"Moving Onto Moving On" - Conversations

Definit_ · 01-04-2006, 01:35 AM

Basically About My Ex, Who Struggles To Move On From Me And Her..She's Too Much Depended On Me Inwhich Masks Her Ways To Leave..
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I Hate You,
You Played With My Heart, Shaded It Dark
Admit It, I Was Never Good Enough From The Start
But I Love You,
Are You Blind To See My Signs To Talk
I Find It Hard, You Agreed To, Time Apart

Deny My Heart?
I Can’t, Our Love Faded To Black
Stayed In Back, Confused On How You Say We’re A Match?
Don’t You See,
I’ve Faced The Facts, Erased The Past
& All My Wrongs I’d Never Want To Take Them Back

I Hate Ya’ Ass
If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly?
Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me?
Answer This
How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me?
I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me?

Claimed Me Hubby?
How, Stop Avoiding The Truth
I Took A Glimpse Of The Future And It Wasn’t With You
Questioning
‘If Im In This For Me Or Her’, Im Juggling To
The Little Things That Turned Me Away, I Struggled To Prove

All Im Loving Is You,
Why Did You Once Say That We Truly Belonged?
And Whats Wrong, Is How Its So Easy For You Move On
Please,
What Did I Do That Pushed You Gone?
To Make You Leave, It Obviously Aint Take Too Long

So I Make These Songs,
With Hopes That It Just Might Ease Your Hurts
There Isn’t Any Other Way To Say We Won’t Work
I Mean,
You Obviously Won’t Believe My Words
What Makes Things Worst, Is That I’m Your First

Just Listenn..

We Can’t Be As One
Its Gunna’ Be Even Harder As Friends
To Be Ok, If You Don’t Allow This To End
Trust In Me, I Did This For Us You See
Threatening Me w/ Suicide? Its Must I Leave
Its Too Much For Me.....Believing Im This..
Sort Of Scapegoat As Your Reasons To Live
Its Clear To See, You Think Its Fair To Me?
When Life Was Going Good, Where Were We?
In Some Kind Of Fantasy, Vanishing?
While Your Panicking In “How Can It Be”
Amnesty? Face It Im This Randomly
Person, Who Will Never Fit Into Your Family
Don’t Hate Me, What I Did, Was Best For Us
Sorry I Had To Sacrifice You Ever Being In Love
Its Fine To, Call Once In Awhile, But Not So Much
Its Only Gonna’ Be O So Rough.....Just
For You Get Over Us…Trust

Definit_ · 01-04-2006, 03:50 PM

Dont sleep On This..

-1

RealMS · 01-04-2006, 05:36 PM

The first part, poem in the first format would've done enough justice right here. Man, I can understand the frustration you going through, when someone can't find it in themselves to believe what you are saying is completely true. Now that I look at it it was probably them childish mind games played, just to kill time and while doing so just trying to conceal how they really feel. I remember that bs. But what I don't understand is why they do that when they know how they feel about the other person?

Claimed Me Hubby?
How, Stop Avoiding The Truth
I Took A Glimpse Of The Future And It Wasn’t With You
Questioning
‘If Im In This For Me Or Her’, Im Juggling To
The Little Things That Turned Me Away, I Struggled To Prove

Then they wanna flip the script like everything is fine. Goodness. I know how it is. And no offense by anything, lol I'm thinking about my own situation lol. Keep writing.

-Much Love

Nebulaz · 01-04-2006, 09:44 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Definit_

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I Hate You,
You Played With My Heart, Shaded It Dark
Admit It, I Was Never Good Enough From The Start
But I Love You,
Are You Blind To See My Signs To Talk
I Find It Hard, You Agreed To, Time Apart

Deny My Heart?
I Can’t, Our Love Faded To Black
Stayed In Back, Confused On How You Say We’re A Match?
Don’t You See,
I’ve Faced The Facts, Erased The Past
& All My Wrongs I’d Never Want To Take Them Back

I Hate Ya’ Ass
If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly?
Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me?
Answer This
How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me?
I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me?

