Vain Gratuities

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Old 01-05-2006, 03:05 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Vain Gratuities

Before this starts, I just want to say that I haven't posted in a long while, and that most probably never knew I left. I have, however, been periodically reading various posts, and I must say that UFO, however unknowingly, has encouraged me to continue writing. I'm not sure why, but he has sparked something within me, or, maybe more, awoken that which was asleep, so here I am. I believe this was the last piece I had written.

Vain Gratuities

Becoming numbed from the pain, and somewhat learned to the sadness,
I have succumbed to the game, knowing mother earth is a sadist.
Half of this life is a painful rut; constantly we tread in it.
We say we're thankful, but..constantly we're dreading it.
And letting it occur daily, without conversing about it,
Is getting my nerves shaky, as if I'm nursing the habit.
The worst things always happen; it will be better next, potentially.
But you're in a hazed entrapment; difficulties abound exponentially.
Flinch and you'll see that you’ve missed, that your one hope and shot has passed.
My life is the ink in this pen, but it's now broke and blotting black.
Trodding back, I remember once hearing that patience is a virtue.
And that truth is the key, but I know that being blatant can hurt you.
Time heals all inert wounds; unfortunately this is a mockish joke.
I've searched every inner room, only to find my clock is broke.
The world is seemingly fateful, and so it's plain for you to see,
That when you tell the world you're thankful, it's a vain gratuity.



Thank you Phoenix.
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Old 01-05-2006, 03:32 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Becoming numbed from the pain, and somewhat learned to the sadness,
I have succumbed to the game, knowing mother earth is a sadist.


i like how you started this out... real nice man...

although I must say that I didn't know that you had an absence from the realm... i really didnt even know you were a regular around these parts...

I myself have been around here for a minute alot longer than what this alias says... lol

been here since 2003....

but anyway nice drop hope you stick around mannnn...

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Old 01-05-2006, 02:59 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Ok drop kid the layout could have been a lil better loooks more like a short story then a poem that was pretty much the only thing i saw wrong with it stay up.
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Old 01-05-2006, 04:51 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Becoming numbed from the pain, and somewhat learned to the sadness,
I have succumbed to the game, knowing mother earth is a sadist.



Im Feeling This..First 2 Lines Had Me Going..

Although In The Middle It Sorta Seemed Forced..N Rushed..

Gradually Hit Me Again....

Damn Re-Reading It, I Understand More..

Trodding back, I remember once hearing that patience is a virtue.
And that truth is the key, but I know that being blatant can hurt you.
Time heals all inert wounds; unfortunately this is a mockish joke.
I've searched every inner room, only to find my clock is broke.


^^My Fav...Keep Writing Man..


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Old 01-09-2006, 09:24 AM   #5 (permalink)
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This was a nice piece.....i mean as far as the way it flowed and everything like that....but....this shit was so depressing, altho its the truth....and im sure most people can relate including myself....it was still depressing as shit!

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