The Truth That Lies Within...

Psycho69 · 02-14-2006, 12:07 AM

She stood, looking in his eyes, both as blue as the skies and water,

Beautiful, even while crying, best described by poets or authors,

It reflected what he felt, projecting his sorrow to her in just moments,

She never noticed it before, but only had to really look to know it,

And as their eyes locked, he walked towards her, so slowly at first,

As he searched her eyes for a question he hadn't ever before heard,

But felt there was something, and that he'd have an answer to give,

But, all he could do was assume, unaware of any truth laying within....

Speedy Gunzalez · 02-14-2006, 12:56 AM

I appreciated line transitions in this piece, it definitely added some quality. The descriptions were nice and simple which suited the tone of the poem.

Nice job.

misspimp · 02-14-2006, 10:03 AM

This was an okay piece....i didnt really like the way it flowed...but i mean i dug the word usage and the over all concept....

mad love

02-14-2006, 12:07 AM	#1 (permalink)
Psycho69 Paint An Empty Page Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Ont, Canada Posts: 814	The Truth That Lies Within... She stood, looking in his eyes, both as blue as the skies and water, Beautiful, even while crying, best described by poets or authors, It reflected what he felt, projecting his sorrow to her in just moments, She never noticed it before, but only had to really look to know it, And as their eyes locked, he walked towards her, so slowly at first, As he searched her eyes for a question he hadn't ever before heard, But felt there was something, and that he'd have an answer to give, But, all he could do was assume, unaware of any truth laying within.... __________________ poetry is how I learned to speak my mind and oh, the conversations we’ve had...

02-14-2006, 12:56 AM	#2 (permalink)
Speedy Gunzalez Awareness is my Alias Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: City of Wind Posts: 9,355	I appreciated line transitions in this piece, it definitely added some quality. The descriptions were nice and simple which suited the tone of the poem. Nice job. __________________ "...No sight of po-lice when we riot, fightin the system fire" - Nas

02-14-2006, 10:03 AM	#3 (permalink)
misspimp a.k.a KATURAH Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Virginia Is For Lovers Posts: 1,308	This was an okay piece....i didnt really like the way it flowed...but i mean i dug the word usage and the over all concept.... mad love __________________ MAD LOVE "Never to suffer would never to have been blessed" ~THE LATE GREAT ~ ~EDGAR ALLEN POE ~

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