VaLeNtiNe'z Day...

[nahledge]

The day comes again like it do every year,
but this year i hold my heart witout a tear,
witout a fear, cuz i have u 2 hold,
so when it be hot u become my cold,
and when it be cold i be yo warm,
i wanna make love, this ain't no porn,
u see, i was born alone, wit no one,
now i got one, and i shall hold em' like a son,
or even a daughter, wit the same love,
thank u LORD, i found this angel from up above,
life's chang'd, i've felt the pain,
even when the sun's out, tears have rain'd,
GOD creat'd perfect and call'd it, JESUS,
GOD creat'd beautiful and call'd it, YOU,
i've seen hell, have only dream'd bout' HEAVEN,
i've awaken' from that dream and now i see HEAVEN,
it'z u, the light that bringz new light 2 my life,
the reason i must live is, to make a sacrifice,
but see i'm no CHRIST and i must sin,
i'm human, and u give me a new heart within',
u give me strength and power 2 excel in this world,
after so many years of lurkin' i found my girl,
forever tru, see, roses are red and violets are blue,
i see HEAVEN when i be wit u,
my soul's been sold, my life's been cold,
i have a new heart and my heart u hold,
in yo hands and vice versa,
i promise i would never hurt ya,
but, this day only comes once every year,
tru love should be shown everyday, not once a year,
will u be my valentine u ask,
nah, be mine 'til my bones turn 2 ash,
grow old wit me, raise a family,
2gether, us 2, and live 4ever eternally,
love isn't somethin' that comes out the blue,
it builds and grows, and it'z the only joy that is tru,
witout money and free 2 humanity,
love is the only thing in life that makes u feel reality,
b4 pain was the only way i knew i was alive,
but now i dream no more, my bride has arriv'd,
aight maybe i'm pushin' it just a lil' bit,
but life is 2 short 2 hold yo self 2 any limit,
let the sky be yo margin, and infinity be yo limit,
live it, wit the one u love every minute,
yea it'z valentines, once again,
this time i hold the world, just me and my girlfriend.

THE END
nahLedge

B.E.Z.
PEACE

[absolute zero]

Yeah........I mean I liked the sentiment of it all.......

I can tell you're a rapper of sorts. But in poetry, I'd like to see a bit more technique. No more grammatical errors, even though I know you did it on purpose. (It just makes you look sloppy) I guess no one could tell if it was spoken. There were flashes of a nice flow, and some nice lines, but I couldn't get into this because of how simple and well.......wrong it was. Sorry.

Keep Writing though.

Bless.

[nahledge]

yo zero thanx 4 da feed man, just wrote this yesterday for my girl and decid'd 2 share it wit the world, i'll work on my tech but it was just like a freestyle thing i wrote, i ain't take time wit it just put it on paper ya kno'...B.E.Z.

PEACE

[*Six-Shootah*]

im lovin this piece...i feel that it was more natural than anything

[nahledge]

dam six, u lovin' this piece, dam thanx yo, i try 2 keep it raw, the way i thought bout' when it first came into my head...thanx 4 da feed meng...B.E.Z.

PEACE

[misspimp]

i agree with zero, i really couldnt get into it...for the lack of technique and the grammatical errors....made it really hard to follow....

however the message in this piece is one that i can defiently relate to. i am 20 and hv never had a valentine....this year i hv a boyfriend who is my valentine....so i am definetly feeling this piece, for that matter

mad love

[nahledge]

thanx 4 the feed misspimp, dam never had a valentine, dat sux i guess but don't stress it girl, my technique will improve and the grammar well, datz my steez ya kno'...happy valentines day to all...B.E.Z.

PEACE

[Shibbymet]

I liked it, good stuff man...had a very good flow and i thought it was str8 up the whole way, keep droppin, pce

[nahledge]

yo shibbymet, u really thought this waz good stuff, thanx yo datz wat up...B.E.Z.

PEACE