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Old 01-05-2006, 05:31 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Love VS Lust(link exchange)
When you're shoulder to shoulder and eyes dance to meet
Pure and evil chance moods
by firing the ice skating fleet
and if the ice melts,
they'll swim the breastroke home
But if love had forgotten to test those zones
Then cold shoulder to cold shoulder this mess hath froze
and eyes dance to escape while mouths stress their tones....

But when You're neck to neck wrapping your counterpart
you don't wonder what else is left.
over, down the dark
alleyway behind the coarse door hiding a clouded heart.
You think about the lips to ears,
and how you found your mark;
Dully whispering 'Come chill with me.'
You're straining aimlessly
even though the sound is sharp and came with haste and ease

Touching elbow to elbow, hoping the sweat'll grease you uP
and provide enough work to get past the tease and touch.
But You're strangers on the Dancerfloor,
Center Stage
Burning away evil nights,
and icing towards those better days
Constructing railroads and decideing how the levers lay
Passionately burning up the tracks, leaving hell to pay

But so you tangle your days figure skating for style?
And do you tango your nights with lust raving your mind?
When it comes to Love do you feel that an omen exists?
What about sex?
can you hold off the Slow JAM that we risk?
And,
is lust to warm for the abominable snowman to resist
When her warm open arms welcome those cold ungreased hips?

You tell her
I bet You'll tell her
that you're the Hungriest

But are you ready?
Ready to go blow for blow with all those ghosts?
Batteling your mates past for the rite to hold her close
You're not, because your speeding through an area thats 'only coast'
and you forgot those vows you insisted would own your throats...
You are more concerned with going toe to toe.
Say it!
Are you not?
And that night time passion has turned your ice skater into a Naked aquanaut

Drowning....
Drowning..

Drowning in a Lake of chocolate and chocolate coated Inner thigh
Making a mess and trying not to drown by Dinner time
So he can eat and drink something other than the Candy of Sin
But at the lake all you get is FISH,
and that prevents you from feeling as manly as him
So expect nothing other than to drown in Chocolate Lust
unless you keep your head above sea level and fish to collect trust
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Old 01-05-2006, 05:38 PM   #2 (permalink)
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what up mannn... wow it's been a hot minute since ive talked to you

But when You're neck to neck wrapping your counterpart
you don't wonder what else is left.
over, down the dark
alleyway behind the coarse door hiding a clouded heart.
You think about the lips to ears,
and how you found your mark;
Dully whispering 'Come chill with me.'
You're straining aimlessly
even though the sound is sharp and came with haste and ease


this piece was amazing man...

I like this stanza the most, dully whispering come chill with me... haha... that's nice man

keep this coming

love vs lust nice pent... nice
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Old 01-05-2006, 05:40 PM   #3 (permalink)
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btw when I'm neck to neck with my counterpart... i'm usually dully whispering let's fuck.... ohh shit.. .ahahaha
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what i thought that was actually quite sharp man...lol
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This was a nice piece....the imagery is really what kept me reading....well that and the over all concept....which is kinda cliched...but the way u expressed your emotions. opinions and thoughts thru out this piece was anything but cliched....i def can relate to this on most levels....keep em comin

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i really liked this piece..allot of imagery that kept me invisioning what was going on....and its quite obvious wats going on unless ur not the brightest...but either way nice drop i liked it word for word
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You still got it.

But if love had forgotten to test those zones
Then cold shoulder to cold shoulder this mess hath froze
and eyes dance to escape while mouths stress their tones....

^This part got me thinking of two separate things. Is this doing so for the sake of self or for the love of the significant other? (to test) lol, if I can recall what I'm thinking I'll IM you one day with it.

Third stanza symbolizes lust-in my opinion of course. Damn this poem is good.

But are you ready?
Ready to go blow for blow with all those ghosts?

This is like the "bad girl" and the "bad boy" gone good, but "nice guys finish last" anyway-sort of deal.

So expect nothing other than to drown in Chocolate Lust

Something I've realized, most if not all of your pieces that I have read include a moral within it. Ahhh we need to talk about this one. Keep writing Pent.

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It's been awhile, sir. Good stuff right here. The first stanza really drew me in, and I was never un-impressed. Wish I could go further in depth.


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You still got it.

But if love had forgotten to test those zones
Then cold shoulder to cold shoulder this mess hath froze
and eyes dance to escape while mouths stress their tones....

^This part got me thinking of two separate things. Is this doing so for the sake of self or for the love of the significant other? (to test) lol, if I can recall what I'm thinking I'll IM you one day with it.

Third stanza symbolizes lust-in my opinion of course. Damn this poem is good.

But are you ready?
Ready to go blow for blow with all those ghosts?

This is like the "bad girl" and the "bad boy" gone good, but "nice guys finish last" anyway-sort of deal.

So expect nothing other than to drown in Chocolate Lust

Something I've realized, most if not all of your pieces that I have read include a moral within it. Ahhh we need to talk about this one. Keep writing Pent.

-Much Love

it would be more for the sake of self and i ?? wut the whole bad girl thing you're talking about

and as for the moral....I figure why write if I don't share some expierence with everyone....no matter how accurate the story that makes it is...

but yeah thanks for peeping me out

let me know
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