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Old 02-14-2006, 04:13 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Bhitiah takes it up the butt!
Untitled.
It’s staring me in the face,
waiting,
patiently
tapping
it’s hand’s on the edge
of my sanity.

And yet,
here I am
on my knees
hands clasped
in prayer position

knees touching
pavement
like a transient
begging for more then
spare change
transitioning
into making changes

It isnt enough
to envision
a better world

and sometimes
one foot
in front of the other
is how you trip..

Momma was right,
Bruises fade
but words
last forever
lingering in the back of your mind..

And I tried every technique
explained to me
to erase memories
that are toxic to my soul

All I’ve ever seen
slide through these
fingertips
are things
I squeezed the life out of
trying to hold onto.

Cant keep smiling
wondering if my eyes
are telling a different story..

Staring me in the face
hands tapping on the edge
of my sanity..

Tired of writing in the dark
so my shadow
doesnt leave an imprint
on lined paper
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Old 02-14-2006, 09:46 AM   #2 (permalink)
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All I’ve ever seen
slide through these
fingertips
are things
I squeezed the life out of
trying to hold onto.



mostly all of the stanzas in this piece are worth qouting....but this one really stood out to me...ive done this more times than i can count....and this piece almost had me crying at work!!! I'm definetly feeling this!!!

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Old 02-18-2006, 10:32 AM   #3 (permalink)
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and sometimes
one foot
in front of the other
is how you trip..
CHURCH!!!

Great job! Muh phuckas gotta stop sleepin in here!lol
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Old 02-21-2006, 03:55 PM   #4 (permalink)
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ok love the play on words here....you do a nice job of taking common everyday values and placing them in the bhitiah world....its slick i can't describe it....I love your style and this seemed to flow effortless....the compassion of the human spirit....mind body and soul....trying to hold on to the things we can't control.....very inspirational....short and to the point....like Mcdonalds I'm lovn it

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Old 02-22-2006, 06:31 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Is this the one you said you weren't liking? Shut up girl lol

If this is your writing a a bad day...well we already know you kill with your pen & paper on a good day.

I like this. A lot. You always have a way of playing with words...this is no different.
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This was a nicely written piece. Very depressing, yet still inspirational. I wanted this to keep on going to see if anything got better at the end for you. Wordplay you displayed was on point.


"All I’ve ever seen
slide through these
fingertips
are things
I squeezed the life out of
trying to hold onto."

^That was my favorite stanza. Something I can relate to myself.


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and sometimes
one foot
in front of the other
is how you trip..

oh shit and


All I’ve ever seen
slide through these
fingertips
are things
I squeezed the life out of
trying to hold onto.

fuck..lol

i love it...i dont understand how your work can be so much like what i've written...beautiful...feels like you write for me everytime i read your work...

thank you for posting..you truely are a favorite of mines...

to b..

your poems never felt like poetry to me
more like words that crept from tounge to ear
that i prayed that God would keep deep
within the catacombs of my heart where
the only one who feels me..is me..

few poets bring to perspective what you do...

-Aaron
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