Claimed Me Hubby?
How, Stop Avoiding The Truth
I Took A Glimpse Of The Future And It Wasn’t With You
Questioning
‘If Im In This For Me Or Her’, Im Juggling To
The Little Things That Turned Me Away, I Struggled To Prove

All Im Loving Is You,
Why Did You Once Say That We Truly Belonged?
And Whats Wrong, Is How Its So Easy For You Move On
Please,
What Did I Do That Pushed You Gone?
To Make You Leave, It Obviously Aint Take Too Long

So I Make These Songs,
With Hopes That It Just Might Ease Your Hurts
There Isn’t Any Other Way To Say We Won’t Work
I Mean,
You Obviously Won’t Believe My Words
What Makes Things Worst, Is That I’m Your First

Quoting the first part, b/c I absoluting loved it. It was incredibly emotional. You penned such clever and decisive lines it had me struggling between smiling b/c of the wittiness and feeling for you. I loved how you played the multi-syllable rhymes, and the first part was great. The second part, I wasn't feeling so much, but its all nice.

Definit_ · 01-04-2006, 09:52 PM

^^Appreciated..Yeah, Now Reading It From A Calm Side Of Me I Dont Like The Second Part...

But I Was Writing For The Moment, Rather Then Writing For Structure And So On...

But Thanks Alot...

-1

Definit_ · 01-05-2006, 12:29 PM

Uppp Uppp & Away

DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA · 01-05-2006, 02:36 PM

This was a very nice drop kid kinda of funny cauuse ive been there before and can relate to this a whole bunch. The word play was almost stage like nah mean like romeo and juliette-ish,but not in the loving way lol. I like stay up kid!

Flammonde. · 01-05-2006, 03:10 PM

These kinds of situations always inspire writing, ya know? Your feelings towards this person were made very clear, and instead of using many metaphors, it seems you decided to face and describe the situation much more bluntly, which can have a powerful effect. I think it worked here nicely. Good drop, keep it up.

Definit_ · 01-05-2006, 11:57 PM

Thanks Alot All..

Definit_ · 01-06-2006, 03:28 PM

"Sliiiiides To The Top"

AlmostFamous · 01-06-2006, 03:59 PM

If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly?
Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me?
Answer This
How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me?
I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me?

damn... riggght there is hot... the picture perfect line was dope man... I see that you write alot like how I like to write...

stuff that just flows from your mind not some force fed, or taking your time to the point where you confuse the reader.... lol

I like this mos def

definit

Definit_ · 01-07-2006, 01:08 PM

lol..Good Looks All..

Bhitiah · 01-15-2006, 03:40 AM

If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly?
Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me?
Answer This
How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me?
I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me?

Yeah I agree, That was nice.

I agree about the second part too, the first part just stood so well on it's own.

01-04-2006, 01:35 AM	#1 (permalink)
Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE' Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: "Im From The State That Is IL" Posts: 206	"Moving Onto Moving On" - Conversations Basically About My Ex, Who Struggles To Move On From Me And Her..She's Too Much Depended On Me Inwhich Masks Her Ways To Leave.. . . I Hate You, You Played With My Heart, Shaded It Dark Admit It, I Was Never Good Enough From The Start But I Love You, Are You Blind To See My Signs To Talk I Find It Hard, You Agreed To, Time Apart Deny My Heart? I Can’t, Our Love Faded To Black Stayed In Back, Confused On How You Say We’re A Match? Don’t You See, I’ve Faced The Facts, Erased The Past & All My Wrongs I’d Never Want To Take Them Back I Hate Ya’ Ass If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly? Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me? Answer This How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me? I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me? Claimed Me Hubby? How, Stop Avoiding The Truth I Took A Glimpse Of The Future And It Wasn’t With You Questioning ‘If Im In This For Me Or Her’, Im Juggling To The Little Things That Turned Me Away, I Struggled To Prove All Im Loving Is You, Why Did You Once Say That We Truly Belonged? And Whats Wrong, Is How Its So Easy For You Move On Please, What Did I Do That Pushed You Gone? To Make You Leave, It Obviously Aint Take Too Long So I Make These Songs, With Hopes That It Just Might Ease Your Hurts There Isn’t Any Other Way To Say We Won’t Work I Mean, You Obviously Won’t Believe My Words What Makes Things Worst, Is That I’m Your First Just Listenn.. We Can’t Be As One Its Gunna’ Be Even Harder As Friends To Be Ok, If You Don’t Allow This To End Trust In Me, I Did This For Us You See Threatening Me w/ Suicide? Its Must I Leave Its Too Much For Me.....Believing Im This.. Sort Of Scapegoat As Your Reasons To Live Its Clear To See, You Think Its Fair To Me? When Life Was Going Good, Where Were We? In Some Kind Of Fantasy, Vanishing? While Your Panicking In “How Can It Be” Amnesty? Face It Im This Randomly Person, Who Will Never Fit Into Your Family Don’t Hate Me, What I Did, Was Best For Us Sorry I Had To Sacrifice You Ever Being In Love Its Fine To, Call Once In Awhile, But Not So Much Its Only Gonna’ Be O So Rough.....Just For You Get Over Us…Trust Last edited by Definit_; 01-04-2006 at 02:49 PM.

