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Old 02-11-2006, 09:54 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Home Between Cracks Of The City

Between one of many cracks of the city, she lays...

The unpolished •••el beneath the trash,
Her fragile figure resting on a slab of concrete,
As God looks down upon her and,
Is too scared to cry, when she cannot,
Be sheltered from it...

And through the night, she feels her heart slow,
As her family sits at home,
Never knowing the fate that has imprisoned her...

And her not even knowing,
They'd gladly give her a blanket of stars,
To warm her heart and spirit,
Through those nights,
If only they could,
Though, she doesn't know they would...

And you can't find those who don't want to be found...
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Old 02-23-2006, 02:20 PM   #2 (permalink)
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well i guess i'm the only one who likes it....I take it this is about a run away who doesn’t see past her own vision thus immaturely leaves the situation? I liked how u started this off and lead into the whole situation without tell’in the reasons why but its still kinda there. This had just the right amount of detail to pull this off

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Old 03-02-2006, 09:47 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Dang thank u poetikal b/c i did not get it the first time i read it and then when i read ure response and read the piece again i totally understood(WOW...I am so slow)....anyways....this was a very good piece....and i agree that the way u started the piece and gave little detail for the reasons was great....and the imagery in the piece was great as well....very nice!!

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