont know if you've seen my eyes lingering
eyeing your body up and down
will you let me make out with your vertical lips?
will you let me put my hand on your hips
move them to the inside and open up your thighs
dont you know i've been dreaming about your cherry pie
you dont even have to do anything to me
i have no problem just pleasuring you
because you know i'll be treasuring you
we can do some under the clothes touching
which will have my cheeks blushing
which in turn will have my blood rushing
but its ok im not rushing
we can take it slow
i understand if your scared
of doing too much too fast like pulling on your hair
incase you didnt know i am a freak
i will gladly kiss you on the cheek
whichever cheeks you prefer
can we do some tounge kissing cuz
you know i have this new piercing
which is suppose to enhance the feeling
this is the sex talk
from a virgin

[Poetic Concept]

Umm...interesting, rhyme scheme messed with flow, I am not going ot freetype on this one, I couldnt get into, your diction and adjectives, could have been extremely better, imagery wasnt there enough, for this type of poem all u need is imagery and it just wasnt there...I dont mean to critise I am just saying that u should practice some more, and write with emotion first, then revise it...out

[AlmostFamous]

hahaa this was a good read man

ride my pony ginuwine lol...

stay up