After The Tavern's Light

ChyllTyrant · 01-03-2006, 12:50 PM

After The Tavern's Light

thoughts of blood and souls
taught to dance so bold
taut as tao
dancing solely with thou

sold to the soda stand
hilly dilly dally crosswalk
ice pop harsh
warm tongue slide slow straw sip

thoughts of blood and souls
so remember my chakras revolution
rise with the wind
through early autumn leaves
as it sweeps and weeps down
sweet as ice pop too late
wisp as whiskey wisked away
weightless lay or whale to the blue moon
dusk approaches from the east
the moon it rises like yeast
falls like fell beast
with leaves straying offwards
outcast outwards off the paths
and soda stands maintain religion
with empty display cans lining the side
one falls
kicked to the grey gutter
stuck to all the wayward leaves

thoughts of blood and souls
taught to dance so bold
taut as tao
dancing solely with thou

stole from traffic signal yellow
red green polarity
street lamp perplexing
with dim pink smog smoke escapee

thoughts of blood and souls
shuddering beneath the red eyes
backstreet beauty bloodclots
racing through the tunnels
mercy me
steal vision from the ugly
perfect swings and swerves
bang it off
flip the bitch
hock a louie
startled into an awareness
whereas elsewhere separation of colons
culinary school gradients
splashing the wayward leaves
westward ho!
d-d-d-d-amn whistle fever
rum rum revrands and politics
window seat reflections

thoughts of blood and souls
taught to dance so bold
taut as tao
dancing solely with thou

blue though black
darkness and light
through the permutations
scream attentive applause for these dreams

thoughts of blood and souls
questions
reincarnation
resurrection
remember

Poetical Techniquez · 01-03-2006, 02:22 PM

Honestly the more i read of this the more it just seemed to go over my head...i like the abstract style myself at times but there seemed to be nothing to try to piece what u were say'in to something else in the poem to try to put it together somehow. The repetition was nice but again nothing in the poem i could go to, to try and make it all come together. Based off the title was someone drunk at some point in the point?

....just read it again....was this about a bar fight and then the person who was drunk was just remember'in it???-the only thing i can come up with

ChyllTyrant · 01-03-2006, 02:29 PM

the point of this poem is that all we are is our life... our physical self, and our soul.

it's metaphor is the outside life and our return to our home.

it starts out probably with a drunk time at a bar, then the walk to the car. to sober up, a stop at the soda stand... then the ride home, from a passanger side viewpoint.

then we get home and sleep.

it's just about how thoughts, souls, and bodies permeate every awakened moment.

PEACE

Poetical Techniquez · 01-03-2006, 02:33 PM

that's pretty interesting once u break it down like that...so there was really no real purpose of the bar only to be a starting point or am i still missing something?

Nitsuj™ · 01-04-2006, 01:01 AM

I liked this a lot....

very deep... kinda makes you think... what style is this? did you follow a poetry form or totally freestyle the form? either way I liked it...

keep writin man...

misspimp · 01-05-2006, 09:44 AM

Yeh This Def Went Straight Over My Head....even With The Break Down....but Im Slow So....whatever....now I Definetly Loved The Style And Like The Above Poster I Would Like To Know If U Followed A Specific Technique Or If U Just Free Styled Style On Ure Own....keep Em Comin.....

Mad Love

Mind~$oul · 01-11-2006, 05:28 PM

Interesting piece. Had no idea where you were going with this though until you explained it. Nice concept man.

"thoughts of blood and souls
questions
reincarnation
resurrection
remember"

^Great way to end the piece man. Uppin for you

One luv

Quotive · 01-11-2006, 06:43 PM

you write the things i can't

thats why i admire you.