01-05-2006, 03:10 PM	#8 (permalink)
Flammonde. As 1 by kings accredited. Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Okay. Posts: 254	These kinds of situations always inspire writing, ya know? Your feelings towards this person were made very clear, and instead of using many metaphors, it seems you decided to face and describe the situation much more bluntly, which can have a powerful effect. I think it worked here nicely. Good drop, keep it up. __________________ _-_ /('.')\ '\(.)(.)/' V _/\_ And now, Starts the craft, Of the Father. I was older whenever I was younger. lllThe Man Flammondelll llThe Man Flammondell lllThe Man Flammondelll Last edited by Flammonde.; 01-05-2006 at 03:13 PM.

01-06-2006, 03:59 PM	#11 (permalink)
AlmostFamous U got a problem? Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Sioux Falls Posts: 2,789	If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly? Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me? Answer This How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me? I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me? damn... riggght there is hot... the picture perfect line was dope man... I see that you write alot like how I like to write... stuff that just flows from your mind not some force fed, or taking your time to the point where you confuse the reader.... lol I like this mos def definit __________________ the good lord giveth and he taketh away isnt that the truth My name is Nate Short MYSPACE NAME:http://www.myspace.com/tooshortnate

01-15-2006, 03:40 AM	#13 (permalink)
Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures Join Date: May 2004 Posts: 1,168	If I Was Picture Perfect, Why’d You Make Me Ugly? Not Even A 2nd Chance? And You Claimed You Loved Me? Answer This How Many Women Have You Placed Above Me? I Gained Back Trust To Love, Now You Take It From Me? Yeah I agree, That was nice. I agree about the second part too, the first part just stood so well on it's own. __________________ You can bomb the world to peices, but cant bomb into peace

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01-04-2006, 03:50 PM	#2 (permalink)
Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE' Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: "Im From The State That Is IL" Posts: 206	Dont sleep On This.. -1

01-04-2006, 05:36 PM	#3 (permalink)
RealMS Pro 31 Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Lafayette/New Orleans, LA Posts: 4,231	The first part, poem in the first format would've done enough justice right here. Man, I can understand the frustration you going through, when someone can't find it in themselves to believe what you are saying is completely true. Now that I look at it it was probably them childish mind games played, just to kill time and while doing so just trying to conceal how they really feel. I remember that bs. But what I don't understand is why they do that when they know how they feel about the other person? Claimed Me Hubby? How, Stop Avoiding The Truth I Took A Glimpse Of The Future And It Wasn’t With You Questioning ‘If Im In This For Me Or Her’, Im Juggling To The Little Things That Turned Me Away, I Struggled To Prove Then they wanna flip the script like everything is fine. Goodness. I know how it is. And no offense by anything, lol I'm thinking about my own situation lol. Keep writing. -Much Love

01-04-2006, 09:52 PM	#5 (permalink)
Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE' Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: "Im From The State That Is IL" Posts: 206	^^Appreciated..Yeah, Now Reading It From A Calm Side Of Me I Dont Like The Second Part... But I Was Writing For The Moment, Rather Then Writing For Structure And So On... But Thanks Alot... -1

01-05-2006, 12:29 PM	#6 (permalink)
Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE' Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: "Im From The State That Is IL" Posts: 206	Uppp Uppp & Away

01-05-2006, 02:36 PM	#7 (permalink)
DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA The Silencer Join Date: Nov 2000 Location: I'm westcoasting ;-) Posts: 2,509	This was a very nice drop kid kinda of funny cauuse ive been there before and can relate to this a whole bunch. The word play was almost stage like nah mean like romeo and juliette-ish,but not in the loving way lol. I like stay up kid!

01-05-2006, 11:57 PM	#9 (permalink)
Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE' Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: "Im From The State That Is IL" Posts: 206	Thanks Alot All..

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Definit_ P0ETiiCLiiCHE' Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: "Im From The State That Is IL" Posts: 206	"Sliiiiides To The Top"

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