NEW YEAR countdown

UFO the Phoenix · 12-31-2005, 10:34 PM

New Year Countdown

So how bout that 2005?
The tsunami got the party started
RIP Richard Insane Pryor
Means no laughs this christmas
cold hearted contained irony
winter mix with wild fires
Iraq builds their own army
Democracy on the conor
with a sign labeled
"Will work for food"
So how bout that 2005?
Michael Jackson found Innocent
Bush 2 is still president
And Paris Hilton Nude
Earthquakes so delicate
rattlesnakes can't breakdance
so Middle East Seeks aid
CBS becomes the #1 network
The crips and bloods become afraid
And don't forget the Hurricane
countdown please

10
more dead in New Orleans
9
more black children homeless
8
more let go of dreams
7
more blow a kiss to dead ones
6
more broken bones on a bottled wall
5
more cops ontop a brothers skull
4
more unanswered 911 calls
3
more lovers discover war
2
more eyes watch a city fall
1
more person going to hell

This is the new year count down
gather around and shout farewell
another moment tatooed upon the self
With so much damage in the past
we wonder what the future holds
putting karma on the shelfs
on top of that dusty bible
on top of that "PEACE" sticker symbol
which is no more then an
upsidedown broken crucafix
so much for world peace
like all those psyhics predicted
Hey its ok to go a little crazy
as long as you admit it
Keep those dreams upon your lips
smile and never forget
Happy 2006
God knows whats next

Lord RAH · 01-01-2006, 09:34 PM

Dude this was hella tight...I would have dug a tighter more fluid flow but the things you talked about allowed me to be totally forgiving...I hate you get sleep on so much.....

misspimp · 01-04-2006, 06:23 PM

yeh i agree with lord about the flow but then at the same time i kinda liked that the flow wasnt that tight i cant believe this shit aint get but one reply...anywhos def diggin the concept...each line was fire that really just made u think hard like damn true true true

keep em comin

mad love

Flammonde. · 01-05-2006, 01:46 PM

"3 more lovers discover war.."

I especially liked this line, kind of sums up a plethora of feelings i've experienced in my life for a while now. Also, the peace symbol - upsidedown broken crucifix line was nicely put, and quite ironic. To me, this piece was unusual, in that although it seemed very melancholy on the surface, the message is almost one of hope. Great job.

DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA · 01-05-2006, 02:52 PM

Man this was really tight kid the whole count down thing got me seriously. I think this was a real nice touch for the peice plus the word play was decent kid mad luv from this was im uppN for the sleeperzzzzzzzzz....

12-31-2005, 10:34 PM	#1 (permalink)
UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS! Join Date: Aug 1999 Location: Oceanside CA USA Posts: 2,965	NEW YEAR countdown New Year Countdown So how bout that 2005? The tsunami got the party started RIP Richard Insane Pryor Means no laughs this christmas cold hearted contained irony winter mix with wild fires Iraq builds their own army Democracy on the conor with a sign labeled "Will work for food" So how bout that 2005? Michael Jackson found Innocent Bush 2 is still president And Paris Hilton Nude Earthquakes so delicate rattlesnakes can't breakdance so Middle East Seeks aid CBS becomes the #1 network The crips and bloods become afraid And don't forget the Hurricane countdown please 10 more dead in New Orleans 9 more black children homeless 8 more let go of dreams 7 more blow a kiss to dead ones 6 more broken bones on a bottled wall 5 more cops ontop a brothers skull 4 more unanswered 911 calls 3 more lovers discover war 2 more eyes watch a city fall 1 more person going to hell This is the new year count down gather around and shout farewell another moment tatooed upon the self With so much damage in the past we wonder what the future holds putting karma on the shelfs on top of that dusty bible on top of that "PEACE" sticker symbol which is no more then an upsidedown broken crucafix so much for world peace like all those psyhics predicted Hey its ok to go a little crazy as long as you admit it Keep those dreams upon your lips smile and never forget Happy 2006 God knows whats next __________________ *The Truth isn't out there because its already landed and the Truth is:* JESUS CHRIST Oddie Sloan

01-01-2006, 09:34 PM	#2 (permalink)
Lord RAH Grandeur's illuminant Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Detroit...Wesside Posts: 753	Dude this was hella tight...I would have dug a tighter more fluid flow but the things you talked about allowed me to be totally forgiving...I hate you get sleep on so much..... __________________ Roguish motives molded Into the coldest opus

01-04-2006, 06:23 PM	#3 (permalink)
misspimp a.k.a KATURAH Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Virginia Is For Lovers Posts: 1,308	yeh i agree with lord about the flow but then at the same time i kinda liked that the flow wasnt that tight i cant believe this shit aint get but one reply...anywhos def diggin the concept...each line was fire that really just made u think hard like damn true true true keep em comin mad love __________________ MAD LOVE "Never to suffer would never to have been blessed" ~THE LATE GREAT ~ ~EDGAR ALLEN POE ~

01-05-2006, 01:46 PM	#4 (permalink)
Flammonde. As 1 by kings accredited. Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Okay. Posts: 254	"3 more lovers discover war.." I especially liked this line, kind of sums up a plethora of feelings i've experienced in my life for a while now. Also, the peace symbol - upsidedown broken crucifix line was nicely put, and quite ironic. To me, this piece was unusual, in that although it seemed very melancholy on the surface, the message is almost one of hope. Great job. __________________ _-_ /('.')\ '\(.)(.)/' V _/\_ And now, Starts the craft, Of the Father. I was older whenever I was younger. lllThe Man Flammondelll llThe Man Flammondell lllThe Man Flammondelll

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01-05-2006, 02:52 PM	#5 (permalink)
DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA The Silencer Join Date: Nov 2000 Location: I'm westcoasting ;-) Posts: 2,509	Man this was really tight kid the whole count down thing got me seriously. I think this was a real nice touch for the peice plus the word play was decent kid mad luv from this was im uppN for the sleeperzzzzzzzzz....

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