01-03-2006, 12:50 PM	#1 (permalink)
ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist? Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Syracuse, NY Posts: 830	After The Tavern's Light After The Tavern's Light thoughts of blood and souls taught to dance so bold taut as tao dancing solely with thou sold to the soda stand hilly dilly dally crosswalk ice pop harsh warm tongue slide slow straw sip thoughts of blood and souls so remember my chakras revolution rise with the wind through early autumn leaves as it sweeps and weeps down sweet as ice pop too late wisp as whiskey wisked away weightless lay or whale to the blue moon dusk approaches from the east the moon it rises like yeast falls like fell beast with leaves straying offwards outcast outwards off the paths and soda stands maintain religion with empty display cans lining the side one falls kicked to the grey gutter stuck to all the wayward leaves thoughts of blood and souls taught to dance so bold taut as tao dancing solely with thou stole from traffic signal yellow red green polarity street lamp perplexing with dim pink smog smoke escapee thoughts of blood and souls shuddering beneath the red eyes backstreet beauty bloodclots racing through the tunnels mercy me steal vision from the ugly perfect swings and swerves bang it off flip the bitch hock a louie startled into an awareness whereas elsewhere separation of colons culinary school gradients splashing the wayward leaves westward ho! d-d-d-d-amn whistle fever rum rum revrands and politics window seat reflections thoughts of blood and souls taught to dance so bold taut as tao dancing solely with thou blue though black darkness and light through the permutations scream attentive applause for these dreams thoughts of blood and souls questions reincarnation resurrection remember __________________ Twyll The ChyllTyrant aka Verbal Kynt aka Soul Prophet aka Wally Wigglez And Like That... He's Gone The greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was convincing the world he didn't exist. http://www.myspace.com/twyllthechylltyrant http://www.myspace.com/realninjtruth http://www.soundclick.com/tyrantny

01-03-2006, 02:22 PM	#2 (permalink)
Poetical Techniquez Lost in Thought Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Tha 4-1-4 Posts: 3,210	Honestly the more i read of this the more it just seemed to go over my head...i like the abstract style myself at times but there seemed to be nothing to try to piece what u were say'in to something else in the poem to try to put it together somehow. The repetition was nice but again nothing in the poem i could go to, to try and make it all come together. Based off the title was someone drunk at some point in the point? ....just read it again....was this about a bar fight and then the person who was drunk was just remember'in it???-the only thing i can come up with Last edited by Poetical Techniquez; 01-03-2006 at 02:24 PM.

01-03-2006, 02:29 PM	#3 (permalink)
ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist? Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Syracuse, NY Posts: 830	the point of this poem is that all we are is our life... our physical self, and our soul. it's metaphor is the outside life and our return to our home. it starts out probably with a drunk time at a bar, then the walk to the car. to sober up, a stop at the soda stand... then the ride home, from a passanger side viewpoint. then we get home and sleep. it's just about how thoughts, souls, and bodies permeate every awakened moment. PEACE __________________ Twyll The ChyllTyrant aka Verbal Kynt aka Soul Prophet aka Wally Wigglez And Like That... He's Gone The greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was convincing the world he didn't exist. http://www.myspace.com/twyllthechylltyrant http://www.myspace.com/realninjtruth http://www.soundclick.com/tyrantny

01-04-2006, 01:01 AM	#5 (permalink)
Nitsuj™ model citizen Join Date: Oct 2000 Location: MPLS / STP, MN Posts: 14,498	I liked this a lot.... very deep... kinda makes you think... what style is this? did you follow a poetry form or totally freestyle the form? either way I liked it... keep writin man... __________________ word

01-05-2006, 09:44 AM	#6 (permalink)
misspimp a.k.a KATURAH Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Virginia Is For Lovers Posts: 1,308	Yeh This Def Went Straight Over My Head....even With The Break Down....but Im Slow So....whatever....now I Definetly Loved The Style And Like The Above Poster I Would Like To Know If U Followed A Specific Technique Or If U Just Free Styled Style On Ure Own....keep Em Comin..... Mad Love __________________ MAD LOVE "Never to suffer would never to have been blessed" ~THE LATE GREAT ~ ~EDGAR ALLEN POE ~

01-03-2006, 02:33 PM	#4 (permalink)
Poetical Techniquez Lost in Thought Join Date: Apr 2000 Location: Tha 4-1-4 Posts: 3,210	that's pretty interesting once u break it down like that...so there was really no real purpose of the bar only to be a starting point or am i still missing something?

01-11-2006, 05:28 PM	#7 (permalink)
Mind~$oul I'm Pretty Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: North Memphis BITCH! Posts: 17,145	Interesting piece. Had no idea where you were going with this though until you explained it. Nice concept man. "thoughts of blood and souls questions reincarnation resurrection remember" ^Great way to end the piece man. Uppin for you One luv __________________ "Everybody wanna be a nicca, but don't nobody wanna be a nicca"-Paul Mooney "I tried to live right, but society aint made for niccas to live right"-Joe Budden

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